Invisibility Posted June 27, 2020 Posted June 27, 2020 websites, p***hub, video edits, amazingly formatted docs... some of y'all are graphic designers and that is your field
smholiv Posted June 27, 2020 Author Posted June 27, 2020 Fruity's entry i'll add this to the other entries later f hello ladies i really am pulling this together out of nowhere sdzjfiodsfsf so bear with luvs x i choose grey to represent monotony, lifelessness and despair my first song choice is 9 to 5 by Dolly Parton, as this song (which is almost 40 years old) still today provides cutting social commentary about the monotony of brutal capitalist structures which bind and constrict us all in our day to day living. this song will truly be TIMELESS and remain radical until we collectively manage to upheave the heavy weight of this deathly political machine my second song choice is CTTR by ms. katheryn hudson because, despite the video ironically depicting a cacophony of colour in a world of oblivia, this is in contrast to a lyric which paints a bleak picture of blindness. the narrative of the song highlights the lack general lack of colour, flavour and individuality in a post-trump era. my final song choice is XS by Rina Sawayama as XS is a song that addresses overconsumption, capitalism’s exploitation of underpaid laborers both physically and mentally, and the corrupt corporate world. since I'm not smart enough to write more I stole an entry from Touch It which quotes from Rina herself: "XS is a song that mocks capitalism in a sinking world. Given that we all know global climate change is accelerating and human extinction is a very real possibility within our lifetime it seemed hilarious to me that brands were still coming out with new makeup palettes every month and public figures were doing a gigantic house tour of their gated property in Calabasas in the same week as doing a ‘sad about Australian wild fires’ Instagram post. I mean I’m guilty of turning a blind eye too, because otherwise it makes me depressed. We’re all hypocrites because we are all capitalists, and it’s a trap that I don’t see us getting out of. I wanted to reflect the chaos of this post-truth climate change denying world in the metal guitar stabs that flare up like an underlying zit between the 2000s R&B beat that reminds you of a time when everything was alright." "The second verse is about the cost of this accelerated pursuit of wealth. The earth truly is taking in as much as it can hold, and even though we have everything we need we want more, at the cost of finite resources and ecological balance." "Basically, the earth is this beautiful place, yet we choose to pursue material things. We don’t think about it too much as there is seemingly no way out. So we go to sleep and forget about it indefinitely." SHE EVEN BRINGS UP FEMINISM BY SAYING.. "Make me less so I want more".. she says this about that line, "Women earn less than women, yet are marketed more aggressively than men" STOP CAPITALISM! KILL JOE BIDEN SO WE CAN HAVE BERNIE AS PRESIDENT! thanks @Touch It x what ties my songs together is that they all sonically present a colourful and vaguely cheery exterior but really - upon deeper introspection - contain a critical take on the mechanical, wearisome, emotionless and expressionless nature of the world we find ourselves in in 2020 x SAD! and very grey x
Kelp Posted June 27, 2020 Posted June 27, 2020 Everyone's communist entries have me up at 1:30 AM right now reading about the principles and history of communism d
Navyofbadgals Posted June 27, 2020 Posted June 27, 2020 CRITIQUES Spoiler @PinkBox - the way I actually HATE YOU LMFAOOOO anyways the worst thing about this was that it was surprisingly good, it follows the same comedic layout as your last one but it's a lot more connected to the colors and you had a clear beginning, middle and end here. Also i can't with your ass posting a bibliography Anyways I enjoyed this and it was an improvement from last round, though I wonder what more you can bring in future rounds xoxo @Hug - you have managed to write a very sound and thought out entry, definitely improving yourself from last round. I think basing it on a game like this was actually very creative and you also pulled that off quite well. I will say that: Quote There’s a difference between freedom and chaos, there’s a difference between justice and law, and there’s always a reason to keep fighting for a better tomorrow. From this passage I expected maybe a different interpretation? The black fits here with what you're saying later, but the white part you've done for the grey section, and the grey section here doesn't really appear as its own section later on? That said, maybe I'm looking too much into it, and forgetting this one sentence, this is a really good entry. It's nitpicky but yeah x good job! <3 @touya kinomoto - This is okay, but honestly it's a bit too minimalistic. I think that going for common symbolisms is cute, and I think the money honey part here was cute, but all in all it's a bit too minimal for me. I don't expect you to do as much as others like Hug, but I feel like you could've done a little bit more to really represent your entry better, because the foundation is there and it's solid @Gay Rat Divorce - there are a lot of positive things I wanna say about this, for starters a very nice way to interpret the round, secondly also appreciate how it's so wildly different than your last entry, and also I want to mention how nice this was to read, it was very beautiful and I think a personal approach is an amazing read. If I have one thing that I would mention is that you only mention your 2nd song in your text, and I feel like for consistency purposes it was nicer to have a short