tournament Golden Hit: Season 1 📀 Congrats to 8thPrince and Jackson!! 🏆🏆

[fountain]

From the entries I have read so far I would say this is the strongest round at this point

[8thPrince]

I’m excited for round 4

[fountain]

I’m excited for round 4

[Julia Fox]

what’s round 4?

[Jackson]

16 minutes ago, Julia Fox said:

what’s round 4?

we have to write this song 

 

[lex]

3 hours ago, Prisoner said:

Here's my updated discography. I just realized I have written quite a lot by now upon compiling this list. I'll also be releasing the cover for my current EP, Drift Away soon 

 

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ESCAPISM:

 

1. Bleeding

2. Rainbow in the Sky

3. Nintendo Entertainment System

4. A Song of the Dancing Eons

5. The Legend of Metal

6. A Bug in the System

7. Escapism

8. Exo

Bonus:

9. Paint Walls With Me

 

Canon:

 

 

1. The Hall of Egress 

2. Fishing

3. A Bicycle Ride

4. Pachelbel - Canon

5. Forever Classics

6. Drown

7. Inferno

8. Exo Pt. II (Bonus)

9. Bamboo Swords

10. Departure

 

Far Away:

 

1. Fireplace

2. Four Leaf Clover

 

My Way:

 

 

1. Hopelessly Devoted To You

2. One day you're driving your dad's old car

3. Beyond the Backyard Fence

4. A Sea of Daffodils

5. My Way

6. Highway

7. When I Pretend

8. Right now I'm driving home from work

9. Space Pirates

 

Drift Away:

 

[Cover to be released soon]

 

1. Wind Chimes

2. Drift Away

3. Crying in the back of a cab, and you're not.

4. TBA

5. TBA

6. TBA

 

Are these all entries for previous rounds?
Love the artwork you chose 

 

also. Is hall of egress a reference to one of the best AT episodes 

[fountain]

53 minutes ago, Jackson said:

we have to write this song 

 

Plz “Baddie and Daddy D” could absolutely be a @Hug title

[Jackson]

2 minutes ago, fountain said:

Plz “Baddie and Daddy D” could absolutely be a @Hug title

i need @Hug and @Remmy to make it happen NOW

[fountain]

6 minutes ago, Jackson said:

i need @Hug and @Remmy to make it happen NOW

Hug as Baddie, Remmy as Daddy D… maybe we will last minute change next round to a collab challenge so we can make this happen

[JoeAg]

i’m so sorry i haven’t submitted yet, my life has been insane for the past three days and going nonstop nonstop nonstop 

 

i’ll try to submit by the late night tonight

 

and then the audios for this week and last week themselves… f*cking mess lol i’ll try to do these this weekend too

[fountain]

3 minutes ago, JoeAg said:

i’m so sorry i haven’t submitted yet, my life has been insane for the past three days and going nonstop nonstop nonstop 

 

i’ll try to submit by the late night tonight

 

and then the audios for this week and last week themselves… f*cking mess lol i’ll try to do these this weekend too

It’s okay we are still reviewing so it’s all fine, good luck with it 

 

I’m definitely looking forward to hearing the audio for your last song, but don’t pressure yourself too much!

[DevonRoars]

Can I still submit? @fountain

[fountain]

34 minutes ago, D e v o n said:

Can I still submit? @fountain

Sure, but as soon as possible please 

[Remmy]

8 hours ago, Jackson said:

we have to write this song 

 

Oh I could do this easily!  

8 hours ago, Jackson said:

i need @Hug and @Remmy to make it happen NOW

So much demand for a collab  Billboard ain't ready for real

35 minutes ago, D e v o n said:

Can I still submit? @fountain

Just do it and hope the answer is yes  (It likely will be anyway) -- edit: oh

[DevonRoars]

28 minutes ago, fountain said:

Sure, but as soon as possible please 

I’m at work so it won’t be until the morning 

[Prisoner]

10 hours ago, ☆lex said:

Are these all entries for previous rounds?
Love the artwork you chose 

 

also. Is hall of egress a reference to one of the best AT episodes 

Thank you and yes, yes it is. Such an excellent episode

[Aurora]

Got off work early so gonna squeeze in some more reviews before sleep.  Had a bit of a hectic week this week so sorry they're not as prompt as you've maybe come to anticipate!

