tournament Golden Hit: Season 1 📀 Congrats to 8thPrince and Jackson!! 🏆🏆

[fountain]

2 minutes ago, 8thPrince said:

I'm going to be submitting something I just need a bit 

 

1 minute ago, JoeAg said:

hi sorry can i please get an extension for sometime tomorrow? i broke my guitar yesterday which sent me spiraling a bit (i’m gonna see if i can get it repaired tomorrow) and i had my math final exam this morning, which i pulled an all nighter to study for/make sure i wouldn’t miss it. i just woke up from an all day nap so i’m extremely out of it and not quite in the mindset to finish a song ??‍♂️ i’m so sorry y’all 

That's okay! Just submit when you are able to

[diamondsky]

4 hours ago, TruGemini said:

Okay cool, just came up with a completely different concept and Jeremih doesn't fit at all 

 

1. Achilles. - Faith Hill

2. luckystrike - Troye Sivan

3. Astro - Nicki Minaj

4. Legend E - Kelly Clarkson

5. Hanami-Blossom - SISTAR

6. GentleDance - Fiona Apple

7. Jessie - Prince

8. Augmented - Lizzo

9. JoeAg - Kate Bush

10. ughgabriel - Zola Jesus

11. Hug - Xydo

12. OreGuy - Celine Dion

13. EpicSongFan - Mariah Carey

14. TruGemini - City Girls
15. ☆lex - Bruce Springsteen

16. Arrows - Carly Rae Jepsen

17. Better Mistakes - Tove Lo

18. RobDeWittBukater - Britney Spears

19. boubour - Jaden Smith
20. DatChickDoe - LeAnn Rimes

21. Julia Fox - Lana Del Rey

22. hurricane326 - Joni Mitchell

23. Euterpe - Evanescence

24. Obsession - Miley Cyrus

25. Remmy - Sigrid

26. Lorenzo22 - Taylor Swift

27. 8thPrince - Yoasobi
28. Insanity - David Archuleta

29. D e v o n - Remi Wolf

30. Prisoner - Pink Floyd
31. mxtthewdelrey - Nessa Barrett

32. Tylerbv - Carrie Underwood

33. Jackson - Elio

CITY GIRLS!  come thru sis 

Edited May 27, 2022 by ☆lex

[fountain]

3 minutes ago, mxtthewdelrey said:

hmmm 24 hour asda cause my cravings are varied (also my closest asda back in wales has a built in mcdonalds so kinda cheating x)

an asda with a built in mcdonalds, now that is luxury 

[diamondsky]

2 hours ago, Julia Fox said:

Here is my song xx 

 

NO WOMAN IS NO ART BY JULIA FOX AND LANA DEL REY 

written by Julia Fox and Elizabeth Grant

 

Lana:

 

all the melodies that i made on your blue yacht

get lost in the wind the day you break my heart

cause you can’t resist the sound of my soul in it

left me alone, abandoned like Atlantis

the girls were watching

they know what you did

they are singing with me 

 

ink running through my veins

a heart made of paper

my blood is my pencil

I’m the same woman who set you free

i called you a masterpiece

but I was wrong, it seems 

 

lana and julia:

 

you don’t know what you just did 

you break a heart of a woman like me

the one that can turn you into a painting

don’t you know when i open my heart and my mind

means that it’s over for you now

 

there’s no way you could fix

the **** that you just did

so you now know that you can’t be like that 

with a woman of heart and mind

forever you will be haunted by art

and the art is me

 

julia:

 

i always was the muse of my boyfriends 

and even were the muse of my girlfriends

but you thought I was an open book

while I see you like a big memoir

i swear you were my muse

but now you are just a fool

 

another man who breaks my heart

it’s another way to make art

a masterpiece if I’m exact

who cares about heartbreak

every day a man's left

there’s no reason to worry about

'cause praising is coming to us

 

lana and julia:

 

you don’t know what you just did 

you break a heart of a woman like me

the one that can turn you into a painting

don’t you know when i open my heart

and my mind

means that it’s over for you now

 

there’s no way you could fix

the **** that you just did

so you now know that you can’t be like that 

with a woman of heart and mind

forever you will be haunted by art

and the art is me

 

julia:

