Galah Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 ย Hey, Hitmakers! It was an absolute pleasure guest judging this round and reading all of your creations for the Multimedia challenge. I would once again like to thank @fountainย and @Jacksonย for hosting this season, and inviting me to participate in this small way. Hopefully my reviews can provide some insight, and best of luck going into Round 6's final "Self Portrait" roundโI may even join you! ย As always, if there is anything in your review you do not wish to be public, just let me know and I will remove it. ย https://docs.google.com/document/d/1y-h9XCo3VJvOaMQSMBSSV6fxhO_cwknCzQjFraUulRg/edit?usp=sharing @XO_Life@Julianna Calm Down@Hug@OreGuy@worldwide angel@PoKiTaurus@Kylie Jenner 2 1
Jackson Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 checking ticket prices for Beyoncรฉ tonight between each review to see if they've dropped yet 1
fountain Posted July 22, 2023 Author Posted July 22, 2023 1 hour ago, Jackson said: going to start reviews now ย 38 minutes ago, Aurora said: ย Hey, Hitmakers! It was an absolute pleasure guest judging this round and reading all of your creations for the Multimedia challenge. I would once again like to thank @fountainย and @Jacksonย for hosting this season, and inviting me to participate in this small way. Hopefully my reviews can provide some insight, and best of luck going into Round 6's final "Self Portrait" roundโI may even join you! ย As always, if there is anything in your review you do not wish to be public, just let me know and I will remove it. ย https://docs.google.com/document/d/1y-h9XCo3VJvOaMQSMBSSV6fxhO_cwknCzQjFraUulRg/edit?usp=sharing @XO_Life@Julianna Calm Down@Hug@OreGuy@worldwide angel@PoKiTaurus@Kylie Jenner Yassss omg the speed judging this round, we love to see it ย thank you!
fountain Posted July 22, 2023 Author Posted July 22, 2023 8 minutes ago, Jackson said: checking ticket prices for Beyoncรฉ tonight between each review to see if they've dropped yet Give her your money, go belt out Break My Soul and get your life to Alien Superstar for me ๐๐ผ
Jackson Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 3 minutes ago, fountain said: Give her your money, go belt out Break My Soul and get your life to Alien Superstar for me ๐๐ผ if they drop below $100 i'm definitely buying one but so far they haven't dropped below $150ย hoping someone gets desperateย 1
Jackson Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 ย StormPulse โ ATRL What a way to start off the round! This was brilliant. When I saw your title, I was worried this would be a literal condemnation of the site, but the way you went about this was so much prettier and more impactful. I absolutely loved the way you describe history throughout the song; both โYou canโt sway history; it will not bendโ and โI take pieces from it/And cast them to sea/Where I pray to God theyโll forever beโ were such powerful metaphors. Thereโs honestly so many highlights here that I canโt mention them all. โShrines for the devoutโ was an image that really stood out to me for some reason. โYou cannot sell me what you cannot ownโ was another favorite of mine, as was โyou cannot make me into what I despiseโ. There was a lot of vulnerability in this as well, the stood as powerful contrast to the resoluteness of the rest of the song. The first half of the last verse was perhaps a bit on the cheesy side, but not enough to detract from the rest of the song, and this was otherwise perfect. This was not only my favorite song from you this season, but perhaps my favorite song this season overall. ย @XO_Life โ Trauerkloร Google translates Trauerkloร as โsad dumplingโ, which I just felt the need to mention (I did see your additional information). I think your choice to omit a chorus worked well here, as it accentuated the narrative element of the lyrics. I liked how you referenced parts of the first verse later in the song, from the crystal blue eyes to the golden spray paint. I especially liked โNever looked into blue crystal eyes, all my lovers searched for anotherโ and the โpetals were colored differentlyโ line. This song struck a good balance between metaphorical, lyric writing and realistic storytelling. Iโm glad youโre doing fine now, as you mention a few times in your additional info, but you convincingly portray the emotions of the song, making me feel immersed in the lyrics. There were a few clunky lyrics, such as โever letting go of him seemed irrationallyโ (which I think was mostly due to a typo) and โin hopes that they would become my significant otherโ, but I thought this was a strong entry and an improvement from last week. ย @Julianna Calm Down โ Cascading Life I like how you delivered yet another cheeky, fun sexual song but from a different angle. For the most part, this is a pleasurable, effervescent pop song that bubbles with rosy imagery and careless enjoyment. It reminds me of a bit of a NSFW @worldwide angelย song in its weightlessness. I think the song would have been stronger without the more humorous lines. Most of the song was light but poetic, and โtake it on the chinโ, โlead