fountain Posted June 22, 2017 Author Posted June 22, 2017 21 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: are you ****ing kidding me girl Have you something to say?
UFO Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 (edited) The more time passes, the more I feel like my song is **** Edited June 23, 2017 by UFO
Hug Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 I can't believe there's still like another day. Feels like I submitted like two weeks ago ff
UFO Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 (edited) Even with every chance we could die we always roll the hard six (six six) the wordplay in this line^ SCALPS tho die = dice nn 5 minutes ago, Hug said: I can't believe there's still like another day. Feels like I submitted like two weeks ago ff Right? it's actually making me anxious for these reviews alkfjsakg Edited June 23, 2017 by UFO
UFO Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 4 minutes ago, Aurora said: nothing from me for this week xo your sig
Hug Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 My favorite lines in my entry are the ones I put in my sig, and the ones where the title of my song makes sense in.
Glassmouth Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 I'm so hyped for the reviews because my song is serving a CONCEPT and I think it's my best song yet
fountain Posted June 23, 2017 Author Posted June 23, 2017 The panel has collectively tragically died please await our timely resurrection
Bandito Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 Y'all are serving Quote This interface has been shutdown temporarily. Please check back for updates. realness. This is your ARTPOP era.
fountain Posted June 23, 2017 Author Posted June 23, 2017 26 minutes ago, Lane Boy said: Y'all are serving realness. This is your ARTPOP era. its ok, my reviews are coming at least!
fountain Posted June 23, 2017 Author Posted June 23, 2017 18 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: tempauragabe's reviews are coming* i wouldn't count on that!
Glassmouth Posted June 23, 2017 Posted June 23, 2017 11 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: i wouldn't count on that!
fountain Posted June 23, 2017 Author Posted June 23, 2017 5 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: the way BOTH of you missed the shade about him copy pasting reviews from the panel for his last round reviews oh
fountain Posted June 23, 2017 Author Posted June 23, 2017 when you name drop @Corsola in a review #icon
fountain Posted June 24, 2017 Author Posted June 24, 2017 15 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: legends only it's your review. and all i said is "Corsola is better than you"
Glassmouth Posted June 24, 2017 Posted June 24, 2017 (edited) 48 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: the way BOTH of you missed the shade about him copy pasting reviews from the panel for his last round reviews the shade wasn't solid enough, it was evaporated, like in turned into gas Edited June 24, 2017 by Glassmouth
fountain Posted June 24, 2017 Author Posted June 24, 2017 There she lusted after her lovers, whose genitals were like those of donkeys and whose emission was like that of horses. (Ezekiel 23:20)
Glassmouth Posted June 24, 2017 Posted June 24, 2017 (edited) 1 minute ago, Gastrodonatella said: three poop emojis was good shade for you so i think it might just be your taste okay, that was a DRAG Edited June 24, 2017 by Glassmouth
Glassmouth Posted June 24, 2017 Posted June 24, 2017 Just now, keshaspearsxo said: There she lusted after her lovers, whose genitals were like those of donkeys and whose emission was like that of horses. (Ezekiel 23:20) stop posting lines from my song on here
fountain Posted June 24, 2017 Author Posted June 24, 2017 Pear Reviews @Hug- I Do, I Do… - Dr Luke Challenge You know how much I love your sentimental songs. And this is not a different case. Such a bittersweet and moving song. I think this is probably your best song all season. Yes, it’s not some masterpiece of imagery and poetry, but I don’t think every song has to be. The simplicity and rawness of this accompanies it perfectly, and the pacing of the story is perfect, ending on such a hollow and cutting statement. I should be sad but I’m happy because this is what I love about writing. @funnellegs - For What It’s Worth - Dr Luke Challenge This song is very personal and unique so you definitely fulfilled what you were going for. I definitely got those feelings. I think my biggest point is how you name everybody. It works in making it more you, yes, but at the same time, I don’t think we need the names. When you name people, and the reader doesn’t really have any knowledge of who this person is or what they’re like, it kind of creates a disconnect. I think it would’ve worked if you had rather just used the general terms like “aunt” or “uncle” because then the reader can relate in to somebody in their mind who they know and share the same relationship to, but when it’s just a name and you have a hard time building a connection to this character, it becomes hard. However, this is a small factor and I largely enjoyed this entry. I think it’s among your best. @OreGuy - Blood - Dr Luke Challenge I don’t know what this is :( @Glassmouth - Behold Digital Afterlife - Former Self Portrait Challenge Wow this is a bit of an impressive and interesting concept! @Corsola would be proud. A gripe I have with this, is that it isn’t really what I think the challenge was aiming for, this I don’t think really captures the emotion or sentimental feeling of a self portrait song to me, it feels more kind of like a social commentary song if you ask me. Though, I liked it a lot overall despite this. But the length could