ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted June 3, 2022 ATRL Moderator Posted June 3, 2022 @fountainΒ @AuroraΒ so if I get it right, I can repeat a chorus three times and it shouldn't be a problem, right? Β
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted June 3, 2022 ATRL Moderator Posted June 3, 2022 So I wrote something entirely new after all. It's pretty cliche but whatever, I like it way more than the Kelly entry for sure.Β Β For the word count, I think it's 715 words actually as I changed something before submitting but I forgot to change it in the fill-in form, sorry :(
Galah Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 44 minutes ago, Legend E said: @fountainΒ @AuroraΒ so if I get it right, I can repeat a chorus three times and it shouldn't be a problem, right? Β Thatβs right. You could even repeat a chorus six times and that would be fine, however only the first three would be taken into account for the word count aspect of the challenge, only serving as transitions for new verses or sections thatΒ would count.
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted June 3, 2022 ATRL Moderator Posted June 3, 2022 1 minute ago, Aurora said: Thatβs right. You could even repeat a chorus six times and that would be fine, however only the first three would be taken into account for the word count aspect of the challenge, only serving as transitions for new verses or sections thatΒ would count. Great. I think I am over 500 without the repetitions too anyway, so it should be okay
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 29 minutes ago, Legend E said: So I wrote something entirely new after all. It's pretty cliche but whatever, I like it way more than the Kelly entry for sure.Β Β For the word count, I think it's 715 words actually as I changed something before submitting but I forgot to change it in the fill-in form, sorry :( Itβs no problem! Thanks for submitting
Galah Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 Yβall turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all?
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 Just now, Aurora said: Yβall turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all?
JoeAg Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 hi i hate to do this two weeks in a row () but iβm gonna need a few more hours again if thatβs okay i have my new guitar which is great, but now i have an even more f*cked up sleep schedule so i just woke up at like 9 pm and i have two different science class hw due both at 11:59 pm so yayyyy. Β anyway iβm sorry iβll try to get this in asap
Achilles. Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 9 minutes ago, Aurora said: Yβall turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all? Miss Americana and the Heartbreak Prince would like a word (or 502, which is her word count if you allow for repetition and background lyrics). Β
ATRL Moderator Legend E Posted June 3, 2022 ATRL Moderator Posted June 3, 2022 13 minutes ago, Aurora said: Yβall turning this round from the ATW10MVTVFTV challenge into the Witness challenge, maybe Swish Swish won after all? Oh no
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 3 hours ago, Tylerbv said: Iβm super torn on how I feel about my submission. Itβs not exactly metaphorical or difficult in nature, but it honestly just poured out of me in a literal fashion. Β Someone teach me to make metaphors in my songs To be honest, not all songs and not all writers need to be super metaphoric or complex! Personally I definitely tend to prefer more poetic language, but sometimes the simple stuff can be much more hard hitting, it just depends on the context and the execution. I took a sneak peek at your song, and it looks like youβve executed it well. I mean the first lines are about being honest and admitting things, so I think a very matter of fact and direct lyrical approach definitely works there.Β Β If you wanted to take a metaphorical approach in this song, the way that jumps out in my mind would be to compare the way that you feel, the way you were treated or the things that happened, to other things. I mean this is not anything to run home about and just an example that Iβm using to try and demonstrate, but you could take something like βyou treated me like a candle and blew me out, when it was convenient for you and my flame couldnβt spreadβ or something like that. You want to think of yourself or the situation as alike something else, and draw a comparison that puts across the same point but in what would be a metaphorical way. I donβt know if this fully makes sense so if it doesnβt let me know and Iβll try to think of another explanation
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 6 minutes ago, JoeAg said: hi i hate to do this two weeks in a row () but iβm gonna need a few more hours again if thatβs okay i have my new guitar which is great, but now i have an even more f*cked up sleep schedule so i just woke up at like 9 pm and i have two different science class hw due both at 11:59 pm so yayyyy. Β anyway iβm sorry iβll try to get this in asap Thatβs okay! Good luck with the homework and just submit when you are able toΒ
JoeAg Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 1 minute ago, fountain said: Thatβs okay! Good luck with the homework and just submit when you are able toΒ thanks ? idk why iβm in this poor time management era of mine right now, itβs the worst possible moment for this but i guess this is what my body/mind is doing and i have to adapt a bit
diamondsky Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 Iβm also gonna be a little late if thatβs okay Β some stuff just came up that I gotta take care of and then Iβll submit
mxtthewdelrey Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 Just submitted ! Wasn't sure whether I was going to this week because my song was feeling a bit personal but I just went for it Didn't go too much over 500 as I felt the song ending abruptly was what worked for the narrative Β Hope everyone is doing well
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 2 hours ago, Achilles. said: And Iβve submitted! The more I sit with this, the more I love it. Itβs a fairly unique structure for me. The verses, prechoruses, and chorus are quite metaphorical, but then in the bridge I stripped it back and got extremely literal because thereβs just no way to dress it all up in poetry. **** needs to get real sometimes. Β The End of the World. Β Β Far too many points were made. I like the sound of thisΒ Β Sometimes you do just need to be brutally direct in songs. Thereβs a real power to it!
mxtthewdelrey Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 Also @fountainΒ did i put my atrl username on the form? I'm so delirious right now that I could have written my actual name for all i know Β
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 1 minute ago, βlex said: Iβm also gonna be a little late if thatβs okay Β some stuff just came up that I gotta take care of and then Iβll submit Itβs definitely okay and totally understandable, life comes first!Β
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 1 minute ago, mxtthewdelrey said: Also @fountainΒ did i put my atrl username on the form? I'm so delirious right now that I could have written my actual name for all i know Β Just checked, looks like we will continue to know you as mxtthewdelreyΒ
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 15 minutes ago, JoeAg said: thanks ? idk why iβm in this poor time management era of mine right now, itβs the worst possible moment for this but i guess this is what my body/mind is doing and i have to adapt a bit No need to worry about it, really we are all like this in our own waysΒ Β Β if it makes your sleep schedule seem any better just know Iβm replying to this at 4:44amΒ
mxtthewdelrey Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 4 minutes ago, fountain said: Just checked, looks like we will continue to know you as mxtthewdelreyΒ Just like anyone I add on Snapchat does, then !
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 Side note I donβt really have an intended time that my reviews will go up this time, Iβm away from home so have a little less opportunity to do them as quick as last round but I have started them at least (if writing one counts as startingΒ ) and theyβll be up as soon as Iβm done! Β Also just a reminder, like last week this rounds results will be taking place on Sunday and round 4 will be posted on Saturday.Β
mxtthewdelrey Posted June 3, 2022 Posted June 3, 2022 Pretty much everything I write is personal but itβs been a while since I wrote something that felt personal to a gut-wrenching extent. Cathartic, though Golden Hit 1. If I Leave This Earth 2. you cheat, you lose 3. The LeaseΒ
fountain Posted June 3, 2022 Author Posted June 3, 2022 7 minutes ago, mxtthewdelrey said: Just like anyone I add on Snapchat does, then ! I just noticed your avatar is Blanco, Brividi should have won it was my favouriteΒ
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