thecptz Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 2 minutes ago, Hug said: Future entries will be in a much more legible font and done on Google docs, if it makes you feel better thank you but are you gonna make it to the next round
Hug Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 Just now, thecptz said: thank you but are you gonna make it to the next round Not to be shady but I don't see myself in the bottom 3 or even bottom half
thecptz Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 Just now, Hug said: Not to be shady but I don't see myself in the bottom 3 or even bottom half oop who do you think going to be in the bottom
Hug Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 1 minute ago, thecptz said: oop who do you think going to be in the bottom Only one who I know will be bottom 3 is minho!
Kelp Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 15 minutes ago, Hug said: Not to be shady but I don't see myself in the bottom 3 or even bottom half I think you should check in with the eye doctor if you don’t “see” yourself there because your entry is a dumpster fire and a sure last place. Are you mad we all effortlessly outshined you? (I’m kidding obviously)
Hug Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 Just now, Gay Rat Divorce said: I think you should check in with the eye doctor if you don’t “see” yourself there because your entry is a dumpster fire and a sure last place. Are you mad we all effortlessly outshined you? (I’m kidding obviously)
Navyofbadgals Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 CRITIQUES @Hug - Spoiler c'mon graphics! This entry looks great, and it was really enjoyable reading it. You had a concept and you fully realized it and made it look great, I will say that I think using songs from the show itself is a bit of an easy route, because they would obviously fit well. Still, you did well and I really enjoyed it overall @coomy - Spoiler your trinity is very well-written, and what I like about it is how well you explained each song choice. I don't necessarily have one vision of how a trinity should look, it can be more conceptual and abstract, or more like this where each choice just makes sense, especially your second song choice was a really strong pick. I will say that if I have a critique (and again, this is nitpicky because I think you did really good), it would be that I'm not sure if the 3rd song is a 100% perfect fit. I totally get the anxiety, but I am missing the ups and downs, and the revolt that goes with it. It's not not a fit, it's just not as strong as a fit as your other two picks. Still great job @clue - Spoiler very interesting that you chose to pick all radiohead songs, you really took a risk and limited yourself, but I think it paid off! I like how your trinity really is a character study of Daria, rather than focusing on other elements of the show. I'm open to other interpretations of trinities, but this was kinda the ones I was expecting to see (not a bad thing btw before you try it lol!). You made a clear entry with an actual character arc and your songs all fit. A really good start, I will say, not so much a critique as it is something that i hope to see in next rounds, is for you to also show us different kinds of trinities and be more creative. But for the first round it's really good <3 @kipperskipper - Spoiler i think this entry has a really decent start to the competition. I'm not really blown away by creativity but it's a well-made trinity. I will say that you kinda missed an opportunity with your second song. Your 1st and 3rd song are not just reflections of who Zim is as a character, but they obviously also link to the fact that Zim is an alien. I think a 2nd song that would fit more with this space theme would've pushed your entry over the edge x @Fruity - Spoiler i can't say I didn't enjoy reading your entry, but it's certainly not perfect. I think your first two picks are kinda copouts, and loving ketchup really doesn't.. tell me a lot about Pikachu. On A Roll is def a better fit than the other two, though with no good explanations, I will say that On A Roll also isn't the best fit out there, as it's way more love love, than the type of connection that pikachu and ash have. I think you made it more difficult on yourself for choosing Pikachu too. @touya kinomoto - Spoiler Super Bass was a really good choice and told me a lot about Touya but I feel like.. the same energy isn't in the rest of the trinity? Brother was fine I guess, but i feel like the song choice is a bit basic and doesn't fully cover the relationship between the two (and I feel like there were better options). I think where you really struggled is with Make Me Feel, which felt moreso as an elaboration of what you've already done a bit with super bass. I'm not really sure who Touya is after this entry. @DevonRoars - Spoiler I am.. not quite sure what to think of you choosing multiple characters. I will commend you for linking them together and not just being random picks, but i think you missed the opportunity to really fully delve into one of these characters and really fully show who they are. I also am not sure if She Wolf really is that great of a fit? At least I personally don't see it, and I think with songs like these, an explanation could help sell it better. @disruptive - Spoiler I think, personally, you did the minimum (tho I appreciate the cute lil graphics). There's nothing I can really fault here but I'm not blown away and I think a lot of that has to do with the fact that you barely wrote anything and just left your songs there. I'm not expecting essays (like Im doing rn lol ) but I feel like if you wanna push yourself into the top 3, you need to be more creative or give us sumn more. That said, the minimum is def good enough, and I can see why your songs fit