tournament Golden Hit: Season 5 ⚜️ Congrats to fountain!

[punisher]

i wish i coulda participated but i was banned 

good luck to everybody else!!

[XO_Life]

2 minutes ago, punisher said:

i wish i coulda participated but i was banned 

good luck to everybody else!!

You are still banned tho.

[punisher]

Just now, XO_Life said:

You are still banned tho.

undead

[XO_Life]

1 minute ago, punisher said:

undead

Well... then drop your spooky anthem.

[punisher]

1 minute ago, XO_Life said:

Well... then drop your spooky anthem.

am i even allowed since the game already started? 

[Hug]

1 hour ago, punisher said:

am i even allowed since the game already started? 

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 As always, there are no eliminations in Golden Hit and anybody can join at any time!

According to the OP, yes!

[fountain]

4 hours ago, XO_Life said:

 

@fountain- The Square

 

This is probably the entry I was most excited about to read. 

 

You have given me great advice throughout my seasons so let me return the favor. 

 

Yes, your entry is probably the longest this round. I often find that the longer a song is the more useless sections or words are added to keep it going. I couldn't think of any useless words in your entry. I thought the combination of poetry and pop style writing bleed flawlessly into each other. 

 

Your song was very interesting to read. You had a tight rhyme scheme, especially in hook number 2 and number 3. Hook number 3 was my favourite part of the whole song. It just felt so damn good to read. 

 

I loved how you stayed on theme and even gave us a finish at the end by finally letting this cough out. To me this song is a combination of light and dark, it has some very light elements but also goes deeper into more complex thoughts.

 

Such details make for very good songs and keep the reader engaged.

 

Very well done!

Thank you! I’m really glad you enjoyed it  I was most worried about your review tbh because my writing does tend to lean very poetic and long so I was definitely conscious about actively trying to keep things engaging and the energy high, while still being true to myself and my intentions. Thank you

[worldwide angel]

5 hours ago, XO_Life said:

 

Okay guys!!! I really enjoyed this round. You are a bunch of amazing writers and I look forward to your next entries. 

 

@blackoutbaby - Paris *****

 

Did I get this entry on the first listen? Let's find out below... 

First of all, this whole entry gave me a lot of Sex-Pop vibes,  which I love.

Let me just say, overall I like short songs that get to the point better than songs that leave too much room for ambiguity. 

Your writing style seems to be very sexual and poppy. With this combination you created one of my favourite entries this round. 

I like how you incorporated French into the song, you used just the right amount. 

The pre chorus was my favourite part of your entry. It just felt like a real song. 

My only criticism for you is that some lyrics were just too on the nose and at times felt a bit cringe. I thought you could've gotten to the point by using different examples they may be less vulgar. 

But this is a really strong entry! Thank you

 

@Invisibility - Corchito

 

This whole entry felt like the color blue and light brown. Just like the beach. I think it's always special if you read something and it gives you a color. To me this is proof that a writer understands what they are doing! Extremely well done! 

The whole scenery of the song gave me daydreaming vibes but just as you are about to "truly" drift away you come back to reality. 

I liked your song and additional information about it a lot. 

The only part I didn't get is why you choose to switch up the pre-chrous and then used the second one twice. I would've like a third pre chorus. Also I thought your chorus could've been a little bit stronger. You verses were really impressive but your chorus lacked a bit of a punch in comparison. 

But overall this is another strong entry!

 

@fountain- The Square

 

This is probably the entry I was most excited about to read. 

 

You have given me great advice throughout my seasons so let me return the favor. 

 

Yes, your entry is probably the longest this round. I often find that the longer a song is the more useless sections or words are added to keep it going. I couldn't think of any useless words in your entry. I thought the combination of poetry and pop style writing bleed flawlessly into each other. 

 

Your song was very interesting to read. You had a tight rhyme scheme, especially in hook number 2 and number 3. Hook number 3 was my favourite part of the whole song. It just felt so damn good to read. 

 

I loved how you stayed on theme and even gave us a finish at the end by finally letting this cough out. To me this song is a combination of light and dark, it has some very light elements but also goes deeper into more complex thoughts.