 

no woman is no art

you should know it by now

no woman is no art

then it’s over for you now

because you break the heart 

of a woman, they are art

 

The way I can hear this in lana’s voice, I’m getting hope is a dangerous thing… type piano hymn 

 

Edited May 27, 2022 by ☆lex

[Remmy]

15 minutes ago, ☆lex said:

Lyricists only. No wonder you’re a good songwriter whew

They had me hooked from the moment I heard "Just dance, gonna be okay, da da doo-doo-mmm" & "So go and tell your friends that I'm obsessive and crazy / That's fine, I'll tell mine you're gay" 

[mxtthewdelrey]

20 minutes ago, fountain said:

an asda with a built in mcdonalds, now that is luxury 

whenever i would go with my mother i would just walk off and get myself a 99p cheeseburger whilst she shopped!

[fountain]

1 minute ago, mxtthewdelrey said:

whenever i would go with my mother i would just walk off and get myself a 99p cheeseburger whilst she shopped!

respect. and where is the song about that? 

[diamondsky]

8 minutes ago, Remmy said:

They had me hooked from the moment I heard "Just dance, gonna be okay, da da doo-doo-mmm" & "So go and tell your friends that I'm obsessive and crazy / That's fine, I'll tell mine you're gay" 

the original SUPERIOR lyrics tbh.

 

our song and lovegame are what got me  

[fountain]

@Arrows idk if you know already but the soundcloud link in your entry says the song has been removed 

[Remmy]

35 minutes ago, ☆lex said:

the original SUPERIOR lyrics tbh.

 

our song and lovegame are what got me  

Picture to Burn wasn't actually my first Taylor song, it's just her best lyric  I started with Just Dance (thanks to a Vevo ad before a YT video) and was instantly obsessed + Teardrops On My Guitar but didn't fall in love until Fearless.

[Galah]

My first batch of reviews nearing completion... will we have our first taste of performance today?

[Hug]

53 minutes ago, Aurora said:

My first batch of reviews nearing completion... will we have our first taste of performance today?

I sure hope so ?

[Galah]

 

 

Hey, Hitmakers! The deadline has passed, and I've been working on my reviews for a decent portion of today to share some early opinions!

Reviews for the remaining songs will be written up tomorrow and posted in Batch 2 (possibly a Batch 3 depending on submission count).

If you have not yet submitted, I will review any entry that is submitted between now and noon tomorrow, my time (approx. 20.5 hours from now).

If there is anything in your review that you do not wish to have public (lyric excerpts, references to your material etc.) I will remove it upon request.

 

Batch 1

 

1. @DatChickDoe - “Blue Is How I Live Without You”
My first impression is that I think it’s a clever idea to use some of your artist’s song titles in the lyrics—it reinforces the connection, and would make a fun “greatest hits” song. The imagery in the first verse was really nice, and I like the way the verses lead into the chorus. I commented on your rhyming last time, and there was less unnatural wording in this submission, so great work. Next submission, I would suggest labelling all of your sections—the chorus and bridge were great, but clarifying everything would help as the first section has six lines, the next has two quatrains, and the third has five lines. Uniformity with the verses would also be another piece of advice. Overall, I do think this was an improvement, and I anticipate your continual rise!

2. @Hug - “Hug”
It’s cute having a self-titled song! There were many lovely moments, though a few puzzled me. The pre-choruses were both stunning, particularly the second, which I hoped was coming following the prior verse. I enjoyed your bridge, the references to your other song were nice and didn’t feel out of place or like required reading. Other gems were the titular couplet in the chorus and most of the second verse. “I feel the old me died,” reads strangely since you have a present tense (feel) and a past tense (died). “You gave me wings so gorgeous that allowed me to fly,” was redundant, and the bugs-making-noise lyric felt like a forced rhyme. The overall concept is solid, but I feel there was more polishing, tightening, and trimming that could have been done.