me through this apocalypseโ, and โItโs been loved and broken 69.000 timesโ broke the immersion a bit for me. Otherwise, I thought this was an effective, fun song. I really liked the chorus, and there were a few standout lines, like โwe let ourselves capsize in a king-sizeโ and โmy face a fountain of dopamineโ. Iโve enjoyed seeing a different side of you each week, and Iโm glad you continue to take risks that pay off. ย @Hug โ the court of public opinion OK I really need to get a midjourney account because that cover is striking . This was a cool concept especially because itโs something that actually happens a lot in this country, and around the world. This would have also fit the absurdity round, because you take something realistic and highlight the absurdity of it. I also appreciate that this was very different than songs you usually submit. I think the way you played with the structure payed off. At times, I think some of the more verbose lines came across as clunky. Preconception/psychosis/synopsis all feel very scientific to include in a song, and to me they detracted from the emotional weight of the message. The opening line, with the repeated โaโ and uneven meter, made the lyrics a bit harder to work through. Still, the message of the song shone through, and many of the risks you took paid off. The seventh quatrain was quite powerful and reminded me of events Iโve heard about in my own community. Even though this wasnโt as strong as last weekโs entry for me, it was still a solid song with an important message. ย @OreGuy โ Justice for the Queen Honestly Iโm surprised we havenโt received more songs written about stan culture, considering how much of an influence it has on this site. I like you wrote the song more like a fairy tale/book than a literal description of tweeting a bitching online. The king/queen metaphor may not be the most original in that context, but I think you pulled it off well. โItโs better to be louder than themโ sums up the entire online community pretty well. โCause the queen was wise/ and she writes nice ritesโ flowed very smoothly and had me bopping a bit ย - great use of internal rhyming. I think the first verse could have used a bit more editing โ the mix of blood and โpays goodโ clashed a bit for me, and โzip his lipโ felt out of place with the rest of the song. Although the lyrics were at times inconsistent in strength for me, there were a lot of highlights, and I enjoyed the overall story and theme. ย @worldwide angel โ in the creek Iโve never heard of this show, so it was cool to look it up and see what an inclusive, positive show it is. I see a lot of parallels between this positivity and the feel of your songs, so I understand why you went with this show as your inspiration. I love the distinctiveness of your lyrical style, and I think youโve shown her versatile it can be, but there are definitely moments where it seems like you revert to common tropesย โ specifically โfloat above the leavesโ, which I find reminiscent of lines about โfloatingโ Iโve come to expect from many of your songs. As youโve shown us, you can write positive, breezy songs about a variety of themes and topics, but I encourage you to be careful to not let them all become too same-y. This wasnโt a problem throughout your song, but I wanted to point it out. There were a lot of standout lines here โ I loved โI have a family of friendsโ, and Iโm always a sucker for internal rhyming such as in โpreservation in a nation where erasure lives in the limelightโ. โPleasant mintinessโ is such a you phrase, but itโs so fun and memorable that I canโt fault it. This was a very worldwide angel song, for better and for worse, but in the end probably mostly better. ย @PoKiTaurus & the band โ Impossible Princess This IS the multimedia round, so I really canโt fault you for including video game characters this time. I didnโt realize there were princesses in The Sims, or named characters at all honestly . Because Iโm not familiar with the character, I might be missing out on some of the lore โ Iโm guessing the fourth heart refers to a new lover after her past love life with the three pirates? Iโm happy to see you take a different approach this round โ having the story revolve around a narrative outside your own life gives the song a faster paced, more immersive feeling. Thereโs also a strong commercial element to this. I liked โshe knows itโs not going to last/everything thatโs happy must collapseโ. The standout line for me was โHeโs number four but still gives the thrill of the first threeโ โ this and other references to the fourth love had a Killers-esque pop rock feel, reinforced by โshe can tell itโs his first time, because he struggled taking off her dressโ. These poppier, more straightforward lines were the highlight for me. For a lot of writers, I recommend trying to wrap their plain-er lines in metaphors and imagery to make them more interesting. For you, I think you often wrap your lyrics in so many metaphors, many of which are incredibly personal, that your more accessible lyrics hit the hardest. Iโm not sure if youโve started writing your finale song