fountain Posted July 21, 2023 Author Posted July 21, 2023 The songs of Round 5, Multimedia: StormPulse - ATRL @XO_Life - Trauerkloß @Julianna Calm Down - Cascading Life @Hug - the court of public opinion @OreGuy - Justice for the Queen @worldwide angel - in the creek @PoKiTaurus & the band - Impossible Princess @Kylie Jenner - I saw a video @Jackson @JoeAg @Legend E ——————— In addition, I have two quick announcements to make: Firstly, @Aurora will be joining us as a guest judge for this Round 5! My co-host and a judge for Golden Hit’s first three seasons, it’s wonderful to have you back king. This multimedia round was originally planned as an ode to you, but since you are back from your online break it’s the perfect opportunity for another guest judge moment! And secondly, to give you all some extra time during the final round we will be posting the challenge a day earlier, so you can expect it later today! The deadline will still be next Thursday as usual, but we have decided to post the round early to maximise your writing time for the final. ——————— Thank you for the submissions, hope you all are doing well we’re very swiftly coming to the end of the season now, and it’s great getting to share it with you all and experience your writing talent. I hope you have been enjoying it too! 🌸 4 1
Jackson Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 welcome back to the panel @Aurora excited to read these songs! 2
Kylie Jenner Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 Panic submitted because I always just give up on these games with no real reason I love mental illness 1
fountain Posted July 21, 2023 Author Posted July 21, 2023 5 minutes ago, Kylie Jenner said: Panic submitted because I always just give up on these games with no real reason I love mental illness Well only one more round to go, you can do it and really it would be an understatement to say you’ve done amazing this season, so don’t doubt it if one round didn’t come as easy. Writing can be very circumstantial, and maybe the timing just wasn’t right. But you’ve got this
poki Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 StormPulse - ATRL LASH this forum! My track on ATRL Song Contest is flopping and I'm so mad (it's obvious which one I sent lmao). This has been SO fun I'll 100% join future seasons.
Jackson Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 Welcome to the final round of Golden Hit Season 4! This season we've asked you to seek out so many different types of inspiration, from Pokémon types to samples and sequels, different choices of chemistry/near death experiences/split songs, all the way into the depths of absurdity and most recently across all of multimedia! However for this final round, we'd like you to look inward instead. Round 6: Self Portrait This round we would like you to write a song that you feel is representative of yourself; your inspiration this round is YOU! The basis is pretty simple, to write a song that is about yourself, represents a part of you or your life, or demonstrates your uniqueness, with the goal being that the song can act as somewhat of a self portrait. This is a great chance to get introspective and personal, but don't feel pressure to write a certain kind of song. You can choose to execute this challenge however you wish, with whatever you feel is representative of yourself. In some ways this may be the simplest theme of the season, but in some ways it could also be seen as the toughest. Ultimately, as long as you are true to yourself and write something from your heart, then there is nothing to worry about! I'm also excited to announce we have one last guest judge joining us this season for the final round, and there's no person more perfect for this than last season's talented winner! @TruGemini Fantastic to have you joining for this final round, helping us close out the season and deciding who will follow you as our next winner! Entries are due via Google Form submission by July 27th, midnight eastern time. @PoKiTaurus @GentleDance @8thPrince @Hug@Gavin. @worldwide angel @OreGuy@Invisibility@vinster13@XO_Life @xBoySelenatorx@FireMotif16@Tropical@Julianna Calm Down @Better Mistakes@Courtney Love @Prisoner@Kylie Jenner @Aurora If you have any questions, feel free to tag any of our judges (@Jackson, @JoeAg and @Legend E), and if you want any specific feedback on anything you have written or are in need of some more in depth advice, then feel free to message this season’s mentor( @fountain). As a reminder, sign-ups are open all season long and anybody is free to join – just submit your song to sign up! 🌸 2 1
poki Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 This round we would like you to write a song that you feel is representative of yourself; your inspiration this round is YOU! Oh. 1
poki Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 It's like I knew in advance what the themes for this season will be lmao. Thanks for the extra day 1
Hug Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 Oh hell nah... write about MYSELF? World's most pathetic entry incoming
Jackson Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 27 minutes ago, Hug said: Oh hell nah... write about MYSELF? World's most pathetic entry incoming lying is always an option! 1
poki Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 31 minutes ago, Hug said: Oh hell nah... write about MYSELF? World's most pathetic entry incoming Noooooo have faith. I believe in you Maybe you could write about your days as a mod?
