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wow, i didnโ€™t expect that at all :jonny:ย congrats @Achilles.ย too, thatโ€™s an insane score

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and obviously thanks judges!ย 

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Well itโ€™s still a repeak even if I didnโ€™t score my second career #1. :gaylorcat2:

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And once again to close out this results show I want to say a huge thank you and a congratulations to everybody, you truly blew us away this round with your submissions. The talent jumped out and I hope you can see that reflected in your scores and can appreciate that!... especially since it'll be the last time you see your song scores before the finalย :eddie:

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No but seriously, thank you for an amazing round :heart:ย it was a pleasure to read what you created.

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2 minutes ago, Jackson said:

wow, i didnโ€™t expect that at all :jonny:ย congrats @Achilles.ย too, thatโ€™s an insane score

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and obviously thanks judges!ย 

Thanks! Congrats to you too! Your consistent slayage in PH is the stuff of legend I fear. :jonnycat:

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Speaking of. I canโ€™t remember. Did you win PH8, or was that likeโ€ฆ Aurora or Temporal or someone? :huh:

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Just now, Achilles. said:

Thanks! Congrats to you too! Your consistent slayage in PH is the stuff of legend I fear. :jonnycat:

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Speaking of. I canโ€™t remember. Did you win PH8, or was that likeโ€ฆ Aurora or Temporal or someone? :huh:

Jackson won DH, I believe Temporal won PH8 (?)

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@Jacksonย @Achilles.ย @GentleDance, as the top 3 you've also respectively earned your Gold, Silver and Bronze Hit Tokens! @Auroraย will be in touch to fulfil these for you when he is back onlineย :heart:

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I can't make a fancy table like Aurora but I'll post a recap now anywayย :bird:

Posted
3 minutes ago, fountain said:

Jackson won DH, I believe Temporal won PH8 (?)

Yeah thatโ€™s what I thought but I wasnโ€™t completely sure.ย 
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I was gonna say, if Jackson did win PH8 this would be the second time he blocked me from the top spot. :laugh:ย 

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:jonnycat:

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Congrats, Jackson!

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Whew an excellent top 5 :jonny5::jonny5::jonny5:ย Congrats to you all, especially Jackson for getting raves & at least one 10/10!

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22 minutes ago, fountain said:

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Having a party at 4th place is...

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@โ˜†lexย with an average score of 9.03

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Congrats on getting a 9! Amazing job this round, I loved reading your song and clearly so did the other judges! Great job and I hope you are proud of yourself :heart:

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Thank you so muchย :jonny6:ย  Iโ€™m elated to be in this top 5

Posted

Will the winners be sharing lyrics?

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12 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

Yeah thatโ€™s what I thought but I wasnโ€™t completely sure.ย 
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I was gonna say, if Jackson did win PH8 this would be the second time he blocked me from the top spot. :laugh:ย 

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:jonnycat:

i was a judge in PH8 :dies:ย 

5 minutes ago, โ˜†lex said:

Will the winners be sharing lyrics?

iโ€™ll share mine in a minute, iโ€™m just on mobile rnย 

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Round 3 Rankings

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1. @Jackson - Il Diavolo e Dio - 9.47

2. @Achilles. - The End of the World - 9.23

3. @GentleDance- You've Settled - 9.1

4. @โ˜†lex - Weekenders - 9.03

5. @Euterpe - A Nymph's Campfire Tale - 8.9

6. @DatChickDoe - Days Spill on Like Blood - 8.73

7. @Arrows - I Hope You're Satisfied Now - 8.63

8. @Jessie - The Sense of an Ending - 8.6

9. @mxtthewdelrey - The Lease - 8.47

10. @8thPrince - Whipping Post - 8.43

11. @hurricane326 - Fight - 8.37

12. @Legend E - Joke - 8.2

13. @Augmented - The Aisle - 8.17

13. @Prisoner - Crying in the back of a cab, and you're not. - 8.17

15. @Remmy - Nonstop Hardcore - 8.13

16. @Hug - mm - 8.1

17. @OreGuy - Simple as Red - 7.97

18. @JoeAg - Maladjusted - 7.8

19. @Better Mistakesย - You Have Changed Me - 7.63

20. @TruGemini - Fill - 7.57

20. @Tylerbv - Running in Circles - 7.57

22. @EpicSongFan - Illusion of Lovin' You - 7.33

23. @Insanity - Distraction - 6.96

24. @Julia Fox - endrophy - 6.83

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Fantastic round everybody :heart: be proud of what you have created here!