with stitch so i'm certainly not mad at this entry either. @Gay Rat Divorce - Spoiler i'm kinda in shock over how good this is this was an experience and I loved how the songs added to the experience. @PinkBox - Spoiler I cannot with your ass also the way I googled Harley Bird because you made it seem like she died but she was simply replaced I don't think you said a lot about Peppa herself, but i like the comedic approach you took and you made me cackle. I'm hoping to see different kind of entries from you in the future as well, but I enjoyed this for the first round. @PiecesOfYou - Spoiler hmm I think unfortunately your entry is a bit one note and misses some nice opportunities to really delve into who Heather is, because in reality, you could've just used her obsession with fame and money and all for one part of her character, and then do other stuff. I am not quite sure that I know who Heather is now as a character after this entry. @Not Like The Movies - Spoiler very nice! Your song choices all fit, you really gave us a look into who your character is and I really appreciate you also linking your song choices together (with choosing for older female singers). I don't think linking song choices is necessary for a good entry, but it certainly helps if it's effective. @Astronomy - Spoiler I really like the way you presented this trinity, esp with the first two songs underlining a lyric from your song, I think that's really an effective way of linking your song to what your preaching about the character. That also brings me to really your only missed opportunity there, which is not doing the same for your 3rd song. It's not a major flaw or anything, but it would've def made it better @Dessy - Spoiler Girl on Fire is a great pick and I also think you really explained Shego well as a character. I will say that I'm not sure if bad blood is really the best fit ever? the song also talks about going from people you thought were cool are now your enemies, and i'm not sure if Shego and Kim were ever.. anything other than enemies. You did good otherwise, and I don't think Bad Blood is a bad pick, it just could've been better @ughgabriel - Spoiler well I think it's obvious you've put in enough work to at least be safe this round cause damn. I really liked your entry and your picks were great and I love how the musical style compliments your entry/character. Also not necessary but THANK you for adding genius links as well that saves me a search so it's really helpful. Anyways not much to say but that you did good @Invisibility - Spoiler love that you picked a format like this. It's also a good example of how a trinity doesn't need to be overly long or complicated, but can be short, sweet and effective. Just underlining some lyrics, explaining the song pick and in this case explaining how it fits. I appreciate this, it's very clear and your last song choice was really a great fit (the rest were too, but this one stands out to me) @Overprotected - Spoiler I don't really judge rn on how good your song is, rather how well it fits, but I will say that your collection of songs is easily the best to listen to Thank you for the brief summary, because I for one am not familiar with the character, so this helped. I think all your song picks fit really well. I will say, and i'm not docking points for it, but it would help if you bolded or underlined the lyric parts here so the entry is a nicer read, but again, it's nitpicky and i'm certainly not docking points for it. Good job in all @Auburn - Spoiler you did decent i will say that I think Hunny is a bit of a copout and didn't as much for me to the entry, whereas your other song picks (and explanations) did more justice to who Pooh is. @Rotunda - Spoiler ahh I might be biased because I like the show a lot, but I think this character pick is one of the best because Bojack is such a dynamic character. Besides a good character pick, I think also all of your songs are pretty much perfect fits. I guess Los Ageless was a giveaway because it also played on the show (for a good reason) but the other two picks are also just really good. This is just a really sound entry, I'm hoping in future rounds to see some creativity, but for this round I don't mind this approach at all, especially because you executed it so well @luckystrike - Spoiler not you forcing me to listen to fat alma!! h8 chu!! anyways this was a decent entry, nothing really blew me away but I think your picks were all decent. I feel like your last passage maybe misses really the depth that the other two gave? Just love for Karen doesn't really embody who Plankton is, or Plankton''s relationship with people around him and Karen. Still you did fine @MusicLoverDude - Spoiler c'mon branding! I think your explanations are thorough and explain who Muffy is pretty well, I think your song picks are just.. okay? I think they're rather straight-forward and I feel like as with 7 Rings, it doesn't not fit, but there surely are songs with better fits that also describe the selfishness that you said Muffy had. I feel like we only just scraped the surface of Muffy and that's what holding your entry back from perfection. I will say though that overall you did fine and I think you presented a decent entry overall x Ok so I typed some ESSAYS lol, don't expect me to do it everytime but I think for the first round it was necessary. I'll also add how impressed I am at the quality of the entries You guys did really good in general, but esp considering it's the first round
DevonRoars Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 @Navyofbadgals I picked she wolf for Charlotte, because after a long night of hookin', trade didn’t like the session so he had gutted me.. and set me on fire.. but I didn’t die.. bitch, I crystalized… and now I’m a Glamazon bitch ready for the runway.
