Rence Posted January 23, 2021 Posted January 23, 2021 37 minutes ago, fountain said: Here u go ! Quote You got: You'll make it through your first mission!
fountain Posted January 25, 2021 Posted January 25, 2021 54 minutes ago, ughgabriel said: Waiting on 1 entry uwu I just woke up lol
ughgabriel Posted January 26, 2021 Author Posted January 26, 2021 21 hours ago, fountain said: I just woke up lol <3
fountain Posted January 26, 2021 Posted January 26, 2021 46 minutes ago, ughgabriel said: <3 My ghost writer hasn’t got back to me yet Spoiler Sorry, I am coming, I’ve been all over the place
fountain Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 2 hours ago, 8thPrince said: How is everyone I am good, but, I am having spontaneous urges again, like, to bleach my hair, when I know I shouldn’t, that it needs a break, but, that, I, so badly, want to feel that burn 14 minutes ago, Rence said: No Rence smile instead
Hug Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 2 hours ago, 8thPrince said: How is everyone Good but nervous ?
Prisoner Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 18 minutes ago, fountain said: @Prisoner come baaaaaaaaack I'm back!
Prisoner Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 Let me just post these first. The rest will come when I wake up or maybe a bit later ROUND XI PT. 1: LIGHT SONGS 1. Hug - "sweet abandon" Spoiler This one is a very bold entry from you, much much more different than anything you submitted before but I like it. This doesn't feel as 'LIGHT' as I expected the entries to be but 'light' is a very broad term so I applaud you on going this route that you took here and surprising me. I actually love the transition from the rage filled or 'angry' tone we have in the verses to the ecstasy filled tone in the chorus, I think the difference here really elevates the chorus. The religious theme here is also nicely done, you actually went in and did a whole thing about it instead of going around it with bits of imagery here and there, not saying that the latter is a bad thing, but it was nice to see someone go this route. If I have to say something, I'd say that this felt a bit preachy during certain lines. But overall, well done. 2. funnellegs - "as the dawn breaks" Spoiler This is a really hopeful entry. Songs with themes of relationships ending often tend to go towards the sadder side so it's always a nice thing to read the opposite. I love that this entry reads like a diary, where the narrator just pours in everything that he feels, and that packed this entry with all sorts of emotions. I love the whole thing but my fave parts of this song has to be the middle three sections just for how conversational and natural it felt. Line after line, there's these really fine details that really elevated the song. That 'victory lap' comparison is also just a really great literary device, the simile really works here. Also, the two lines with the '…work in progress... the most beautiful thing' is simply amazing. If I have to say something, It'd be that the first stanza went in a few directions in terms of imagery and that confused me initially. But overall, well done! 3. Rence - "stanley park" Spoiler I know I keep saying this, but this is one of your best songs yet. I love how you keep outdoing yourself and reach new heights every now and then. This entry has such a nice sweet simple plot and that is already enough for me but the smooth transition between the scenes like from the verses to the pre chorus and then to the chorus, etc. is just nicely done. It's what made the song for me tbh. The intro is also a really great opening to the song, it's probably my favourite part of the song, it's really simple and succinct and immediately pulls you into the song. I also think that you wrapped up the final chorus really well, it doesn't feel abrupt but goes out naturally. If I have to say something, It'd be that verse 2's first stanza felt a bit clunky but otherwise, well done! 4. fountain - "P!" and "Hw II" Spoiler Firstly, impressed at you sending four whole songs for this round. But it's just what you do! Anyway, I really love the two songs you submitted for the 'LIGHT' entry. "P!" feels really grand and is such a classic 'pears' entry. I actually think this song could work as a pop song and I can see it being actually catchy. The song itself is literally very refreshing to read and I love how you managed to capture that feeling. "Hw II"on the other hand is not something I've expected to see from you. It's written in a style that's vastly different from the one you've used this season so this was also very refreshing to read. I love the simplicity of this and also how you managed to make this song really sweet without going overboard. If I have to say something, it'd be that the first stanza of "P!"s chorus felt a bit weaker to the rest of the section but otherwise, well done! @Rence @fountain @Hug @funnellegs
Rence Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 1 hour ago, fountain said: No Rence smile instead still nervous though
Rence Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 Thank you Prisoner I don’t think I’m ready for the next one
fountain Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 13 minutes ago, Prisoner said: I'm back! I willed it into existence!
Prisoner Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 3 minutes ago, Rence said: I don’t think I’m ready for the next one the entries are dark. so the reviews will also be dark. ha ha...
Prisoner Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 2 minutes ago, fountain said: I willed it into existence! I'm actually shook
Rence Posted January 28, 2021 Posted January 28, 2021 2 minutes ago, Prisoner said: the entries are dark. so the reviews will also be dark. ha ha... oh no
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