 

Such details make for very good songs and keep the reader engaged.

 

Very well done!

 

@Prisoner - The Fishpond Behind My Grandfather's Home

 

Ok, so here we have a poetry entry. Let me start of by saying what I was missing: I really wanted to know about more about this whole story. I was really engaged reading it and thought it was a beautifully written story but, and you usually don't hear me say this very often, I thought it could've been longer. I enjoyed it so much that I wanted to know more about it. 

This is something I rarely find happen to me when reading or listening to songs. You did an amazing job and captured my interest. You had some clever rhymes in there as well. 

 

I would like to challenge you to enhance your next entries by adding more song elements like a chorus, intro, pre chorus, bridge and so on.

 

@réveuse - London

Mhh... this is a really, REALLY short song. It's kinda difficult for me to review this.

Your Verse had a tight rhyme scheme which I liked very much and it gave me a glimpse of the potential you have. 

The chorus and pre chorus were fine as well. The chorus felt very poppy and cute, I thought it would be a banger. 

 

But for me, this is just too short. I think your next entry should show us the potential you have as a writer even more. This is just a little glimpse.

 

@Antikythera - Amsterdam (Lekker D)

 

Well... hello there... ;) 

Get that guy, girl or whatever and have fun! This song screams good time, drinks, getting ****** up and going home with a 10, waking up with a 2 and loving it. 

I really liked your rhyme scheme in verse 1. This verse immediately captured my attention.  

 

I love how you incorporated a different language as well. This is something I could see Kim Petras sing. The lyrics feel very now. 

 

"Let me get it straight or bi-
What I wanna do is try
To forget you and ride
On different vibe (and guy)"

I mean come on, serve that gay pop perfection! I really enjoyed this entry. This is such a cool take on the challenge. 

Overall this is a very good entry. I feel like your style will make for very interesting and fun entries this season. Sometimes the lyrics were too much on the nose tho, maybe use a metaphor once in a while too boost up the imagery. But this is a fun entry and I enjoyed it very much! Great start for you!

 

@worldwide angel - babel

 

Your entry feels very "now" if you know what I mean. The lyrics were composed beautifully and every Word seems to have been selected with precision. Something tells me that you have a lot of expierence when it comes to writing songs. 

 

I really enjoyed that you morphed each chorus. This is a very difficult technique and can lead to mishaps. You did it flawlessly. 

 

Your rhyme scheme was very diverse too. There were some AA - BB and  some ABAB. For me this keeps a song interesting. 

My only slight critique would be that you sometimes missed a rhyme. For example: 

 

"but can i conceive? (A)
conjure up a dream world? (B)
like they sang of in greece (A)
The fields of Elysium" (C) 

 

But then again... not everything has to rhyme. I just prefer a very tight rhyme scheme.

 

Your storytelling and imagery is on a whole different level. I really could feel the longing for "babel" 

This is such a diverse entry - I myself haven't written anything on this level. 

Really, I have nothing left to say but what an amazing artist you are. This makes me very excited for your next entry. 

With this being said I would like to challenge you to write something really stripped down. No special imagery, no poetic lines. Just a raw song. I know that this is very difficult especially in a writing contest but you have the chops to pull it off and give it a chorus that just ties the whole thing together and makes it amazing.

 

@stupidjock - Mountains and the sea

 

First, welcome to golden hit! It's always great to see New people participate to keep this iconic game going. Love it. 

 

Overall your song felt very romantic and gave me "wanderlust" to travel the world with that special someone. The chorus and first verse were definitely the highlights of your entry. 

 

"Hundred miles up from my soul to your eyes and back" is a lyric to die for. Well done! 

 

I don't know for how long you have been writing songs but this is a very strong entry to kick off your season. I liked that your chorus felt "real and raw", yet very relatable!

 

The beginning of Verse 2 kinda lost me tho but quickly took me back in. I didn't understand "paying by card" part. Maybe it's just me. I also didn't understand the part "ten days is enough". In my opinion this lyric could've been scrapped. 

 

I liked how you incorporated countries that are near the sea and mountains, I really liked this detail a lot. 