Hug Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 Thank you for your comments @Navyofbadgals ? When I decided to use only songs from the soundtrack, I was originally planning on doing songs that Greg sung himself, but outside of Adelaide Parade, the only other song he sung on the OST was a lot harder to fit into the entry. Ultimately, I decided it was better to use fitting tracks as opposed to forcing a cute gimmick. Still, I understand the "easy route" criticism, and I kinda felt that way myself. It seems that it didn't hurt me in the end, but I'll be more adventurous with song choices in the future. ?
touya kinomoto Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 Thank you for the critique Miss Bagels @Navyofbadgals but let me just add that I wanted to describe Touya with songs that are actually from the perspective of the other people. So say for Super Bass, it's from the perspective of the girls that are head over heels for him, for Brother, it is from Sakura's POV and for Make Me Feel, it's from the POV of both Kaho and Yukito.
clue Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 I'll be better in the future. I had sexy graphics/more text originally, but I lost it all when the project program crashed on me
smholiv Posted June 22, 2020 Author Posted June 22, 2020 not bagels easily using a spoiler tag for everyone, we- well. i guess its just me
clue Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 10 minutes ago, minho said: not bagels easily using a spoiler tag for everyone, we- well. i guess its just me you can do bb code, maybe that would help
smholiv Posted June 22, 2020 Author Posted June 22, 2020 Just need to say I am shook by how well these entries are overall, especially for R1. This could be one of the most competitive seasons of this game going forward if so many people are bringing it already! Batch One Hug (Greg) - I loved your presentation a lot, and the way you approached your entry as a story in the character's perspective was great (especially because it fit the theme of the show and the character too). The songs you chose being from the series was a fine choice, it made sense overall, however it might've been more exciting to use something unexpected. coomy (Terr) - I'm really glad you chose someone more obscure, it makes things interesting! Likewise you chose songs I hadn't ever heard of and I think that added more to the intrigue of your entry. Coming at this from the perspective of someone who doesn't know much about this character or the film they're from, you did a good job of laying out your interpretations. clue (Daria) - Choosing 3 songs from the same artist/act was an interesting choice but I feel like it made sense here. I definitely got a few different aspects of Daria's personality through the songs you chose. I like that the approach you took with this entry is to narrow your focus in on her character. kipperskipper (Invader Zim) - Zim is such a silly and fun character, and a huge part of his (and the show's) appeal is how absurd things can get. I feel like you captured that with this entry and chose some good songs to represent his quirkiness. I think this is a solid start but going forward I would like to see something more exciting. Fruity (Pikachu) - The entry itself was messy and fun kind of captures Pikachu idk. I like the way you approached the entry a lot and think you should keep up this ~mood. The songs were a bit weird though, I didn't really feel like On A Roll fit for example, and I guess the entry overall lacked a cohesion that might've enhanced your entry! touya kinomoto (Touya Kinomoto) - Oop, I always wondered where this name came from. I see now that you approached this entry by choosing songs based on how other's see this character in the series which is an interesting idea. However without that information the entry feels a bit all over the place. Mainly, the second song felt a bit weaker than the others. DevonRoars - I like the characters you chose for this entry, and I like that you picked out really strong key characteristics. Songwise these were pretty okay, I was less convinced by Wonder Woman, but the other two did fit with your descriptions. My