ultraviolence.xx Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 1 minute ago, Jackson said: woo all the judges flopping have you gotten any scores?
Citrus Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 Reviews half way done, think I can finish tonight!
Citrus Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 6 hours ago, SaintWest said: when shitrus is our last hope for reviews Oh. I think my reviews will be posted tomorrow.
SaintWest Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 5 minutes ago, Citrus said: Oh. I think my reviews will be posted tomorrow.
Jackson Posted October 30, 2017 Author Posted October 30, 2017 4 minutes ago, ultraviolence.xx said: have you gotten any scores? I don't think anyone expect citrus has even started n
Jackson Posted October 30, 2017 Author Posted October 30, 2017 Well I just finished my paper but I have more studying to do now
Aurora Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 Looks like I'm gonna be at work during results again. Going to be a stressful day.
SaintWest Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 Singing to the deer in the skies Singing as they jingle, jingle, jingle tonight Singing to the moon setting free You're the angel on the top of my tree Singing to the spirit above Sing your heart out with all of your love Santa's coming for us Santa's coming for us, Santa's coming for us Santa's coming for us, Santa's coming for us Santa's coming for us Oh, Santa's coming for us
ATRL Moderator Tsareena Posted October 30, 2017 ATRL Moderator Posted October 30, 2017 3 minutes ago, SaintWest said: Santa's coming for us, Santa's coming for us Santa's coming for us, Santa's coming for us Santa's coming for us
Jackson Posted October 30, 2017 Author Posted October 30, 2017 Cabello (born in Cojimar, Eastern Havana, Cuba) also charts the fourth Hot 100 top 10 this year whose title doubles as the name of a city. It follows prior trips to the top 10 for "Paris" by The Chainsmokers (No. 6 peak in March); "Portland" by Drake (No. 9, April); and "Malibu" by Miley Cyrus (No. 10, June). and they say i have no impact
ceremonials Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 Doing reviews on my phone rn cause I’m at work and it’s dead x
ceremonials Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 @Hug, “Nine of Diamonds” ”poker face is timeless” ummmm tru Ok but this was pretty cute conceptually. I think it was neat how you were able to bridge those two concepts together, since they’re not super famously or obviously connected. I think you linked the object and betrayal pretty well, even if the card/luck puns were getting to be a little much by the end. In that sense, while your imagery was still concise and portrays what you were trying to say exceptionally, it does feel a little one note if the narrative doesn’t go through some major climax, which I don’t think it really does. Some other problem areas were the “message after the beep” line and the use of the word “damnedest”. The former was a little too forced for me, and the latter is just phrased awkwardly. If it’s any consolation, I can’t tjonk of anything to replace “damnedest” that wouldn’t change the meaning, but alas. Overall, this was good, and consistent throughout, though I wish the narrative had a bit more interaction. ”From the whole deck of cards I drew the Nine of Diamonds / Money won’t buy honesty, but a poker face is timeless”
ceremonials Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 @Tsareena, “Sunflower” Okay this was pretty cute. The imagery was super consistent, and while I don’t fully understand the complexities of what’s going on connotatively, it seems like a message simple enough for most people to resonate with. The chorus growing as it went on was wig-defying, especially in the context of the song. A really cute detail. I still took issue with some lines though - like the last line in Verse One. It seems like it’s missing a word or something? I also felt like the repeating lines in the chorus weren’t necessary, and I like the layer choruses a lot more than the first few. On the other hand, Verse 3 feels a little filler-y, and I don’t think this song needed four verses. Overall, this feels like your most polished entry yet, even if there minor hurdles here and there. “Gold hues of the Sun in my petals / From my new life in Eden”
ceremonials Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 F*** that’s all I have time for my reviews are still coming tonite though sorry for this week, I have lots of things due all of the sudden
ATRL Moderator Tsareena Posted October 30, 2017 ATRL Moderator Posted October 30, 2017 5 minutes ago, ceremonials said: @Tsareena, “Sunflower” Okay this was pretty cute. The imagery was super consistent, and while I don’t fully understand the complexities of what’s going on connotatively, it seems like a message simple enough for most people to resonate with. The chorus growing as it went on was wig-defying, especially in the context of the song. A really cute detail. I still took issue with some lines though - like the last line in Verse One. It seems like it’s missing a word or something? I also felt like the repeating lines in the chorus weren’t necessary, and I like the layer choruses a lot more than the first few. On the other hand, Verse 3 feels a little filler-y, and I don’t think this song needed four verses. Overall, this feels like your most polished entry yet, even if there minor hurdles here and there. “Gold hues of the Sun in my petals / From my new life in Eden” I had 3 verses boo. Thanks for the review
ceremonials Posted October 30, 2017 Posted October 30, 2017 2 minutes ago, Tsareena said: I had 3 verses boo. Thanks for the review Oh there was a bridge too. Then it didn’t need 3
Aurora Posted October 31, 2017 Posted October 31, 2017 Didn't Hug's song say "priceless", not "timeless"?
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 31, 2017 Posted October 31, 2017 6 minutes ago, Aurora said: Didn't Hug's song say "priceless", not "timeless"? queen of fact checking. expose ha alternative facts!
ATRL Moderator Tsareena Posted October 31, 2017 ATRL Moderator Posted October 31, 2017 30 minutes ago, ceremonials said: Oh there was a bridge too. Then it didn’t need 3 Cool cool
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