probably be cut down and polished overall. @FCKNAmbrosia - The Curator - Sequel Challenge Ok this is perfect. Love this so much. That's all. @UFO - Magic Tricks - Sequel Challenge Dddddd okay so I like your song, but you chose such a ****ty song to make it a sequel to, like I feel like this would’ve been better on it’s own. This original is so surface level. It’s a bit of a discredit to yourself to relate this to a Katy Perry song. Love how even a song you describe as being fun is still littered with insecurity. @Tsareena - Cirque de Soi - Former Self Portrait Challenge I don’t really get how this is a former self portrait tbh. Maybe you thought since it’s kind of talking about something in past tense, but I don’t think this was the intention of the challenge really. I think it was more about reflecting internally and creating a dialogue with a former version of yourself. This feels more so like a storytelling esque song. I will say though, the whole song carried the circus theme so well and the pacing was really really good. I just didn’t feel it totally captured the challenge idea. Probably one of your best entries regardless though. @Nait Phoenix - Inception - Dr Luke Challenge I get a dreamy, hazy picture in my mind from this song, which I really enjoy. But, I feel like the lyrical style doesn’t totally reflect that at times. In some instances, I was left hoping you would take a more poetic route than the simple one. I think that would’ve really aided you here. @Gastrodonatella - Advice - Former Self Portrait Challenge “Every day you wake up just to fall down on your knees” I only go down on my knees for papa @Corsola in my dreams. Anyway this is cute but it’s no Moonbeam Bridge. You executed the challenge quite well but, like I can't get over Perfectbeam 10ridge. But I still like it. But serve another Godbeam Slayridge. @Lane Boy - Melancholy Boy - Former Self Portrait Challenge I think you achieved the concept of a former self portrait song the best of everybody. It was pretty much a perfect execution. I really like the song overall, but one pointer I would say is when you refer to the incidents in the song, they could use a bit more detail I think. If you hadn’t included the explanation for the song, I would’ve been a bit confused, I feel. It could’ve been a little clearer. But like I said I do enjoy this overall. The outro in particular is my favourite, you ended it on such a perfect, sweet, uplifting moment. @SaintWest - Ticking - Dr Luke Challenge Oh sis, not alleyways. @Auburn - A Moon Hangs in the Sky - Dr Luke Challenge Gah this is so pretty. Your best entry all season. I love it fully. Got nothing bad to say. @mxtthewdelrey - I Can’t Kill You - Dr Luke Challenge I really like this song it is- wait, I feel something coming over me... This piece is called, "Thinking About You, Girl" Boy you wanna think in caps? I'll show you how to think IN CAPS like a capitalist im the master of this Judith The Cow and a horse pulled by master with her side chick Pea, Jasmine Masters of this Blood and porridge, stir it up Vape with me, remix it up Postman come and hit me up BDSM dog it up Puppy on the floor and you're growling at me If we were in Mexico you'd say "ay papi" say my name I know you know it, moan it clearLee Have you ever heard about my song called Pony? im the host with the most and you're tied to a post i can get dirty if it's not in my game i better win this cause together my two sides came and if I don't we will only have Matthew to blame! @beatinglikeadrum - Wonderland - Former Self Portrait Challenge I wish you could spend more time on your entries and get a little help with your English in them because it would improve them so much! Well, at least you have tried every week no matter what. @RihsusChrist(ATG) - Queen of the World - Sequel Challenge I like Princess of China but it’s kinda a bad song to choose to sequel because it’s lyrics aren’t really.. special. Nor do they have some kind of concept behind them. I get that you tried to go with the royal theme, but it doesn’t make sense because in the song they are theorising about how they could’ve been a princess and a king, when in actuality they aren’t.
Glassmouth Posted June 24, 2017 Posted June 24, 2017 3 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: @Glassmouth - Behold Digital Afterlife - Former Self Portrait Challenge Wow this is a bit of an impressive and interesting concept! @Corsola would be proud. A gripe I have with this, is that it isn’t really what I think the challenge was aiming for, this I don’t think really captures the emotion or sentimental feeling of a self portrait song to me, it feels more kind of like a social commentary song if you ask me. Though, I liked it a lot overall despite this. But the length could probably be cut down and polished overall. I was kind of aiming for a self portrait song in a less depressive/emotional way, like in a more epic and child-like way, like in ''hey kiddo the future is awesome xdxd'' or something like that
fountain Posted June 24, 2017 Author Posted June 24, 2017 3 minutes ago, Glassmouth said: I was kind of aiming for a self portrait song in a less depressive/emotional way, like in a more epic and child-like way, like in ''hey kiddo the future is awesome xdxd'' or something like that i liked it a lot anyway but yea
beatinglikeadrum Posted June 24, 2017 Posted June 24, 2017 Sorry but I stan an artist who wrote in her song: I should haven't. Like ignore my grammar. And my artpop can mean anything.
fountain Posted June 24, 2017 Author Posted June 24, 2017 2 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: the bar being so high because i'm THAT talented. whew One hit wonder
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