Aurora Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 Just now, keshaspearsxo said: But seriously it could mean anything so last time someone got a gif alone it was Gassy Donny for Persephone and it was Austin's #1 so
UFO Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 (edited) 16 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: @UFO, “Nothing Ever Stays The Same” Okay, so there was still kind of a lot of unnecessary repetition here, but it was admittedly a lot less than usual, and mainly in the chorus, so I don’t have too much of a problem with it. I think conceptually this was really interesting, it wasn’t necessarily a huge departure from the original but it also wasn’t a retelling. It was somewhere in the middle, which is what I would have aimed for if I were to do this challenge. I thought the analogies of looking up and down as future and past was really cute, but then you sort of retconned it back to our usual concept of time (front and back). This was a minor detail though. Overall you definitely handled this challenge a lot better than last week, though it still kind of suffers from the same problems your entries usually have. However, there much less noticeable here and that made for a much more enjoyable read. “The tides start to pull as the moon orbits / But as the Sun falls, he falls with it too” YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAS An improvement from last week, definitely! I've always been a slow burner. I'm never the type of contestant to be last place one week and then immediately shoot up to #1 the next week. It's always a gradual and steady increase when it comes to me. I definitely haven't peaked this season yet or showed off all of my songwriting skills so I'm excited Thank you for loving the concept! I was uneasy at first about tackling it because I know that I often incorporate too many ideas together and it ends up being a badly-executed mess especially since I was writing from a unique and difficult perspective (observing my younger self) but I think I managed to not over-complicate things which is good and yas, I really didn't want to write a retelling of the original story but I also wanted to make sure the theme wasn't too LOOSE, so I think I found a good balance in terms of being inspired by the original story. I definitely understand what you mean by switching back to our usual concept of time. If I were to rewrite it, I think I would rewrite the third verse a LOT differently, I would probably write it from the perspective of my younger self but grown up and having that realisation of looking back at my younger self (nnn it's so confusing ) but I think I managed to wrap it up quite nicely with the outro! also YAS @ “The tides start to pull as the moon orbits / But as the Sun falls, he falls with it too” being your favourite couplet. I was so anxious about the first part of the chorus because it's pretty vague and fantastical compared to the rest of the song, especially compared to the second part of the chorus, so I'm glad you liked it! The first part of the chorus was supposed to represent how my younger self feels as though things will never change i.e. the Sun always rises, the Earth always rotates, the tides always pull as the moon orbits, and when the Sun falls my younger self always "falls" with it too - I wanted to emphasise how my younger self is in a cyclical mindset of things never improving which contrasts with my future self who already knows that the cycle will eventually break some day. NNnnn anyway I'm just glad you liked it! especially after last week. And especially since this song was more personal to me I think being last place last week was a blessing in disguise, I definitely feel more motivated and determined to experiment and do even better now that I have experienced the feeling of being last place. I can't wait for the next round! I am READY Edited October 1, 2017 by UFO
ceremonials Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 It's honestly not even typos. I just have really poor vision and most likely dyslexia
ceremonials Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 2 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: But seriously it could mean anything so Ok tea time, i wasnt absolutely slain by it like Persephone but it did thoroughly tug at my wig. There were just no holes I could poke it that I haven't already brought up to you, I feel. SO yeah, its a good thing.
fountain Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 2 minutes ago, Aurora said: last time someone got a gif alone it was Gassy Donny for Persephone and it was Austin's #1 so This is all a simulation anyway so who cares
Aurora Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 me when @ceremonials posts a bunch of pokemon graphics I have no understanding of and realise I'm meant to somehow decipher my ranking/score out of these little characters
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 me looking at pokémon stats for 4 minutes and then giving up and letting Will do it
ceremonials Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 1 minute ago, Aurora said: me when @ceremonials posts a bunch of pokemon graphics I have no understanding of and realise I'm meant to somehow decipher my ranking/score out of these little characters This was actually my thought process. You always used to figure out ALL the hints so i had to make ones I knew you wouldn't be able to so they'd actually be (somewhat) engaging but now im realizing that will does the same thing
UFO Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 Next round will definitely be MY round, I can feel it my intuition is NEVER wrong
Aurora Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 i don't like being at the mercy of will's mind. that's a scary place.
Aurora Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 Just now, UFO said: Next round will definitely be MY round, I can feel it my intuition is NEVER wrong but your intuition told you it would be okay to rename your chorus a bridge even tho you already had a bridge and call it a day
UFO Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 Just now, Aurora said: but your intuition told you it would be okay to rename your chorus a bridge even tho you already had a bridge and call it a day Sis it wasn't my intuition that told me to do that, it was my brain
Aurora Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 1 minute ago, UFO said: Sis it wasn't my intuition that told me to do that, it was my brain must be bridge on the braiiiiin that got me feeling dis wayyyy
UFO Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 (edited) 3 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: what body part is in control of your intuition and actions? that's right. your uvula My intuition isn't controlled by any body part, it's controlled by my conscience although it can be influenced by my subconscious sometimes ! Edited October 1, 2017 by UFO
fountain Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 11 minutes ago, ceremonials said: Ok tea time, i wasnt absolutely slain by it like Persephone but it did thoroughly tug at my wig. There were just no holes I could poke it that I haven't already brought up to you, I feel. SO yeah, its a good thing. Well thanks, elephant juice
UFO Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 but anyway, I have never been wrong with my predictions thus far and my intuition is telling me that I will SLAY next round Nostradamus, who?
UFO Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 1 minute ago, keshaspearsxo said: Poke my hole Which one?
UFO Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 PLATINUM HIT 11 ▴ buy tell me you love me on itunes wow is demi lovato's album really that good ? I don't want to have to sit through 12 demi songs if they're not worth my time
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 (edited) 3 minutes ago, UFO said: PLATINUM HIT 11 ▴ buy tell me you love me on itunes wow is demi lovato's album really that good ? I don't want to have to sit through 12 demi songs if they're not worth my time ok yes. demi’s DW is here to singe follicles Edited October 1, 2017 by ultraviolence.xx
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 2 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: halfway through the album and my unconvincingly dyed blonde locs have been torched in an inferno you heard Only Forever yet? that one roasts my strands
Nait Phoenix Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 1 hour ago, ceremonials said: but it seems like you just weren’t feeling this challenge. That obvious, huh?
Citrus Posted October 1, 2017 Posted October 1, 2017 54 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: i wish i had a review from @Citrus so i could get some insight on what score i might've possibly gotten on persephone x I'll write a review for it tmw because you asked! My reviews for this round are done but I won't be able to post till tmw morning. Goodnight ladies xo
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