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@Hug It was a poem I wrote months ago with no intention of ever sharing honestly.

It's finals week here at college so I had no time to write anything new so I just sent this.

 

My bipolar head is kicking my ass right now.

Will it ever get any better though?

 

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Just now, Lane Boy said:

@Hug It was a poem I wrote months ago with no intention of ever sharing honestly.

It's finals week here at college so I had no time to write anything new so I just sent this.

 

My bipolar head is kicking my ass right now.

Will it ever get any better though?

 

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ok wait i knew it was familiar

 

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1 minute ago, Lane Boy said:

@Hug It was a poem I wrote months ago with no intention of ever sharing honestly.

It's finals week here at college so I had no time to write anything new so I just sent this.

 

My bipolar head is kicking my ass right now.

Will it ever get any better though?

 

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Okay well we're just happy to see you around. I hope you'll be able to get into a better head-space. :heart2: 

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Just now, ultraviolence.xx said:

ok wait i knew it was familiar

 

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How? I wrote it in September after my Paramore concert when there was no PH.

Maybe I DMd you it when we were being friendly, I don't know anymore.

 

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Just now, Lane Boy said:

How? I wrote it in September after my Paramore concert when there was no PH.

Maybe I DMd you it when we were being friendly, I don't know anymore.

 

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yes, you asked if someone would read it before you turned it in.

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52 minutes ago, Hug said:

@ICEY - Body On Me

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Thank you! I always feel like my songs aren't complete without a melody bc its such a driving part of a songs structure/rhythm so no worries, just comment on the lyrics would be nice, any feedback is helpful! :flower:

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@Hug

 

Lol, I knew the parantheses would get dragged, but that’s how I hear the chorus in my head—with a backing vocal repeating those particular lines—so I figured I might as well write it that way. It’s odd because sometimes when you look up lyrics to a song like that, it’ll include the repetition... and other times it won’t. But I guess for a lyric-writing competition, there isn’t anything to be gained from including that sort of thing, so I’ll refrain in the future. :alexz3: 

 

I’m glad you liked the concept! I’m kinda shook that I even came up with the idea of writing a song about Cassandra that uses her as both the mythological figure (a prophet whose prophecies were never believed) and as the larger feminist symbol of society’s dismissiveness of women. Ugh my mind.

 

But I agree about the general lack of standout lines. There are a few places I thought really shined (the alarms/arms couplet!) and a few places that were definitely a bit weaker (the last couplets of both verses). Interestingly, this is probably the first song I’ve ever written where I used the same “format” in the two verses (“for every woman that... / there are ten men that...”). It’s a really common songwriting technique that I’ve somehow never used before. :eek:

 

And I don’t mind if you (or the other judges) quote a few particular lines that you like (or don’t). I just don’t really want my full songs being posted! :cm: 

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1 hour ago, KatyCatPH said:

Now that reviews from Hugboard are in, I wanna share a throwback to my highest charting song. Hopefully this inspires me for the upcoming rounds.

 

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OPAL SKIES

 

[VERSE 1]
I was lonely living alone
In my monochromatic world
My life was a sketch in a blank canvas

My fate changed when you came along
Armed with pallet instead of a sword
To draw on color to my world at last

[PRE-CHORUS]
I was left breathless when I first saw you
Felt like drowning in your pools of dark blue
Am I hallucinating?
Is it real, what I'm feeling?

[CHORUS 1]
We found love under opal skies
Kaleidoscopic paradise
You filled my world with every radiant hue
All's aglow under opal skies
You're my life's most brilliant surprise
You filled my world with every radiant hue

[HOOK]
Under opal skies there was you... ooh ooh ooh
There was you... ooh ooh ooh

[VERSE 2]
Thought it's gonna be forever
Kept my hopes alive in my heart
When truly I was just chasing rainbows

We were sailing in rough waters
Our made-up world was falling apart
I still saw it through rose-tinted windows

[BRIDGE 2]
I was left speechless when I learned the truth
Felt lost trying to reconcile the sooth
Am I hallucinating?
Is it real, what I'm seeing?

