tournament Song of the Season 3 ? WINNER ANNOUNCED (pg. 137)

[Ampersand13]

Thank you for the reviews! 

[firecrotch]

Thank you both!!! Serving eliminated 
 

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[Rence]

Thank you auburn 

[8thPrince]

Thank you auburn for the review!

[Hug]

15 hours ago, ughgabriel said:

@Hug - Crimson Water Runs

 

What I loved so much about this song is that it feels really cohesive and focused. I feel like this is a great example of something “being more than the sum of its parts” because the whole ensemble creates a very captivatingly creepy and haunting story. I don’t know how familiar you are with horror movies but I definitely could picture this song as this kind of curse written on a book; some kind of ancient scriptures that hold a malediction. I also believe that your opening couplet is one of your strongest and it really captured my attention.

There’s a lot of emotionality in this song as well. Even though its aesthetic is more of a horror song when you see past that, you can also get to comprehend the deeper meaning that it lies within it. Especially on its second verse. I honestly don’t know if this song makes me feel sad or creeped out. Either way, this was another great entry from you and I applaud you for going out of your comfort zone.

Omg and here I was thinking it sounded repetitive and dull. A pleasant surprise today! I do get the "being more than a sum of its parts" thing because I felt like not much really stands on its own, like it's hard to take anything out of context here. Not really my intention, but hey it worked!

 

While my intention wasn't horror, I like that it can be interpreted that way (but really I'm glad it can be interpreted as anything other than lost potential!) I'm being really hard on it but I did truly think I flopped and it isn't something I would've sent if the challenge didn't call for it, BUT it's great that it seemingly worked for me.

 

5 hours ago, Auburn said:

Hug - Crimson Water Runs

This was simply great. I love it. Especially the verses and the bridge. If you didn’t say it was outside of your comfort zone I never would have been able to tell.

Oh wow, I'm surprised how much the verses/bridge are being commented on, as if I had to point out what the weakest part of the song (to me) was, it'd be the second half of verse two, with the chorus being the strongest part. Once again, glad I'm being proven wrong. This whole week has been me being WRONG and I love it.

[Prisoner]

Thanks for being so patient everyone. And sorry for the vague reviews this round. I'll try to edit them later though. 

 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GJvsFvECmjwdI5VG0A1PzCJdvSetptLk54Z5AHprQkM/edit?usp=drivesdk

 

@Hug @firecrotch @funnellegs @Ampersand13 @Rence @Dessy @8thPrince @Astronomy @keshaspearsxo

Edited November 8, 2020 by Prisoner

[Ampersand13]

6 minutes ago, Prisoner said:

Thanks for being so patient everyone. And sorry for the vague reviews this round. I'll try to edit them later though. 

 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GJvsFvECmjwdI5VG0A1PzCJdvSetptLk54Z5AHprQkM/edit?usp=drivesdk

 

@Hug @firecrotch @funnellegs @Ampersand13 @Rence @Dessy @8thPrince @Astronomy @keshaspearsxo

Thank you for the review babe! 

[Hug]

Ahh wait I was nervous for my review but ????

 

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This is honestly very amazing. I'm absolutely in love with this. The verses flow very well but the chorus especially is on a whole other level. I love the way the determination of the narrator was portrayed in the second stanza of the chorus, I love the whole entry but this part gave me chills. Overall, brilliant imagery, brilliant storytelling, brilliant work!

Really wasn't expecting this kind of reception  but thank you I really appreciate all the kind comments. The second part of the chorus was also my personal favorite so I'm happy to see someone agrees.

[Courtney Love]

Short reviews this round sorry. (And apologies for the lateness). This week has just been very hard to concentrate on anything that wasn't college or the election (i'm not even from America but everyone I know was immersed in it). 

 

@Hug – Basilisk

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I really felt that I wanted a whole book about how the war came to be or anything like that so -5 points for you.

The conversational style in the song elevated the message you were trying to get across, so great choice. It felt like I was reading this persons war letter and promise to the king described, allowing for the emotions, anger and rage to seep through the text.

Really enjoyed the imagery and the contrast in the first verse between the green plains and crimson sea they’ve become. Obviously alluding to the sheer amount of bleed shed through war. The venomous and uncaring nature of the king/leader is really clear and concrete when I was reading.

 

If I have to cross the crimson, fare the raging tides

If I have to bite the bullet just to see the other side

If I have to part the seas, searching far and wide

When I find you I promise it’s your turn to die

 

This was fantastic imagery and really emotive writing. It also really clicked with the idea of someone has to die to end the cycle of death storyline. I think this type of writing is you at your best, just conceptual and full of emotion (motivational rage and vengeful in this instance).