mention of all your songs, but that is nitpicky. Very nice overall @coomy - hmm I'm a bit mixed on this tbh! There are mostly really nice things, for starters I think all your songs fit, and I also really like that all the songs sound kind of the same-y, but I feel like the real problems are that you haven't really capitalized on your concept. I wish you would've told a more clear story from beginning to end, whilst also capitalizing off the idea that these songs all could fit together sonically. There is something great here but I feel like I'm missing that greatness a bit in reading this @luckystrike - @PinkBox - the way I actually HATE YOU LMFAOOOO anyways the worst thing about this was that it was surprisingly good, it follows the same comedic layout as your last one but it's a lot more connected to the colors and you had a clear beginning, middle and end here. Also i can't with your ass posting a bibliography Anyways I enjoyed this and it was an improvement from last round, though I wonder what more you can bring in future rounds xoxo @Hug - you have managed to write a very sound and thought out entry, definitely improving yourself from last round. I think basing it on a game like this was actually very creative and you also pulled that off quite well. I will say that: Quote There’s a difference between freedom and chaos, there’s a difference between justice and law, and there’s always a reason to keep fighting for a better tomorrow. From this passage I expected maybe a different interpretation? The black fits here with what you're saying later, but the white part you've done for the grey section, and the grey section here doesn't really appear as its own section later on? That said, maybe I'm looking too much into it, and forgetting this one sentence, this is a really good entry. It's nitpicky but yeah x good job! <3 @touya kinomoto - This is okay, but honestly it's a bit too minimalistic. I think that going for common symbolisms is cute, and I think the money honey part here was cute, but all in all it's a bit too minimal for me. I don't expect you to do as much as others like Hug, but I feel like you could've done a little bit more to really represent your entry better, because the foundation is there and it's solid @Gay Rat Divorce - there are a lot of positive things I wanna say about this, for starters a very nice way to interpret the round, secondly also appreciate how it's so wildly different than your last entry, and also I want to mention how nice this was to read, it was very beautiful and I think a personal approach is an amazing read. If I have one thing that I would mention is that you only mention your 2nd song in your text, and I feel like for consistency purposes it was nicer to have a short mention of all your songs, but that is nitpicky. Very nice overall @coomy - hmm I'm a bit mixed on this tbh! There are mostly really nice things, for starters I think all your songs fit, and I also really like that all the songs sound kind of the same-y, but I feel like the real problems are that you haven't really capitalized on your concept. I wish you would've told a more clear story from beginning to end, whilst also capitalizing off the idea that these songs all could fit together sonically. There is something great here but I feel like I'm missing that greatness a bit in reading this @luckystrike - Anyways I really liked this, without the video it prolly would've been too simplistic, but I like the approach you took, you fully embodied the color and the entry itself is minimalistic but it works. You've created an experience from start to end and I really appreciate the song order as well, closing with 4AEM was def the best thing to do thanks to the song its slow outro, creating a trip that almost fizzles away. @Not Like The Movies - beautifully written, every word here counts and is important. I also don't know if this was done on purpose but I love that you also chose songs by 3 women too. An incredibly powerful entry, that besides just its message is also very well executed, with nicely written passages and great song picks. I think you did a really good job this round @Dessy - This was for starters very nicely written, and whilst your first entry didn't have bad writing, you surely improved from the last time. I'm especially a fan of your last song pick, which I think is a bit stronger than the other two (particularly CW), it's a great fit. As for CW, it obviously fits, but it's a bit straightforward? I guess it doesn't excite me that much, but it fits so this is nitpicky. I think you def shown a lot of improvement so @clue - ily and I won't dock points for this but the way the videos are formatted here is kinda annoying xoxo the video player is way too small for me to look up which song it is, so maybe for next time it would be handy to have some titles with that. Again, I don't feel this necessarily should take away from the quality of your entry so dw for now. I feel like you left color a bit behind there (there's a reference on it, and I think it's enough, but some people tackled the concept of color more than you). That said, I also think this is SUPER creative. I had some ideas myself on what I would've done if I was a contestant, and some were represented by the contestants, some not, but I would've never stumbled on this idea. I also like how it's very creative, but text wise it's short and simple. It really doesn't need more, and it's a great example of that a succesful entry here doesn't always need to be super big, unlike this essay I've just written for you LMAOOOOO @kipperskipper - I like the approach that you took for gold, but I guess I'm not 100% satisfied. The first thing, which again is nitpicky, but songs like golden