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14 minutes ago, EpicSongFan said:

This was my entry! Do lemme know what y'all think of it :bird:

 

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SCORCHING MEMORY

V1
She didn’t listen and took things for granted
So she left all the candles unattended
And she went ahead with her daily routine
Little did she know that she’d come back to a fiery scene

Pre Chorus
The gentle breeze brought the oxygen
So it grew into a roaring beast
Consuming everything in its path
Slowly until nothing else exists

First Chorus
Even though she’s standing far away
She could still feel the smouldering heat
Emanating across her face
There’s nothing else she could do but pray
As she stood across the quiet street
Now every night will remain a scorching memory in her mind

V2
Chaos erupts within the vicinity
With some panicking and being in a frenzy
She was the only one who stood quietly
As she slowly begins to start accepting reality

Pre Chorus
The sirens echo in the background
As the firemen came running
They couldn't save it from burning down
But that won't stop them from trying

Second Chorus
Even though she’s standing far away
She could still feel the smouldering heat
Emanating across her face
There’s nothing else she could do but pray
As she stood across the noisy street
Now every night will remain a scorching memory in her mind
Now every night will remain a scorching memory in her mind

V3
After everything settled down the very next day
She was brought to the station for formality
She cried her heart out, thinking that it was her fault
But turn out evidence revealed the true culprit
She witnessed her ex-lover causing arson through the screen

Bridge
Even though now he's behind bars
What about her, whose house got turned into ashes?
She never expected he would take things this far
Now she's left with all these scars, feeling cursed

Final Chorus
Even though things have turned out this way
She started picking up all the pieces
She tried her best to move ahead
All she could do at this point was pray
Since this pain in her heart could last ages
Cause every night will remain a scorching memory in her mind
Cause every night will remain a scorching memory in her mind

Outro
Now every night will remain a scorching memory in her mind
She'll remember this for the rest of her life
 

 

 

That artwork is so good :jonnycat: and the lyrics as well, i really love the storytelling. Also is her house burning down supposed to be a metaphor of her own life as well? :omg:

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2 hours ago, EpicSongFan said:

@RobDeWittBukater @Hug @Julia Fox @Remmy @hurricane326 @Hanami-Blossom @Arrows @JoeAg

So I read through the lyrics and listened the audio of some who had audios ready and damn... the TALENT each of yall have :jonny5: I gotta say that I learned some new things just from reading each of yall's entries, really! Definitely eye opening and I think it's gonna help me a whole lot in the future rounds! Thank you so much for sharing your lyrics and I'll share mine shortly :bird:

Thank you for this sweet like honey (I'm lowkey tired of honey now *cackle*) comment! :hug: :heart:

 

That is part of the beauty of this game is that we can learn from ourselves and also from each other.

 

It feels so rewarding that my song had a positive impact on you. Even though I've had prior songwriting experience, it is so enjoyable and humbling to be put into the position of a "beginner" again. I feel like I am tapping into a well of creative energy right now and it is overflowing through everyone in this game.

 

I love your openness about learning new things from others. It can be a difficult thing to allow ourselves to do, let alone openly admit.

 

Learning is an endless experience that enriches over time, the more that you learn. It is a worthwhile investment that yields acres and acres of crops for you to harvest for yourself and the seeds of learning can be transferred over to others too, for them to grow and nurture their craft as well. I think accepting that you don't know it all is an exciting realisation that can lead to tons of adventure and this is something that I am realising.

 

Whew, don't mind me I am having a #lifequotes moment right now. :fan:

 

I just feel like it can be easy to fall into the claws of darkness in this world, I would love to be someone who can remind people of the brightness that shines within us and our innate ability to connect with that and radiate it powerfully.