3. @Better Mistakes - “Dancing With My Tears”
This had a cute commercial vibe, and I could see Tove Lo being involved. The pronouns being “him” took me out of the Tove immersion a bit, although I guess her ex might not be straight. The first verse was a great start. “As we made out with drinks ‘til your mind blinked?” felt a little clunky as if it were written just to rhyme. The chorus serves its purpose, but I would have loved to see more punch; instead of repeating the quatrain, perhaps the fifth and sixth lines could have been something new to give it more body. Did you purposely omit a second verse? The second pre is much better! On a strictly lyrical level, the bridge did feel like a missed opportunity to showcase a range of emotions. Keep submitting and I look forward to your continual growth!

4. @hurricane326 - “Into the Blue”
I think you channelled Joni well with the three periods of growth, which felt like a nod to “Both Sides Now”. I enjoyed the imagery in the first verse, I got strong lush green vibes and a sense of optimism, and I really liked the callback to this verse in the fifth section. Your use of repetitions aided to their respective sections rather than reading like filler, so good balance there. This song took me on a journey, and I can relate to the themes of waning optimism, settling for less fantastical goals, growing apart from childhood friends and so forth. Life is wonderful but it can also be cruel and wear us down. As a whole it works well, and the only thing I would have liked is one or two killer couplets that stood out from the rest. Great work!

5. @Julia Fox - “No Woman Is No Art”
Ooh a duet, that’s an interesting take on the challenge. There’s definitely a sense of melancholy which is giving Lana vibes, so that’s a good start. I liked the “Atlantis” lyric, and the section that followed from “ink,” to “it seems,” was very conceptually intriguing. I think the duetted chorus could have been strengthened with a few more of these artistic metaphors rather than focusing more on the literal dissolution of the relationship. The muse/book metaphors in the second verse were again a good direction to steer this song, and would have loved to see more of that in the chorus, and a bridge would have helped flesh out the concept even further.

6. @Euterpe - “Candlelight”
What a unique artist inspiration! I really enjoyed this submission. The comments I made last round about providing more content for context definitely didn’t apply here, there was plenty of great lyricism here. The alliteration in the chorus was a nice touch, and it created some dark and mystical imagery which I could definitely see Evanescence incorporating into their music. “Melting a part of myself, to be a part of you,” was a standout lyric—loved this! The bridge was fantastic also, a beautifully constructed section. It definitely seems like you’ve taken the feedback you received last week on board, because this showed tremendous growth to me.

7. @OreGuy - “Ways to Bring You Down”
There were many surprising moments in this song—just when I thought I’d found the standout lyric, you surprised me with another one, which is definitely a good thing! Your continual growth as a writer is evident. “When we said forever, I guess this is what we meant,” “Fire of desire, now burned down all the bridges,” and “Your eyes to win me over / But I guess you're determined to win,” were all great. These comparisons of something positive with something negative worked well in this song’s context. Conceptually, I think reinforcing the pain you have caused each other by using some more specific examples of the back-and-forth would have aided this piece.

8. @boubour - “Lonely”
Interesting artist choice and submission overall. I want to keep my review concise in case I was unclear in my review of your last submission. While writing to an instrumental is fine, unnecessarily confining yourself to certain section lengths and flows determined by a beat might not be the best approach moving forward in this tournament. If you wish to continue writing to instrumentals, perhaps finding something a little longer would serve you well. For this submission, there was a lot of repetition and only thirteen unique lyrics, and of those thirteen, some unique angle or twist on a common theme would have gone a long way.

9. @GentleDance - “They Just Had to Tell Me”
Let me start off by admitting I had to search up definitions for a lot of the words in this song, and coming from the formerly-dubbed “Thesaurus King,” that’s saying something! This is where I can offer some unique first-hand advice: fancy and formal isn’t always best for writing. I am not going to be too critical given, a) Your artistic inspiration was Fiona Apple, and b) English isn’t your mother tongue, but I would love to see you experiment with more emotive, accessible language that doesn’t require an immense vocabulary knowledge or take one out of the immersion by researching some of the more advanced lyricism—lyrics like “You’ll accessorize your accessory,” are wonderfully powerful with simpler language. I can’t wait to see what else you have in store.

