mxtthewdelrey Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 the universal praise Platinum Hit's All Stars 7 era 15 minutes ago, fountain said: @mxtthewdelrey - The Lease “Will my tears keep flowing like average Welsh weather?” I love this line but they better not! This song is so sad though I mean really just punch me in the gut instead please :( I think it’s one of if not the most directly moving songs that I have read from you. What I like is that it remains in your typical charm, but also touches on so many emotional bases. I love how you take unconventional items, like a head sock, and give them so much personality and meaning, it’s really beautiful. I also love how you don’t feel the need to cover up or hide behind any fancy writing techniques, either. You're direct with your pain and your sadness, and that in itself is a huge display of strength worth applauding, but it also works well as a stylistic choice to make your song unique. Overall another great entry from you, I truly believe we are in the mxtthewdelrey renaissance era. Thank you so much, love. You never ever fail to make me feel heard and understood, years down the line. I'm really glad that this song had emotional impact, as it certainly had an emotional impact when I was writing it, and I feel like that frankness was quite a cathartic release for me in the end.
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 10 minutes ago, JoeAg said: thanks i’ll iturn it in by the end of the hour Thank you, I’ll review it if I get the chance before I sleep, if not then tomorrow before results take place
Achilles. Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 Oop the slay of this being your favorite from me so far. Yay. Speaking of Diamond Hit, is there any way to see the scores + stuff from the first 3 rounds? Or anything from Platinum Hit 8? I’ve been meaning to ask because I’d like to compile a list of all my past submissions with their scores / rankings. Any help would be appreciated!
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted June 5, 2022 ATRL Moderator Posted June 5, 2022 Glad to have better reviews than last time. Fair criticism with the opening lines of the verses, perhaps it became too forced at some point. Thank you
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 10 minutes ago, mxtthewdelrey said: the universal praise Platinum Hit's All Stars 7 era Thank you so much, love. You never ever fail to make me feel heard and understood, years down the line. I'm really glad that this song had emotional impact, as it certainly had an emotional impact when I was writing it, and I feel like that frankness was quite a cathartic release for me in the end. Absolutely I am glad you could get this experience, coming up with the challenges we never intend or think of anything like “this is the perfect trauma round!” but seeing how you all take the challenges and use them as vessels to write about your personal experiences and share such intimate writing with us is really beautiful and I’m thankful you trust us with things like this.
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 13 minutes ago, Achilles. said: Speaking of Diamond Hit, is there any way to see the scores + stuff from the first 3 rounds? Or anything from Platinum Hit 8? I’ve been meaning to ask because I’d like to compile a list of all my past submissions with their scores / rankings. Any help would be appreciated! For DH I’ll check if I can find anything from the first three rounds, but I know a lot was lost in the move from old ATRL to new ATRL. If I remember correctly I don’t have any of the entries from those rounds, but it’s possible that I could have scores or rankings, I will have to check my google drive in a little bit. As for PH8 I have no idea but @Aurora should be able to answer
Jackson Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 6 minutes ago, fountain said: For DH I’ll check if I can find anything from the first three rounds, but I know a lot was lost in the move from old ATRL to new ATRL. If I remember correctly I don’t have any of the entries from those rounds, but it’s possible that I could have scores or rankings, I will have to check my google drive in a little bit. As for PH8 I have no idea but @Aurora should be able to answer if you find it lmk what my R1 ranking was too
JoeAg Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 okay i submitted it and yes, velitation is a a real word idk why it puts the squiggly line lol
Achilles. Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 (edited) 16 minutes ago, fountain said: For DH I’ll check if I can find anything from the first three rounds, but I know a lot was lost in the move from old ATRL to new ATRL. If I remember correctly I don’t have any of the entries from those rounds, but it’s possible that I could have scores or rankings, I will have to check my google drive in a little bit. I still have all of my entries saved and I just realized that the scores of every song submitted in DH were listed at the end of the game, so all I’m missing are the rankings for the first 3 rounds and I don’t really need them so please don’t inconvenience yourself for my sake! I think the only song I’ve ever submitted in one of these games that I don’t have the lyrics for is my iconic mess Boys Will Be Boys, which was written for some god awful challenge where we had to record ourselves singing our submission. Would actually love to find the lyrics for it somewhere and relive how horrible it was. Edited June 5, 2022 by Achilles.
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 2 minutes ago, JoeAg said: okay i submitted it and yes, velitation is a a real word idk why it puts the squiggly line lol Thank you for persevering and still submitting
JoeAg Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 1 minute ago, fountain said: Thank you for persevering and still submitting of course ?