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Oop I wasn't able to escape the bottom 10 :mandown:ย But I know plenty of people overperformed this round

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second post is all up to date with links to everything relevant!

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for anybody who might not be sure i'm referring to this post here:

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On 5/11/2022 at 11:12 PM, fountain said:

Round 1: The Element Challenge

Challenge

Aurora's reviewsย / Element's reviews / fountain's reviews

Live Results

Ranking

Top Three Tokens

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Round 2: The Studio Session Challenge

Challenge

Aurora's reviews / Element's reviews / fountain's reviews

Live Results

Ranking

Top Three Tokens

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Round 3: The ATW10MVTVFTV Challenge

Challenge

Aurora's reviews / Element's reviews / fountain's reviews

Live Results

Ranking

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Round 4: The Queer Pride Challenge

Challenge

Aurora's reviews / Element's reviews / fountain's reviews

Live Results

Ranking

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Round 5

Challenge

Aurora's reviews / Element's reviews / fountain's reviews

Live Results

Ranking

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Round 6

Challenge

Aurora's reviews / Element's reviews / fountain's reviews

Live Results

Ranking

you can always look back on it as it is kept updated with anything you might need or want to find :heart:

Posted
15 minutes ago, โ˜†lex said:

Will the winners be sharing lyrics?

If I didnโ€™t win does that mean I donโ€™t have to share?ย :gaycat3:

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9 minutes ago, Jackson said:

i was a judge in PH8 :dies:ย 

I like it better when you judge because you win too much when you play. :gaycat4:

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My song:ย 

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Il Diavolo e Dio

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Intro
Hello friend, benvenuto to my life
Each stroke of pen will show you fragments of my mind
From yellowed pages of my younger times
A manifesto to who I am inside
A pious boy from southern Italy
Traveling through the rough cobblestone streets
Until I make each man in Rome believe
That praising Godโ€™s our only destiny
So please readโ€ฆ

ย 

Verse
I wake each day and say a little prayer in my heart
Cause God is good and no one should be left without his charm
I walk the road to lead me home and talk to all who pass
Though most avoid me I feel joy each time I see them dash
Even if they only hear my word from far away
I know the spirit touches them in its own special way
And so I hum a hymn of praise and proclaim earthly pleas
To save these lowly sinners as God once had rescued me

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, sing him praises until Iโ€™m
On my knees, then repeat and Iโ€™ll keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Verse
I read the news and see confused souls seeking mortal sin
Their evil deeds will only lead to blackened souls within
Shoot every shot like they forgot the Father gave them life
So he sends plagues until theyโ€™ve paid the price that He provides
Even if they only hear his word in muffled calls
I hope one day theyโ€™ll recognize that he could save them all
Robbers, crooks, and deviants, and those who lie with man
I know that God can save them all if they follow his plan

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, sing him praises until Iโ€™m
On my knees, then repeat and Iโ€™ll keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Bridge
Sometimes I take the road to Rome, seeing cities burn to bones
See the people suffering and I wish that I was home
In my mind I still believe God is good so why does he
Let good people suffer while he lives immortal life of luxury?
Maybe Iโ€™m not good enough if I donโ€™t believe his love
Heals all strife but I can see it when the lightning strikes above
I see people keel in pain, taking the Lordโ€™s name in vain
And I wonder whatโ€™s the purpose again?