10. @EpicSongFan - “Feeling You”
Another gorgeous cover! I love that this tournament has helped you complete a song you’ve had in your pocket for years. I actually like the new parts you’ve written for this tournament best. The hook is nice, inconsequential and simple, but the verses in particular do a much better job of showing the level of adoration. The “a precious treasures” lyric appears to have a grammatical error—small qualm. The bridge is lovely, especially the “paradigm” lyric. I often find when writing that the sections I form early in the process need to be reworked later on, and I would have loved to see this with a reworked hook to provide a little more texture. Otherwise, nice work!

11. @Arrows - “Out Of The Blue”

Hmm, definitely not the Carly era I would have imagined you channelling. I couldn’t play your performance either. That said, that’s where most of my criticisms end. This was very cute, I could definitely see Carly being involved with this one. It appears you’ve put more focus on each of the sections having stronger lyricism rather than being carried by interesting melodies, so that’s definitely noted and appreciated. The additions in parentheses I could see being fun backing vocal moments, too. The second verse was definitely my favourite, the entire verse was perfect honestly. The bridge was a touch basic and it would have been lovely to see something a little more honest and vulnerable here to really convey their passion.

 

12. @Remmy - “Don't Let a Man Tell You What to Do”

Not the ooo’s—we-are-going-to-pretend-we-didn’t-see-that.mp4 (seriously, cute in moderation, but never a great idea in a lyric-focused tournament). Not Sigrid being British now, we— this is certainly a welcome change of pace all things considered. You display a great understanding of rhyming, particularly internal rhyming in the verses which is enjoyable to read and helps shape the metre and flow of the piece nicely. The chorus could have been stronger admittedly—as you have mentioned it’s “decently basic” and perhaps selecting Sigrid to match this level of lyricism isn’t a suitable crutch given this is still a lyric-focused tournament. Taking your impressive internal rhyming skill and applying that to a more eloquent piece would be appreciated!
 

13. @RobDeWittBukater - “Password”

I think Britney Spears is an interesting choice because she’s not necessarily known as an acclaimed, renowned lyricist. That’s not to say every selection had to be, and I love plenty of Britney’s bops. The “piece of me” reference was cute, and the “mystery/gist of me” rhyme was chaotically good. While short, I really liked the bridge (although it’s not a middle eight by definition, which is literally eight bars in the middle of a song). Conceptually, I think the password idea was solid for a pop song format, yet the lyrics themselves could have done with some more refinement—references to cracking codes, “keystrokes”, or what might happen if they try to “hack”/guess incorrectly. There’s a lot more you could have done with this fun concept!

 

14. @Legend E - “Talk of the Town”

This is probably one of the most distinct approaches to the challenge thus far. While most have attempted to model their songs after specific musical stylings, song titles, or eras of their respective artists, you’ve fully focused on the personal life aspect and brought your own songwriting style to the forefront. I think you have an interesting concept here, but it is admittedly a little hard to grasp. I won’t make direct references to lyrics out of respect, but I wasn’t sure if Kelly was supposed to be the shrub or growing it? I’m also not entirely sure if hearing about a breakup is a suitable comparative to being poisoned? In short, I feel like you got caught up in the metaphors a bit with this one. That said, the outro was a lovely end to this piece.

[fountain]

7 minutes ago, Aurora said:

Not Sigrid being British now, we—

omg @Remmy fake fan exposed

[Remmy]

Kiii  The thing is I either had to choose someone messy like cupcakKe or someone that's kinda basic but can easily write lyrics that get stuck in your head. There's no way I was gonna go with an artist that's lowkey a poet. I'm a pop hoe at heart, what can I say!  I definitely understand the critiques though.