poki Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 We have a chorus. Why is talking to myself in 5 different points of view actually working 1
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted July 21, 2023 ATRL Moderator Posted July 21, 2023 We're back! StormPulse – ATRL There are things I like and things I don’t about this entry. I like the message, I understand where it’s coming from, and outside of a few parts of ATRL, you do have this attention-seeking attitude from multiple members. I will start with the positive, I loved all the water imagery in this entry, especially sort of this traditional fairytale-esque moment “But I take pieces from it/And cast them to sea/Where I pray to God they’ll forever be”. I liked the reference to what I assume is the big donation you did on ATRL in “I want to use my power to make this world better/Yet I still stoke the coals”. I feel this is a very personal entry and I am sorry that your experience on this website still affects you up to this moment. I also want to mention that I feel the beauty of a lot of these lyrics is sometimes altered by the more simplistic and generic lyrics, which is generally the first lyric in every stanza. I also think various lyrics in the last one take me there, albeit appreciating their intention. I think this is overall a good entry, but with a few alterations, I feel it would have been even better. XO_Life – Trauerkloss I appreciate your entry and I hope that indeed these thoughts which you described in your ‘other information’ are now gone. Weight should not define us. I do appreciate your different stylistic approach, however at times I felt a bit confused while reading this entry. In the first verse, I do not understand the ‘lips lingered on yours even long after he was gone’ part, as before that to me it seems like the narrator is looking for this perfect lover, but is then someone else coming in the forefront? I am also slightly confused on the same aspect in the third verse. While I do find some parts hard to follow, I think from Verse 4 onwards, the entry is absolutely stunning. I love the antithesis with the second verse. In the Bridge/Outro, I specifically love the last lyric. We all just find an outlet to forget our problems. One other problem I have with this entry is that I wish it was about a specific piece of media. But otherwise, even though I may seem critical, I did enjoy it a lot! Julianna Calm Down – Cascading Life Sexual entries can always be tricky, but I feel you did it justice. My favourite lyric is easily “on my skin are golden droplets of cortisol” – genius. I also love “This bed is photogenic with us dancing on the covers”. Now, there is also one thing I do not like. I think the reference to 69 twice is a bit too much for me, and feels like it’s lacking originality a bit. However, I believe it is hard to write a song like this, trying to find as many visual images to display the sexual act, while making the song still sound sensual and erotic, and I think you did a decent job. It is not my favourite entry of yours, but nothing bad of any sorts. Hug – the court of public opinion You scared me for a minute with that cover art! Slay! I think this is pretty much a perfect entry for me. I think its message is extremely important and something I am happy to see being written about in Golden Hit. I will highlight a few parts I really liked: “What if the pictures gave the whole story/But people invented their own ending based on its synopsis?” or “Because telling someone the foundation of their beliefs is a lie/Would be like telling them they’ve led a life of sin”. Amazing job as always! OreGuy – Justice for the Queen Okay gag me a bit with this entry. While I do wish you had focused on one particular piece of media, I appreciate the originality behind this entry a lot. My only complaint here is that I also wish I knew how ‘the queen’ feels about this. While this is hinted on in Verse 2, I think you could have made this song even more beautiful by including that. Otherwise, my favourite part of this song is probably the bridge, which I feel completes the story very nicely. Overall, a great job! worldwide angel – in the creek I am really wondering if you’re considering doing a sort of concept album with the entries you sent this season, because I feel this one maintains that dreamy characteristic that we always love about your entries. Once again, a great topic to bring for Golden Hit. I love the first verse, especially the ‘preservation in a nation where erasure lives in the limelight’ lyric. My only problem here is that I feel that, if read by themselves, a lot of these lyrics are a bit more to the simple side. This is not a huge problem, and it definitely works a lot of times, but I also wish some more innovative imageries were present here. Otherwise, I think it remains a strong entry and I look forward to your final entry! PoKiTaurus & the band – Impossible Princess A princess who did what and had WHAT? Okay, I am kinda stanning this. First of all, I adore this: “she always hoped to touch a noble pirate’s hand/That’s an oxymoron she learned first hand/But contradictioons exist, will this one go as planned?”