tournament Golden Hit: Season 1 📀 Congrats to 8thPrince and Jackson!! 🏆🏆

[Jackson]

I was really struggling until this morning when things finally starting coming naturally. I think I ended up with like 914 words (doesn't mean they're good though!)

[fountain]

7 minutes ago, Jackson said:

I was really struggling until this morning when things finally starting coming naturally. I think I ended up with like 914 words (doesn't mean they're good though!)

That’s what I’m talking about

 

Hopefully this writing experience can be inspiring and something to learn from 

 

Spoiler

Kinda weird seeing somebody else with a gold avatar now

 

[Into The Void]

ok im just turning this in cause honestly im over trying to make a 500 song word make sense

[Into The Void]

On 5/29/2022 at 8:04 PM, Aurora said:

 

 

 

Rank	Writer	Song Title	Score
1	@Jackson	“DEEPFAKE”	8.9
2	@8thPrince	“Fraternite”	8.767
3	@Euterpe	“Candlelight”	8.7
4	@hurricane326	“Into the Blue”	8.267
5	@Achilles.	“A Long Time Coming”	8.2
	@JoeAg	“Woman in the Charmed Garden”
7	@GentleDance	“They Just Had to Tell Me”	8.067
8	@Prisoner	“Drift Away”	7.933
9	@Arrows	“Out Of The Blue”	7.867
10	@Tylerbv	“Reason to Stay”	7.667
11	@Augmented	“Keeps You Talkin”	7.633
	@Hug	“Hug”
13	@EpicSongFan	“Feeling You”	7.567
14	@DatChickDoe	“Blue Is How I Live Without You”	7.333
15	@Julia Fox	“No Woman Is No Art”	7.3
16	@OreGuy	“Ways to Bring You Down”	7.267
17	@mxtthewdelrey	“you cheat, you lose”	7.167
18	@Legend E	“Talk of the Town”	7.133
19	@Remmy	“Don't Let a Man Tell You What to Do”	7.1
20	@Lorenzo22	“Teenage Love Story”	6.8
21	@☆lex	“Nights on the Run”	6.767
	@Jessie	“Ecstasy All Night”
	@RobDeWittBukater	“Password”
24	@TruGemini	“Zone”	6.6
25	@Better Mistakes	“Dancing With My Tears”	5.767
26	@Insanity	“Just Try”	5.233
27	@D e v o n	“Session 32”	5.167
28	@boubour	“Lonely”	4.667

3rd from last maybe this round ill be 4th from last lol

[Into The Void]

1 hour ago, Jackson said:

I was really struggling until this morning when things finally starting coming naturally. I think I ended up with like 914 words (doesn't mean they're good though!)

after 300 words my song just ran on into pointless territory lol

[fountain]

13 minutes ago, Insanity said:

ok im just turning this in cause honestly im over trying to make a 500 song word make sense

Well thank you for trying nonetheless, “Just Try” chanteuse living up to their word!

[Achilles.]

I have a potential concept and a few lines. We’ll see if I’m able to make this come together…

[Prisoner]

I really need to get started 

[Jackson]

25 minutes ago, Insanity said:

after 300 words my song just ran on into pointless territory lol

i tried something new this time and outlined the story of my song by verse so i could make sure i still had something to write about by the end. i think that helped me this time - otherwise i would’ve been in the same boat 

[Prisoner]

Did I just write a 500 word song in like an hour?  whew the talent. I'll sit on it for an hour or two so I can assess the flaws more properly (in which there's tons of them). Or I might not really edit it so it can feel more 'authentic' ?

[Achilles.]

Got some verse, some chorus, some bridge… my mind really said come up with bits and pieces and then just find a way to make it all fit together.

[Achilles.]

Okay I think I’ve gotten through the first chorus but now I need to think of where to take the second verse. 

[fountain]

2 hours ago, Achilles. said:

I have a potential concept and a few lines. We’ll see if I’m able to make this come together…

 

2 hours ago, Prisoner said:

I really need to get started 

 

1 hour ago, Prisoner said:

Did I just write a 500 word song in like an hour?  whew the talent. I'll sit on it for an hour or two so I can assess the flaws more properly (in which there's tons of them). Or I might not really edit it so it can feel more 'authentic' ?

 

1 hour ago, Achilles. said:

Got some verse, some chorus, some bridge… my mind really said come up with bits and pieces and then just find a way to make it all fit together.

 

51 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

Okay I think I’ve gotten through the first chorus but now I need to think of where to take the second verse. 

Talent prevailing

 

You can do it

[Achilles.]

Can’t tell if this is a work of genius or an absolute mess but I’m kinda living for it. Just came up with a line that has me gagged a bit; a fun play on words that made the concept and a metaphor I’m using come together. 

[fountain]

42 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

Can’t tell if this is a work of genius or an absolute mess but I’m kinda living for it.

Me with literally everything I ever write. 
 

My advice: trust yourself and just go with it! 

[8thPrince]

finally have something to work with whaaaaaaat

[fountain]

21 minutes ago, 8thPrince said:

finally have something to work with whaaaaaaat

I am loving seeing it finally click for everybody

[Achilles.]

Welp. I think it’s finished. The bridge is practically its own song. 

This thing ended up being so long that it passes 500 words without even counting the repeated chorus.

 

The concept of this song is very much “we live in a society” and I hate that but it was honestly kinda cathartic to write after… everything. 

[fountain]

48 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

Welp. I think it’s finished. The bridge is practically its own song. 

This thing ended up being so long that it passes 500 words without even counting the repeated chorus.

 

The concept of this song is very much “we live in a society” and I hate that but it was honestly kinda cathartic to write after… everything. 