main critique is I think this entry would've been a lot stronger if you picked one of the characters and really focused on 3 different personality traits or character traits. disruptive (Stitch) - The presentation is amazing of course. I liked the songs you chose as well - the Elvis song definitely fits with both the character and the movie itself, and the Rina song is a perfect choice for Stitch's backstory. The Lorde song felt a bit out of place? I do think your entry speaks for itself for the most part, but it could've been stronger with a bit more to it. Still solid as a start. Gay Rat Divorce (Salad Fingers) - Maybe I should've made it mandatory to use google docs. Obviously this is one of the most creative entries of the entire group, its well thought out, has a lot of personality to it, but doesn't overshadow the character either. The songs you chose fit kind of perfectly... truly an experience! Pinkbox (Peppa Pig) - As soon as you sent this I was so happy about the creativity you put in. I am happier to see that you had so much fun with this entry and actually backed it up with a solid trinity overall nnn. You definitely rolled with your own interpretation of Peppa and I like how much you committed, whew! Batch Two PiecesOfYou (Heather Total Drama Island) - I would've liked to see a bit more to this entry as it feels very bare on its own. While you don't necessarily have to write out long descriptions I do think a different approach could've been picking one of these personality traits and creating a trinity around that (as an idea) Not Like The Movies (Suga Mama) - PLEASE skjsjs. Suga Mama was one of my favourite characters when I was younger and I think you nailed why. She's just so funny and bold, and the songs you chose perfectly captured Suga Mama's personality to me. Astronomy (Rukia) - Your descriptions were pretty spot on and well thought out, so I appreciated that! The songs also felt like they fit your descriptions and worked together really nicely. I like the progression in your trinity, and overall it was just a really nice entry and start to the game. Dessy (Shego) - Her popularity. This is a very solid entry overall, I think the songs picked fit pretty well but I also think this might've been even better with something unexpected or surprising? Otherwise its a solid entry, good job ughgabriel (Noah Kaiba) - SUPER creative, lots of thought put into this entry, its essentially like the best approach you can take because not only did it wow me, it fit the criteria really well and approached it in a way that was new and fresh. Invisibility (Pearl) - I really liked the songs you chose here, they all felt purposeful and worked with your entry in a great way. Your entry overall was also a highlight, it's very simple but straightforward in a meaningful way and I really got to learn a lot about Pearl's arc throughout the series. Overprotected (Taeko Okajima) - Really good song choices for the themes of the movie. I felt myself getting lost a bit and I really appreciated that. Your entry is overall really solid, a great example of a simple but meaningful entry! Auburn (Winnie the Pooh) - It's a nice, simple start, I think you could've done more with this to really make it stand out, and I wasn't a huge fan of the second song in this entry, but its a good introduction to the game! Rotunda - Bojack Horseman - I like that you focused on the overall arc for your entry and I think you did a pretty good job of it (coming from someone who is unfamiliar with this character). The songs you chose also worked well with your descriptions, and I felt like I got a good intro to the different aspects of Bojack's character with this entry. luckystrike (Plankton) - It's a nice first entry but I would've liked to see more? I think this is a fun entry but the last song for example feels kind of out of place and the first description felt kind of bare bones. Overall a solid entry. MLD (Muffy) - Ahhh I was secretly hoping you'd use Muffy for your entry. Your descriptions are very thorough and I liked the thought you put into it, I really felt like I got a good sense of Muffy through them. Songwise these are pretty solid as well!
