Bandito Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 @Hug It was a poem I wrote months ago with no intention of ever sharing honestly. It's finals week here at college so I had no time to write anything new so I just sent this. My bipolar head is kicking my ass right now. Will it ever get any better though?
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just now, Lane Boy said: @Hug It was a poem I wrote months ago with no intention of ever sharing honestly. It's finals week here at college so I had no time to write anything new so I just sent this. My bipolar head is kicking my ass right now. Will it ever get any better though? ok wait i knew it was familiar
Hug Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 1 minute ago, Lane Boy said: @Hug It was a poem I wrote months ago with no intention of ever sharing honestly. It's finals week here at college so I had no time to write anything new so I just sent this. My bipolar head is kicking my ass right now. Will it ever get any better though? Okay well we're just happy to see you around. I hope you'll be able to get into a better head-space.
Bandito Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just now, ultraviolence.xx said: ok wait i knew it was familiar How? I wrote it in September after my Paramore concert when there was no PH. Maybe I DMd you it when we were being friendly, I don't know anymore.
Kylie Jenner Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 ???? ????? ???? ????? ?? ? ??????? ??? ???? ???? ?? ????? ?????????
ultraviolence.xx Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just now, Lane Boy said: How? I wrote it in September after my Paramore concert when there was no PH. Maybe I DMd you it when we were being friendly, I don't know anymore. yes, you asked if someone would read it before you turned it in.
ICEY Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 52 minutes ago, Hug said: @ICEY - Body On Me Reveal hidden contents Thank you! I always feel like my songs aren't complete without a melody bc its such a driving part of a songs structure/rhythm so no worries, just comment on the lyrics would be nice, any feedback is helpful!
Achilles. Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 @Hug Lol, I knew the parantheses would get dragged, but that’s how I hear the chorus in my head—with a backing vocal repeating those particular lines—so I figured I might as well write it that way. It’s odd because sometimes when you look up lyrics to a song like that, it’ll include the repetition... and other times it won’t. But I guess for a lyric-writing competition, there isn’t anything to be gained from including that sort of thing, so I’ll refrain in the future. I’m glad you liked the concept! I’m kinda shook that I even came up with the idea of writing a song about Cassandra that uses her as both the mythological figure (a prophet whose prophecies were never believed) and as the larger feminist symbol of society’s dismissiveness of women. Ugh my mind. But I agree about the general lack of standout lines. There are a few places I thought really shined (the alarms/arms couplet!) and a few places that were definitely a bit weaker (the last couplets of both verses). Interestingly, this is probably the first song I’ve ever written where I used the same “format” in the two verses (“for every woman that... / there are ten men that...”). It’s a really common songwriting technique that I’ve somehow never used before. And I don’t mind if you (or the other judges) quote a few particular lines that you like (or don’t). I just don’t really want my full songs being posted!
ICEY Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 1 hour ago, KatyCatPH said: Now that reviews from Hugboard are in, I wanna share a throwback to my highest charting song. Hopefully this inspires me for the upcoming rounds. Reveal hidden contents OPAL SKIES [VERSE 1] I was lonely living alone In my monochromatic world My life was a sketch in a blank canvas My fate changed when you came along Armed with pallet instead of a sword To draw on color to my world at last [PRE-CHORUS] I was left breathless when I first saw you Felt like drowning in your pools of dark blue Am I hallucinating? Is it real, what I'm feeling? [CHORUS 1] We found love under opal skies Kaleidoscopic paradise You filled my world with every radiant hue All's aglow under opal skies You're my life's most brilliant surprise You filled my world with every radiant hue [HOOK] Under opal skies there was you... ooh ooh ooh There was you... ooh ooh ooh [VERSE 2] Thought it's gonna be forever Kept my hopes alive in my heart When truly I was just chasing rainbows We were sailing in rough waters Our made-up world was falling apart I still saw it through rose-tinted windows [BRIDGE 2] I was left speechless when I learned the truth Felt lost trying to reconcile the sooth Am I hallucinating? Is it real, what I'm seeing? [CHORUS 2] I found you under opal skies Getting lost in someone else's eyes I wonder was I ever loved by you There you were under opal skies His rainbow words got you enticed I wonder was I ever loved by you [HOOK] Under opal skies there was you... ooh ooh ooh There was you... ooh ooh ooh [BRIDGE] Got a broken heart from my misplaced trust The world we have built slowly turned to rust All I can do now is wave my white flag All I can do now is wave my white flag [CHORUS 3] I found love under opal skies Hurts to fall from the highest highs Wish I've known it was to good to be true I was dazzled by opal skies Blind to your technicolor lies Wish I've known it was to good to be true Under opal skies there was you... ooh ooh ooh There was you... ooh ooh ooh There was you... ooh ooh ooh There was you oh wow i love this
touya kinomoto Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 2 minutes ago, ICEY said: oh wow i love this Oh thank you!
