tournament Golden Hit: Season 1 📀 Congrats to 8thPrince and Jackson!! 🏆🏆

[Julia Fox]

Tysm!

[Aurora]

9 minutes ago, Jackson said:

OMG @Aurora how long did this take you?  

 

thank you - i totally agree with everything you said & i'm glad you caught the Stardust reference . the dog line was initially worse, but my dog was literally staring at me while i was writing the song and i couldn't cut his cameo out, so i tightened it up a bit but i still wasn't completely enamored with it. i included the closet/pride lines to make sure the song truly fit the challenge in case the pronouns didn't make it explicit enough. i agree with what you said in mxtt's review - i feel like there's a lot of songs about gay people suffering and struggling with their identity, and i've written that song before, so i wanted to just write a completely sappy gay love song 

Too long smh. But well worth it!

 

How could I not pick up on the Stardust reference? My 2/3 finale win ass is STILL traumatised by that song's perfect 10 score washing away any chances of victory until eight months later hihi. But in all honesty, I knew as soon as I'd read "Stardust" that it was a very special song and I got that same feeling from this one. Even if this doesn't end up matching the former's impossible success, it's just as good in my heart.

[Euterpe]

@fountain @Aurora Thank you for the reviews! I wasn’t sure how the song would go over or if I made theme enough, for obvious reasons. It’s definitely enough for me that you both liked it. 

[Remmy]

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Have you ever tried writing from a more poetic style? I notice with this song and with your Sigrid song you chose themes that have a lot of depth, but have executed them at times in a more lighthearted and less matured way (in this song I’m specifically pointing at the “why don’t I look like the prom king” line), which is interesting because people usually tend to do the opposite. I’m not saying it’s a bad thing, but it could be interesting to see you try a more matured writing style too if you go for a song concept like this again, just to at least see how it works out and if it compliments the writing. I think it’s worked in both cases so far too, since with this song you’re writing from the perspective of somebody discovering them so they would be at a young age and probably would be concerned with something like being like a prom king, but in terms of lyrics it’s not the most moving to be honest coming from an adult perspective, so I would be careful with that in other songs. But overall I think you’ve embraced the challenge very well.

I mean I could always try, but that style just isn't me  i don't have the brain power & vocabulary for all that, honestly! Plus my aftempt at poetry would likely come off as cheesy or pretentious  Oop that was actually one of the lines that I was thinking about changing  Yeah I can see what you mean by that for sure. Most of the song is from the perspective of someone that's either at the end of their high school years or in very early adulthood but I agree that lyric kinda stands out and not necessarily in a good way. Thanks

[JoeAg]

submitted

not my fav thus far, but i’m proud of the title and main motif

[Augmented]

All I can say is thank you so much @Aurora and @fountain 

[fountain]

48 minutes ago, Augmented said:

All I can say is thank you so much @Aurora and @fountain 

It was all you

[fountain]

6 hours ago, JoeAg said:

submitted

not my fav thus far, but i’m proud of the title and main motif

Yay I’m glad you submitted

[8thPrince]

I submitted to the form like 11 hours ago btw hope that's okay!

[fountain]

59 minutes ago, 8thPrince said:

I submitted to the form like 11 hours ago btw hope that's okay!

How dare you?

[mxtthewdelrey]

looking forward to everyone's songs inspired by AOTY next round

 

 

[fountain]

13 hours ago, Remmy said:

I mean I could always try, but that style just isn't me  i don't have the brain power & vocabulary for all that, honestly! Plus my aftempt at poetry would likely come off as cheesy or pretentious  Oop that was actually one of the lines that I was thinking about changing  Yeah I can see what you mean by that for sure. Most of the song is from the perspective of someone that's either at the end of their high school years or in very early adulthood but I agree that lyric kinda stands out and not necessarily in a good way. Thanks

Well, you could always try! You never know. But it’s up to you ultimately. It did irk me a little though, it felt like the song couldn’t meet its full potential, it was definitely still good but perhaps lacked the insightfulness I was maybe hoping for. But that’s just my taste on a personal level!

[fountain]

14 hours ago, Euterpe said:

@fountain @Aurora Thank you for the reviews! I wasn’t sure how the song would go over or if I made theme enough, for obvious reasons. It’s definitely enough for me that you both liked it. 

Have you shown it to your friend yet? If so what was the reaction, if you don’t mind sharing? 

[fountain]

15 hours ago, Achilles. said:

Thanks for the reviews! LOL I love that my title faked you both out. I actually considered renaming the song because I felt a bit like “In The Closet” makes it too obvious where the song is going to go, but the only other title I considered was “The Better Part of Me” and I thought giving away the last line was the less appealing idea. Plus I’ve had the “In The Closet” concept in the back of my mind for six years, so it was hard to let go of. Much like all the junk in my closet.  
 