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 5 minutes ago, Achilles. said: I still have all of my entries saved and I just realized that the scores of every song submitted in DH were listed at the end of the game, so all I’m missing are the rankings for the first 3 rounds and I don’t really need them so please don’t inconvenience yourself for my sake! I think the only song I’ve ever submitted in one of these games that I don’t have the lyrics for is my iconic mess Boys Will Be Boys, which was written for some god awful challenge where we had to record ourselves singing our submission. Would actually love to find the lyrics for it somewhere and relive how horrible it was. I found them R1: #4 (avg score 8) R2: #15 (avg score 6.825, sorry but it looks like I tanked you on that round ) R3: #2 (avg score 8.775)
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 17 minutes ago, Jackson said: if you find it lmk what my R1 ranking was too #2 with an average of 8.25 (#1 was 8.325)
8thPrince Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 15 minutes ago, Achilles. said: I still have all of my entries saved and I just realized that the scores of every song submitted in DH were listed at the end of the game, so all I’m missing are the rankings for the first 3 rounds and I don’t really need them so please don’t inconvenience yourself for my sake! I think the only song I’ve ever submitted in one of these games that I don’t have the lyrics for is my iconic mess Boys Will Be Boys, which was written for some god awful challenge where we had to record ourselves singing our submission. Would actually love to find the lyrics for it somewhere and relive how horrible it was. I remember BWBB and the hook/your whisper singing! I wrote the instrumental for that one hehe
Galah Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 Gosh I feel like any reviews I post are gonna look Simon'd against fountain's universal praises. 45 minutes ago, Achilles. said: Speaking of Diamond Hit, is there any way to see the scores + stuff from the first 3 rounds? Or anything from Platinum Hit 8? I’ve been meaning to ask because I’d like to compile a list of all my past submissions with their scores / rankings. Any help would be appreciated! I salvaged my old files about a year ago, so yes I still have access to a lot of PH8 content including my scores and reviews, average scores, challenge outlines, twists etc. Just let me know what you'd be interested in and I can probably fetch it for you!
Achilles. Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 10 minutes ago, fountain said: I found them R1: #4 (avg score 8) R2: #15 (avg score 6.825, sorry but it looks like I tanked you on that round ) R3: #2 (avg score 8.775) Oop awesome, thank you! Looking through my performance in past seasons and kinda shook to realize I did better and lasted longer in PH12 than I did in Diamond Hit. The way I’ve spent years thinking PH12 was my worst season and that it caused the death of my interest in songwriting. 3 minutes ago, 8thPrince said: I remember BWBB and the hook/your whisper singing! I wrote the instrumental for that one hehe fff yes, the whisper singing. Everything about that was just a mess. I always thought that it was a DH/PH12 song that I ended up getting eliminated for, but it turns out it wasn’t from either of those seasons… which means it must be from PH8. So either I miraculously didn’t get eliminated (even though I feel like I remember it scoring well below a 5?) or else I was eliminated and then booked a come back. 2 minutes ago, Aurora said:salvaged my old files about a year ago, so yes I still have access to a lot of PH8 content including my scores and reviews, average scores, challenge outlines, twists etc. Just let me know what you'd be interested in and I can probably fetch it for you! That’d be great! I’d like all of the average scores and rankings if you’ve got them, please! I’d welcome the reviews too, if it isn’t too much of a hassle. I did a lot of my best writing in that season and it’d be nice to revisit some reactions. Still remember someone (Temporal?) being shook when I sent in Red Carpet Funeral.
mxtthewdelrey Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 33 minutes ago, Aurora said: Gosh I feel like any reviews I post are gonna look Simon'd against fountain's universal praises. but Simon, you're a warm, charismatic, handsome person with great dentistry!
Temporal Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 17 minutes ago, Achilles. said: Oop awesome, thank you! Looking through my performance in past seasons and kinda shook to realize I did better and lasted longer in PH12 than I did in Diamond Hit. The way I’ve spent years thinking PH12 was my worst season and that it caused the death of my interest in songwriting. fff yes, the whisper singing. Everything about that was just a mess. I always thought that it was a DH/PH12 song that I ended up getting eliminated for, but it turns out it wasn’t from either of those seasons… which means it must be from PH8. So either I miraculously didn’t get eliminated (even though I feel like I remember it scoring well below a 5?) or else I was eliminated and then booked a come back. That’d be great! I’d like all of the average scores and rankings if you’ve got them, please! I’d welcome the reviews too, if it isn’t too much of a hassle. I did a lot of my best writing in that season and it’d be nice to revisit some reactions. Still remember someone (Temporal?) being shook when I sent in Red Carpet Funeral. Just that title sends chills down my spine… a moment
Galah Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 1 minute ago, Achilles. said: That’d be great! I’d like all of the average scores and rankings if you’ve got them, please! I’d welcome the reviews too, if it isn’t too much of a hassle. I did a lot of my best writing in that season and it’d be nice to revisit some reactions. Yours were actually pretty easy to compile since I made tribute summary charts for all of the finalists, and you placed second in PH8! I just needed to add your finale score, too. Song Title Score Peak Round I Only Come Out At Night 8.46 3 1 Therapy 8.44 6 2 1989 7.87 15 3 Running Free 7.13 16 4 Telegony 7.81 6 5 Hatred Over Love (Created Equal) 8.24 4 6 This Place I Call Home 7.87 9 7 The Man You Think I Am 8.43 5 8 Damaged Goods 7.47 4 9 Roots Grow Deeper 8.94 1 10 Something Like Heaven 8.04 4 11.1 Let The World End 7.83 6 11.2 The World Raw 8.06 2 12 If you would like any specific reviews (or just all of them, I don't mind) I can message them to you privately if you'd like.