I loved the bridge, particularly the opening and it definitely stood out to me as the strongest message in the song (other than the revenge part):

                You took everything from me in one fell swoop

But that’s only a drop in the crimson ocean to you

 

Overall, I know you said this is super outside of your comfort zone, but I think you think it in a great direction that kept me going back to it.

 

 

 

 

 

@firecrotch– Wildfires

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I really gravitated towards this song. I love themes about obsession and crossing over boundaries with an empathetic lens on the person. This song is really well done.

 

Your song reads as a before and after of going over the deep end with obsession. In verse 1, the opening is so strong with its imagery and really connects to the chorus of playing with fire. But I also got a duel meaning of reaching obsession is can be metaphorically described as climbing a mountain. When you reach the peak (after climbing barefoot), you’re feet are going to be filthy and your lungs are not getting the oxygen it would at the ground level.

 

I don’t think you needed to describe the person the woman is obsessed with, I think it would’ve been more effective to not have any information about that person and solely focus on the her and her reasoning and emotions. So  I would’ve cut out the prechorus about the ‘white knight’ lines. I also would’ve made the bridge a bit more important and filled it with something else rather than the ‘I lie for you, etc’.

The unrealistic expectations that woman has of the person to ‘save her’ is represented well in the second verse. The lines flow well also.

The chorus is kinda hit or miss for me. I think the playing with fire (a fire in a woods possibly?) is great, I just think it needed to be fleshed out a bit more.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this and I think it’s your best work again. (I say this every week lmao).

 

 

 

@funnellegs– ‘I’m needy, u need me’

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I think we all know someone like this. Someone who is not ready for a relationship, but yet seems to always be in one, only to break it off just as quick as they got into it.

I think this really explores that selfishness and carelessness well, albeit a little unsympathetically.

I really liked that it wasn’t super one note i.e.:

‘there’s always passion but no love,

silver tongued devil looking for fun.

I know when push comes to shove,

I’d rather tell a lie than find “the one.”’

 

This is one of my favourite parts of the song. Flows really well and the personification and metaphorical content is really engaging.

But it actually developed and moved onto the power play of wanting someone to need you and using that against them.

‘like a game of chess, it’s all too easy,

don’t try to deny, I know you need me.

just about to undress, we do it sleazy,

by the end of the night you’ll be needy.’

I really liked the take home message at the very end. Sometimes people who act like this, were treated the way they treat others. You portrayed this message really elegantly here.

 

 

 

 

 

@Ampersand13 – Steam (Indifference)

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I think you really conveyed the image of someone’s life actually feeling lifeless really well here.

My favourite part was:

Picture me wearing nothing

In an open casket still breathing

That’s where I’m at right now

Tickets to my dying show already sold out

 

It really illustrated the idea of someone already just waiting for their funeral happen, which is extremely tragic. I’m really hoping that this person finds that spark in their life to fall in love with it being in the moment again.

I also really liked how there was a repeated ‘That’s where I’m at right now’, really moody and conversational.  

My only critique I guess would be that it comes across a little one note and it can feel like it doesn’t really go anywhere.

 

 

 

 

 

 

@Dessy- Sting

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I thought the chants were really effective in creating this creepy, almost seductive vibe, which goes great with the cunning theme of this song.

Really liked the avenge aspect to this song and conveying you have to be smart, and calm and ready. This was portrayed really in the second verse, which was my favourite part of the song.

My only critique was I felt the chorus felt underwhelming and not as climactic as the chants at the start and the heavy tones in the verse would’ve set up for I felt. It just felt like another verse. The chorus was still great lyrically, it just would’ve worked better as a verse to allow for a punchier chorus.

 

 

 

 

 

 

@Rence– Calamity Heart

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This song felt like such a huge cinematic experience really so great job on that. I felt totally immersed into the song for the most parts.

My favourite lines were:

‘let the tears drown until they dry into warmth

someday I’ll be free from my calamity heart

when the sun comes I’ll turn my life around

I’ll shine like a rainbow on this lonely town’.

 

Really powerful poetry about waiting and trying to move on and trying to be something new, that wasn’t initially accepted.

 

I think was a really creative way to show a song about hiding emotion.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

@8thPrince – Your Turn to Die

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I thought starting most of the verses with ‘It was my turn to die’ was really smart because it instantly stood out and gave it an edge to a song that is particularly poetic and descriptive.

Every single line in this is manufactured in such a particular way and you can tell how much work went into crafting this.

You definitely get the message across about her this Tyrant wants everything to be beautiful and perfect, and can’t take that everything has a little mud, dirt and grime to it.

My only real issue is that I feel like some of it could be cut because it does almost border on the too long territory, which only hinders the song because the lines start to blend together. Such a long outro probably added to this.

