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Nnnnnnn true and I agree, it’s just frustrating a little cause I always get held back because of my meter/technique :skull:  and I feel like I’ve improved SO much in this season in terms of that. It’s insanely difficult for me to write like that, but I’ve grown a lot. I know how to write with good meter and have everything polished. I just don’t like it personally :skull: it gives me anxiety, but I still actively try to polish my songs as much as possible.

 

My brain and work ethic are very abstract so writing with perfect meter is an obstacle :jonny:  that’s why my songs can be so inconsistent cause I’ll start off with such a tight rhythm and then I’m like “**** it” :skull::bibliahh:Not to get too deep but I also do think it’s a control issue for me :skull: I tend to focus on the emotion and immersiveness of the song a lot more. but yas I understand COMPLETELY all your points and I think that’s the frustrating part. Because I KNOW what’s wrong, I’ve BEEN knew for a LONG time and yet............ I still can’t fix it  :deadbanana: but I’ve improved so much so it’s okay. Everything is a work-in-progress! :duca:

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@UFO please post every paragraph in a seperate post so we can reach 200 pages by the end of this season thank you x

 

also my reviews are going very well so far, I have completed one of four x
 

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10 hours ago, Aurora said:

@UFO please post every paragraph in a seperate post so we can reach 200 pages by the end of this season thank you x

 

also my reviews are going very well so far, I have completed one of four x
 

Screaming :bibliahh:  me being used for payola since PH5 and I still ain’t got a single cheque! Faux fighting with a bunch of homos just so y’all can cross the 1k post mark. A bunch of FRAUDS. you heard it here folks from the big titty alien bitch U F O a k a U **** OFF

 

ahhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!! :bibliahh:  I can’t wait for my rap era. spitfire your ass with oxygen, cause when you threw away the KEY to my HEART imma throw a match on ya :katie2: flick flick flicker bitch I ain’t a quitter but you is my bi Ch and I’m hit yo man for ya

 

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whew we love a Nicki Garbaj roleplay

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Whew!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The way Tonight is serving Dancing On My Own teas, only BETTER.

 

ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I love myself

 

:weeps:  When you hold me tighter than her, I feel like I don’t need the rain (no more tears!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! he didn't really hold you tighter BITCH you're deluded into thinking he did because you're so deep into this abusive relationship, you don't need him! i know it's hard but you're a ****ing skeleton flower and he is what? he is a FUNGUS)

But then you run off to her and leave me here to burn our flame (what a DICK)

 

I’m dancing in your eyes but you turn away to her lips (her lips could mean N E THING)
Tonight, tonight I’ll be your everything in the cold darkness (ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh)

 

o m g

 

quick someone make me a guest judge so i can review my own songs and stan myself and also drag myself, omg it'll be so fun
:jonny: Tove lo hit me up let's collab xo

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Give me my crown, Australia. And I'll give you back the ozone layer.

 

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Being a PH war veteran is cute and all but the PTSD can really **** with you. This is why I believe ass-kissing is a good remedy to wash away your flashbacks of the past. Try it today and you'll potentially, almost certainly make the finale. who doesn't love a good suck? IT WORKED FOR ME!

 

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We need songwriters like me, we need songwriters like me!

so they can go online on Discord and paint me out to be the bad guy EuphorianSea.

 

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throwback wednesday.

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"That makes me sad, but not as sad as Fefe's tiny ****"

 

"And if they don't, well, you can keep being a dark horse until they regret it"

 

 

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sTrEaM nO bY MeGhAn TrAiNoR

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wow ufo really lost it

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2 hours ago, UFO said:

Give me my crown, Australia. And I'll give you back the ozone layer.

 

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I’m screaming at this payola.

 

the finale nerves are kicking in I take it?

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I hope we're all still streaming Louisa

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fjlksdjlkdsjfldks :bibliahh:

 

THIS

IS

PERFORMANCE

ART

 

*runs onto the PH finale stage and starts singing Boys, Boys, Boys by Stefani Joanne Angelina 'Lady Gaga' Germanotta*

 

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3 hours ago, Kylie Jenner said:

I hope we're all still streaming Louisa

Yes

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screaming at the master doc leading to a UFO master doc which leads to a doc for each of UFO's songs

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GASTRODONATELLA

 



Astral Bloom – wow, this really is your Bjork era, isn’t it? I can appreciate that this song is very technically well-done, but it doesn’t really make me feel anything – the emotional attachment isn’t there. feels like a by-the-numbers Gastrodonatella song, though the images are lovely and it provides a nice thematic contrast to Ocean Floor. the experience of this is kind of like looking at a very lovely painting of a scene instead of having the emotional understanding of that scene and actually being in it.