Henry Posted June 22, 2020 Posted June 22, 2020 Really solid first round! Gonna be hard to rank these tbh. Excited to see what everyone does in the other rounds (they are really good I think you guys will like them ) This is my first time doing any sort of critiques for a game so please bear with me as I find my footing! Spoiler Hug (Greg) - Wow amazing job selling the show/character, made me want to watch! Not sure if these events happen over the entire series or just one episode but you did a really good job telling it in a short and effective way. Song choices were good but I guess to be expected since they were from the show but I didn’t mind since they worked really well. coomy (Terr) - I’ll admit I didn’t listen to the songs in their entirety but from reading the lyrics/listening to snippets they fit well with the story you were telling. Like Hug, you took the story and gave a summary that was easy to understand and I think you did the story and character justice. Reflections in Suspension is amazing, if only it was shorter. clue (Daria) - Well you really made one artist work for her character arc. One would think you choose the songs first then found a character that fits wow. Not familiar with Daria or Radiohead but I feel like she would listen to them based on this entry so really good job making everything work well together. Really liked your entry. kipperskipper (Invader Zim) - Also really liked your entry. Good job with the character arc and each song did fit pretty well. Zim seems like a really cool character and I think you did a really good job showing that with your entry. Fruity (Pikachu) - Plsssss. Well your entry was fun at least. Maybe if Pikachu did this Ash would have won a league or whatever they are called sooner! touya kinomoto (Touya Kinomoto) - Probably would have liked your entry better if you took Super Bass and Make Me Feel and focused on that side of him? Like the bother stuff felt out of place. Not sure how his relationships are portrayed but I feel like you probably had a lot more to work with since he’s a bisexual animie character. I saw in the thread you said it was from the POV of the other characters so I guess that would help but still felt like you maybe could have done better. DevonRoars - Well I didn’t expect to see 3 different characters for an entry but in my opinion your songs don’t really fit your descriptions that well? I mean I could see the songs fitting each character but maybe if you choose one character and focused on only them your entry could have been better. I definitely liked your characters and their descriptions more than the song choices. disruptive (Stitch) - Love Stitch and I think you did a decent job but I wish you did a little more after seeing some of these entries. Liked the songs and cute graphic! Gay Rat Divorce (Salad Fingers) - Ahh I loved the Salad Fingers series and your entry is amazing. Document was well formatted. No complaints, you did an excellent job! Looking forward to more from you. Pinkbox (Peppa Pig) - fjhjhfjh we love a good laugh. Very creative and definitely NOT what I expected but you somehow made it work. RIP Harley Bird :( PiecesOfYou (Heather Total Drama Island) - Pretty basic entry and I feel like most things could be swapped out, including the character. If this is all you could have done with Heather maybe you should have chosen someone else. You said you are not good at explaining yourself but I still think you could have done something way better. Hopefully you get the chance to redeem yourself! Not Like The Movies (Suga Mama) - Love her! You did a really good job and I feel like I really know who Suga Mama is after this entry and the song choices were good. Astronomy (Rukia) - Loved her story and really liked the songs! You did a good job. Might even come back to some of these songs. Dessy (Shego) - Yea like bagels said I think Bad Blood is the only somewhat miss in your entry but I can see what you were going for with the song so it's not really an issue.You did a really good job with the character. ughgabriel (Noah Kaiba) - Period omg. Loved everything about your entry, even the songs which are not really the type of songs I like. The document was really well done. My ass was clicking like I was expecting something to happen fjhf. Invisibility (Pearl) - Good job explaining the arc in such a simple and effective way. The song choices were good. Solid entry overall. Love Pink in the Night wow. Overprotected (Taeko Okajima) - Wait lemme save this Weyes Blood song. Another solid entry. You explained everything well and the songs fit, good job. Auburn (Winnie the Pooh) - Hunny feels very out of place in this otherwise good entry. Sanctuary was really nice and captured exactly what you were saying I think. Feeling So Good was also a nice choice. Think you could have done a bit better though. Rotunda (Bojack Horseman) - Excellent entry! Honestly there is nothing to complain about, everything fits really well and I think you did a really good job with his arc. One of my favorite entries. luckystrike (Plankton) - I love Computer Boy so much :kii2poor: Liked your entry and I think the songs fit well. I feel like you could have done even more with a character like Plankton but still a solid entry. MLD (Muffy) - Well listening to 7 Rings and looking at the pic of Muffy was something fff. Cute song choices and they fit with what you were saying about Muffy. I think you did a good job with her.
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