 

 

 

 

 

 

@Astronomy – open your eyes / raw

 

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Open your eyes was such a really sweet and tender song about trying to let your partner know that their insecurities are actually your favourite part of them and I really loved that.

 

But then raw took me on a trip i-

It was such a transition i-

I don’t know what to say lmao

I liked that it shared a similarity in that it the person was letting their partner know how beautiful they actually are, just in a more aggressive way :skull:

I did really love reading it though and it did put a smile on my face so good job.

 

 

 

 

 

@keshaspearsxo – T F D EP.

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I thought this was really incredible what you did here. Like an actual EP…… that’s absolutely amazing.

And they all share that theme of failure in different ways. So creative. I wish I had more time to write this review and go in depth and what I liked about each. I’m just still in awe at your ability to have 4 songs written extremely well, make sure they all share a theme, and submit in a week. I wouldn't have the time, even on a normal judging to really dedicate the time to fully critiquing the whole EP understandably but I've read them songs a few times and I really commend you on your creativity. I don't think most people could write four song in a week, let alone them being as good as these.

 

 

[Hug]

? does this mean results coming tonight/tomorrow? also lemme read these now

[Courtney Love]

Really fantastic jobs again everyone, I rate each song out of 10 and I think the lowest this round was an 8.  

[Ampersand13]

Thank you so much @Courtney Love

[Courtney Love]

8 minutes ago, Hug said:

? does this mean results coming tonight/tomorrow? also lemme read these now

not sure 

i will ask 

[Rence]

Thank you so much judges 

[Hug]

Really wasn't expecting to seemingly get the most consistent acclaim of the season for me so far with this, but I take pleasant surprises!

 

12 minutes ago, Courtney Love said:

I really felt that I wanted a whole book about how the war came to be or anything like that so -5 points for you.

The conversational style in the song elevated the message you were trying to get across, so great choice. It felt like I was reading this persons war letter and promise to the king described, allowing for the emotions, anger and rage to seep through the text.

Really enjoyed the imagery and the contrast in the first verse between the green plains and crimson sea they’ve become. Obviously alluding to the sheer amount of bleed shed through war. The venomous and uncaring nature of the king/leader is really clear and concrete when I was reading.

 

If I have to cross the crimson, fare the raging tides

If I have to bite the bullet just to see the other side

If I have to part the seas, searching far and wide

When I find you I promise it’s your turn to die

 

This was fantastic imagery and really emotive writing. It also really clicked with the idea of someone has to die to end the cycle of death storyline. I think this type of writing is you at your best, just conceptual and full of emotion (motivational rage and vengeful in this instance).

I loved the bridge, particularly the opening and it definitely stood out to me as the strongest message in the song (other than the revenge part):

                You took everything from me in one fell swoop

But that’s only a drop in the crimson ocean to you

 

Overall, I know you said this is super outside of your comfort zone, but I think you think it in a great direction that kept me going back to it.

we-  I think reading your review made me appreciate my own entry a bit more  like I didn't really piece together how the conversational tone could stand to elevate it, as opposed to bring it down, as I thought it didn't really feel grand enough. I thought I could've "elevated" the language a bit to make it more powerful, but the simplicity of a conversational tone humanizes the narrator and...I guess I didn't really get that until now.  me accidentally making a point, I guess!

 

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Oh and I want to say thank you to all of the judges. It's really been rough for a lot of people, and understandably so, so I'm just happy this thing is still going at all.  Love you all!

[8thPrince]

Thank you for the review Courtney Love!
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now to figure out who i need to use my meteor dodge on 

[8thPrince]

OK looked over all my reviews and I'm hoping I made the correct read by who I chose to dodge 

[CountryBritney]

I'm so gutted that I missed a new season 

[Hug]

3 minutes ago, CountryBritney said:

I'm so gutted that I missed a new season 

We're gutted too ? your absence was felt!

[CountryBritney]

20 hours ago, Hug said:

If I have to cross the crimson, fare the raging tides

If I have to bite the bullet just to see the other side

If I have to part the seas, searching far and wide

When I find you I promise it’s your turn to die

@Hug Or maybe I'm not so gutted because how on earth could I compete with that??? 

[ughgabriel]

@Hug @firecrotch @funnellegs @Ampersand13 @Rence @Dessy @8thPrince @Astronomy @keshaspearsxo

 

Ready for results?

[Hug]

15 minutes ago, CountryBritney said:

@Hug Or maybe I'm not so gutted because how on earth could I compete with that??? 

Wdym I've seen your serves before this is a LIE.

 

Just now, ughgabriel said:

@Hug @firecrotch @funnellegs @Ampersand13 @Rence @Dessy @8thPrince @Astronomy @keshaspearsxo

 

Ready for results?

Ready ‼

[Rence]

Yup yup

[8thPrince]

[Ampersand13]

Ready to die