[Aurora]

21 hours ago, 8thPrince said:

Had a typo in my song @Aurora @element @fountain should be “you want TO leave” my bad

Noted! *Subtracts 0.5 from score.*

[fountain]

24 minutes ago, Aurora said:

Got off work early so gonna squeeze in some more reviews before sleep.  Had a bit of a hectic week this week so sorry they're not as prompt as you've maybe come to anticipate!

[fountain]

Going to be posting some reviews soon, I really prefer posting them all at once but I haven’t been at home during this reviewing period so I’ve had less opportunity to do them all at once, I have about half done so will be posting them first and the rest will come after I’ve had the chance to complete them

[Julia Fox]

4 minutes ago, fountain said:

Going to be posting some reviews soon, I really prefer posting them all at once but I haven’t been at home during this reviewing period so I’ve had less opportunity to do them all at once, I have about half done so will be posting them first and the rest will come after I’ve had the chance to complete them

Don’t worry babe, just post them! 

[fountain]

 

Round 3: The ATW10MVTVFTV Challenge, part one

 

Hurray for another great round of songwriting! Thank you to everybody who submitted, this was definitely the tougher of the challenges so far but I hope being pushed outside of your box like this ultimately was a useful and learning experience, and that you are proud of what you created this round! Personally I believe it has paid off and we are looking at the strongest round of entries thus far. But  don’t worry, next round I think will be more universal. 

 

@DatChickDoe - Days Spill on Like Blood

 

So you’re actually like nine words short of 500, but that’s very minor so it won’t be anything worth penalising in my opinion, but it should be noted. Your song is obviously extremely timely and very inspired by recent events, and the truth is it can be very hard with songs tackling themes of this nature especially when they are so fresh in the mind and raw. That said, I think you did a very good job with it. While it can be hard and all of those things, I think what you created here was very eloquent and quite the statement piece. It’s the type of thing that I can hear read out as performance art, at a protest or something. It’s powerful. The verse about the Buffalo shooting was particularly moving, and I think structurally it worked well as the whole song kind of built up to that moment, and then afterwards you have the verses which are more about reflection, and I thought that was a really smart choice. Ultimately, I think you’ve done a wonderful job, sure it’s a few words short but the song is very hard hitting, and I have to say it’s amazing seeing another huge leap in growth with you, you should certainly be proud. I am hoping to see you in that top ten this time!

 

@Hug - mm

 

I think in terms of the type of song you’ve went for you’ve pulled it off brilliantly, and structurally this is really the type of song I was hoping for this round. Thematically it’s obviously very emotive and a touching story, of course it’s hard not to read this and feel it in your heart, so great job achieving that. The first part specifically, when it's looking back at all of the things in the past, that’s an absolute 10/10 there. What I loved about it specifically was the details, you can get the same message across in a much more generic way but in the way you’ve done it you’ve imbued it with so much detail that the story truly feels real, it paints a full picture of these scenes and gives you all these sentimental things to  attach to. In another situation you could have left these things out and it would still be emotive, but it’s these specifics that make the song and the story more unique and acts as an emotional anchor to the song, so great job with all of that. The latter part where it’s the narrator reflecting on how they feel now, I felt that part could’ve been a little shorter (the 6th and 7th verses could be removed and it would not have much of an impact), specifically because once you go from all of that very detailed backstory, to a section which is more standard and lacking uniqueness like that, it doesn’t totally live up to the highs of the first part, but it does of course complete the story and put a finish to what was a fantastic entry. So I suppose if there’s any advice that I am supposed to offer you from this, it’s to make every part of the song really count, especially in a challenge like this where we are asking for songs of a certain length, if parts could be left out and considered filler-y then they could use an edit to make them more crucial to your entry, but obviously I gather from your posts that this was not an ideal challenge for you so I understand if that was just overlooked and more so just to get to the word count. But overall, despite liking or not liking the challenge you’ve done a really great job, this is my favourite entry from you thus far.

 

@hurricane326 - Fight

 

This a wonderfully powerful, poetic and inspiring entry. People need to hear words like this right now, this literally is art, the type that not just your country but the world at large need. I don’t really have any criticism or anything much to comment on because you said what needs to be said, and you said it brilliantly. In my opinion I would say this is your best entry so far, you’ve been poetic in the past and have had really beautiful lyrics but I think everything came together here; and, I think you took the feedback I gave toward your last entry about how it needed context to understand previously, and here you’ve created something that can fully stand on its own and remains poetic while also having its message and meaning being clear, so amazing job. 