[CHORUS 2]
I found you under opal skies
Getting lost in someone else's eyes
I wonder was I ever loved by you
There you were under opal skies
His rainbow words got you enticed
I wonder was I ever loved by you

[HOOK]
Under opal skies there was you... ooh ooh ooh
There was you... ooh ooh ooh

[BRIDGE]
Got a broken heart from my misplaced trust
The world we have built slowly turned to rust
All I can do now is wave my white flag
All I can do now is wave my white flag

[CHORUS 3]
I found love under opal skies
Hurts to fall from the highest highs
Wish I've known it was to good to be true
I was dazzled by opal skies
Blind to your technicolor lies
Wish I've known it was to good to be true
Under opal skies there was you... ooh ooh ooh
There was you... ooh ooh ooh
There was you... ooh ooh ooh
There was you

 

oh wow i love this 

Posted
2 minutes ago, ICEY said:

oh wow i love this 

Oh thank you! :heart2:

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@Hug Honestly i wrote 5 songs including that one this round :jonny:. I just love the one I sent. Also I never knew the word piqued existed until now :skull:.

 

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Just now, Body Talk⠀ said:

so when is the next round? i'm ready to make my last submission look like trash 

That's the spirit!

 

...but tbh I don't know myself. :dancehall: 

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Just now, Corsola said:

People out here writing 5 songs and I can't even finish one :jonny: 

I’m sure the harder it is to complete as song the better it is sometimes. :gaycat2: 

Quality>Quantity  

I mean I wrote one which was a arrangement of Haikus but I personally didn’t like it :ahh: 

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@Hug dragging me for filth and he is one of the least cruel judge. 

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Just now, beatinglikeadrum said:

@Hug dragging me for filth and he is not cruel at all.

I did it because I believe in you. :dancehall: 

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@Hug I’ll assume the lack of a review meant it was perfect x

 

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Just now, ceremonials said:

@Hug I’ll assume the lack of a review meant it was perfect x

 

I'm giving you your review if you'd ever log on to Skype. x

Posted
3 minutes ago, Hug said:

I did it because I believe in you. :dancehall: 

Yeah. But your believing won't help me in qualifying to the next round. 

 

Just kidding. Thank u for your opinion. I'll try my best. 

 

Will someone be my ghostwriter ? 

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I think starting next week, I'll be pointing out my favorite lines from each song, but my favorite couplet of the week goes to @Kunst's "Butterfly Weather" congrats on doing #THAT

 

“Tugging at impossible forevers / Maybe it’s the butterfly weather”

 

I'm still shook

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Thank you so much :jonny5:

 

I've been writing a lot since I got eliminated last season 

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@Hug

 

That's what I get for trying to be avant-garde :jonny5:

 

The song's main theme is emptiness. It was written following a life-threatening accident, and so it's touches on numbness from painkillers as well as hopelessness following a near death experience. The water/fire/blood imagery is meant to be a way to explore numbness (think of an expressionist paintings), as the narrator can see they're broken and hurt but doesn't really feel it.

 

The mother/daughter is an loose allusion to classical mythology, with Mother being capitalized sometimes to represent Earth. The entire chorus is the battle with giving in to thoughts of suicide/giving up, So "little girl is one with Mother" would be letting go of everything, and being consumed by the numbness

 

Hopefully that helps the song make a little more sense.

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2 minutes ago, Alesus said:

@Hug

 

That's what I get for trying to be avant-garde :jonny5:

 

The song's main theme is emptiness. It was written following an life-threatening accident, and so it's touches on numbness from painkillers as well as hopelessness following a near death experience. The water/fire/blood imagery is meant to be a way to explore numbness, as the narrator can see they're broken and hurt but doesn't really feel it.

 

The mother/daughter is an loose allusion to classical mythology, with Mother being capitalized sometimes to represent earth. The entire chorus is the battle with giving in to thoughts of suicide/giving up, So "little girl is one with Mother" would be letting go of everything, and being consumed by the numbness

 

Hopefully that helps the song make a little more sense.

Okay I was like

 

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When I first read it, but I think it makes more sense now

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Hor’s Daily Double tea is coming tomorrow, not on tonight. Hugboard gave a lot to talk about.

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Just so you guys know, the "sales" haven't been "calculated" yet, so if you think I missed something or something went over my head, just let me know. I'm reviewing the songs tomorrow before I decide what numbers y'all are doing.

 

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