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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:09 AM, MattyTacos said:

 

I just added Jackson to the pm to show I submitted the entry :skull: we'll see what happens I guess, not too mad since I was kinda side-tracked with the whole "getting kicked out of the house" situation which luckily has calmed down a bit & I'm making plans to move into an apartment spring next year

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i can review her if you want :fan:

 

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AHHH I LOVE MY SONG SO FAR

 

doing my favorite color and stone :)

 

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whew ok let me REMIND myself to not write too much this round since that was like the major criticism :skull:  sometimes I get too carried away and lost in my own thoughts when I write my songs so I add another stanza to verse 1 and then another stanza to verse 2 and then I merge verse 1 and verse 2 together to create a 4-stanza long verse and then I write another verse 2 and then I write the bridge and then I make it a 2-part bridge and repeat it so it "flows" better and if I STILL have more to say I write an outro and then I cut half the bridge and place it at the beginning for ~experimental structure~ and then I turn the chorus into a "hook" and make it as short as possible so my song won't seem as long when it actually is and then I don't write a pre-chorus because I'm a lazy bitch and it's long enough anyway :celestial5: this is literally my writing process :fan:  inb4 I troll the judges and submit like only 3 lines this week :deadbanana:  :rip:  :fan:  

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:17 AM, ceremonials said:

i can review her if you want :fan:

 

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That'd be great, I understand that it's completely out of your way at this point so it means a lot you still want to read/give thoughts :hug: 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:18 AM, MattyTacos said:

That'd be great, I understand that it's completely out of your way at this point so it means a lot you still want to read/give thoughts :hug: 

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Okay, PM it to me I dont wanna wait for Ratson

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:20 AM, ceremonials said:

Okay, PM it to me I dont wanna wait for Ratson

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I invited you to the PM, let's see if somebody actually gets it this time

 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:14 AM, MattyTacos said:

bitchdid you make escape the ESSAY even longer than before i critiqued it? screaming, it was too ahead of its time for lengthy entries i suppose :skull: 

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sis what :skull:  akfjhakjf I actually DELETED some lines from the version I sent you :ahh:  

 

These lines:

 

(Once again, once more I'd like to feel myself break like I had some worth)
(Like I have some worth, like I have a voice)
(Like I have a beating heart to hurt, hurt)

 

Oh, how I wish I could hurt and love and hurt again in freedom
In freedom

 

are GONE

 

oh wait nvm I did make it longer I just checked:ahh:  :skull:  I repeated the "I choose to fall away" line like 1294692138541 more times 

:jonny: I think I have a LEGIT problem :rip:  

 

 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:22 AM, UFO said:

sis what :skull:  akfjhakjf I actually DELETED some lines from the version I sent you :ahh:  

 

These lines:

 

(Once again, once more I'd like to feel myself break like I had some worth)
(Like I have some worth, like I have a voice)
(Like I have a beating heart to hurt, hurt)

 

Oh, how I wish I could hurt and love and hurt again in freedom
In freedom

 

are GONE

 

oh wait nvm I did make it longer I just checked:ahh:  :skull:  I repeated the "I choose to fall away" line like 1294692138541 more times 

:jonny: I think I have a LEGIT problem :rip:  

 

 

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We clearly need to stage an intervention for your 5,000 word essays :ahh: 

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I don't share my songs with contestants anymore because I'm afraid they would steal my ideas

 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:26 AM, MattyTacos said:

We clearly need to stage an intervention for your 5,000 word essays :ahh: 

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RIGHT? I could literally write essays on what the weather was like today :ahh:  literally something that can be explained in one sentence, I write THREE paragraphs to explain it ajfsadfjl idk what's wrong with me :skull:  I think it's because I feel like I never make sense or no one understands what I'm saying so I overcompensate and write more than I should which backfires because I look even crazier than before UGH someone help me :'(  :rip:  

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:27 AM, Covergirl said:

I don't share my songs with contestants anymore because I'm afraid they would steal my ideas

 

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NNNnnnn sis :deadbanana::skull: 