yet, but I encourage you to continue branching out and taking more risks! ย @Kylie Jenner โ I saw a video I saw you post in the thread about how you wanted to submit something because you often give up and quit halfway through these games, and I feel like this is a metaphor for that. This reminds me a bit of a @fountainย song. โI saw a video of a fish with a harpoon through its headโ is a striking and memorable way to start a song. Despite the unusual subject matter, I loved the raw emotion of the song. There were a couple times where I think you took the โfishโ metaphor too far, specifically โIt was 2am but all I could think about was how another fishyโs baby got cruelly taken outโ. That verse could have used a bit more editing, but I realize this was a last day song for you. The last minute feeling actually helped you at times. It helped the lyrics flow freely. The narrative felt like a changing tide, at times coursing strongly and floating aimlessly at others. This might be a controversial song, but it was memorable and honest, so you can count me as a fan! 1 1
Kylie Jenner Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 Thanks for the reviews ย kind of wish I submitted the other song instead of what I did but sometimes you just gotta throw a turd at a wall and hope it sticks
fountain Posted July 22, 2023 Author Posted July 22, 2023 7 minutes ago, Kylie Jenner said: Thanks for the reviews ย kind of wish I submitted the other song instead of what I did but sometimes you just gotta throw a turd at a wall and hope it sticks You should post it, especially if you had taken the time to record it as wellย
Jackson Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 37 minutes ago, Kylie Jenner said: Thanks for the reviews ย kind of wish I submitted the other song instead of what I did but sometimes you just gotta throw a turd at a wall and hope it sticks if anything the black swan song will make a cute bonus track for your albumย
Hug Posted July 22, 2023 Posted July 22, 2023 It's giving polarizing. This really wasn't my week ย Well I'm sure the self-portrait round will be much better... ๐คช
Jackson Posted July 23, 2023 Posted July 23, 2023 Scores are in! Since we have our results a bit early this week, we'll host Round 5 results TOMORROW afternoon! Time to be announced soon... ย @Hugย @PoKiTaurusย @Kylie Jennerย @XO_Lifeย @worldwide angelย @OreGuyย @Julianna Calm Down 2 1
Galah Posted July 23, 2023 Posted July 23, 2023 Congrats on the top ten hits this round everyone. ย We love maximising everyone's joint slay. 1
fountain Posted July 23, 2023 Author Posted July 23, 2023 The fast af results omg okโฆ the way I havenโt even read all the entries yet ย Spoiler Whew letโs have this energy for the final plsย ย
Jackson Posted July 23, 2023 Posted July 23, 2023 4 hours ago, Jackson said: Scores are in! Since we have our results a bit early this week, we'll host Round 5 results TOMORROW afternoon! Time to be announced soon... ย @Hugย @PoKiTaurusย @Kylie Jennerย @XO_Lifeย @worldwide angelย @OreGuyย @Julianna Calm Down results at 1PM EST tomorrow @Kylie Jennerย @XO_Lifeย @worldwide angelย @OreGuyย @Hugย @Julianna Calm Downย @PoKiTaurus 1
Jackson Posted July 23, 2023 Posted July 23, 2023 i guess today unless youโre on the US west coastย 1
Galah Posted July 23, 2023 Posted July 23, 2023 Quite curious for these results, as after reading the other judges' feedback it appears we had some split opinions on the panel! Wishing for everyone to do well regardless. 1
fountain Posted July 23, 2023 Author Posted July 23, 2023 Oh wow, this round almost ended up being as eclectic as last roundโs Absurdity entries! These songs made for a really fun and great read, so good job everybody! Many standouts and possibly some season bests (in my subjective opinion ). Good luck and see you all for results in a few hours! ย Round 5: Multimedia ย @XO_Life - Trauerkloร I really loved reading about the backstory to this song, your concept and the layers behind it. Really creative and unique! I think speaking strictly from a lyrical and writing point, this is up there with โthe child is grown, the dream is goneโ as one of your strongest of the season. This was a massive return to form after last round, so great job at bouncing back and getting through your writer's block! This has definitely been your strongest season so far and this song continues this, I think you should be very proud of your creations this season.ย ย @Julianna Calm Down - Cascading Life You're in your sexual liberation era and Iโm here for it! Loved this sexy pop bop on first read, and loving it again now too! Despite being fun and more of a jovial theme, what I appreciate most is that you kept the lyricism high. Your writing is great throughout with many standout lyrics, both for their cheekiness and for their lyricism itself. Itโs also a perfect use of your chosen inspiration, impeccably reflecting the image and playing with the concepts of sexual pleasure and pain. Another wonderful song joining your creations this season! ย @Hug - the court of public opinion Oh wow! This is a really interesting topic and a fantastic use of your inspiration. This is very ambitious, because I think a serious theme like this could fall flat if not done justiceโฆ but I think you did it extremely well. Really, it works perfectly. And to be honest, I think this might be my favourite song of yours all season. Though you have many brilliant song this season, this one is really standing out to me both for its ambitious and impactful topic, and for the fact that itโs quite a different take on writing. Your choruses are always classic, so it was fun and refreshing reading a song with quite a different structure for you. Overall, this all comes together as a really fantastic and memorable song from you.