Galah Posted April 21, 2018 Author Posted April 21, 2018 1 hour ago, swiftie13 said: To the Sunflowers from season 10 is literally the best song I’ve ever written. 1 hour ago, Tsareena said: Sunflower from season 11 is literally the best song I've ever written Flowers inspiring all these smashes.
Overprotected Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 I've never written a song but there's a first time for everything Sign me up
RihsusChrist(ATG) Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 Justice for Southern Queen Wisteria! Wisteria is associated with 'devotion'. Hey @Aurora does the flower we choose have to be our specific song title? I already have a particular flower for my song picked out!
fountain Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 18 hours ago, Gastrodonatella said: The days feel slow, but life moves fast It’s been some years since we spoke last I trace your shape in silhouettes To make sure that I don’t forget yes.
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 i wanna do this week's challenge. @Hug i may have a song to send you
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 the rest of the R1 reviews coming in a few
Citrus Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 Never written a song about flowers because I'm not a homo
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 6 minutes ago, Citrus said: Never written a song about flowers because I'm not a homo we get it
RihsusChrist(ATG) Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 47 minutes ago, Overprotected said: I've never written a song but there's a first time for everything Sign me up Words of Warning: Leave your personal feelings at the door. Do not attempt you can't stand to have what you create publically eviscerated in a blunt, no holds barred, and matter of fact manner. Some Narcissists also lurk about as well...they're pretty easy to identify though, within a few interactions (remember...the poor things can't help themselves ). Other than that have fun.
Overprotected Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 10 minutes ago, RihsusChrist(ATG) said: Words of Warning: Leave your personal feelings at the door. Do not attempt you can't stand to have what you create publically eviscerated in a blunt, no holds barred, and matter of fact manner. Some Narcissists also lurk about as well...they're pretty easy to identify though, within a few interactions (remember...the poor things can't help themselves ). Other than that have fun. I don't get the narcissist part but yeah sounds like fun
swiftie13 Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 56 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: @Kunst my child! Well done The student becomes the master
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 U MAGAZINE THIS WEEK'S TRACK REVIEWS This post rounds up our reviews of the third quarter of the week's chart debuts. The final quarter will be posted in a later digital issue. @UFO – "Island" Spoiler UFO returns this week with “island.” UFO is the long-reigning king of maximalism, and it shows here in a beautiful way. one of the things i love is that you’ve got a central metaphor, but not every single line is adhered to that metaphor; you stray from it and don’t just make another clichéd song about an island. the anaphora in the chorus is very effective (and my thoughts kept rising / and my heart kept hunting / and the waves kept charging) and makes for a very cool center of the song. that said, there are a couple issues i noticed. one of them is the slangy delivery in verse 1 (everybody be faking), which felt too conversational and took me out of the song. also there are some tense issues (“i never realiseD who they truly ARE” should be WERE since it’s past tense, “’til they got what they WANT” should similarly be WANTED). favorite part: “it hurts to be your own worst enemy / when you’ve already been stranded / deserted, damaged, abandoned” @Achilles. – "Cassandra" Spoiler achilles returns this week with “cassandra,” a feminist anthem. from the opening couplet—“for every woman that knows / there are ten men that don’t believe“—it’s clear that achilles is coming for blood. the story is told in a very simple, processional way (we see the signs, sound the alarms / men ignore us and take up arms) that presents the tale without feeling too general or too done-before. i know you wanted “listen” and “missin’” to rhyme in the chorus, but i would’ve gone with “missing”; the clipped version feels too hokey to be taken seriously, and “missing” and “listen” form a cool slant rhyme. the only part of the song that felt like too much was the last two lines of the bridge, which stepped a bit too much into cloying territory. otherwise a very worthy return. favorite part: the opening couplet @Speezy – "Handle It All" Spoiler speezy returns this week with “handle it all.” this song, to me, feels like it didn’t have long enough to gestate. there are some lazy lines, like “with a body of wonder / that fulfills all of your wonders,” that feel like you laid down the first thing that came to mind. i kept waiting for something to jump out at me and tie it all together but nothing did. you always deliver the sex, but this week it feels like sex without concept. next week i’d like to see you step out of the comfort zone and