Going from the reviews, it looks like there were many interesting, personal songs submitted this week. Great work everybody.

Hate the title tbh  but the song is brilliant.
 

“There, in the Closet” is more iconic I think

[Remmy]

13 minutes ago, fountain said:

Well, you could always try! You never know. But it’s up to you ultimately. It did irk me a little though, it felt like the song couldn’t meet its full potential, it was definitely still good but perhaps lacked the insightfulness I was maybe hoping for. But that’s just my taste on a personal level!

We'll see, but i wouldn't count on it  Guess it will mainly depend on the next theme. Although if I continue my pattern then next up is sex bop #3  or maybe I'll do a Plot Twist (by Sigrid)

[Euterpe]

13 minutes ago, fountain said:

Have you shown it to your friend yet? If so what was the reaction, if you don’t mind sharing? 

I sent it to her before submitting it. She never commented on it and instead told me drama instead. She still hasn’t said anything about it. 

[fountain]

15 hours ago, Legend E said:

I do have to say, however, that I feel these themes are quite tied together, and it basically is overall just a song about someone trying to accept and get over their partner's death but not being able to do so. To me it also doesn't seem similar in execution to the Kelly song, as that was just a big ass metaphor (which I agree was not executed in the best way), rather than a continuous state of questioning, as I feel this song was. But, I will try to trim the fat then next time and I'm really sorry it didn't come across the way I intended it to.

Nothing to be sorry about at all, I suppose this is just my Simon moment (although in reality I’m actually the Paula ). This song, in this form, just did not really click with me. But like I said, you had a lot of great messages and interesting topics in there… they just felt secondary to the story and I felt instead if we got an entry focusing on one of these ideas and exploring it in depth then it might have been stronger in my opinion. 
 

What I meant by the Kelly song comparison was that I felt both had good ideas but just missteps with the execution, with the Kelly song it was the heavy use of metaphors and with this song I felt it was the mix match of topics. While these themes do play a part together none were really given the proper time to be explored as meaningfully as they maybe could have been, because these are really deep and important topics and they were each kind of limited to a line or two when they could’ve been the idea for a whole song instead. Like, instead of this story about somebody losing their boyfriend at Pulse and then spiralling in all these ways… it could’ve been just a song about one of these specific spirals, instead. That’s what I meant by in this case less is more; the story itself at large was probably not needed because the actual topics were much more interesting. 
 

Hopefully this makes a little more sense. 

[fountain]

4 minutes ago, Euterpe said:

I sent it to her before submitting it. She never commented on it and instead told me drama instead. She still hasn’t said anything about it. 

Wow, link her to our reviews so she can see your work being appreciated as it should! 

[fountain]

10 minutes ago, Remmy said:

next theme

Again with the singular 

[Remmy]

24 minutes ago, fountain said:

Again with the singular 

Well I would think round 6 would be the double(?) theme for an interesting finale  unless YOU are serving the Plot Twist (by Sigrid) after all... a reverse Warholian experience tbh

[Aurora]

Hey all.

 

Just wanted to inform you of some issues I’m currently going through. Due to severe weather conditions I lost power yesterday. 18 hours later and it’s still out with no estimated repair time due to ongoing dangerous weather conditions.

 

When the power went out I was working on the next challenge as I had something quite elaborate planned for it. Hoping to stick to the Saturday challenge schedule it’s looking like the challenge will have to be scaled back a bit which I’m extremely disappointed about since I was quite excited about this one.

 

This will become clearer in the coming hours when the challenge is posted. I apologise for any delays this may cause as well.

[fountain]

3 hours ago, Remmy said:

Well I would think round 6 would be the double(?) theme for an interesting finale  unless YOU are serving the Plot Twist (by Sigrid) after all... a reverse Warholian experience tbh

We serve interesting every round baby, not just at the final 

[fountain]

6 minutes ago, Aurora said:

Hey all.

 

Just wanted to inform you of some issues I’m currently going through. Due to severe weather conditions I lost power yesterday. 18 hours later and it’s still out with no estimated repair time due to ongoing dangerous weather conditions.

 

When the power went out I was working on the next challenge as I had something quite elaborate planned for it. Hoping to stick to the Saturday challenge schedule it’s looking like the challenge will have to be scaled back a bit which I’m extremely disappointed about since I was quite excited about this one.

 

This will become clearer in the coming hours when the challenge is posted. I apologise for any delays this may cause as well.

Australia strikes again

[fountain]

What is B7? What is Round 5? 

[Aurora]

Small update: I now have access to a laptop and internet so challenge should hopefully be up within the hour.