hour are so straightforward because of their title that it doesn't really excite me. It doesn't matter that much and I don't expect you to find the most indie song ever, but I guess I'm just not a big fan of str8forward songs. My second problem is something you sort of admitted yourself, and that is 20 Something that is a different approach than the other two, I think you were better off doing 3 different approaches, or have something other than 20 something here for cohesiveness. I did like that the songs all sound so good together, and they sonically fit together. VB was also a very nice pick. @ughgabriel - I'm very impressed with how well you've done in both rounds, but I'm especially in awe of this entry. From start to finish it's absolutely amazing, it's super creative, it was fun to read and the song choices are absolutely perfect. This is absolutely flawless and I can't wait to see how you could possibly top this in future rounds. @Rotunda - super cool concept for starters, not only that you also thought out your entry very clearly and you executed it very nicely. Frankly, I don't have any complaints here. Your songs are all unique, but flow together and need each other to be great. The writing is great, and again, it's very creative. Love that you also showed us some more creativity, after your strong start in R1 (that again, wasn't nearly as creative as this (though still amazing)) @Overprotected - All of your songs fit perfectly, and the communism approach was fun and creative. I will say that I would've loved to see your approach with a little bit more structure. You have a great concept, you should use it more because you could make something even better with this. @Auburn - this is fine, I love the approach you took and I think it's creative, I'm just not really that in awe of it? It just doesn't really blow me away or stick with me. I will say that you have def improved from last round. @Astronomy - GIRL I CANT WITH YOUR ASS you really done created a whole ass website PLEASEEE Anyways besides the effort put in, this is also just very good you absolutely picked it out of the park. The songs fit not only lyrically, but also sonically, the concept is creative and it's super cohesive. You did amazing @disruptive - love the approach you took. I also feel like, and maybe you didn't at all but it just seems that way, but it feels like you listened to the critiques. If anyone really improved from R1 to R2 it's you. The approach is creative and I love how you kept a rather minimalistic style from last round, but now tweaked some things in the 'formula', like mentioning a line from the song (which I really think is a good tool to make a succesful entry here). Also like that the songs feel like a gradient both lyrically and sonically. You really thought this out and it shows. It's very clean. Will add, just like I said with some others, and again super nitpicky, but I'm not a big fan of super straightforward songs and Hell is kinda that, but it fits so nicely here that at the end of the day it's really nothing more than nitpicking to find just something @MusicLoverDude - your songs fit very well, it's just not that exciting because there isn't really a clear structure, or a very creative approach here. I liked that you gave yourself the added challenge of finding songs that feel pink, and I like that you mentioned it. @Invisibility - You probably have one of my fav set of songs this round, they all fit nicely together. Also, like I mentioned last round, I'm absolutely in love with your super clean lay-out. That said, what sets you back a bit here, is that just creative/experimental songs isn't that creative of an approach in itself. This was such a creative round, and like I don't expect you to make a site n, but I feel like there was more to be done here. I mostly enjoyed this though, as it's just executed so neatly. @Fruity - love that your songs are all upbeat, but are much bleaker in their messaging. It makes the entry super cohesive. I feel like you could've presented your concept better (but as you said yourself you were pulling this out of your ass so I'm sure you are somewhat aware of it yourself too). This was a bit of a messy read but you have a fun concept and good song picks. I do wanna know, if you really want to continue, and if you do (which I hope) then let me know. And if this was entry was moreso a sign that you didn;t bail then I appreciate that too but like I feel like it's good to know anyways cute entry and nice improvement from last round, that is the takeaway message here Super impressed by all the entries. I feel like I may have been a little bit more critical than last round, but in my mind I think everyone did a great job and that this round was a lot stronger than the first one. At points I just had to be more nitpicky to really make a more clear ranking for myself but I think everyone should be really proud thanks so much for the work you guys are putting in, even if it's just 5 minutes, or if you spend hours on it, the results are all amazing so
Kelp Posted June 27, 2020 Posted June 27, 2020 Thanks Bagels <3 kinda bummed I didn't do as well as last round but there's always next time assuming I'm not eliminated
Hug Posted June 27, 2020 Posted June 27, 2020 Thank you for your comments, bagels. <3 I can't say you're wrong about the sentence I added. Those themes ARE represented in the game...I just did a bad job representing it in my entry. Probably because I thought talking about nihilism was more interesting and I couldn't figure out how to make it sound cute in that little sentence. -- I'm gonna try and do something revolutionary next round...unless I'm fuck all for ideas then it's another formatted google doc.