 

Overall this is a strong entry and makes me excited for your future entrie

 

@stupidjock - Rijeka

 

Okay well... to me this is a completely different song. I will judge it seperatly.

 

Well... you kept the part "paying by card". 

 

You had some rhymes in this altered entry as well.

 

In this entry your rhyme scheme is AA - BB but all in one sentence. This is fine and works well here. I would like to encourage you to use a more complicated rhyme scheme. Maybe something like ABAB for your next entry. 

 

I really enjoyed the chorus of your last entry. Unfortunately you deleted this part. 

 

I get it - sometimes it's hard to put the pen down. Ultimately you have to be happy with your entry, this is the end goal. 

 

I will keep it straight tho, to me this is sadly a downgrade from your original entry and too much editing has been done. 

 

This is not a bad entry by any means. It's very short and could serve as an intro. I prefer your original entry.

 

@Legend E - Lands

 

Thank you so much for your entry and allowing us to peak insight your mind. 

 

For me this felt like an introduction to you as writer and showed me the things/feelings you are going to write about this season. I am excited to see where those emotions will take you lyrically. 

 

The song itself is more of an poem (maybe even an intro to an album?) Which is completely fine but I was missing some elements. I would've appreciated a chorus and a tighter rhyme scheme. The lyrics also felt very real and descriptive which further allowed me to understand you as a person. Especially the background information for this song were really interesting and made this entry stronger. I just love when an artist explains what their art is about. I really liked that the entry is really raw and emotional, you didn't use a lot of abstract imagery which I think worked to your advantage for this entry.

 

This entry is really intriguing and I am really looking forward to your next entry and give us the opportunity to get to know your story even more! 

 

With this being said, I would like to challenge you to go for a more standard song writing structure for your next entries and explore more abstract imagery while still remaining in the realm of the rawness you showed here. This might be tricky but I believe you can pull it off! 

 

Great entry!

 

@Hug - Sea of stars

 

Omg I can totally relate to this. I have had this thought a million times. I sometimes really think that there might be another planet out there with someone that is perfect for me... but with that being said, let's talk about your entry. 

 

You know that you are a very talented writer, and your experience shines through in your lyrics. The rhyme scheme is very tight and doesn't feel repetitive. It just makes sense. I myself sometimes tend to overdo it, but you did a really good job here. Every lyric felt completely at the right place. 

 

The feeling of endless possibilities and feeling useless here is something a lot of people (if not everyone) can relate to. You captured this feeling completely with your entry. Yes, the song is very magical, but it also relates to the real world, e.g., not feeling you are needed at work. 

 

The build from the pre chorus to the chrous was executed very well, it build my anticipation and didn't let me down. For me, this song is about breaking free from a situation or feeling you feel useless in and can only escape from it in your mind.

 

Amazing entry!

 

I don't really have any pointers for you. Just keep going and maybe find a way to use your talent to write something that may be triggering, provocative, raw, and brutal. Maybe an entry without a magical element? That is something I would like to challenge you to do.

 

 

@hurricane326 - The City (An Ode to Pittsburgh)

 

A very deep poem that got me thinking... thank you for taking us on your journey. I could tell that those lyrics are really important to you! I liked that you used a more poetic style. Your storytelling was very effective and kept my attention. I can tell that you are an expierenced writer not everyone can pull this type of song off! You did it very well and took us on your journey. I could almost feel the emotions you had writing this. Amazing entry! 

 

You had some good rhymes in there and executed them very well. I would've loved a traditional chorus tho but I can see why you didn't want to repeat an chorus over and over again as this would not have matched with your entry.

 

The whole part of the firing line till " changed my mind" was epic to me.

 

With this being said, I challenge you to deliver us pop perfection in at least one challenge!

 

@Kayseri Mantisi - Land Of The Rising Sun

 

What a way to start the season! Wheew! Your song blew me away. It definitely has a pop feel to it which I love. The lyrics are so colorful and really took me to Tokyo. The whole song felt very romantic and simply beautiful. I imagined going to Tokyo with the love of my life and everything felt rose pink. I immediately felt a deep connection to your song, you described the the scenery flawlessly. You execute your rhymes in a very good manner and didn't over do it. I could totally see this song being real and recorded. 