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, but I still donโ€™t know if I
Still believe, but maybe if I keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
But Iโ€™ll never earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

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Verse
Itโ€™s like I have awakened for the first time
I see the Earth in technicolor with new eyes
Narcotized emotions take control
And voices beckon me towards a new goal
Maybe Godโ€™s a puppet master pulling all our strings
He sets fire to the Earth because he delights in suffering
If Iโ€™m not his child Iโ€™m just a sycophant
Maybe Iโ€™m ready to follow my own footprints

ย 

Alternate Chorus
Harmonies of hallelujah fall flat
Why would I sing praises to a psychopath?
Only narcissists believe immortal life
Could ever be more than eternal strife
Now I know of heavenโ€™s fraud
One that I had spread abroad
And it only stops by killing God

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Verse
Mia madre says she worries for my sanity
Like God hasnโ€™t destroyed the Earthโ€™s sanctity
Mio padre says I should take my medicine
And if I keep on spiraling Iโ€™m dead to him
But why would I take pills to numb the rage?
If feeling somethingโ€™s crazy maybe Iโ€™m insane
Something in my head says I should go
Take a knife and take the road to Rome

ย 

Alternate Chorus
Harmonies of hallelujah fall flat
Why would I sing praises to a psychopath?
Only narcissists believe immortal life
Could ever be more than eternal strife
Now I know of heavenโ€™s fraud
One that I had spread abroad
And it only stops by killing God

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Bridge
I stumble around the Vatican, feeling frenzy in my eyes
Blurred faces fill the spaces I shuffle past
The rage consumes me faster
I thrust the wooden doors of the Sistine open
I feel its fabled frescoes mocking me
God reaches out to Adam on the ceiling
Beginning manโ€™s torment
Prenda anche del frutto dellโ€™albero della vita
E ne mangi, e viva in perpetuo
Enslaved to sing his praises eternally

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I feel the paint envelop me
Iโ€™m taken to heaven in a chariot of acrylic blues
Angels encircle me, singing tunes and tributes
I hear fear in the cracks in their voices
Millenia of stolen harmonies sweep the clouds
And I see God now
His outstretched arms extend toward me
Il diavolo e Dio, a tetralogy of malice
I unsheath my blade and say a prayer to myself

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Chorus
Sang Hallelujah to on High, but now I know that I
I believe in nothing and the truth is deafening
I convicted the king, killed a crook and now he bleeds
Jesus falls at my feet
Heaven dims like candlelight
And falls into a silent night
God is dead and my world fades to white

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Posted
4 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

If I didnโ€™t win does that mean I donโ€™t have to share?ย :gaycat3:

You better share kingย :gaycat1:

Posted
3 minutes ago, Jackson said:

My song:ย 

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Il Diavolo e Dio

ย 

Intro
Hello friend, benvenuto to my life
Each stroke of pen will show you fragments of my mind
From yellowed pages of my younger times
A manifesto to who I am inside
A pious boy from southern Italy
Traveling through the rough cobblestone streets
Until I make each man in Rome believe
That praising Godโ€™s our only destiny
So please readโ€ฆ

ย 

Verse
I wake each day and say a little prayer in my heart
Cause God is good and no one should be left without his charm
I walk the road to lead me home and talk to all who pass
Though most avoid me I feel joy each time I see them dash
Even if they only hear my word from far away
I know the spirit touches them in its own special way
And so I hum a hymn of praise and proclaim earthly pleas
To save these lowly sinners as God once had rescued me

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, sing him praises until Iโ€™m
On my knees, then repeat and Iโ€™ll keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Verse
I read the news and see confused souls seeking mortal sin
Their evil deeds will only lead to blackened souls within
Shoot every shot like they forgot the Father gave them life
So he sends plagues until theyโ€™ve paid the price that He provides
Even if they only hear his word in muffled calls
I hope one day theyโ€™ll recognize that he could save them all
Robbers, crooks, and deviants, and those who lie with man
I know that God can save them all if they follow his plan

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, sing him praises until Iโ€™m
On my knees, then repeat and Iโ€™ll keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Bridge
Sometimes I take the road to Rome, seeing cities burn to bones
See the people suffering and I wish that I was home
In my mind I still believe God is good so why does he
Let good people suffer while he lives immortal life of luxury?
Maybe Iโ€™m not good enough if I donโ€™t believe his love
Heals all strife but I can see it when the lightning strikes above
I see people keel in pain, taking the Lordโ€™s name in vain
And I wonder whatโ€™s the purpose again?