 

I'm so excited for Round 2 :duca:

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16 hours ago, Aurora said:

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GURL the opening line alone, we- I’m so glad someone took the plunge and submitted a shameless thot anthem, Golden Hit is welcome to one and all with open arms… and legs! Your choruses were actually fantastic, the shifting seasonal imagery worked for the challenge yet didn’t feel out of place within the context of your song either. You have many great one liners (pronouns, Grande reference, garden/hoe, the entire first quatrains of verse 2 and 3 tbh), but also some that fell a bit flat or felt a little forced (wilter—gurl this ain’t even a word in this context, Sigourney—great idea, messy execution, porta potty—a mess). In a way all of the “issues” I took with the song are strangely endearing, though. Love this vibe for you, please come again.

adsfjisdjf not you clocking (in a good way) some of the main issues I had myself :oh: I knew the Sigourney reference didn't make a lot of sense but I was like whatever, let me stick it in there anyway nnn. I actually googled "wilter" & it didn't try to correct me so I just assumed it was a word :oh::oh: The porta potty line was cute though! Thanks baby girl :gaycat2: I love writing a good thot anthem, there's definitely a chance at least one more will be on the way.

15 hours ago, fountain said:

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Round 1: The Element Challenge

 

@Remmy - Flowerbloom

 

My biggest issue with your entry, is trying to decide which of the lyrics I want to appear on my gravestone. Honestly, rhyming poppys with Abu Dhabi? I’ve never seen anything as beautiful as this, you have truly made my flowerbloom too! On a serious note, the word play is just insane and genius, a really good job. I mean I have no idea how long this took you to write, but if I was given ten times as long I know I couldn’t come up with anything even half as funny or punchy. This was pure entertainment. I don’t know if your entries will always look like this or if we are going to see a switch up, but this was so fun that I don’t care, do whatever you want. Great job.

:bibliahh: Thank you :kiss::kiss: I think it probably took close to 2 hours total? We'll have to see :gaycat3: Wasn't sure which direction I would take but I guess it's best to just take it round-by-round and let it lead me some type of way. The elements concept didn't strike an emotional match or anything so this felt like the right step!

3 hours ago, EpicSongFan said:

@RobDeWittBukater @Hug @Julia Fox @Remmy @hurricane326 @Hanami-Blossom @Arrows @JoeAg

So I read through the lyrics and listened the audio of some who had audios ready and damn... the TALENT each of yall have :jonny5: I gotta say that I learned some new things just from reading each of yall's entries, really! Definitely eye opening and I think it's gonna help me a whole lot in the future rounds! Thank you so much for sharing your lyrics and I'll share mine shortly :bird:

Oh thank you! :blush::blush: I had a feeling my song would open some eyes as well as a few legs

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Thank you :heart2: @Aurora

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gonna start trying to produce my song while we wait for reviews/results :lakitu:

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19 minutes ago, Remmy said:

Wasn't sure which direction I would take but I guess it's best to just take it round-by-round and let it lead me some type of way. The elements concept didn't strike an emotional match or anything so this felt like the right step!

Absolutely! And I definitely do think it was the right choice to make, your song was outrageous… but in the best way :clap3:

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4 hours ago, EpicSongFan said:

@Aurora

Thank you so much for the review and feedback! I highkey screamed at the Disaster Girl meme correlation because I can definitely see that in the song now :bibliahh: Once again, I definitely agree that learning to put in details to "show" than to explain is something that I do need to learn. I noticed that I tend to be really vague when I speak irl but be the opposite when I write lyrics :deadbanana2: Hopefully I'll be able to pick some stuff up as I go with each round! :bird:

 

@fountain

Thank you so much for the review and feedback as well! I can definitely understand where you're coming from with feeling a bit mixed with the twist. Looking back, I think if I had added some disposition hinting on either the relationship or even the ex-lover, it could've worked out better! I actually didn't think of including this twist but I was speaking with my cousin about writing a song and she just randomly suggested it. She probably was joking but I thought "why not?" and it sorta became this entire thing on its own :bird:

Your suggestion on having verse 3 be the perspective of the house feeling "betrayed" actually is really genius ngl, definitely learned something for sure! :jonnycat:

 

@RobDeWittBukater @Hug @Julia Fox @Remmy @hurricane326 @Hanami-Blossom @Arrows @JoeAg

So I read through the lyrics and listened the audio of some who had audios ready and damn... the TALENT each of yall have :jonny5: I gotta say that I learned some new things just from reading each of yall's entries, really! Definitely eye opening and I think it's gonna help me a whole lot in the future rounds! Thank you so much for sharing your lyrics and I'll share mine shortly :bird:

thanks hon :heart: yours is fantastic, as is the artwork you made!!