 

Oblivion – N/A

 

Paper Lanterns – AHHH not the Tangled pic bitch. ok, is this heart beating to the tempo of the breaths not the exact same thing I pointed out last week that I swore I’d seen in another one of your songs?? at the end, this kind of dips into corny territory (i.e., the bridge), but the beginning is stellar and beautiful. the first verse was a wonderful introduction – the first stanza in particular I think is my favorite part.

 

Eden Edenloaded The Petals-Up – a gorgeous victory lap. that was a classic, that was a classic.

 

MINHO

 



the fox – “it’s not our minds, but our hearts that dream” I sat there for about three minutes just processing the stellarness of this line. the rest of it, though, feels kind of elementary. perhaps because the first stanza establishes the content of the entire song and it doesn’t really progress from there. also, damn, reading every page in the bookstore? that would take a **** ton of time.

 

Shadow of the Colossus – BITCH!!!!! do you watch AJayII’s reaction videos? because she says “BITCH” a certain way and that’s totally how i’m saying it in my head right now. this is FIRE!!!! “the skies feel different this evening / like even the lightning’s hesitating” BITCH that line!!!! this is ****ing incredible i’m blown away, wow wow!

 

summer – ugh, there are some gorgeous lines in here too. “a distant lght that paints our skin gold,” “we carve our names in stone, we carve our summer night”… kind of like citrus’s “friends” earlier in the season, i’m not a huge fan of the “summer, summer, summer” parts, but i’m not big on repetition like that in general. the rest of this is gorgeous.

 

Dream in a Dream – ahhhh I forgot about “maybe we could both get drenched,” an iconic line. i’m lowkey positive this is unchanged? still beautiful.

 

CEREMONIALS

 



The Last of Us – I don’t remember the outro destroying me in the original like it did in this one. it may have and I just don’t remember, but whew.

 

Anger Point – the original AP is one of my favorite songs of this season, so you had a difficult challenge attempting something with the same title, but you still did a solid job. the imagery is wonderful, but some of the lines strike me as odd, like the fish one in v3. one thing I did notice though is the anger is kind of lost on me aside from the hook. if the hook were omitted I wouldn’t know anything about it, which may have been intentional so it was more about the metaphor and less about actual anger, but I noticed that regardless.

 

The Wind Waker – The Wind Waker is obviously wind. serving UFO explanation bolding, i’m howling. i’m also kiing that you said “accessible” right before the song starts and then the first line opens with “crisp air replenishes.” king of inaccessible vocabulary. the chorus of this is flawless. also wow the last few lines of v2, snatch me king. this is how I felt when I was worried about you rejecting my proposal. i’m surprised you could incorporate the dead-horse cliché “wind beneath my wings” in a way that’s completely not tired. cool, wonderful.  

 

Twilight Princess – this is nice. I really can’t think of a single damn thing to say about this song. I like it as expansion on goldenrod and it’s got some pretty lines but it doesn’t pack a wallop the way some of your other songs do. I think I might be overexposed after four songs in a row, so what’s quality is just registering as average at this point.

 

UFO

 



Becoming Human – the bad news is, the spoken parts still don’t work for me. the good news is, the rest of it works super well for me! I like that this exists in tandem with hyperreality without what I thought was overdone and somewhat corny last time, the tech references. I also love a good key change now and then.

 

Tonight / Skeleton Flower – how exactly does a candle shine with a million fireflies? I don’t understand that image. “I’m melting in your neglect and I feel like I must change” :’( AHHH THE BRIDGE!! aside from the filthy line I LOVE everything about the bridge. wow. why is “these plants have a secret” SENDING me to hell? i’ve been laughing at that for like five minutes now ahh. okay this is definitely one of my favorites.

 

Candles in the Sky – serving elton john. the sometimes-rhyming-sometimes-not is throwing me off a bit. why the **** is everyone writing about paper lanterns this week? like three of you mentioned paper lanterns. why did that happen? the chorus of this is absolutely beautiful, though. also “I don’t want to disappear in false paradise” stole my wig and pieces of my scalp. I’m a bloody mess. help!

 

Rings of Saturn – ugh, this one is still so great. i’m glad you chose this to go on your album.

 

favorite songs:

 

gastrodonatella: eden reloaded

minho: shadow of the colossus

cere: the wind waker

ufo: tonight, closely followed by candles

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Twilight Princess deserved better from all of you

 

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A career highlight.

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stan for Wind Waker tho

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On 7/25/2018 at 3:16 PM, UFO said:

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SCREEEEEEEAM

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