wow us with a really big concept. i did like that you had some moments of genuine intimacy (standing strong though your skin is scarred, etc.) that elevated this just past the realm of sex. favorite part: “there’s nothing left in between / only you and me” @Tsareena – "Siren Song" Spoiler Tsareena returns this week with “siren song.” there are some moments in here that feel a bit too slangy and kind of take me out of the mythological magic you’ve got set up, things like “what in the hell.” some of the rhymes, too, feel a bit forced, like “shore / more,” “much / touch.” there were a few specific moments i thought were really gorgeous—the second verse is my favorite part overall, also the mentioning of Atlantis and the really mythological feeling that accompanies that. the use of “God” as an exclamative felt too modern for the tone you were trying to convey in my opinion. i also thought the outro was a bit too on-the-nose. favorite part: “i watch as your lungs fill up with water / my love song is but a song of slaughter” WHEW! @Avocado – "Impulsive By Nature" Spoiler avocado returns with “impulsive by nature.” that chorus! gaga’s super bowl intro is SHEWK. also girl WHAT are you doing with that arrow?? the verses are really great but some of these rhymes feel incredibly forced. “misguided/lopsided” are both great words but the lines they’re in feel like they were written just for the rhyme. the “reason / season” lines slay though. “you’re the only one with the power to ripen me” should feel cloying but for some reason it doesn’t at all and i STAN. i did want to ask about the title, because it doesn’t seem to fit the song to me. the song gives off a guarded-heart sense, and i’m wondering how impulsivity plays into that. perhaps the impulse is to protect? favorite part: “you’re the only one with the power to ripen me” @Lane Boy – "The Hunger" Spoiler lane boy returns this week with “the hunger.” i know you submitted this for an assignment and i think it fits the confines of that assignment better than it does a challenge like this. it feels more like a poem than a song and it’d be interesting to see this turned into a song. it feels almost like this could be rearranged/edited into a song, but in its current state, i can’t really read it as anything other than a poem. that being said, i’ll be excited to see what you come up with for the challenge next week. favorite part: the image of “powder blue butterflies,” which stuck with me for a while after reading this originally! @PoKiTaurus – "Ignited" Spoiler “ignited” by PoKiTaurus debuts on the charts this week. this song is technically written well—there aren’t any unbelievably forced lines, the meter is relatively in check—but there isn’t really anything that makes it stand out for me. maybe it’s because i don’t get it. i have no idea who spyro is or the context of anything you’re saying, so maybe there’s a layer i’m missing, but the technicals are good, so i’m thinking later rounds will click for me? (okay i just googled it, OMG, are there new games coming or something? :dies:) at first, my extra ass was thinking this was some sort of odysseus retelling or something. favorite part: “now he’s coming home, to reclaim his throne / you can’t stop him no”. this reads like it would have SUCH a sick melody, catchy af.
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 8 minutes ago, swiftie13 said: The student becomes the master Spoiler is this IconMale or Platinum Hit
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 Just now, Corsola said: We love revuvies and uvie loves you-vie
Hug Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 1 hour ago, ultraviolence.xx said: i wanna do this week's challenge. @Hug i may have a song to send you OMG finally someone to write with me
RihsusChrist(ATG) Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 4 minutes ago, Overprotected said: I don't get the narcissist part but yeah sounds like fun narcissist: a person who has an excessive interest in or admiration of themselves. People with this condition are frequently described as arrogant, self-centered, manipulative, and/or demanding Trust me, you'll get it...
Hug Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 1 hour ago, Overprotected said: I've never written a song but there's a first time for everything Sign me up Hello, don't be afraid to get adventurous. Write what speaks to you and have fun.
RihsusChrist(ATG) Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 (edited) 10 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: shut up 7 minutes ago, Hug said: Hello, don't be afraid to get adventurous. Write what speaks to you and have fun. Well well...isn't that interesting... I was just talking about narcissism, and y'all suddenly magically appear. Edited April 21, 2018 by RihsusChrist(ATG)
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 Just now, Gastrodonatella said: true narcissism is taking a judge responding to a player and encouraging them to think creatively and making it revolve around yourself im so glad you're bringing this gif back asldkfhasd
Hug Posted April 21, 2018 Posted April 21, 2018 2 minutes ago, RihsusChrist(ATG) said: Well well...isn't that interesting... I was just talking about narcissism, and y'all suddenly magically appear.
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