Galah Posted May 17, 2018 Author Posted May 17, 2018 9 minutes ago, MattyTacos said: Mess, just submitted but idk if it counts. no sorry, I printed your entry out and put it through a paper shredder
MattyTacos Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 13 minutes ago, Aurora said: no sorry, I printed your entry out and put it through a paper shredder they're gonna pay for this they're gonna burn me at the stake but i got a fire in my veins
Hug Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 1 hour ago, Aurora said: no sorry, I printed your entry out and put it through a paper shredder I remember when Katie actually did that in Top Member I SCREAMED
Galah Posted May 17, 2018 Author Posted May 17, 2018 25 minutes ago, Hug said: I remember when Katie actually did that in Top Member I SCREAMED YES I was going to find that gif but I couldn't be bothered and I didn't think anyone else would remember sadjlsadja
Hug Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 1 minute ago, Aurora said: @Hug@Mimie Mess I didn't know it was Mimi's iconic!
Galah Posted May 17, 2018 Author Posted May 17, 2018 2 minutes ago, Hug said: Mess I didn't know it was Mimi's iconic! I remembered it was Mimi's application, but not who shredded it.
OreGuy Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 totally missed this round because of the server, I guess that's all for this season
OreGuy Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 totally missed this round because of the server, I guess that's all for this season
OreGuy Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 2 minutes ago, OreGuy said: totally missed this round because of the server, I guess that's all for this season okay, wig, late submissions are allowed let me dig
Citrus Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 2 minutes ago, OreGuy said: @Aurora, just submitted We love a dedicated songwriter
Mimie Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 8 hours ago, Aurora said: I remembered it was Mimi's application, but not who shredded it. F it was Katie
ultraviolence.xx Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 U MAGAZINE THIS WEEK'S TRACK REVIEWS This post rounds up the opening third of our reviews of this week's chart debuts. Further installments will be posted in later digital issues. @beatinglikeadrum – "The Praying of Job" the opening line is gorgeous and ushers me into the atmosphere of this song. i like the meaning and a lot of the images you choose are beautiful. that being said, it feels less like a pop smasher and more like a Florence + the Machine deep cut, which isn’t necessarily a bad thing in the big picture, but in the context of this challenge it would flop on public radio. i really do love it though; the chorus is beautiful and each of the verses adds something new. my favorite from you so far. favorite part: “i don’t want to be a sacrifice on your golden altar / i’ve never been your angel, never been your warrior” @Nait Phoenix – "Tricks of the Trade" girl, a pop song with “probable anomaly” in the chorus? a risk-taker, thou art. the whole time i was reading i kept thinking of “turning tricks” – i have no idea why – and it gave the song a darker edge, even tho it’s written in rainbow colors. i’d like to know if there was a particular influence for this song or if it was just inspired by pop as a whole. it has that nice vagueness that radio pop music has and fits the challenge really well but doesn’t really stand out to me, except for the “anomaly” line. favorite part: “i don’t have a lot of time to prove / the wonders of the unknown and what they can do” @minho – "Dream in a Dream" the structure of this one is interesting – intro/pre-chorus/verse/chorus? odd. other than that, wig, this is beautiful. it’s simple enough to do well on radio without sacrificing any of your artistic integrity. the “drenched” line reads awkwardly to me for some reason – being drenched hasn’t ever been a positive thing for me, so reading it as such felt strange. the “believe” line feels a bit forced too. i’m not finding much else to say because there’s not much to pick apart. strong work! favorite part: “there’s nowhere i need to be / i’m losing myself in a dream” @Citrus – "Fruit" the spoken intro has me C A C K L I N G. oh my god, girl. “have ya ever had a plate of me?” feels like it should be “don’t you wanna…” because assuming their straight they haven’t had a plate of Vitamin A-hole, but that could just be me reading it too obviously. “healthy, natural juice” sounds slightly more like an infomercial than an appetizing taunt. “*****ticulture” is the best thing i’ve read in my 1.25 years of PHing, poor others. “i knew you liked the fruit” AAAHHHH WIG. the second verse gets kind of real in a way i wasn’t expecting and i’m not sure i entirely like? “i’m white gold / with a green thumb” is legendary. “they all blow / but can’t suck” adfsdlfh i feel like i was spoiled early on with the best lines (intro / verse 1 / also the bridge) and the chorus kind of pales in comparison. overall tho, poor marina and the diamonds. favorite part: “fans around the world wanna Vitamin C me / boys on the block tryna Vitamin D me / girls on the chop wish they could Vitamin B me” i’m still screaming @Obsession – "Difficult Romance" okay, this is cute, and radio CANDY. the meter is really good and the darker themes could be masked by something lighter sonically (in the way of Dancing On My Own). great job fulfilling the requirements of the challenge while also writing a great song in general. “anyway” feels awkward being on its own in the line, in a way that “we just sway” doesn’t, because “anyway” doesn’t feel like a complete thought in the same way the latter does. i hope this sells to a hitmaker because europe is going to eat this UP on the dance floor. favorite part: “we know what we’re supposed to say / but none of us will make the move” @SeanKevinMusic – "Run Away with Me" your songs, i’m realizing, sound very much like confessionals and less like “songs” in the traditional sense, in that they’re straightforward and conversational-sounding. you don’t use much imagery, so on the occasion that you do, it really POPS – like the darkness/light couplet that wigged me. the repetition of “back” in the first pre-chorus (“we stood back / while letting all these demons back…”) stood out to me negatively; if it were me i’d find a way to reword one of those. in future rounds i’d like to see you play a bit more with images and elevated language to give your songs a bit more pizzazz, because as it is right now, they feel too similar to me. favorite part: “i’ll just run away in the darkness / you hide in the light, in the light” @RihsusChrist(ATG) – "Specter" this feels very Florence, so you’ve nabbed that, but some of the rhymes are super duper forced. the “house/mouse/blouse/louse” bit felt suuuuuper forced, along with “tide/hide/side” and “life/strife”. the parts that shine the most are when you let go a little bit and get looser with your rhyme scheme like the “wrought/fault” pairing that i was super impressed with. the word “sh*t” feels a bit too informal for the rest of the song to me. next round i’d like to see you try to play more with your rhymes so they don’t sound like you’re writing lines just to make them match up. favorite part: “specter, i’ll be rid of you / i’ll untie these binds”
Citrus Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 Yeah I knew my chorus would be the roughest spot. My choruses have always been relatively simple, but I didn't have any emotional buildup to make it resonate this time.
ultraviolence.xx Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 13 minutes ago, Citrus said: Yeah I knew my chorus would be the roughest spot. My choruses have always been relatively simple, but I didn't have any emotional buildup to make it resonate this time. to be fair, "rough" is relative to the rest of your song, not actually rough by any means!
Achilles. Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 1 hour ago, ultraviolence.xx said: boys on the block tryna Vitamin D me / girls on the chop wish they could Vitamin B me Should I make this my twitter bio?
ultraviolence.xx Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 5 minutes ago, Achilles. said: Should I make this my twitter bio? slay with that MUNA sig!
RihsusChrist(ATG) Posted May 17, 2018 Posted May 17, 2018 @ultraviolence.xx thank you for the fair and balanced review. And me and @beatinglikeadrum being inspired by the queen!
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