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, but I still donโ€™t know if I
Still believe, but maybe if I keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
But Iโ€™ll never earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Verse
Itโ€™s like I have awakened for the first time
I see the Earth in technicolor with new eyes
Narcotized emotions take control
And voices beckon me towards a new goal
Maybe Godโ€™s a puppet master pulling all our strings
He sets fire to the Earth because he delights in suffering
If Iโ€™m not his child Iโ€™m just a sycophant
Maybe Iโ€™m ready to follow my own footprints

ย 

Alternate Chorus
Harmonies of hallelujah fall flat
Why would I sing praises to a psychopath?
Only narcissists believe immortal life
Could ever be more than eternal strife
Now I know of heavenโ€™s fraud
One that I had spread abroad
And it only stops by killing God

ย 

Verse
Mia madre says she worries for my sanity
Like God hasnโ€™t destroyed the Earthโ€™s sanctity
Mio padre says I should take my medicine
And if I keep on spiraling Iโ€™m dead to him
But why would I take pills to numb the rage?
If feeling somethingโ€™s crazy maybe Iโ€™m insane
Something in my head says I should go
Take a knife and take the road to Rome

ย 

Alternate Chorus
Harmonies of hallelujah fall flat
Why would I sing praises to a psychopath?
Only narcissists believe immortal life
Could ever be more than eternal strife
Now I know of heavenโ€™s fraud
One that I had spread abroad
And it only stops by killing God

ย 

Bridge
I stumble around the Vatican, feeling frenzy in my eyes
Blurred faces fill the spaces I shuffle past
The rage consumes me faster
I thrust the wooden doors of the Sistine open
I feel its fabled frescoes mocking me
God reaches out to Adam on the ceiling
Beginning manโ€™s torment
Prenda anche del frutto dellโ€™albero della vita
E ne mangi, e viva in perpetuo
Enslaved to sing his praises eternally

ย 

I feel the paint envelop me
Iโ€™m taken to heaven in a chariot of acrylic blues
Angels encircle me, singing tunes and tributes
I hear fear in the cracks in their voices
Millenia of stolen harmonies sweep the clouds
And I see God now
His outstretched arms extend toward me
Il diavolo e Dio, a tetralogy of malice
I unsheath my blade and say a prayer to myself

ย 

Chorus
Sang Hallelujah to on High, but now I know that I
I believe in nothing and the truth is deafening
I convicted the king, killed a crook and now he bleeds
Jesus falls at my feet
Heaven dims like candlelight
And falls into a silent night
God is dead and my world fades to white

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I meanโ€ฆ just genius

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5 minutes ago, Jackson said:

My song:ย 

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Il Diavolo e Dio

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Intro
Hello friend, benvenuto to my life
Each stroke of pen will show you fragments of my mind
From yellowed pages of my younger times
A manifesto to who I am inside
A pious boy from southern Italy
Traveling through the rough cobblestone streets
Until I make each man in Rome believe
That praising Godโ€™s our only destiny
So please readโ€ฆ

ย 

Verse
I wake each day and say a little prayer in my heart
Cause God is good and no one should be left without his charm
I walk the road to lead me home and talk to all who pass
Though most avoid me I feel joy each time I see them dash
Even if they only hear my word from far away
I know the spirit touches them in its own special way
And so I hum a hymn of praise and proclaim earthly pleas
To save these lowly sinners as God once had rescued me

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, sing him praises until Iโ€™m
On my knees, then repeat and Iโ€™ll keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Verse
I read the news and see confused souls seeking mortal sin
Their evil deeds will only lead to blackened souls within
Shoot every shot like they forgot the Father gave them life
So he sends plagues until theyโ€™ve paid the price that He provides
Even if they only hear his word in muffled calls
I hope one day theyโ€™ll recognize that he could save them all
Robbers, crooks, and deviants, and those who lie with man
I know that God can save them all if they follow his plan