Don’t worry, you are not the only one who felt that way and channeled it into an entry. Anyway, that’s what writing is for ultimately. Looking forward to reading it. 

[fountain]

17 hours ago, fountain said:

22 hours left to submit or make any edits!

 

submit here: https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLSeuXCGGFlYFz_2sD5_QRx9e2aDyvQeF6Ksu5nuL1OAIVkRLDw/viewform?usp=sf_link

 

countdown to deadline: https://www.timeanddate.com/countdown/fall?iso=20220602T235959&p0=179&msg=Golden+Hit+Round+3+Deadline&font=cursive

 

looking forward to seeing what you have created! 

 

@Overprotected @D e v o n @Insanity @Lorenzo22 @Better Mistakes @mxtthewdelrey @DatChickDoe @JoeAg @Astro @Julia Fox @Jessie @TruGemini @boubour @Augmented @OreGuy @luckystrike @EpicSongFan @Tylerbv @Euterpe @ughgabriel @Jackson @Arrows @Hug @hurricane326 @RobDeWittBukater @Achilles. @8thPrince @Remmy @Legend E @Prisoner @GentleDance @☆lex 
 

 

heres a 5 hour reminder for anybody still looking to submit for this round!
submission form and countdown to deadline in the quoted post 

 

@Overprotected @D e v o n @Insanity @Lorenzo22 @Better Mistakes @mxtthewdelrey @DatChickDoe @JoeAg @Astro @Julia Fox @Jessie @TruGemini @boubour @Augmented @OreGuy @luckystrike @EpicSongFan @Tylerbv @Euterpe @ughgabriel @Jackson @Arrows @Hug @hurricane326 @RobDeWittBukater @Achilles. @8thPrince @Remmy @Legend E @Prisoner @GentleDance @☆lex 
 

[Tylerbv]

I’m super torn on how I feel about my submission. It’s not exactly metaphorical or difficult in nature, but it honestly just poured out of me in a literal fashion.

 

Someone teach me to make metaphors in my songs

[Achilles.]

46 minutes ago, fountain said:

Don’t worry, you are not the only one who felt that way and channeled it into an entry. Anyway, that’s what writing is for ultimately. Looking forward to reading it. 

Lol I went through a whole era of “purposeful pop” in like PH12 or whatever season happened in the first half of 2018 because I was not coping well with the state of things and I had no other outlet for it. IIRC I kinda bombed that season. ? But I think this may be better than a lot of those songs.

 

Just did some editing and I’m pretty pleased with it. I think I’ll send shortly. 
 

 

Very small Madonna reference in the song, since it’s conceptually rather similar to something she wrote once.

[Achilles.]

And I’ve submitted! The more I sit with this, the more I love it. It’s a fairly unique structure for me. The verses, prechoruses, and chorus are quite metaphorical, but then in the bridge I stripped it back and got extremely literal because there’s just no way to dress it all up in poetry. **** needs to get real sometimes.
 

The End of the World.

 

 

Far too many points were made.

[Julia Fox]

I think my song is very cringey but I wanted to sent something… at the same time it’s very personal so I don’t mind if judges don’t like my song 

[Julia Fox]

My song btw:

 

Spoiler

endrophy 

 

intro (reciting)

 

A stranger that you thought you know, that’s what love was for me

used to dream with it, but never felt it under my skin

Always said ‘when I will find what I'm looking for?' for so long 

But in reality it was always there, but I never knew it till today…

 

verse 1: 

The trill of my big dry heart

And all these years that were burning it down 

a living hate, just like getting used to being hurt

Sadness of getting darker as the days are passing by

 

verse 2:

 

The bird who brought me in tears

Now is the bird that sings when I sing

I fell asleep laying on it's warm wings

I almost gave myself up till death

Just waiting for my ashes

to be dispatched 

 

pre chorus:

 

I was so fragile

That I almost got rid of myself  

 

chorus:

 

But now I know that in the end you will not come back looking for me

I re-enter to the river that you never dare to crossed

But now I know in the end I know you're not going to stop me from crawling

For the flow of the same river where you left me

 

verse 3:

 

How to look at you without disarming me?

How to hug without being indolent?

Waking up and feel all the daylight's warm

Suddenly erase what used to hurt forever

 

verse 4:

 

The cry of a bird falling

The rumble that turn everything so dark

To the hug that held you yesterday

I can feel the air caressing my skin

it feels so good inside of me

 

pre chorus 2: 

i never used to experience this

it’s a new beginning, this is real 

 

chorus: 

 

Cause now I know that in the end you will not come back looking for me

I re-enter to the river that you never dare to crossed

But now I know in the end I know you're not going to stop me from crawling

For the flow of the same river where you left me

 

bridge:

 

I gave myself

Just cold I said goodbye to the old dark days

I wasn’t expecting to reborn

this is a return to form 

Now I understood that life is a mirror

And whoever has to fall will fall

but now it’s my time to rise

 

chorus: 

 

Cause now you know that in the end you will not come back looking for me

I re-enter to the river that you never dare to crossed

But now I know in the end I know you're not going to stop me from crawling

For the flow of the same river where you left me

 

bridge 2:

 

I can see it in my reflection 

it’s my new revelation

don’t you know this is not perfection 

but who cares when you feel the vibrations

my soul keeps flying like a bird 

and nobody can’t stop me from there 

im so high, can you see my face 

now I’ll never fall into your trace

anymore 

 

outro (reciting):

 

Then suddenly I woke, and everything around me had changed


I looked up, and I knew I was there

And since that, I never left

Now I’m here to stay

 

Edited June 3, 2022 by Julia Fox