 

I liked that the song was short and sweet. Sometimes the less words the better.

 

The only lyric that felt... let's say "off putting" was: "I wanna taste your sushi, explore each hidden room". 

 

The song didn't need this. It kinda felt out of place for me and took away some of the magic and momentum you build.

 

Excellent song!

 

@Hey Dude - High

 

Hello there thank you very much for your entry! 

 

I liked that you used a different structure for this song while still using some basic elements of a pop song. 

 

The spoken intro here worked to your advantage and fitted very well to the theme you were going for. 

 

I totally see this as country-pop song that is in the veins of "Morgan Wallen - Last Night". This type of music is pretty popular right now (kinda always has been tho) so your song feels very current and in the now. I liked that your chorus brought out a strong country pop theme. 

 

Throughout the song you maintained a good rhyme scheme which is always welcome in my book. Your imagery was placed very well throughout the song and helped to set the scene. 

 

I wasn't a fan of your post-chorus. I thought it could've been part of the chorus. I also didn't like the spoken post chorus, it's not that I didn't like this stylistic choice, I just thought it took away from image I was building in my mind up to this point. 

 

Overall I enjoyed this entry a lot and think you did an amazing job.

thank you so much  a stripped down song will be coming in the future 

[XO_Life]

21 minutes ago, fountain said:

Thank you! I’m really glad you enjoyed it  I was most worried about your review tbh because my writing does tend to lean very poetic and long so I was definitely conscious about actively trying to keep things engaging and the energy high, while still being true to myself and my intentions. Thank you

In my opinion you achieved just that. I really loved your song!

 

I do see why the more poetic writers might be worried about my reviews since I don't really do poetry personally.  But I do love reading it. 

[blackoutbaby]

I love you Omg @XO_Life

[worldwide angel]

5 hours ago, XO_Life said:

 

Okay guys!!! I really enjoyed this round. You are a bunch of amazing writers and I look forward to your next entries. 

 

@blackoutbaby - Paris *****

 

Did I get this entry on the first listen? Let's find out below... 

First of all, this whole entry gave me a lot of Sex-Pop vibes,  which I love.

Let me just say, overall I like short songs that get to the point better than songs that leave too much room for ambiguity. 

Your writing style seems to be very sexual and poppy. With this combination you created one of my favourite entries this round. 

I like how you incorporated French into the song, you used just the right amount. 

The pre chorus was my favourite part of your entry. It just felt like a real song. 

My only criticism for you is that some lyrics were just too on the nose and at times felt a bit cringe. I thought you could've gotten to the point by using different examples they may be less vulgar. 

But this is a really strong entry! Thank you

 

@Invisibility - Corchito

 

This whole entry felt like the color blue and light brown. Just like the beach. I think it's always special if you read something and it gives you a color. To me this is proof that a writer understands what they are doing! Extremely well done! 

The whole scenery of the song gave me daydreaming vibes but just as you are about to "truly" drift away you come back to reality. 

I liked your song and additional information about it a lot. 

The only part I didn't get is why you choose to switch up the pre-chrous and then used the second one twice. I would've like a third pre chorus. Also I thought your chorus could've been a little bit stronger. You verses were really impressive but your chorus lacked a bit of a punch in comparison. 

But overall this is another strong entry!

 

@fountain- The Square

 

This is probably the entry I was most excited about to read. 

 

You have given me great advice throughout my seasons so let me return the favor. 

 

Yes, your entry is probably the longest this round. I often find that the longer a song is the more useless sections or words are added to keep it going. I couldn't think of any useless words in your entry. I thought the combination of poetry and pop style writing bleed flawlessly into each other. 

 

Your song was very interesting to read. You had a tight rhyme scheme, especially in hook number 2 and number 3. Hook number 3 was my favourite part of the whole song. It just felt so damn good to read. 

 

I loved how you stayed on theme and even gave us a finish at the end by finally letting this cough out. To me this song is a combination of light and dark, it has some very light elements but also goes deeper into more complex thoughts.

 

Such details make for very good songs and keep the reader engaged.

