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[Legend E]

@fountain @Aurora so if I get it right, I can repeat a chorus three times and it shouldn't be a problem, right?

 

[Legend E]

So I wrote something entirely new after all. It's pretty cliche but whatever, I like it way more than the Kelly entry for sure. 

 

For the word count, I think it's 715 words actually as I changed something before submitting but I forgot to change it in the fill-in form, sorry :(

[Aurora]

44 minutes ago, Legend E said:

@fountain @Aurora so if I get it right, I can repeat a chorus three times and it shouldn't be a problem, right?

 

That’s right. You could even repeat a chorus six times and that would be fine, however only the first three would be taken into account for the word count aspect of the challenge, only serving as transitions for new verses or sections that would count.

[Legend E]

1 minute ago, Aurora said:

That’s right. You could even repeat a chorus six times and that would be fine, however only the first three would be taken into account for the word count aspect of the challenge, only serving as transitions for new verses or sections that would count.

Great. I think I am over 500 without the repetitions too anyway, so it should be okay

[fountain]

29 minutes ago, Legend E said:

So I wrote something entirely new after all. It's pretty cliche but whatever, I like it way more than the Kelly entry for sure. 

 

For the word count, I think it's 715 words actually as I changed something before submitting but I forgot to change it in the fill-in form, sorry :(

It’s no problem! Thanks for submitting

[Aurora]

Y’all turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all?

[fountain]

Just now, Aurora said:

Y’all turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all?

[JoeAg]

hi i hate to do this two weeks in a row () but i’m gonna need a few more hours again if that’s okay

i have my new guitar which is great, but now i have an even more f*cked up sleep schedule so i just woke up at like 9 pm and i have two different science class hw due both at 11:59 pm so yayyyy.  anyway i’m sorry i’ll try to get this in asap

[Achilles.]

9 minutes ago, Aurora said:

Y’all turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all?

Miss Americana and the Heartbreak Prince would like a word (or 502, which is her word count if you allow for repetition and background lyrics).

 

[Jessie]

Painful, but submitted nonetheless 

[Legend E]

13 minutes ago, Aurora said:

Y’all turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all?

Oh no

[fountain]

3 hours ago, Tylerbv said:

I’m super torn on how I feel about my submission. It’s not exactly metaphorical or difficult in nature, but it honestly just poured out of me in a literal fashion.

 

Someone teach me to make metaphors in my songs

To be honest, not all songs and not all writers need to be super metaphoric or complex! Personally I definitely tend to prefer more poetic language, but sometimes the simple stuff can be much more hard hitting, it just depends on the context and the execution. I took a sneak peek at your song, and it looks like you’ve executed it well. I mean the first lines are about being honest and admitting things, so I think a very matter of fact and direct lyrical approach definitely works there. 
 

If you wanted to take a metaphorical approach in this song, the way that jumps out in my mind would be to compare the way that you feel, the way you were treated or the things that happened, to other things. I mean this is not anything to run home about and just an example that I’m using to try and demonstrate, but you could take something like “you treated me like a candle and blew me out, when it was convenient for you and my flame couldn’t spread” or something like that. You want to think of yourself or the situation as alike something else, and draw a comparison that puts across the same point but in what would be a metaphorical way. I don’t know if this fully makes sense so if it doesn’t let me know and I’ll try to think of another explanation

[fountain]

6 minutes ago, JoeAg said:

hi i hate to do this two weeks in a row () but i’m gonna need a few more hours again if that’s okay

i have my new guitar which is great, but now i have an even more f*cked up sleep schedule so i just woke up at like 9 pm and i have two different science class hw due both at 11:59 pm so yayyyy.  anyway i’m sorry i’ll try to get this in asap

That’s okay! Good luck with the homework and just submit when you are able to 

[JoeAg]

1 minute ago, fountain said:

That’s okay! Good luck with the homework and just submit when you are able to 

thanks ? idk why i’m in this poor time management era of mine right now, it’s the worst possible moment for this but i guess this is what my body/mind is doing and i have to adapt a bit

[diamondsky]

I’m also gonna be a little late if that’s okay  some stuff just came up that I gotta take care of and then I’ll submit

[mxtthewdelrey]

Just submitted ! Wasn't sure whether I was going to this week because my song was feeling a bit personal but I just went for it

Didn't go too much over 500 as I felt the song ending abruptly was what worked for the narrative

 

Hope everyone is doing well

[fountain]

2 hours ago, Achilles. said:

And I’ve submitted! The more I sit with this, the more I love it. It’s a fairly unique structure for me. The verses, prechoruses, and chorus are quite metaphorical, but then in the bridge I stripped it back and got extremely literal because there’s just no way to dress it all up in poetry. **** needs to get real sometimes.
 

The End of the World.

 

 

Far too many points were made.

I like the sound of this 

 

Sometimes you do just need to be brutally direct in songs. There’s a real power to it!

[mxtthewdelrey]

Also @fountain did i put my atrl username on the form? I'm so delirious right now that I could have written my actual name for all i know  

[fountain]

1 minute ago, ☆lex said:

I’m also gonna be a little late if that’s okay  some stuff just came up that I gotta take care of and then I’ll submit

It’s definitely okay and totally understandable, life comes first! 

[fountain]

1 minute ago, mxtthewdelrey said:

Also @fountain did i put my atrl username on the form? I'm so delirious right now that I could have written my actual name for all i know  

Just checked, looks like we will continue to know you as mxtthewdelrey 

[fountain]

15 minutes ago, JoeAg said:

thanks ? idk why i’m in this poor time management era of mine right now, it’s the worst possible moment for this but i guess this is what my body/mind is doing and i have to adapt a bit

No need to worry about it, really we are all like this in our own ways  

 

if it makes your sleep schedule seem any better just know I’m replying to this at 4:44am 

[mxtthewdelrey]

4 minutes ago, fountain said:

Just checked, looks like we will continue to know you as mxtthewdelrey 

Just like anyone I add on Snapchat does, then !

[fountain]

Side note I don’t really have an intended time that my reviews will go up this time, I’m away from home so have a little less opportunity to do them as quick as last round but I have started them at least (if writing one counts as starting ) and they’ll be up as soon as I’m done!

 

Also just a reminder, like last week this rounds results will be taking place on Sunday and round 4 will be posted on Saturday. 

[mxtthewdelrey]

Pretty much everything I write is personal but it’s been a while since I wrote something that felt personal to a gut-wrenching extent. Cathartic, though

Golden Hit

1. If I Leave This Earth

2. you cheat, you lose

3. The Lease 

[fountain]

7 minutes ago, mxtthewdelrey said:

Just like anyone I add on Snapchat does, then !

I just noticed your avatar is Blanco, Brividi should have won it was my favourite