 

@Julia Fox - endrophy

 

I think you executed the challenge very well, structurally your song is very nice and it flows in a nice way too, so I think you have embraced and took on the challenge well. I think that on the lyrical side this maybe could have used a bit more editing or reworking. There are some parts that I really enjoy, but there are some parts that also get a bit muddy, where the imagery and the message you are trying to put across get muddled and it feels ultimately kind of confused; for example the lines “I can feel the air caressing my skin, it feels so good inside of me”… do you have skin on your insides? The point ultimately becomes confusing because something seems lost in the execution of the image you were going for. I think overall you’ve written a nice empowerment song, and it’s unique because your writing is unique and I like that, but there are other examples that I can point out that maybe could have used rethinking - in the second bridge you say “who cares when you feel the vibrations”, and whatever these vibrations are supposed to be are never talked about prior or after this line, so ultimately I am not sure what it adds to the song, it’s a nice idea but it hasn’t been expanded upon at all so in the overall song it ultimately becomes a filler line and there are a few like this throughout the song which leaves it feeling somewhat disjointed as an overall piece. I love your writing but my advice for the future would be to try and make the story you are telling and the imagery and metaphors you use as comprehensive as possible. 

 

@OreGuy - Simple As Red

 

This feels like such a huge growth! I think this is the most poetic song I have ever read from you. I really, really enjoyed reading it. I think overall it’s a very touching song but the verses and particularly the outro blew me away, your writing in those sections truly excelled and I think you should be very proud of what you have written here. The outro specifically just made me so happy, I mean not from the lyrics themselves because obviously they are very emotional, but your writing there was just so good, it felt very confessional but also very wise and understanding, it can be hard to write in that style as laying things down like that can come across messy because of the amount of emotion but you executed it perfectly and that section just left me so impressed. I would love to see you working with this style again because I absolutely loved it. I think you should be really proud of this song, you’ve done a fantastic job with this challenge. 

 

@Remmy - Nonstop Hardcore

 

NOT THE NSFW GIF!!!!!

I think it’s tricky with songs like this, when every line is a reiteration of the same point (the point being: “I want sex”) is can kind of get boring at a point, the shock wears off, and I think this is especially the case when you’ve already submitted another entry in the same vein. But you… you little *****… you are just a poet, and somehow you pull it off, because I don’t know how you come up with this stuff, but it is genius. This is a viral hit waiting to happen (also probably viral in other ways but perhaps let’s not dwell on that) and, yup, you’ve done it again. You had me laughing again at certain lines, specific honourable mentions are “reverse birth, bout to brown, ass clean, no brown” and “he do sign language while his hand up my *****”, I mean that really speaks to the soul and the important issues, right? I don’t really know what more to say about this but… your mind… your depraved, genius mind.

 

@Better Mistakes - You Have Changed Me

 

“Ain’t it funny that you hurt me and yet, I’m the one here who’s changed” OUCH. That line hit hard, damn. I think this is definitely my favourite entry of yours so far. The song is insanely relatable, I mean I’m pretty sure everybody has felt themselves in a position similar to this before, and you’ve done a really good job of taking that emotion and creating a song out of it, so great job. I also think this is the entry that has shown off your writing the most so far, I would love if in the future rounds you could attempt something like this again because I really enjoyed seeing your writing flourish like this, that like I quoted specifically was a total revelation but there were also many more in the song which themselves were nice. Overall I think you’ve shown some huge growth here, I think you should be proud of having written this song and I’m definitely hoping to see you higher up on the rankings this round, you deserve it! 

 

@Euterpe - A Nymph’s Campfire Tale

 

This song is so poetic and the imagery is so lush. It was just so lovely to read and to be transported to this world of the Nymph’s that you have crafted. Really beautiful work. I like that this feels quite open to interpretation, I can keep reading it again and again and come to different conclusions, find new things and create altering theories, and I love that in writing and in a song, and if you are going for that I think you have executed it perfectly. If I did have one criticism, which really isn’t a criticism but rather something that I suppose I just hoped for, it is that I felt like the verses themselves could have been a little longer, it felt at times as though a verse would end just as it was settling upon an idea, and then it would move onto the next verse. I don’t know if this is by design but it left me wanting more, it was very alluring, and that’s not specifically a bad thing because it is also quite smart in how it keeps the intrigue high in the song and keeps you going on and wanting to read more, but it can also sometimes be tricky to pull off so that’s just something to bare in mind, I think it worked here but in another situation it could have felt lacking. Overall another very strong entry from you, I am loving reading your writing and really can’t wait to see more!