. To me, this whole piece reads more like a sort of pirate song, and in a way I am stanning it. Since I don’t have a bad thing to say, I am looking forward to seeing supreme queen Sarah McLachlan on the cover x Kylie Jenner – I Saw a Video I like how this reads like a Miley or Kesha song. I think the theme of animal cruelty is very important to be brought here. The first part of the song has so many beautiful lyrics such as “There was beauty in the way it dealt with the pain”. To me, the chorus falls a bit flat. While I do enjoy the comparison between the narrator and the fish in the video, it seems rather a simple chorus. One other aspect that I enjoy less is that I feel the word ‘fish’ is used too many times, and I feel there were other ways to evoke or repeat the same idea. Somehow, I do enjoy the outro a lot, and that repetitiveness makes the song even more sad and beautiful. I think this is overall another great entry from you! @XO_Life @Julianna Calm Down @Hug @OreGuy @worldwide angel @PoKiTaurus @Kylie Jenner 4 2
Galah Posted July 21, 2023 Posted July 21, 2023 Thank you @fountain for reaching out and asking me to guest judge this challenge, it's one that is very close to my heart and I am definitely expecting big things from this talented bunch of writers! Media provides such a vast pool of inspiration to draw from, so I am especially excited to see what unique interpretations and original sources you have all drawn from this round. Speaking of rounds, this final round is definitely a welcome change of pace. I feel as if I have already expressed my self portrait in "First Place • Second Wind", however now I am settled into my new home perhaps a third instalment may be on the cards. 1 2
fountain Posted July 22, 2023 Author Posted July 22, 2023 1 hour ago, Legend E said: We're back! Reveal hidden contents StormPulse – ATRL There are things I like and things I don’t about this entry. I like the message, I understand where it’s coming from, and outside of a few parts of ATRL, you do have this attention-seeking attitude from multiple members. I will start with the positive, I loved all the water imagery in this entry, especially sort of this traditional fairytale-esque moment “But I take pieces from it/And cast them to sea/Where I pray to God they’ll forever be”. I liked the reference to what I assume is the big donation you did on ATRL in “I want to use my power to make this world better/Yet I still stoke the coals”. I feel this is a very personal entry and I am sorry that your experience on this website still affects you up to this moment. I also want to mention that I feel the beauty of a lot of these lyrics is sometimes altered by the more simplistic and generic lyrics, which is generally the first lyric in every stanza. I also think various lyrics in the last one take me there, albeit appreciating their intention. I think this is overall a good entry, but with a few alterations, I feel it would have been even better. XO_Life – Trauerkloss I appreciate your entry and I hope that indeed these thoughts which you described in your ‘other information’ are now gone. Weight should not define us. I do appreciate your different stylistic approach, however at times I felt a bit confused while reading this entry. In the first verse, I do not understand the ‘lips lingered on yours even long after he was gone’ part, as before that to me it seems like the narrator is looking for this perfect lover, but is then someone else coming in the forefront? I am also slightly confused on the same aspect in the third verse. While I do find some parts hard to follow, I think from Verse 4 onwards, the entry is absolutely stunning. I love the antithesis with the second verse. In the Bridge/Outro, I specifically love the last lyric. We all just find an outlet to forget our problems. One other problem I have with this entry is that I wish it was about a specific piece of media. But otherwise, even though I may seem critical, I did enjoy it a lot! Julianna Calm Down – Cascading Life Sexual entries can always be tricky, but I feel you did it justice. My favourite lyric is easily “on my skin are golden droplets of cortisol” – genius. I also love “This bed is photogenic with us dancing on the covers”. Now, there is also one thing I do not like. I think the reference to 69 twice is a bit too much for me, and feels like it’s lacking originality a bit. However, I believe it is hard to write a song like this, trying to find as many visual images to display the sexual act, while making the song still sound sensual and erotic, and I think you did a decent job. It is not my favourite entry of yours, but nothing bad of any sorts. Hug – the court of public opinion You scared me for a minute with that cover art! Slay! I think this is pretty much a perfect entry for me. I think its message is extremely important and something I am happy to see being written about in Golden Hit. I will highlight a few parts I really liked: “What if the pictures gave the whole story/But people invented their own ending based on its synopsis?” or “Because telling someone the foundation of their beliefs is a lie/Would be like telling them they’ve led a life of sin”. Amazing job as always! OreGuy – Justice for the Queen Okay gag me a bit with this entry. While I do wish you had focused on one particular piece of media, I appreciate the originality behind this entry a lot. My only complaint here is that I also wish I knew how ‘the queen’ feels about this. While this is hinted on in Verse 2, I think you could have made