Speezy Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 @Hug Honestly i wrote 5 songs including that one this round . I just love the one I sent. Also I never knew the word piqued existed until now .
Hug Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just now, Body Talk⠀ said: so when is the next round? i'm ready to make my last submission look like trash That's the spirit! ...but tbh I don't know myself.
Speezy Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just now, Corsola said: People out here writing 5 songs and I can't even finish one I’m sure the harder it is to complete as song the better it is sometimes. Quality>Quantity I mean I wrote one which was a arrangement of Haikus but I personally didn’t like it
beatinglikeadrum Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 (edited) @Hug dragging me for filth and he is one of the least cruel judge. Edited April 18, 2018 by beatinglikeadrum
Hug Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just now, beatinglikeadrum said: @Hug dragging me for filth and he is not cruel at all. I did it because I believe in you.
ceremonials Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 @Hug I’ll assume the lack of a review meant it was perfect x
Hug Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just now, ceremonials said: @Hug I’ll assume the lack of a review meant it was perfect x I'm giving you your review if you'd ever log on to Skype. x
beatinglikeadrum Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 3 minutes ago, Hug said: I did it because I believe in you. Yeah. But your believing won't help me in qualifying to the next round. Just kidding. Thank u for your opinion. I'll try my best. Will someone be my ghostwriter ?
Hug Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 I think starting next week, I'll be pointing out my favorite lines from each song, but my favorite couplet of the week goes to @Kunst's "Butterfly Weather" congrats on doing #THAT “Tugging at impossible forevers / Maybe it’s the butterfly weather” I'm still shook
poki Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Thank you so much I've been writing a lot since I got eliminated last season
Alesus Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 (edited) @Hug That's what I get for trying to be avant-garde The song's main theme is emptiness. It was written following a life-threatening accident, and so it's touches on numbness from painkillers as well as hopelessness following a near death experience. The water/fire/blood imagery is meant to be a way to explore numbness (think of an expressionist paintings), as the narrator can see they're broken and hurt but doesn't really feel it. The mother/daughter is an loose allusion to classical mythology, with Mother being capitalized sometimes to represent Earth. The entire chorus is the battle with giving in to thoughts of suicide/giving up, So "little girl is one with Mother" would be letting go of everything, and being consumed by the numbness Hopefully that helps the song make a little more sense. Edited April 18, 2018 by Alesus
Hug Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 2 minutes ago, Alesus said: @Hug That's what I get for trying to be avant-garde The song's main theme is emptiness. It was written following an life-threatening accident, and so it's touches on numbness from painkillers as well as hopelessness following a near death experience. The water/fire/blood imagery is meant to be a way to explore numbness, as the narrator can see they're broken and hurt but doesn't really feel it. The mother/daughter is an loose allusion to classical mythology, with Mother being capitalized sometimes to represent earth. The entire chorus is the battle with giving in to thoughts of suicide/giving up, So "little girl is one with Mother" would be letting go of everything, and being consumed by the numbness Hopefully that helps the song make a little more sense. Okay I was like When I first read it, but I think it makes more sense now
swiftie13 Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 (edited) Hor’s Daily Double tea is coming tomorrow, not on tonight. Hugboard gave a lot to talk about. Edited April 18, 2018 by swiftie13
Hug Posted April 18, 2018 Posted April 18, 2018 Just so you guys know, the "sales" haven't been "calculated" yet, so if you think I missed something or something went over my head, just let me know. I'm reviewing the songs tomorrow before I decide what numbers y'all are doing.
Recommended Posts