ceremonials Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 Verse 1 Looking ahead, I see faded horizons And there's nothing before us but a dark moon rising Black is enveloping us from every direction But even with no color, you still bleed perfection Prechorus Slowly connecting with your spectrum lips I remember what it feels like when our colors mix Chorus Remembering you comes in rose-colored shades 'Cause the day you left, it all turned to gray And I can't help but to search for that hue In every sunrise, I only see you Verse 2 Looking back, I see brilliant shades of blue An ocean of light that formed when I first saw you And when I catch myself looking too far ahead I escape to the fields of gold and rivers of red Prechorus Slowly connecting with your spectrum lips I remember what it feels like when our colors mix Chorus Remembering you comes in rose-colored shades 'Cause the day you left, it all turned to gray And I can't help but to search for that hue In every sunrise, I only see you Bridge Escaping to a haven where the colors define me I search for the relics that used to remind me I might never reach the dawn I'm heading for So I'll cherish the sunset and not ask for more And even when I'm drifting off into the abyss You'll be that relic that reminds me that love still exists Chorus Remembering you comes in rose-colored shades 'Cause the day you left, it all turned to gray And I can't help but to search for that hue In every sunrise, I only see you
Temporal Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 Quote "Maybe I'll get a #1 hit in Diamond Hit." - @swiftie13 post 19,596 of PH9 Poor it
ughgabriel Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 over, over and again Tove keeps serving quality bops
ceremonials Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 2 hours ago, Temporal said: Poor it the random lash
Galah Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 wait, we're at the Top 12 already? looks like even if I flop my career Top 12 streak is still in tact poor zara larsson, her US career
ughgabriel Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 19 minutes ago, Aurora said: wait, we're at the Top 12 already? looks like even if I flop my career Top 12 streak is still in tact poor zara larsson, her US career Top 13 but it's going to turn top 10 in a couple of days
Galah Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 5 minutes ago, ughgabriel said: Top 13 but it's going to turn top 10 in a couple of days mess, watch me jinx it, place #13 and be eliminated. zara her impact!
Galah Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 i want to do the #MusicWriterExercise challenge thing but that means I'll have to listen to like 6 albums tomorrow just to catch up and idk if I even know 28 albums i haven't heard yet which I want to listen to if I did it I'd probably start with aurora - all my demons greeting me as a friend bruno mars - 24k magic jojo - mad love. lady gaga - joanne shawn mendes - illuminate skylar grey - natural causes
fountain Posted February 5, 2017 Author Posted February 5, 2017 20 minutes ago, Aurora said: i want to do the #MusicWriterExercise challenge thing but that means I'll have to listen to like 6 albums tomorrow just to catch up and idk if I even know 28 albums i haven't heard yet which I want to listen to if I did it I'd probably start with aurora - all my demons greeting me as a friend bruno mars - 24k magic jojo - mad love. lady gaga - joanne shawn mendes - illuminate skylar grey - natural causes What is this?
Galah Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 7 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: What is this?
UFO Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 I hope the judges understand the concept of my song. I tried to make it as easy to understand as possible I don't like including explanations but my song does have a double meaning! I also tried to keep the rhythmic meter as tight as possible which is something I never do when I write my songs overall, I'm happy with Blanket. The melody is still stuck in my head.
fountain Posted February 5, 2017 Author Posted February 5, 2017 1 hour ago, Aurora said: Listen to CLC - Crystyle
Galah Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 Just now, keshaspearsxo said: Listen to CLC - Crystyle Added it to my list, I need to bulk it up anyway so why not? ¯\_(ツ)_/¯
fountain Posted February 5, 2017 Author Posted February 5, 2017 32 minutes ago, Aurora said: Added it to my list, I need to bulk it up anyway so why not? ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ It's only 6 songs, do it now and I'll give you a 10
Galah Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 12 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: It's only 6 songs, do it now and I'll give you a 10 was just about to go to bed as it's 2am but it's only 20 mins so why not lmao
Galah Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 didn't expect it to be kpop for some reason liar kinda shook me, mess at this song being called hobgoblin. the chorus kinda goes off.
Jackson Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 5 hours ago, Aurora said: i want to do the #MusicWriterExercise challenge thing but that means I'll have to listen to like 6 albums tomorrow just to catch up and idk if I even know 28 albums i haven't heard yet which I want to listen to if I did it I'd probably start with aurora - all my demons greeting me as a friend bruno mars - 24k magic jojo - mad love. lady gaga - joanne shawn mendes - illuminate skylar grey - natural causes YESSS
Temporal Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 6 hours ago, keshaspearsxo said: Temporal cannot count When I posted that you hadn't added Ceremonials to the doc, so I forgot about ha just like we've all forgotten about all of ha entries
Hug Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 Just like I don't have much of anything to say for Jackson most of the time, I always have a lot to say about Kunst.