 

@EpicSongFan - Illusion of Lovin’ You

 

I’m kinda getting Mariah from your song again, I can definitely hear her singing this! I think overall this is a really solid, nice song. The subject matter is pretty relatable, and I like the way you’ve tackled it; specifically you’ve used the challenge and the extra word count to tell a complete story, truly looking deep into the feelings of said illusion of love and then also progressing the story and completing it with the act of moving on at the end. If there is any advice that I would look to offer you it’s that maybe next round could be a switch up in terms of theme, I’ve really liked both of these last two songs but they’ve had similar themes and have looked at both sides of love, and I think in the future I’d like to see you explore other concepts again, not necessarily something similar to Scorching Memory again but I think you’ve tackled these two songs centering on love very well, and perhaps now we can see you take things in another direction next time, or even incorporating multiple themes into a song. At the same time though, you’ve executed these love related songs very well, so you could also stick to them if you wanted and continue exploring the area if you find unique ways to look at it, entirely up to you. Knowing what the next challenge is, I’m interested to see how you explore it. Overall a good job again this round!

 

@Tylerbv - Running in Circles

 

This is a really interesting song… it walks the line and I’m not sure if you meant for it more to be like a declaration of love, or a cry for help, but personally I found it quite sad. It’s relatable because I feel like I’ve been in a position before where somebody has made me feel like this… on a personal level I’m hoping for the best for you, because this sounds quite toxic, and I would love it if you could be a bit more empowered, and get out of this situation, but really… I’ve been there and I feel this. It really sucks. I don’t really have any lyrical critiques because like you said it’s more like a confessional and outpouring song and I believe you executed that style well in putting across the differing emotions in a situation like this, which could otherwise be hard to do. It’s not a poetic or metaphorical song, but it still made me thoughtful, because the situation is tricky. If I were to be nit picky, I would point out that the word count is mostly filled out by repetition, so I think structurally you probably could have embraced the challenge more and it might have been even more interesting if the song lacked those repeating parts and instead just had more of your confessional thoughts. But, overall I think this is a very solid entry and probably my favourite from you so far, you really did make me feel these complex emotions in an interesting way and it resulted in a very melancholic and reflective mood.

 

@Augmented - The Aisle

 

 You called your song a mess but I really don’t think it is. I love how you executed the challenge, the altering chorus and pre chorus was used very well, and overall you’ve managed to tell a really vivid story. Something that I like specifically, which feels like a conscious choice, is that you never reveal specifically why the person getting married feels this way, with what happened to them and what the other person has done. I feel like you’ve cleverly avoided heading into melodramatic territory by obscuring these details, since there is already the drama of it taking place at a wedding ceremony and being about this heavy emotion, revealing further dramatic details may have ended up taking away from the poignancy and made it seem less real, but you’ve struck a very clever balance here with the way you have written the song which is really a good display of control; that, sometimes, less can be more, and you’ve used that idea well. The song is kept intriguing and also emotive thanks to this and I think these are signs of a good writer, even if you weren’t specifically thinking of these things when writing it, you’ve still subconsciously achieved it. Overall, I think your doubt in your entry is misplaced, as I have really enjoyed it. Good job.

 

@Arrows - I Hope You’re Satisfied Now

 

“I say things dramatically, but that never made them less true” ok punch me. From a lyrical standpoint, this is absolutely your strongest entry so far. What I love specifically is how personal you’ve made the song, with all of these direct details; I don’t know if they are conversations or things that have actually happened or if you have conceived this for your entry, but regardless it all adds so much personality to the song. The thing is in writing, there are so many people writing so many songs, there’s always going to be overlap in themes and in the emotion that is trying to be put across in writing, but thanks to how personal and unique to the situation you have made this song, it doesn’t end up falling into that area of “I’ve heard something like this before”. Since you’ve done it so well here my advice for the future would be to use this as an example of how to imbue your song with personality, so that even if you are writing about the most generic of themes your song can still stand out and have its merit thanks to this use of emotive detail. Overall, it’s hard to say because I’ve enjoyed each of your songs, but I think this may be the best so far. Another great job from you,  can’t wait to see more!

 

Edited June 4, 2022 by fountain

[fountain]

Will be posting Round 4 in the next few hours btw 

[Legend E]

seems like i'll flop based on these good reviews

 

 

[Julia Fox]

Coming for last place I fear