this song even more beautiful by including that. Otherwise, my favourite part of this song is probably the bridge, which I feel completes the story very nicely. Overall, a great job! worldwide angel – in the creek I am really wondering if you’re considering doing a sort of concept album with the entries you sent this season, because I feel this one maintains that dreamy characteristic that we always love about your entries. Once again, a great topic to bring for Golden Hit. I love the first verse, especially the ‘preservation in a nation where erasure lives in the limelight’ lyric. My only problem here is that I feel that, if read by themselves, a lot of these lyrics are a bit more to the simple side. This is not a huge problem, and it definitely works a lot of times, but I also wish some more innovative imageries were present here. Otherwise, I think it remains a strong entry and I look forward to your final entry! PoKiTaurus & the band – Impossible Princess A princess who did what and had WHAT? Okay, I am kinda stanning this. First of all, I adore this: “she always hoped to touch a noble pirate’s hand/That’s an oxymoron she learned first hand/But contradictioons exist, will this one go as planned?”. To me, this whole piece reads more like a sort of pirate song, and in a way I am stanning it. Since I don’t have a bad thing to say, I am looking forward to seeing supreme queen Sarah McLachlan on the cover x Kylie Jenner – I Saw a Video I like how this reads like a Miley or Kesha song. I think the theme of animal cruelty is very important to be brought here. The first part of the song has so many beautiful lyrics such as “There was beauty in the way it dealt with the pain”. To me, the chorus falls a bit flat. While I do enjoy the comparison between the narrator and the fish in the video, it seems rather a simple chorus. One other aspect that I enjoy less is that I feel the word ‘fish’ is used too many times, and I feel there were other ways to evoke or repeat the same idea. Somehow, I do enjoy the outro a lot, and that repetitiveness makes the song even more sad and beautiful. I think this is overall another great entry from you! @XO_Life @Julianna Calm Down @Hug @OreGuy @worldwide angel @PoKiTaurus @Kylie Jenner The speed thank you king, wonderful reviews
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted July 22, 2023 ATRL Moderator Posted July 22, 2023 Just now, fountain said: The speed thank you king, wonderful reviews i am also shooketh tbh 1
fountain Posted July 22, 2023 Author Posted July 22, 2023 1 hour ago, Aurora said: Thank you @fountain for reaching out and asking me to guest judge this challenge, it's one that is very close to my heart and I am definitely expecting big things from this talented bunch of writers! Media provides such a vast pool of inspiration to draw from, so I am especially excited to see what unique interpretations and original sources you have all drawn from this round. Speaking of rounds, this final round is definitely a welcome change of pace. I feel as if I have already expressed my self portrait in "First Place • Second Wind", however now I am settled into my new home perhaps a third instalment may be on the cards. A return to judging AND a possible second entry this season, oh we moved looking forward to hearing your thoughts on the songs Miss Mona getting another new look omg 1
fountain Posted July 22, 2023 Author Posted July 22, 2023 6 hours ago, Hug said: Oh hell nah... write about MYSELF? World's most pathetic entry incoming 5 hours ago, Jackson said: lying is always an option!
Galah Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 15 minutes ago, fountain said: A return to judging AND a possible second entry this season, oh we moved looking forward to hearing your thoughts on the songs Miss Mona getting another new look omg Ms. Mona has plenty of reasons to smile now. 1
Jackson Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 3 hours ago, Legend E said: We're back! Reveal hidden contents StormPulse – ATRL There are things I like and things I don’t about this entry. I like the message, I understand where it’s coming from, and outside of a few parts of ATRL, you do have this attention-seeking attitude from multiple members. I will start with the positive, I loved all the water imagery in this entry, especially sort of this traditional fairytale-esque moment “But I take pieces from it/And cast them to sea/Where I pray to God they’ll forever be”. I liked the reference to what I assume is the big donation you did on ATRL in “I want to use my power to make this world better/Yet I still stoke the coals”. I feel this is a very personal entry and I am sorry that your experience on this website still affects you up to this moment. I also want to mention that I feel the beauty of a lot of these lyrics is sometimes altered by the more simplistic and generic lyrics, which is generally the first lyric in every stanza. I also think various lyrics in the last one take me there, albeit appreciating their intention. I think this is overall a good entry, but with a few alterations, I feel it would have been even better. XO_Life – Trauerkloss I appreciate your entry and I hope that indeed these thoughts which you described in your ‘other information’ are now gone. Weight should not define us. I do appreciate your different stylistic approach, however at