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[Galah]

30 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

My dream is to write the gay Blank Space and satirize the notion that gay people are “recruited” / “groomed” into existence. 

 

Excuse me, young man, have you got a minute

To talk about why you should be a ******

 

Eternally ahead of your time, I fear.

[Into The Void]

6 hours ago, fountain said:

Does anybody else look at the lyric threads that get made on here and cringe at some of the responses and lyrics that people quote? Because usually they are not that impressive 

 

We genuinely read much, much better from the submissions here 

no but i cringe at things ive written lol

[Galah]

Just now, Insanity said:

271 words and im at the bridge how am i supposed to make this 500? lmao

Turn the bridge into a middle eight and make it the centrepiece of your song, then write as many words after it as before!

[Into The Void]

2 minutes ago, Aurora said:

Turn the bridge into a middle eight and make it the centrepiece of your song, then write as many words after it as before!

idk how to do that lol and idk what that even means

Edited May 31, 2022 by Insanity

[Euterpe]

3 minutes ago, Insanity said:

271 words and im at the bridge how am i supposed to make this 500? lmao

Personally, I kept writing and trying to think of things simply to put in there, because sometimes just writing helps get to more ideas. You can always modify lines and wording later, sometimes it's just about getting something down. (This is what I did yesterday, so I'm at the "so many things need to be changed/modified" stage, but I have the word count at least.)

[fountain]

Oop it’s June where I live! Happy Pride Month everybody!

[fountain]

36 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

My dream is to write the gay Blank Space and satirize the notion that gay people are “recruited” / “groomed” into existence. 

 

Excuse me, young man, have you got a minute

To talk about why you should be a ******

 

Interesting idea, would be fun if you could incorporate it for a future challenge! 

[Into The Void]

370 words!

 

 

to bad it makes no sense

Edited May 31, 2022 by Insanity

[Galah]

3 minutes ago, Insanity said:

idk how to do that lol and idk what that even means

A middle eight essentially functions just like a bridge—it has its own unique character/vibe within the song. More specifically, a middle eight is typically eight bars/lines and toward the middle of a song rather than the end like a bridge often might be (i.e. before the final chorus). It's just a structural technique you might want to try:

 

VERSE

CHORUS

VERSE

MIDDLE EIGHT

VERSE

CHORUS

VERSE

 

This is a very basic song structure, and could be a good starting point to expand upon and tweak to suit your song best, should you wish to.

[fountain]

7 minutes ago, Insanity said:

271 words and im at the bridge how am i supposed to make this 500? lmao

There are many ways really… you could have a perspective change or a narrative shift in your song, or if it’s something personal just continue telling your story and put across as much as you can in therms of the unique details and specifics of whatever the song is about, telling a story not only from the beginning to the end / the now, but also thinking of the future as well. If you really give it some thought, you will think of something I’m sure. And if you can’t, if the content just simply isn’t there, then the concept behind your song might simply just be lacking. 

[Into The Void]

1 minute ago, fountain said:

There are many ways really… you could have a perspective change or a narrative shift in your song, or if it’s something personal just continue telling your story and put across as much as you can in therms of the unique details and specifics of whatever the song is about, telling a story not only from the beginning to the end / the now, but also thinking of the future as well. If you really give it some thought, you will think of something I’m sure. And if you can’t, if the content just simply isn’t there, then the concept behind your song might simply just be lacking. 

im almost at 400 and it starting to not make any sense actually it didnt make snese ages ago i was just writing whatever came out of my mind thats how i write just random thoughts lol until it makes sense

[fountain]

1 minute ago, Insanity said:

im almost at 400 and it starting to not make any sense actually it didnt make snese ages ago i was just writing whatever came out of my mind thats how i write just random thoughts lol until it makes sense

If I can ask, what is the concept behind your song? Knowing that might make it a little easier to give you suggestions on how to continue writing

[Into The Void]

5 minutes ago, fountain said:

If I can ask, what is the concept behind your song? Knowing that might make it a little easier to give you suggestions on how to continue writing

its about someone who is depressed and finding distractions to get them out of their funk

[fountain]

7 minutes ago, Insanity said:

its about someone who is depressed and finding distractions to get them out of their funk

If you’ve run out of ideas for potential distractions, then you could write verses about this person’s life before they were feeling depressed and how it has changed and why they now need these distractions, or you could also go the opposite direction and assume that the distractions potentially helped and you can describe how this person comes to feel better afterwards. Or both.

 

Or you could write a second part to the song from the perspective of the people around this person, and how they notice a change in them, with these people suggesting their own ways to help, and also talk about how this has impacted them seeing the person go through this? Or, again, possibly both. 

[Into The Void]

3 minutes ago, fountain said:

If you’ve run out of ideas for potential distractions, then you could write verses about this person’s life before they were feeling depressed and how it has changed and why they now need these distractions, or you could also go the opposite direction and assume that the distractions potentially helped and you can describe how this person comes to feel better afterwards. Or both.

 

Or you could write a second part to the song from the perspective of the people around this person, and how they notice a change in them, with these people suggesting their own ways to help, and also talk about how this has impacted them seeing the person go through this? Or, again, possibly both. 

 my mind doesnt run that deep

[Achilles.]

1 hour ago, Aurora said:

Eternally ahead of your time, I fear.

 

1 hour ago, fountain said:

Interesting idea, would be fun if you could incorporate it for a future challenge! 

Okay but why do your two comments together make me think the next round is going to be to write a gay anthem for pride month.

 

 

 

32 minutes ago, Insanity said:

 my mind doesnt run that deep

[fountain]

23 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

 

Okay but why do your two comments together make me think the next round is going to be to write a gay anthem for pride month.

 

If we were wouldn’t it have made more sense to do this week, since this week is the start of pride month? 
 

I think Aurora said that because you posted it ahead of June. And I just like the idea. 

[Euterpe]

My Iliad has been submitted. I hope you're ready for the weirdest song structure you've ever seen.

[fountain]

 

1 hour ago, Euterpe said:

My Iliad has been submitted. I hope you're ready for the weirdest song structure you've ever seen.

You couldn’t post this and expect me not to take a sneak peek  

 

[Galah]

My schedule is so full this week and I know this is going to take a MINUTE to judge, the perils of being booked and busy I fear.  Extremely looking forward to this round's submissions, though!

 

8 hours ago, Achilles. said:

 

Okay but why do your two comments together make me think the next round is going to be to write a gay anthem for pride month.

 

 

 

Yes exactly, for the month of June we're going to be known as RAINBOW HIT and change all of our logo and emblems to rainbow colours and you'll be competing for RAINBOW TOKENS instead!!1 #PRIDE

[Galah]

OK time to kickstart reviews, methinks.

 

[Galah]

Also, don't think I'm not going to double check your word counts and don't be thinking any whitespaces are gonna fool me!

[Euterpe]

2 minutes ago, Aurora said:

Also, don't think I'm not going to double check your word counts and don't be thinking any whitespaces are gonna fool me!

Low key paranoid it’s not actually meeting the word count even though I put it in a word counter. 

[Galah]

Me reading these first few songs:

 

[Galah]

Me after writing three reviews: