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Omg that was totally unexpected! Thank you judges :hughard:. That's definitely my best score/ranking in a round 1. 
 

Also congrats @Rotunda! 9+ scoring songs are rare and doing it on your debut is practically unheard of 

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Here are my lyrics if anyone's interested 

 


Paper Wings

 

Untouched beauty, I'm enveloped in your purity

So delicate and intricate, emerging in the spring

Holy presence, I'm struck by your iridescence

You've hardly left your chrysalis, you're just testing your wings

 

You tell me you're ready, my love are you sure?

I don't want to taint something so bright and so pure

You crawl under bed sheets, I tell you I'm yours

I'll hold you more gently than I've held before

 

I'll carefully unfold your paper wings

And map each corner of you left uncreased

Twist you gently like origami

So carefully, fold into me

You flutter in my skilled and seasoned hands

But still I'm scared you'll crumple in my grasp

But if you want my color on your canvas

Carefully, fall into me

 

Glints of yellow spread through a mountain meadow

Surrender to our footsteps as we skip towards bubbling springs

Immersed in pleasure, submerged in natural treasures

I'm baptized in your innocence, your love washes me clean

 

You tell me you want this, my love, if I'm honest

I know I'm unworthy of your perfect touch

I'm fractured and tattered, I've loved and I've shattered

But I've never felt the frenzy of your love

 

So I'll carefully unfold your paper wings

And map each corner of you left uncreased

Twist you gently like origami

Carefully, fold into me

You flutter in my skilled and seasoned hands

But still I'm scared you'll crumple in my grasp

But if you want my color on your canvas

Carefully, fall into me

 

Fall into my footsteps and I'll match your every move

We'll dance until the last ray of sunlight leaves the room

Then play our favorite record and crash into the sheets

I'll trace your fragile figure as we savor every beat

I'll worship every movement until the morning comes

Praying for the day I'll be deserving of your love

 

So I'll carefully unfold your paper wings

And map each corner of you left uncreased

Twist you gently like origami

Carefully, fold into me

You flutter in my skilled and seasoned hands

But still I'm scared you'll crumple in my grasp

But if you want my color on your canvas

Carefully, fall into me

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Thank you judges

And yes @Hug @Aurora i can see very well how my entry would fail to satisfy the challenge without any context. It's that i hate butterflies with a passion so i did not want to reference them in any way even though there were many openings for such :gaycat7: anyway it was a decision i took and i appreciate the reviews :heart2:

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Genuinely shocked by this score and by my top 3 placement. Thank you so much to the judges! I was not so pleased with my final result and in my head I was going for something even more emotional. But I can't say I am mad about the score :eli:

 

Congrats, Rotunda and Jackson! :heart:

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not me barely making it to the 2nd tier

 

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Thank you judges! A top ten debut aint bad! Haha. Hopefully this next song will be even better and i will take all of your constructive criticisms for this round seriously! 

Thank you again! :heart:

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Thank you everyone who sent in tracks for this round. :smile:

I'm sorry that I couldn't post in-depth reviews but here are some ideas of mine that I hope will inspire you:

 

- Feel free to try out all sorts of structures. Such as 2 verses followed by a chorus. This gives you build up to tell your story. 

- When you have a short chorus (let's say, about 4 lines) and/or the chorus is featured more than twice, it can be fun to switch it up with some alternative rhymes that still fit the main idea of the track. Or switch the point of view between first, second and third person view.

- Take inspiration from either:

  • personal events, experiences, emotions. This makes the track you write truly yours and no one else could recreate it
  • art, video games, books, TV shows, movies, any connection you can find, no matter how small, that is able to fit the theme requirement. It can give a very creative spin on your track in the sense of "wow, I didn't even think about that!" and express your individuality.

- Make visuals! Artworks, CD concepts, album booklets (I did that in Season 4), these can help make your track more vivid to envision. We all love when our favorite artists provide visuals for the music.

 

And remember this is a game that in addition to lyrics, growth is another main aspect of it. Every step counts. :smile:

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Wrote my song for the new round in about 1 hour today with a few tweaks

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I have NOTHING for the new round

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Top 10 :jonny: ohh we need to keep this T10 streak. Let me write this next one.

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I hate Easter, it's so random and it's like Christmas from Wish

 

 

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yeah...we're submitting tomorrow i fear

 

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2 hours ago, Legend E said:

yeah...we're submitting tomorrow i fear

 

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Cooking another top 3 I know it :jonnycat:

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Haven't started yet. But tomorrow is a holiday so we'll see :giraffe:

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39 minutes ago, fountain said:

Cooking another top 3 I know it :jonnycat:

really doubt it cause all my ideas rn are the quirky mess type and you know how those entries of mine sound like :toofunny3:

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15 hours ago, stupidjock said:

I hate Easter, it's so random and it's like Christmas from Wish

 

 

Technically Christmas is the Easter from Wish, since Jesus wasn't actually born on Christmas Day, yet he was crucified and resurrected during Easter. :cm:

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Needed an escape from work this week so procrastinated by submitting for this round, I enjoyed it :celestial4:

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maybe we need an extension!

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I'll be taking a peek at what has been submitted so far when I wake up :clap3:

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5 hours ago, Kylie Jenner said:

Needed an escape from work this week so procrastinated by submitting for this round, I enjoyed it :celestial4:

MCDFTS sequel I hope :jonny5:

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2 hours ago, fountain said:

MCDFTS sequel I hope :jonny5:

Gaga Came Up From The Ground (Easter Anthem) is coming

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11 hours ago, Aurora said:

Technically Christmas is the Easter from Wish, since Jesus wasn't actually born on Christmas Day, yet he was crucified and resurrected during Easter. :cm:

Here it's less days off work, no presents and awkward breakfast instead of dinner

 

ctrlgabe-i-mean-let-me-ask-the-audience.

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In my one hit wonder era :gaycat6:

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Just submitted my work. Writer's block was a ***** the round, but I am satisfied with my final submission.

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Can I submit it a bit after the deadline? :emofish: 2 hrs max I hope

 

LE: Managed to submit just 20 mins before the deadline :jonny5: 

 

Hope y'all received it cause I am always paranoid about these google forms :skull:

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