times I felt a bit confused while reading this entry. In the first verse, I do not understand the ‘lips lingered on yours even long after he was gone’ part, as before that to me it seems like the narrator is looking for this perfect lover, but is then someone else coming in the forefront? I am also slightly confused on the same aspect in the third verse. While I do find some parts hard to follow, I think from Verse 4 onwards, the entry is absolutely stunning. I love the antithesis with the second verse. In the Bridge/Outro, I specifically love the last lyric. We all just find an outlet to forget our problems. One other problem I have with this entry is that I wish it was about a specific piece of media. But otherwise, even though I may seem critical, I did enjoy it a lot! Julianna Calm Down – Cascading Life Sexual entries can always be tricky, but I feel you did it justice. My favourite lyric is easily “on my skin are golden droplets of cortisol” – genius. I also love “This bed is photogenic with us dancing on the covers”. Now, there is also one thing I do not like. I think the reference to 69 twice is a bit too much for me, and feels like it’s lacking originality a bit. However, I believe it is hard to write a song like this, trying to find as many visual images to display the sexual act, while making the song still sound sensual and erotic, and I think you did a decent job. It is not my favourite entry of yours, but nothing bad of any sorts. Hug – the court of public opinion You scared me for a minute with that cover art! Slay! I think this is pretty much a perfect entry for me. I think its message is extremely important and something I am happy to see being written about in Golden Hit. I will highlight a few parts I really liked: “What if the pictures gave the whole story/But people invented their own ending based on its synopsis?” or “Because telling someone the foundation of their beliefs is a lie/Would be like telling them they’ve led a life of sin”. Amazing job as always! OreGuy – Justice for the Queen Okay gag me a bit with this entry. While I do wish you had focused on one particular piece of media, I appreciate the originality behind this entry a lot. My only complaint here is that I also wish I knew how ‘the queen’ feels about this. While this is hinted on in Verse 2, I think you could have made this song even more beautiful by including that. Otherwise, my favourite part of this song is probably the bridge, which I feel completes the story very nicely. Overall, a great job! worldwide angel – in the creek I am really wondering if you’re considering doing a sort of concept album with the entries you sent this season, because I feel this one maintains that dreamy characteristic that we always love about your entries. Once again, a great topic to bring for Golden Hit. I love the first verse, especially the ‘preservation in a nation where erasure lives in the limelight’ lyric. My only problem here is that I feel that, if read by themselves, a lot of these lyrics are a bit more to the simple side. This is not a huge problem, and it definitely works a lot of times, but I also wish some more innovative imageries were present here. Otherwise, I think it remains a strong entry and I look forward to your final entry! PoKiTaurus & the band – Impossible Princess A princess who did what and had WHAT? Okay, I am kinda stanning this. First of all, I adore this: “she always hoped to touch a noble pirate’s hand/That’s an oxymoron she learned first hand/But contradictioons exist, will this one go as planned?”. To me, this whole piece reads more like a sort of pirate song, and in a way I am stanning it. Since I don’t have a bad thing to say, I am looking forward to seeing supreme queen Sarah McLachlan on the cover x Kylie Jenner – I Saw a Video I like how this reads like a Miley or Kesha song. I think the theme of animal cruelty is very important to be brought here. The first part of the song has so many beautiful lyrics such as “There was beauty in the way it dealt with the pain”. To me, the chorus falls a bit flat. While I do enjoy the comparison between the narrator and the fish in the video, it seems rather a simple chorus. One other aspect that I enjoy less is that I feel the word ‘fish’ is used too many times, and I feel there were other ways to evoke or repeat the same idea. Somehow, I do enjoy the outro a lot, and that repetitiveness makes the song even more sad and beautiful. I think this is overall another great entry from you! @XO_Life @Julianna Calm Down @Hug @OreGuy @worldwide angel @PoKiTaurus @Kylie Jenner the efficiency i could never 3 hours ago, Aurora said: Thank you @fountain for reaching out and asking me to guest judge this challenge, it's one that is very close to my heart and I am definitely expecting big things from this talented bunch of writers! Media provides such a vast pool of inspiration to draw from, so I am especially excited to see what unique interpretations and original sources you have all drawn from this round. Speaking of rounds, this final round is definitely a welcome change of pace. I feel as if I have already expressed my self portrait in "First Place • Second Wind", however now I am settled into my new home perhaps a third instalment may be on the cards. ooh a part III sounds like a slay honestly 2
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