Henry Posted June 28, 2020 Posted June 28, 2020 Another great round wow! At this rate people are gonna be projecting their entries on the moon in a couple of rounds plsss. Love the creativity this round. Spoiler Pinkbox - ffff actually liked this even more than your last entry. Very creative entry once again and wow what a #throwback with the Hannah song. Keep it up but also don’t keep it up at the same time if that makes sense? Like don’t turn into a one-note contestant because I could easily see your entries feeling samey after a few rounds but I'm sure you will mix it up and keep impressing since you are very creative. Great job once again tho! Hug - Well I heard my sister blasting Greedy by Ariana in her room so I guess not really the vibe you were going for fff. At first I was like bleh because the game theme you went with felt a bit too close to the last round cartoon stuff in my mind but I think you did a good job and I enjoyed reading your entry. Loved the song choices (side eyeing 4'33" though f but I think you explained it well). touya kinomoto - Well there isn’t anything wrong with your entry I guess but I definitely think you could have done a bit more, I mean look at the competition! You don’t have to write a 6 page google document but give us something a bit more. <3 Gay Rat Divorce - Beautiful entry! <3 Actually read it twice and I loved the song choices. Now why is the Jewish song a bop and why is it actually the second Jewish bop I’ve heard this year fff. coomy - Def liked your entry and song choices but you definitely should/could have played up the protagonist stuff more. At first I thought you just picked songs that fit your description and you did a good job with that and the protagonist stuff at the end somewhat pulled it together but this would have been excellent if you just put a bit more oomph into it. Luckystrike - Come on video! Wow LOVED everything about your entry tbh. Great written part (even though we cannot relate!), great video thingy and great song choices. The growth from your first entry perry!!! Not Like The Movies - Amazing entry. Both written parts and song choices were very beautiful. Think you did a really good job with what you set out to do, paying tribute to BLM. Amazing job! Dessy - Isn't it Wonderful is amazing wow I’m such a sucker for a good ballad. I didn’t really vibe with Cold Water and I would have liked maybe another song that fit the sea vibe, whatever that means lol. But yea other than that I really liked your entry and the written parts were nice to read. clue - Come on Elisabeth Moss! This was very well done and super creative wow! Very simple but I think this is a good thing as it speaks for itself. Great entry once again. The Google Slides thing is a mess tho f. Maybe use the Docs next time but yea this is just me complaining <3 kipperskipper - I actually really liked how the different parts kinda flowed in my mind? Like Kacey is singing about this person she loves dearly, then Lana sings about a mundane but precious life with this person and also acknowledging that this thing she treasures that it may not last and finally SZA sings about breaking up with this person and now I’m just rambling but yea. Maybe this isn’t what you were going for and me just making up this scenario in my head but I think going at it with approach and linking all the parts would have made me like your entry even better. I still liked it though and the songs were really nice. ughgabriel - Another excellent entry wow. Very different from your last entry and yet still as amazing and creative. A+ with the document once again and amazing song choices. Rotunda - Loved loved loved everything about your entry wow! Amazing concept, amazing songs and the written parts. Very well done! Overprotected - Actually loved the communism concept, very creative. The songs were good and fit well. Maybe you could have done more but still I enjoyed the entry. ☭☭☭☭☭☭ Auburn - Like the Stereotypes concept but your entry isn’t as strong as most of the others though which just makes it just okay for me. Maybe a little more could have pushed it up higher but yea still liked your entry tho. Astronomy - fhjdfhjfd come on web programmer!!! My web programming internship actually starts on Monday but maybe they should have given you the spot instead! NOT the ****hub links tho fjhfdjhddf. Amazing entry WOW! Everything was perfect tbh. Well done! disruptive - Enjoyed this much more than your first entry. Loved the concept a lot (hot pics, we need the vid on him topping the guy in the last nice) and the song choices were good. Hope you keep this up! MLD - Love the chromesthesia approach,your explanation and the songs but I think your entry isn’t as strong