Hug Posted February 5, 2017 Posted February 5, 2017 (Part 1 of 2; too hungry to do the rest rn sorry) Funnellegs - Tiny Hands/Dear Sister Well, you said it was pretty self-explanatory, but I am actually confused as to what you were going for here. I thought, at first, this was about a baby sister that died before she could even grow up, but then the way you worded the chorus made me think of something different. Specifically, “you’ll always be her first born, her baby boy.” made me think “wait, is this person trans?” I’m just really lost as to what the theme is. I also couldn’t help but feel some words could be omitted with no consequence, in the chorus particularly. “Tiny hands don’t you let go of me / There’s so much more left for you to see”, where you keep the bolded words. It would help the song not feel as if it runs on. Corsola - Stained Glass Okay, let’s just get some things out of the way first. “But when the darkness attacks I shatter / Turning me into just a disaster” this line made me mad because you had a great idea and executed it poorly. Here, I will even rewrite it for you. “But when the darkness rises, I shatter / From a work of art to a disaster”. I also don’t like your place/disgrade word choice. Yellows/exposed is the biggest reach for a rhyme I think I’ve seen all season. Now, with that out of the way, I love the idea of stained glass being like two different parts of you, and for the most part, it works well. I particularly love your first verse. That, to me, was the best example of your idea working. I want to give a special mention to the extended chorus, and the lines “...Why I want to hear people say they love my shades / Yet I'll never be able to tell myself the same”, and these two lines alone tell me that there’s more that we need to see from you as a writer, and it makes me look forward to seeing what you do in the future. Kunst - Lately Once again, you’ve really intrigued me with your entry because it’s so polarizing to me. On one hand, you have things that, had I not been a judge, would’ve told you to fix before submitting; very easy changes, mind you, that would’ve really taken this higher. For instance, you didn’t need to describe the veins as “busy”; it didn’t add anything to the statement. For the “a hundred faces in the mirror, none of them is mine”, are mine would be proper grammar. I specifically chose your first verse to pick at because even with my critiques about it, I really can not help but love it. The demons swimming in your veins line was a great way to describe be under the influence of drugs, and even though the colors line half seemed like they were there for imagery, I could see the point behind it and I thought it was the perfect way to end that verse. It’s these things that tell me that you do know what you’re doing, but you just need a bit more time for the small changes that make the entry all the better. Something else I want to touch of is your chorus. The “daydream” / ”bloodstream” rhyme felt forced to me, and a bit unneeded. The ending of the chorus was great, though, and I think it was an eloquent way to basically say you’re addicted. So, typically the label heads would say whether or not they would hire the people who wrote for their label or not, but this time, pear decided against it. At any rate, I still think contestants would want to know, hypothetically, if they would be hired. For you, I would say: Yes, but we’d need to get our camp to fix the song a bit before releasing the final version. Aurora - Katrina You know, despite my label write up making it sound all serious, I DID want people to have fun with my label, and it really looks like you did. You had a lot of clever word play here, and you explored some of the issues I highlighted specifically, like his drug addiction and his bisexuality, and all in a way that I thought was very fun (and edgy! Which I loved about it, by the way.) This really makes me sad that we aren’t choosing who we are hiring for bonus points, because I think this will be very polarizing as an entry, but personally, I would hire you instantly! Ughgabriel - The Neon Demon What is it with people using weird adjectives to describe their veins for Kayn’s songs? This is my only complaint for you, though, because wig. Once again, you have a wonderful sense of meter that I can easily pick up a rhythm to, and you paint a vibrant image with your word choice, all while keeping it within what I wanted from my label. If we were actually hiring people, you’d be hired for sure. Thecheetahwings - Drown You Out I was really surprised to see you went with my label, but I figured “Hey, he must be wanting to expand his horizons and ditch the relationship songs”, but this really just felt like another one of those. It took me reading it a couple times, but I think I understand your song now...it’s about him leaving a girl for a guy? It’s an interesting take on my label, but not so interesting coming from you where you’ve dealt with relationships all season. I think this was a wasted opportunity from you, and if we were hiring people in this challenge, I don’t think I’d hire you.
fountain Posted February 5, 2017 Author Posted February 5, 2017 4 hours ago, Aurora said: didn't expect it to be kpop for some reason liar kinda shook me, mess at this song being called hobgoblin. the chorus kinda goes off. Hobgoblin is an ANTHEM GUNNA WADA WADA UNNA WADA WADA Meow Meow is a bop I hope you stanned
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