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, sing him praises until Iโ€™m
On my knees, then repeat and Iโ€™ll keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Bridge
Sometimes I take the road to Rome, seeing cities burn to bones
See the people suffering and I wish that I was home
In my mind I still believe God is good so why does he
Let good people suffer while he lives immortal life of luxury?
Maybe Iโ€™m not good enough if I donโ€™t believe his love
Heals all strife but I can see it when the lightning strikes above
I see people keel in pain, taking the Lordโ€™s name in vain
And I wonder whatโ€™s the purpose again?

ย 

Chorus
Sing Hallelujah to on High, but I still donโ€™t know if I
Still believe, but maybe if I keep serenading
Sing convictions to the king, crooning carols endlessly
Maybe then Iโ€™ll earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet
Hoping heaven hears my pleas
Hoping God is listening
But Iโ€™ll never earn a seat at Jesusโ€™s feet

ย 

Verse
Itโ€™s like I have awakened for the first time
I see the Earth in technicolor with new eyes
Narcotized emotions take control
And voices beckon me towards a new goal
Maybe Godโ€™s a puppet master pulling all our strings
He sets fire to the Earth because he delights in suffering
If Iโ€™m not his child Iโ€™m just a sycophant
Maybe Iโ€™m ready to follow my own footprints

ย 

Alternate Chorus
Harmonies of hallelujah fall flat
Why would I sing praises to a psychopath?
Only narcissists believe immortal life
Could ever be more than eternal strife
Now I know of heavenโ€™s fraud
One that I had spread abroad
And it only stops by killing God

ย 

Verse
Mia madre says she worries for my sanity
Like God hasnโ€™t destroyed the Earthโ€™s sanctity
Mio padre says I should take my medicine
And if I keep on spiraling Iโ€™m dead to him
But why would I take pills to numb the rage?
If feeling somethingโ€™s crazy maybe Iโ€™m insane
Something in my head says I should go
Take a knife and take the road to Rome

ย 

Alternate Chorus
Harmonies of hallelujah fall flat
Why would I sing praises to a psychopath?
Only narcissists believe immortal life
Could ever be more than eternal strife
Now I know of heavenโ€™s fraud
One that I had spread abroad
And it only stops by killing God

ย 

Bridge
I stumble around the Vatican, feeling frenzy in my eyes
Blurred faces fill the spaces I shuffle past
The rage consumes me faster
I thrust the wooden doors of the Sistine open
I feel its fabled frescoes mocking me
God reaches out to Adam on the ceiling
Beginning manโ€™s torment
Prenda anche del frutto dellโ€™albero della vita
E ne mangi, e viva in perpetuo
Enslaved to sing his praises eternally

ย 

I feel the paint envelop me
Iโ€™m taken to heaven in a chariot of acrylic blues
Angels encircle me, singing tunes and tributes
I hear fear in the cracks in their voices
Millenia of stolen harmonies sweep the clouds
And I see God now
His outstretched arms extend toward me
Il diavolo e Dio, a tetralogy of malice
I unsheath my blade and say a prayer to myself

ย 

Chorus
Sang Hallelujah to on High, but now I know that I
I believe in nothing and the truth is deafening
I convicted the king, killed a crook and now he bleeds
Jesus falls at my feet
Heaven dims like candlelight
And falls into a silent night
God is dead and my world fades to white

ย 

Oh wowโ€ฆ damn. What a read. I definitely see why you wonย 

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Gods Jacksonโ€ฆ.

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Iโ€™mโ€ฆ.

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There is simply nothing to say to that.ย 
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My score should not have been so close to yours. :deadbanana:
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10 minutes ago, โ˜†lex said:

You better share kingย :gaycat1:

I never share my songs publicly but Iโ€™ll think about it. :emofish:
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Me and Jackson both using the word โ€œpsychopathโ€ when discussing religion in our songs and coming in top 2. Very interesting. :gaycat3:

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i guess iโ€™ll post mine cause f*ck it

Spoiler

Velitations so unnerving

So vain, so reserving

But did my vacancies require a slightly raised look?