as others. Not sure what else to say tbh, nice concept that you could have maybe executed better. Invisibility - Loved the vibe of your entry. All the songs were amazing and fit your overall concept but I guess it’s just the concept itself that is the weak point of your entry. Still a good entry but maybe more would have pushed it higher. Fruity - See I actually liked your entry and the song choices were great. With a bit more polish this could have been one of the stronger entries. You can definitely do well in this game based on this entry but it feels like you aren’t taking it that seriously? Keep this up tho. @Hug @coomy @clue @kipperskipper @touya kinomoto @Gay Rat Divorce @PinkBox @Not Like The Movies @Astronomy @Dessy @ughgabriel @Overprotected @Auburn @Rotunda @luckystrike @MusicLoverDude@Fruity @Invisibility @disruptive
thecptz Posted June 28, 2020 Posted June 28, 2020 Spoiler pinkbox (yellow) ok this racist ass entry you really have something wrong with you and your disgusting mind pinkbox. yellow aka asians, disgusting in the same sentence?? WTF. like really, **** you and **** off. ok, lets get serious now, this is very personal and i feel sad reading this. i know how hurt you are. also, i love how creative you are with showing many sides of yellow and how you tie it together to be one story! the songs fit with what you want and yeah its just another cute entry from this racist hag hug (black/grey/white) urgh this hurts my eyes this is better than your first entry for sure. you give a detailed explanation about what you want to, um that word, i think, explain? to us and that makes me understand your entry more. the songs selection are great and the creativity are there as usual. the thing is, like bagels, i thought those sentences in 3 different colors would show in the section of each color as well but i don’t see justice and law in grey? but like, you did great hug x touya kinomoto (purple) i- well i appreciate this but seeing your opponents’ entries, i think you really should step up your game a bit. when they go over things like in a whole paragraph, you give us only two sentences. yes, sometimes it’s good but i feel like there are lots of things that you could do more like maybe highlighting some lyrics that you feel capture what you want to go for the most or maybe elaborate the story, for example, in the magic one, you could give an example methinks. but thanks for the entry, good luck! gay rat divorce (hapa) aw and oh wow, this is a very nice read. the way the story flows beautifully i see how you mention about your selection in the first two sections even though its just like a few sentences in the first section. yeah, i wish you do that in every section just like bagels said. but like, i don’t have much to say and i’m, again, very impressed with your entry. coomy (purple) hello hehe, i feel like in this round, there are things that missing from your entry. idk how to describe it but i feel like these explanation cannot make me fully understand what you are going for in your entry. like its a bit confusing for me. and the jump from the first two songs to vroom vroom is kinda like complete 180 and i feel it a bit too rushed maybe because of your explanation. but its a good entry nonetheless, keep on the good work luckystrike (acid green) i hate acid green AHHHH i hate you lucky bye bitch, this is like the WORST entry i have ever read well… jk!!!! compared to others, this is very simple. but you captured the feeling that acid green is. this is how you do simple things tbh, it literally is an EXPERIENCE lmao. the vid is a nice addition to your entry and you make me feel like i’m doing drugs even though i have never done it in my life. so, don’t do drugs kids! not like the movies (black) another great entry from you. i don’t have anything to say much but you really did well with your selection and your writing. dessy (blue) gasp! dessy using google doc wow, i’m so impressed with your entry in this round. like, i’m weirdly impressed by it. i love your first and last song so much and how it fits with your explanation. that being said, your explanation is great. it’s not much but i think its beautiful! the formatting is simple but its good. great job. clue (scientific blue) ok so at first, i was confused like where the explanation is but then it clicked. and all i have to say is this is sooooo clever! your mind, it amazes me sometimes!!! i think all the songs speak for itself but it might help me a bit more if you just like explains more of your reason on choosing it. but i mean, this entry, this formatting is just so great. whewwwwwww kipperskipper (gold) this is an okay entry. like its very middle of the road for me. i feel like you