ย ย @OreGuy - Justice for the Queen Oh, this is camp. Taking the absurdity of stan wars and writing a song about this is really clever! And I also find it hilarious tbh, because this stuff is just so melodramatic, and the way you showcased that in your song was really well done. This is also like a total 180 from your last entry which is really interesting to see. Youโve always been a very diverse writer, but this season in particular your songs all feel unique and have really interesting concepts and basis to them. In this way your songs always stand out to me, for their creativity alone! Youโre doing a wonderful job this season, well done.ย ย @worldwide angel - in the creek Your inspiration behind this song is so cute. I was not familiar of the show but looking it up and hearing about it is so heartwarming. Iโm so glad shows like this exist today for the youth! I mean, I loved the cartoons we had back in the day but thereโs definitely something special about seeing representation and progressiveness like this. Anyway, on to the song itself! Well, it shouldnโt come as a surprise that I love it. This song demonstrates everything that I love about your writing; itโs positive, hopeful and uplifting, dreamlike and full serene and touching imagery. Just completely lovely and pure. I am loving absolutely everything you have shown this season. Youโve had a residency in the top 3 the last two rounds, and well it will be totally deserved if you are there again.ย ย @PoKiTaurus & the band - Impossible Princess Not gonna lie, this probably could have worked as an entry for the absurdity round ๐ the mix of your imaginary band concept and this storyline of the sims princess and her pirate boyfriends, itโs a scream! But, despite the cooky inspiration what matters most is the writing shown- and your writing here is great! This is a really fun and creative song, not too serious and on the more unconventional side but still comes off well written and with some really well thought out lines that packed a punch! Your creativity really is off the charts, you pull inspiration from such interesting and unexpected areas, which always makes for refreshing and unique entries. Great job! ย @Kylie Jennerย - I saw a video Ok, so this round may not have worked out the way you had intended, being torn with the Black Swan song and submitting this instead, and then maybe regretting it. Well, for what it is worth, I really enjoyed this song. I saw Jackson compared it to my style of writing, I can definitely see it! And I take that comparison as a compliment ๐. The act of taking something random and otherwise inconsequential, like a video you saw of a fish, and turning that into something greater and investing more thought, feeling and meaning into it; thatโs very reminiscent for me as I love doing that in songs, and now after reading this song I can also say that I love seeing it in other people's songs! It was great, honestly, and despite it being written in a short time as you said, it still appeared very well thought out. The metaphors for which the fish video was used really worked for me, and despite that more clunky โfishyโs babyโ verse, the rest of the song is really really nice and makes a lot of great statements. So, though you might have been uncertain about this, it just might pay off!ย ย 1 2
Hug Posted July 23, 2023 Posted July 23, 2023 more mixed reviews wow, the judge group chat must be in flames ย edit: mixed as in some stan some think i dropped the ball x 1
fountain Posted July 23, 2023 Author Posted July 23, 2023 6 minutes ago, Hug said: more mixed reviews wow, the judge group chat must be in flames Itโs dusty and inactive, but lemme go start some drama in there in your nameย 1
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted July 23, 2023 ATRL Moderator Posted July 23, 2023 3 hours ago, fountain said: Itโs dusty and inactive, but lemme go start some drama in there in your nameย wym? sending 2 messages per week seems quite active to me!
fountain Posted July 23, 2023 Author Posted July 23, 2023 21 minutes ago, Legend E said: wym? sending 2 messages per week seems quite active to me! My heart yearns for moreย
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted July 23, 2023 ATRL Moderator Posted July 23, 2023 24 minutes ago, fountain said: My heart yearns for moreย i would speak more, but atrl is still annoying with private messages IMO 1
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