Did my shortcomings receive none other than a platitudinous crook?

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Baby i get it now

I think i might read maladjusted

Read the room once, shake it up a few inches

Dote the pull, hoard the chain

Spill my plume and inkย 

But only i can fuel the walk

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Oh for ****โ€™s sake youโ€™re uninspiringย 

That palimpsest yeah you wish iโ€™d go revising

But you may cross once, iโ€™ll never cross again

For youโ€™ve furtively chastised me once, pretty sycophant

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Oh darling i think i might read maladjusted

Read the room once, shake it up a few notches

Dote the pull, hoard the chain

Spill words black just to blinkย 

But only i can walk this walkย 

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Oh no sugar not i will read maladjustedย 

For your heavens have given me bitter first tastes

For your fruits are disastrous, your coals hidden masters, oh

We philistines broke our leaves so treacherouslyย 

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Plus time is of the essenceย 

Your horticultures wither with the clock of the thousands of suns

Tick away like the sticks on beaten drums

Hold me close with bricks melted and poured in my ears

Golden cascades of starlight, sunlight for your children youโ€™ll someday bring

To waterfalls, to waters of yore

While my memory is but a filament

A filament to rip and cackle at

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My love a writ

A clause to rebel against

For no floor is deep enough for youย 

And no ceiling too bright

You canโ€™t blind yourself on futures so rigid they wonโ€™t refract

Crumble for me, baby, crumble all night long

ย 

As i wash up in the rivers of deep belligerenceย 

The dryness collected on my dermis like painted vagrancyย 

I chose to give myself, i chose to soak myself in

I deal in hardened truths, i deal in banks of serpentine conclusion

I waste time in unguarded baths, i waste life in my bed

Who am i?

ย 

Who would be this bitter in recollection?ย 

Who would you appreciate if not me?

Was i fast enough? Was I welcoming enough? Open minded enough?

A love of a thousand magnolias?ย 

A love of a sunset so melty?

Not i, maladjusted, just a whole mess

Not i, maladjusted, just a world youโ€™ll never return to

ย 

A harkening of the creek behind my apartment

Gives me hope that my memory of you will not fade

As a masochist i must never let you sand

Mustnโ€™t let you escape these olden pressures

For you instilled them upon me, gladdened like a coo of a crane

ย 

Butt thatโ€™s where we lived, sweet love

In the hands of the emboldened

In the lakes of the lost

Forever and ever it felt like, for hard times and sad claims

Never enough, i stuttered

To myself as i carved my name in every alleyway

I vandalize the roadways you so desired

The pavements now my own, they felt my power even as i treaded lightly

ย 

You felt my flaws

Accepted the holes in my plots

Accepted twists of fate in me and who i am

But lost me with the riptides and apogees

The encomium of light. the paean to a better future

You didnโ€™t want me there, and so i drifted

I sailed away and was maladjusted but content in another land

Youโ€™re not to love me again, or hold another painting i scraped out within seconds for some unbound competition

No more locker door slams, no more squeeze of a shoulder in a crosswalk

No kissing at every rock show

ย 

Said iโ€™m sorry for it, but never showed it to your satisfaction

Said my cries werenโ€™t of anger and werenโ€™t representative of my soul

But were obviously not pleasing to the ear

I apologize for the verbosity, but the redundancy of this letter isnโ€™t for your comfort

Itโ€™s for my convalescence and my soul work

Youโ€™d best understand if i left it to be now

So this is my official goodbye to you, as we ride into the distance

Donโ€™t forget my love for you, please let it remain even if it is all you remember of me

i barely even remember writing it, it just came outย :skull:

Posted
38 minutes ago, Remmy said:

Whew an excellent top 5 :jonny5::jonny5::jonny5:ย Congrats to you all, especially Jackson for getting raves & at least one 10/10!