 

9 minutes ago, fountain said:

omg @Remmy fake fan exposed

I know she's not British but several European accents all get lumped into the Bri'ish category for me

[fountain]

1 minute ago, Remmy said:

I know she's not British but several European accents all get lumped into the Bri'ish category for me

like a typical UHHHHHHmuhricun 

[Hug]

20 minutes ago, Aurora said:

2. @Hug - “Hug”
It’s cute having a self-titled song! There were many lovely moments, though a few puzzled me. The pre-choruses were both stunning, particularly the second, which I hoped was coming following the prior verse. I enjoyed your bridge, the references to your other song were nice and didn’t feel out of place or like required reading. Other gems were the titular couplet in the chorus and most of the second verse. “I feel the old me died,” reads strangely since you have a present tense (feel) and a past tense (died). “You gave me wings so gorgeous that allowed me to fly,” was redundant, and the bugs-making-noise lyric felt like a forced rhyme. The overall concept is solid, but I feel there was more polishing, tightening, and trimming that could have been done.

Well chickens have wings and they can't fly!

 

No but I can understand your criticisms and I appreciate your feedback ♥

 

However this song will not be shared until after the results due to my first review reading like a 70 on metacritic when the deal was 80+

[Remmy]

2 minutes ago, fountain said:

like a typical UHHHHHHmuhricun 

YEEEEEEEEEEHAAAAAWWWWWWW!!! i love my beer and trucks and football

[fountain]

1 minute ago, Remmy said:

YEEEEEEEEEEHAAAAAWWWWWWW!!! i love my beer and trucks and football

thats right sonstand up for the flagand things that should be banned

[OreGuy]

37 minutes ago, Aurora said:

 

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7. @OreGuy - “Ways to Bring You Down”
There were many surprising moments in this song—just when I thought I’d found the standout lyric, you surprised me with another one, which is definitely a good thing! Your continual growth as a writer is evident. “When we said forever, I guess this is what we meant,” “Fire of desire, now burned down all the bridges,” and “Your eyes to win me over / But I guess you're determined to win,” were all great. These comparisons of something positive with something negative worked well in this song’s context. Conceptually, I think reinforcing the pain you have caused each other by using some more specific examples of the back-and-forth would have aided this piece.

a positive review  thanks legend

Edited May 27, 2022 by OreGuy

[Remmy]

16 minutes ago, fountain said:

thats right sonstand up for the flagand things that should be banned

this was my reaction when seeing this post, brother!!!!!! AMEN i'll drink to that!!! YEEE YEEEEEEE

 

 

[fountain]

9 minutes ago, Remmy said:

this was my reaction when seeing this post, brother!!!!!! AMEN i'll drink to that!!! YEEE YEEEEEEE

 

 

Mate I was there can’t you see me? 

[Arrows]

2 hours ago, fountain said:

@Arrows idk if you know already but the soundcloud link in your entry says the song has been removed 

57 minutes ago, Aurora said:

 

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11. @Arrows - “Out Of The Blue”

Hmm, definitely not the Carly era I would have imagined you channelling. I couldn’t play your performance either. That said, that’s where most of my criticisms end. This was very cute, I could definitely see Carly being involved with this one. It appears you’ve put more focus on each of the sections having stronger lyricism rather than being carried by interesting melodies, so that’s definitely noted and appreciated. The additions in parentheses I could see being fun backing vocal moments, too. The second verse was definitely my favourite, the entire verse was perfect honestly. The bridge was a touch basic and it would have been lovely to see something a little more honest and vulnerable here to really convey their passion.

 

Thanks for the review! That’s weird though, can’t really seem to figure out why. Here it is though, it’s a bit rough but the song itself is there

 

[RobDeWittBukater]

Since the reviews are coming out, I thought I'd share the song I submitted for this round!

Here it is: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AC_sC9gCoWcyKIm0PmAKSfIpxTeokd6WCUFHyAQDqaY/edit?usp=sharing

 

(/And here's my song from the first round, 'Stranded in Your Arms': https://docs.google.com/document/d/19zWVJ7Qc7iL2sS4gA-CqA-MONt39YmvaHnfSYuL5YS4/edit?usp=sharing

[Remmy]

24 minutes ago, fountain said:

Mate I was there can’t you see me? 

Afraid not, soldier... but my health insurance didn't pay for my new glasses so maybe that's why