 

Very well done!

 

@Prisoner - The Fishpond Behind My Grandfather's Home

 

Ok, so here we have a poetry entry. Let me start of by saying what I was missing: I really wanted to know about more about this whole story. I was really engaged reading it and thought it was a beautifully written story but, and you usually don't hear me say this very often, I thought it could've been longer. I enjoyed it so much that I wanted to know more about it. 

This is something I rarely find happen to me when reading or listening to songs. You did an amazing job and captured my interest. You had some clever rhymes in there as well. 

 

I would like to challenge you to enhance your next entries by adding more song elements like a chorus, intro, pre chorus, bridge and so on.

 

@réveuse - London

Mhh... this is a really, REALLY short song. It's kinda difficult for me to review this.

Your Verse had a tight rhyme scheme which I liked very much and it gave me a glimpse of the potential you have. 

The chorus and pre chorus were fine as well. The chorus felt very poppy and cute, I thought it would be a banger. 

 

But for me, this is just too short. I think your next entry should show us the potential you have as a writer even more. This is just a little glimpse.

 

@Antikythera - Amsterdam (Lekker D)

 

Well... hello there... ;) 

Get that guy, girl or whatever and have fun! This song screams good time, drinks, getting ****** up and going home with a 10, waking up with a 2 and loving it. 

I really liked your rhyme scheme in verse 1. This verse immediately captured my attention.  

 

I love how you incorporated a different language as well. This is something I could see Kim Petras sing. The lyrics feel very now. 

 

"Let me get it straight or bi-
What I wanna do is try
To forget you and ride
On different vibe (and guy)"

I mean come on, serve that gay pop perfection! I really enjoyed this entry. This is such a cool take on the challenge. 

Overall this is a very good entry. I feel like your style will make for very interesting and fun entries this season. Sometimes the lyrics were too much on the nose tho, maybe use a metaphor once in a while too boost up the imagery. But this is a fun entry and I enjoyed it very much! Great start for you!

 

@worldwide angel - babel

 

Your entry feels very "now" if you know what I mean. The lyrics were composed beautifully and every Word seems to have been selected with precision. Something tells me that you have a lot of expierence when it comes to writing songs. 

 

I really enjoyed that you morphed each chorus. This is a very difficult technique and can lead to mishaps. You did it flawlessly. 

 

Your rhyme scheme was very diverse too. There were some AA - BB and  some ABAB. For me this keeps a song interesting. 

My only slight critique would be that you sometimes missed a rhyme. For example: 

 

"but can i conceive? (A)
conjure up a dream world? (B)
like they sang of in greece (A)
The fields of Elysium" (C) 

 

But then again... not everything has to rhyme. I just prefer a very tight rhyme scheme.

 

Your storytelling and imagery is on a whole different level. I really could feel the longing for "babel" 

This is such a diverse entry - I myself haven't written anything on this level. 

Really, I have nothing left to say but what an amazing artist you are. This makes me very excited for your next entry. 

With this being said I would like to challenge you to write something really stripped down. No special imagery, no poetic lines. Just a raw song. I know that this is very difficult especially in a writing contest but you have the chops to pull it off and give it a chorus that just ties the whole thing together and makes it amazing.

 

@stupidjock - Mountains and the sea

 

First, welcome to golden hit! It's always great to see New people participate to keep this iconic game going. Love it. 

 

Overall your song felt very romantic and gave me "wanderlust" to travel the world with that special someone. The chorus and first verse were definitely the highlights of your entry. 

 

"Hundred miles up from my soul to your eyes and back" is a lyric to die for. Well done! 

 

I don't know for how long you have been writing songs but this is a very strong entry to kick off your season. I liked that your chorus felt "real and raw", yet very relatable!

 

The beginning of Verse 2 kinda lost me tho but quickly took me back in. I didn't understand "paying by card" part. Maybe it's just me. I also didn't understand the part "ten days is enough". In my opinion this lyric could've been scrapped. 

 

I liked how you incorporated countries that are near the sea and mountains, I really liked this detail a lot. 