selected the songs first and then tried to explain it to us how it fit with the theme you wanted. for the first two songs, its very spot on but 20 something kinda brings it down a bit. but golden hour and venice bitch are just so amazing! ughgabriel (pink puffs) omg i can’t express how much i enjoy reading your entry. from the formatting to the songs, everything is just perfect! the creativity in this omg i want to get some desserts now you’ve set yourself to be a force to be reckoned with and i can’t wait to see what you are going to bring to this game next. sooo excited omg! rotunda (scarlet) okay, what a cute story! yeah i think this is very great entry. but compared to other great entries this round, this may fall a little flat for me or maybe i’m just dumb cause others seem to love your entry so congrats :/ but that just shows how great you guys are. so rotunda, keep on this great work!! you did great! overprotected (red) pls a communism. great songs selection. i feel like every song speaks on its own very well so you don’t have to do much to try to explain how these songs say about communism. so by saying that, i think the creativity may be a bit low? however, i know you’re capable of doing amazing things so pls do that next time again, great selection! auburn (auburn) well this is very short and while its creative, its just a bit forgettable. i appreciate how you want be more creative and it shows, but its just like.. yeah, that’s it. astronomy (pink) PLSSSSSSSS i just know that this is right up your alley your e-girl aesthetic helps you lots in this round i see!!! the way you use ****hub GIRL astro. the creativity just jumped out!!! your selection captures what you said you want to capture, the intensity, the feelings, :hot_face: you gave me another impressive entry and i thank you for that. disruptive (blue to black) i wish y’all just use a normal font tbh. i know this is for like ~aesthetic~ and i can zoom in to read but its just hard to read. maybe provide a transcript if you want to use that weird and hard to read but soo aesthetic font. ok, this is actually a very cool concept, even though its not ground-breaking this is still exciting to read. just like bagels said, you have shown growth and it deserves to be mentioned. your selection is also great so keep on this great work x mld (pink) everybody loves pink! i just wanna mention that you should’ve read the twist section too since you kinda did what the twist said not to do. great selection and i can feel it being pink but with pink being the easiest color methinks, i just want more than this. its not as creative as ughgabriel and astro who did pink and when you chose the popular color, of course, its gonna be some comparison x invisibility (orange) king of sending right at the deadline. i feel like this is a very rushed entry. you could explain more about why you chose the track and how it fits with what you wanted to go for cause these 3 songs are so great and flow together very well but i struggle to find a connection since the creativity in the first song is not rlly that creative. but again, i rlly like these songs and you did good. fruity (grey) if invisibility is very rushed entry, this is like more of invisibility times 10. i appreciate that you still sent something and also have a great song selection even though its rushed. and like bagels and herny have mentioned, i feel like you’re not rlly taking this seriously like you are just here to troll. but you could do so much more and if you make it to the next round, i just wanna see you being more serious pls since you have potential. ty x @PinkBox @Hug @touya kinomoto @Gay Rat Divorce @coomy @luckystrike @Not Like The Movies @Dessy @clue @kipperskipper @ughgabriel @Rotunda @Overprotected @Auburn @Astronomy @disruptive @MusicLoverDude @Invisibility @Fruity x
Rotunda Posted June 28, 2020 Posted June 28, 2020 (edited) Amazing critiques from Bagels and Henry Baby Z, your critiques were great too, but next to the amazing critiques this one fell a little flat to me, but that just shows how great you judges are! Edited June 28, 2020 by Rotunda
thecptz Posted June 28, 2020 Posted June 28, 2020 perry. they are all great and amazing judges i'm glad i'm working with these talents kings
Auburn Posted June 28, 2020 Posted June 28, 2020 thank god I didn't read my lukewarm reviews until after my birthday was over
thecptz Posted June 28, 2020 Posted June 28, 2020 44 minutes ago, Gay Rat Divorce said: Thank you Henry and thecpdfxjz!
Overprotected Posted June 28, 2020 Posted June 28, 2020 Talented panel, I mean I know everyone else snapped harder than me so I'll be fine with a cute safe position PTR
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