 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:28 AM, UFO said:

RIGHT? I could literally write essays on what the weather was like today :ahh:  literally something that can be explained in one sentence, I write THREE paragraphs to explain it ajfsadfjl idk what's wrong with me :skull:  I think it's because I feel like I never make sense or no one understands what I'm saying so I overcompensate and write more than I should which backfires because I look even crazier than before UGH someone help me :'(  :rip:  

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That's a descriptive quality that most writers nowadays fail to possess so kudos to you :'( just find a better way of balancing descriptions in shorter sentences. 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:11 AM, UFO said:

ok I'm switching my plans. gonna do Ruby first and see if I can come up with anything good

UNLESS I think of a really good Opal concept but all I can think of right now is having sex with a wizard :skull:  @Speezy is shook ! :fan:  :rip: 

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Don't let him disappear inside you :gaycat2: 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:30 AM, MattyTacos said:

That's a descriptive quality that most writers nowadays fail to possess so kudos to you :'( just find a better way of balancing descriptions in shorter sentences. 

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Thanks, I will! :weeps::heart2: 

I'll try :jonny:  :fan:   from this post onwards I'll try to restrain myself if I can. whew king of bondage

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:32 AM, Speezy said:

Don't let him disappear inside you :gaycat2: 

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ffff maybe I'll make him come back with his magic wand :gaycat3:  :eddie:

:skull:  :skull:  we should NEVER collab tbh - the girls would not be ready for us :deadbanana:  :fan:  

 

although we would SCALP

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  On 9/11/2017 at 1:39 AM, UFO said:

ffff maybe I'll make him come back with his magic wand :gaycat3:  :eddie:

:skull:  :skull:  we should NEVER collab tbh - the girls would not be ready for us :deadbanana:  :fan:  

 

although we would SCALP

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:ahh: the mess. The 50 Shades Of Grey Platinum Hits track will be born 

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  On 9/10/2017 at 10:08 PM, Gastrodonatella said:

speezy is machoke because you want sexual speezy to come back with a choke me daddy anthem 

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:ahh: why didn't I see this 

But I found what works for me finally which are those types of songs 

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okay :date3: I just came up with a super cute concept ! I'm excited 

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The record label challenge was always the turning point for me the last two seasons so it better not be the opposite this time. :shakeno:

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                         hi this is a megapost for my reviews in the first rounds so jackson can link them in the OP. My round 1 reviews are spread over like 10 pages so i aint wanna look thru all them :gaycat3: 

 

but from now on the post should just be linked in the OP, since i do them in two parts instead of 37

 

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can we incorporate multiple birthstones or do we have to stick to 1? 

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Blink

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You leave them to fade to black in their grey world

You search for a myriad, your own rainbow

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also 

 

@MattyTacos, "Nature's Playgirl"

 

Okay, so I got some Florence vibes from this, for sure. I don't know if I could really see her singing this, but I do think the similarities in style were there, if not somewhat muddled. Speaking of muddled, this seemed like a big change in word choice for you - you're usually much more of a simple but effective writer, and this seemed like you kicked it up a couple notches. A few too many perhaps, since a few things get lost in translation. Let's take "repent" for example. It sure fits the tone of the song with its religious undertones, but when reading the line it's in it's clear you meant "resent". I also think the bridge is a sort of rough area. It just didn't really add enough to the song to justify it being there, as I think the song was long enough without it. Still, there are some amazing couplets and flashes of genius in this as always, and this was definitely my favorite entry from you so far.

 

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  On 9/11/2017 at 2:40 AM, ceremonials said:

                         hi this is a megapost for my reviews in the first rounds so jackson can link them in the OP. My round 1 reviews are spread over like 10 pages so i aint wanna look thru all them :gaycat3: 

 

but from now on the post should just be linked in the OP, since i do them in two parts instead of 37

 

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i can't believe cere used to stan for me!

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  On 9/11/2017 at 2:59 AM, SaintWest said:

i can't believe cere used to stan for me!

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you were my #5 tho :'(

 

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