 

Overall this is a strong entry and makes me excited for your future entrie

 

@stupidjock - Rijeka

 

Okay well... to me this is a completely different song. I will judge it seperatly.

 

Well... you kept the part "paying by card". 

 

You had some rhymes in this altered entry as well.

 

In this entry your rhyme scheme is AA - BB but all in one sentence. This is fine and works well here. I would like to encourage you to use a more complicated rhyme scheme. Maybe something like ABAB for your next entry. 

 

I really enjoyed the chorus of your last entry. Unfortunately you deleted this part. 

 

I get it - sometimes it's hard to put the pen down. Ultimately you have to be happy with your entry, this is the end goal. 

 

I will keep it straight tho, to me this is sadly a downgrade from your original entry and too much editing has been done. 

 

This is not a bad entry by any means. It's very short and could serve as an intro. I prefer your original entry.

 

@Legend E - Lands

 

Thank you so much for your entry and allowing us to peak insight your mind. 

 

For me this felt like an introduction to you as writer and showed me the things/feelings you are going to write about this season. I am excited to see where those emotions will take you lyrically. 

 

The song itself is more of an poem (maybe even an intro to an album?) Which is completely fine but I was missing some elements. I would've appreciated a chorus and a tighter rhyme scheme. The lyrics also felt very real and descriptive which further allowed me to understand you as a person. Especially the background information for this song were really interesting and made this entry stronger. I just love when an artist explains what their art is about. I really liked that the entry is really raw and emotional, you didn't use a lot of abstract imagery which I think worked to your advantage for this entry.

 

This entry is really intriguing and I am really looking forward to your next entry and give us the opportunity to get to know your story even more! 

 

With this being said, I would like to challenge you to go for a more standard song writing structure for your next entries and explore more abstract imagery while still remaining in the realm of the rawness you showed here. This might be tricky but I believe you can pull it off! 

 

Great entry!

 

@Hug - Sea of stars

 

Omg I can totally relate to this. I have had this thought a million times. I sometimes really think that there might be another planet out there with someone that is perfect for me... but with that being said, let's talk about your entry. 

 

You know that you are a very talented writer, and your experience shines through in your lyrics. The rhyme scheme is very tight and doesn't feel repetitive. It just makes sense. I myself sometimes tend to overdo it, but you did a really good job here. Every lyric felt completely at the right place. 

 

The feeling of endless possibilities and feeling useless here is something a lot of people (if not everyone) can relate to. You captured this feeling completely with your entry. Yes, the song is very magical, but it also relates to the real world, e.g., not feeling you are needed at work. 

 

The build from the pre chorus to the chrous was executed very well, it build my anticipation and didn't let me down. For me, this song is about breaking free from a situation or feeling you feel useless in and can only escape from it in your mind.

 

Amazing entry!

 

I don't really have any pointers for you. Just keep going and maybe find a way to use your talent to write something that may be triggering, provocative, raw, and brutal. Maybe an entry without a magical element? That is something I would like to challenge you to do.

 

 

@hurricane326 - The City (An Ode to Pittsburgh)

 

A very deep poem that got me thinking... thank you for taking us on your journey. I could tell that those lyrics are really important to you! I liked that you used a more poetic style. Your storytelling was very effective and kept my attention. I can tell that you are an expierenced writer not everyone can pull this type of song off! You did it very well and took us on your journey. I could almost feel the emotions you had writing this. Amazing entry! 

 

You had some good rhymes in there and executed them very well. I would've loved a traditional chorus tho but I can see why you didn't want to repeat an chorus over and over again as this would not have matched with your entry.

 

The whole part of the firing line till " changed my mind" was epic to me.

 

With this being said, I challenge you to deliver us pop perfection in at least one challenge!

 

@Kayseri Mantisi - Land Of The Rising Sun

 

What a way to start the season! Wheew! Your song blew me away. It definitely has a pop feel to it which I love. The lyrics are so colorful and really took me to Tokyo. The whole song felt very romantic and simply beautiful. I imagined going to Tokyo with the love of my life and everything felt rose pink. I immediately felt a deep connection to your song, you described the the scenery flawlessly. You execute your rhymes in a very good manner and didn't over do it. I could totally see this song being real and recorded. 