Achilles. Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 2 minutes ago, Temporal said: Just that title sends chills down my spine… a moment IIRC I didn’t even submit the entire song. I think I cut the first half that had a lot of the scene-setting and only sent the really showtuny second half of the song. That was my real All Too Well serve I fear. The fact that the song was inspired by news coverage of Celine Dion at her husband’s wake.
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 1 hour ago, Aurora said: Gosh I feel like any reviews I post are gonna look Simon'd against fountain's universal praises. Please I am not ready for you and Element to come out and call this round trash after I’ve loved nearly every single entry
Galah Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 Just now, fountain said: Please I am not ready for you and Element to come out and call this round trash after I’ve loved nearly every single entry Oh, nothing of the sort! I just fear any minor criticisms or suggestions I may have (and I do have a few) will make my critiques come across as harsh in comparison to your glowing reviews. Definitely haven't come across anything "trash" thus far, though!
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 2 minutes ago, Aurora said: Oh, nothing of the sort! I just fear any minor criticisms or suggestions I may have (and I do have a few) will make my critiques come across as harsh in comparison to your glowing reviews. Definitely haven't come across anything "trash" thus far, though! To be fair this round was very suited to my taste and ideals in songwriting anyway, so maybe that has played a part also, but the talent really has jumped out. I fear we are in for trouble with scoring.
Achilles. Posted June 5, 2022 Posted June 5, 2022 19 minutes ago, Aurora said: Yours were actually pretty easy to compile since I made tribute summary charts…. Thank you so much for this! LOL. My 1989 title track must have sucked indeed if I don’t even remember having written it! It’s the only one I haven’t got in my digital files, either. Maybe I wrote it by hand? This is me in real time realizing that I must have competed in PH9 as well because Red Carpet Funeral, Paint By Number, Scapegoat, Full Time Mom, and Boys Will Be Boys aren’t in 8, 10, or 12. I didn’t think I did so many seasons. Round 5 though. That was a trip. “Write a song using a word I chose randomly from the dictionary. Jake, your word is ‘telegony.’” I’d love to have all of the reviews if it isn’t too much of a bother!
fountain Posted June 5, 2022 Author Posted June 5, 2022 @JoeAg - Maladjusted First I really want to praise you and thank you for your commitment and the fact that you have persevered and submitted despite the testing week that you have had, I really appreciate it. Your writing here is very inspired and almost abstract at times, there are many points at which I had to look up what certain words meant, and I think you have to be a little careful with using such language at times, especially to such a degree, because with outdated or underused words you can end up sounding nonsensical or even pompous when other words are avaliable; that said though, with the nature of your song I think that these word choices work and help strengthen this “maladjusted” theme as using language like this itself could be considered quite maladjusted, so if that’s what you intended for it to resonate as then I think that was a smart choice, but in the future I would advise to be careful not to overdo it as in some cases it can end up being a hindrance to the message and the resonance of a song, definitely take it on a case by case basis. Personally I would say I feel the last two sections of the song are the strongest here, I think this is where your writing found the nicest balance between the stylistic choices you were making and the emotion and story you are trying to portray, particularly a line such as “said my cries weren’t of anger and weren’t representative of my soul, but were obviously not pleasing to the ear” was beautiful and also really self aware, and I love when a writer can be self aware and comment on the self in their own song, and you did that really brilliantly here. The song itself as a whole is quite an interesting mix of some poetic writing and abstract language, and various strokes of imagery, which probably shouldn’t all work together conventionally but actually in this case I think does, and that you have managed to pull it off, which shows your strength as a writer. It is perhaps not always the best method, but in this song and with this theme I think you have executed it well. Overall, I think that despite the struggles that you have faced in submitting this week that ultimately you have written a very strong entry, another which you should definitely be proud of, but still I hope that the next round can be more of a smoother experience for you.
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