I heard a rumour I was not the only oneโ€ฆ but I cannot confirm nor deny this speculationย :gaygacat7:ย 

Posted
Just now, JoeAg said:

i guess iโ€™ll post mine cause f*ck it

ย  Reveal hidden contents

Velitations so unnerving

So vain, so reserving

But did my vacancies require a slightly raised look?

Did my shortcomings receive none other than a platitudinous crook?

ย 

Baby i get it now

I think i might read maladjusted

Read the room once, shake it up a few inches

Dote the pull, hoard the chain

Spill my plume and inkย 

But only i can fuel the walk

ย 

Oh for ****โ€™s sake youโ€™re uninspiringย 

That palimpsest yeah you wish iโ€™d go revising

But you may cross once, iโ€™ll never cross again

For youโ€™ve furtively chastised me once, pretty sycophant

ย 

Oh darling i think i might read maladjusted

Read the room once, shake it up a few notches

Dote the pull, hoard the chain

Spill words black just to blinkย 

But only i can walk this walkย 

ย 

Oh no sugar not i will read maladjustedย 

For your heavens have given me bitter first tastes

For your fruits are disastrous, your coals hidden masters, oh

We philistines broke our leaves so treacherouslyย 

ย 

Plus time is of the essenceย 

Your horticultures wither with the clock of the thousands of suns

Tick away like the sticks on beaten drums

Hold me close with bricks melted and poured in my ears

Golden cascades of starlight, sunlight for your children youโ€™ll someday bring

To waterfalls, to waters of yore

While my memory is but a filament

A filament to rip and cackle at

ย 

My love a writ

A clause to rebel against

For no floor is deep enough for youย 

And no ceiling too bright

You canโ€™t blind yourself on futures so rigid they wonโ€™t refract

Crumble for me, baby, crumble all night long

ย 

As i wash up in the rivers of deep belligerenceย 

The dryness collected on my dermis like painted vagrancyย 

I chose to give myself, i chose to soak myself in

I deal in hardened truths, i deal in banks of serpentine conclusion

I waste time in unguarded baths, i waste life in my bed

Who am i?

ย 

Who would be this bitter in recollection?ย 

Who would you appreciate if not me?

Was i fast enough? Was I welcoming enough? Open minded enough?

A love of a thousand magnolias?ย 

A love of a sunset so melty?

Not i, maladjusted, just a whole mess

Not i, maladjusted, just a world youโ€™ll never return to

ย 

A harkening of the creek behind my apartment

Gives me hope that my memory of you will not fade

As a masochist i must never let you sand

Mustnโ€™t let you escape these olden pressures

For you instilled them upon me, gladdened like a coo of a crane

ย 

Butt thatโ€™s where we lived, sweet love

In the hands of the emboldened

In the lakes of the lost

Forever and ever it felt like, for hard times and sad claims

Never enough, i stuttered

To myself as i carved my name in every alleyway

I vandalize the roadways you so desired

The pavements now my own, they felt my power even as i treaded lightly

ย 

You felt my flaws

Accepted the holes in my plots

Accepted twists of fate in me and who i am

But lost me with the riptides and apogees

The encomium of light. the paean to a better future

You didnโ€™t want me there, and so i drifted

I sailed away and was maladjusted but content in another land

Youโ€™re not to love me again, or hold another painting i scraped out within seconds for some unbound competition

No more locker door slams, no more squeeze of a shoulder in a crosswalk

No kissing at every rock show

ย 

Said iโ€™m sorry for it, but never showed it to your satisfaction

Said my cries werenโ€™t of anger and werenโ€™t representative of my soul

But were obviously not pleasing to the ear

I apologize for the verbosity, but the redundancy of this letter isnโ€™t for your comfort

Itโ€™s for my convalescence and my soul work

Youโ€™d best understand if i left it to be now

So this is my official goodbye to you, as we ride into the distance

Donโ€™t forget my love for you, please let it remain even if it is all you remember of me

i barely even remember writing it, it just came outย :skull:

Is your guitar fixed now? :monkey:ย :heart:

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