 

I liked that the song was short and sweet. Sometimes the less words the better.

 

The only lyric that felt... let's say "off putting" was: "I wanna taste your sushi, explore each hidden room". 

 

The song didn't need this. It kinda felt out of place for me and took away some of the magic and momentum you build.

 

Excellent song!

 

@Hey Dude - High

 

Hello there thank you very much for your entry! 

 

I liked that you used a different structure for this song while still using some basic elements of a pop song. 

 

The spoken intro here worked to your advantage and fitted very well to the theme you were going for. 

 

I totally see this as country-pop song that is in the veins of "Morgan Wallen - Last Night". This type of music is pretty popular right now (kinda always has been tho) so your song feels very current and in the now. I liked that your chorus brought out a strong country pop theme. 

 

Throughout the song you maintained a good rhyme scheme which is always welcome in my book. Your imagery was placed very well throughout the song and helped to set the scene. 

 

I wasn't a fan of your post-chorus. I thought it could've been part of the chorus. I also didn't like the spoken post chorus, it's not that I didn't like this stylistic choice, I just thought it took away from image I was building in my mind up to this point. 

 

Overall I enjoyed this entry a lot and think you did an amazing job.

thank you so much  a stripped down song will be coming in the future 

[Invisibility]

5 hours ago, XO_Life said:

 

@Invisibility - Corchito

 

This whole entry felt like the color blue and light brown. Just like the beach. I think it's always special if you read something and it gives you a color. To me this is proof that a writer understands what they are doing! Extremely well done! 

The whole scenery of the song gave me daydreaming vibes but just as you are about to "truly" drift away you come back to reality. 

I liked your song and additional information about it a lot. 

The only part I didn't get is why you choose to switch up the pre-chrous and then used the second one twice. I would've like a third pre chorus. Also I thought your chorus could've been a little bit stronger. You verses were really impressive but your chorus lacked a bit of a punch in comparison. 

But overall this is another strong entry!

Thank you! Appreciate the feedback and compliments on my imagery & intention

 

Looking forward to results 

[Jackson]

4 hours ago, punisher said:

i wish i coulda participated but i was banned 

good luck to everybody else!!

you can still play! the winner of the game is determined by the average of each player’s top 5 scores, and since we’re only on round 2 of 6 you could still submit for the next 5 rounds and be competitive

[XO_Life]

4 hours ago, punisher said:

am i even allowed since the game already started? 

If you submit you better make sure we absolutely love it.

[fountain]

Results tonight?

[fountain]

Also I have NO IDEA what I’m going to do for my Halloween song. I fear I cannot top “Killer Bees of the Zombie Strain” from last year’s Halloween special

[XO_Life]

39 minutes ago, fountain said:

Also I have NO IDEA what I’m going to do for my Halloween song. I fear I cannot top “Killer Bees of the Zombie Strain” from last year’s Halloween special

Give us that slasher anthem.

[Aurora]

1 hour ago, fountain said:

Results tonight?

Results tonight! Let's aim for about twenty minutes to half an hour from this post?

 

@Kayseri Mantisi@Hug@Legend E@stupidjock@worldwide angel@Antikythera@Hey Dude@blackoutbaby@Invisibility@fountain@Prisoner@réveuse

[Kern]

I flopped so whatever

[Kayseri Mantisi]

i'm excited 

[fountain]

I will be working but I’ll try to check when I can

[XO_Life]

7 minutes ago, stupidjock said:

I flopped so whatever

You did not flop. 

You still did well.

[XO_Life]

Are we here?

[Legend E]

well yes

[Aurora]

 

Round 1: Wanderlust Challenge ⚜️ LIVE Results Show

 

Hey, Hitmakers! Welcome to your first live results show of the season. We had a slight delay on our return flight, but isn't that always the way...

We searched the world for the best new talent and came across your thirteen pièce de résistance creations. Who will wander their way into a win?

 

Spoiler

@Kayseri Mantisi@Hug@Legend E@stupidjock@worldwide angel@Antikythera@Hey Dude@blackoutbaby@Invisibility@fountain@Prisoner@réveuse