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38 minutes ago, 8thPrince said:

gonna start trying to produce my song while we wait for reviews/results :lakitu:

I would be very interested to hear how it is intended to sound! Probably nothing like what I imagined :rip:

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ROUND 1 RESULTS ANNOUNCEMENT

 

Hey everybody! The judges are currently just finalising our scores and finishing the remaining reviews.

 

The round 1 results show will be happening tonight at 10PM EDT! This is two hours from the time of this post.

 

Additionally, the new challenge for round 2 will be posted once the results show has concluded.

 

Hope everybody can be there, and good luck!

 

@hurricane326 @DatChickDoe @Tylerbv  @Julia Fox  @Hug @Better Mistakes @Astro @EpicSongFan@Hanami-Blossom @RobDeWittBukater @Euterpe @OreGuy @boubour @Legend E @Insanity@Augmented @Prisoner @Arrows @GentleDance @Remmy @D e v o n @Jessie @Achilles. @Jackson @ughgabriel @mxtthewdelrey  @TruGemini @JoeAg @☆lex @Lorenzo22 @8thPrince@luckystrike 

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Did the third judge post reviews? :psyduck:

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@fountain Thank you for the review! I feel like I was so focused on the ground of Earth where Ley Lines are that I missed adding more about the specific element in it. I’ll try to make the theme stronger in future rounds!

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7 minutes ago, Achilles. said:

Did the third judge post reviews? :psyduck:

Element is finishing them now :bird:

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Coming for OUT 

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Whew i’ll be Wine Drunk (by Ellie Goulding on iTunes) by then. Can’t wait. I wanted to post my song but I don’t have my laptop, mess

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1 minute ago, ughgabriel said:

Coming for OUT 

Spoilers:

 

Everyone is serving IN-IN, actually! :party:

 

 
except you
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Sources say I may have hints for my Top 10 rankings coming within the hour. :matty:

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alexa play out-out 

 

Astro

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4 minutes ago, Tylerbv said:

Whew i’ll be Wine Drunk (by Ellie Goulding on iTunes) by then. Can’t wait. I wanted to post my song but I don’t have my laptop, mess

We could post it for you if you want?

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6 minutes ago, fountain said:

We could post it for you if you want?

Sure. Thanks - I should've saved it somewhere accessible from my phone instead of on notepad on my laptop :rip: 

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Omg so excited to see how hard I flopped lol 

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9 minutes ago, Tylerbv said:

Sure. Thanks - I should've saved it somewhere accessible from my phone instead of on notepad on my laptop :rip: 

Tylerbv - Sail Away

 

 

 

sail away

 


 

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verse 1

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i've never called anywhere else home

i stay here on my island each day

looking through these maps for new horizons

praying for a bright and sunny place

 

but when love and hope knock at my door

i shut the blinds; hide under my bed

cause although i long for things to change

i always lock myself inside instead

 

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prechorus

========

i swear i long to see it all 

but i'm chained to this place

someday, i'll untangle myself from this mess

and i'll finally sail away

 

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chorus

========

i will let myself go

and i'll become somebody new

i'll finally get on my boat

and search for something new

 

i will cross every ocean

looking for a place to stay

i will swim through the seas

and dive across the bays

 

at least that's what i tell myself every day

for now, i'll try to find the courage to sail away

 

========

verse 2

========

i'll find a reason to be here

give my heart some time to slow down

make my utopia from these sticks and stones

and finally want to stick around

 

i'll build these walls so high

it'll be like nowhere i've ever been

they'll keep me safe from all that comes at me

even when the tidal waves crash in

 

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prechorus

========

i swear i long to see it all 

but i'm chained to this place

someday, i'll untangle myself from this mess

and i'll finally sail away

 

========

chorus

========

i will let myself go

and i'll become somebody new

i'll finally get on my boat

and search for something new

 

i will cross every ocean

looking for a place to stay

i will swim through the seas

and dive across the bays

 

at least that's what i tell myself every day

for now, i'll try to find the courage to sail away

 

========

bridge

========

i know i'm gonna be somewhere better soon

it's just a matter of when

next time love and hope knock at my door

i hope i'll finally let them in

 

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chorus/outro

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i will let myself go

and i'll become somebody new

i'll finally get on my boat

and search for something new

 

i will cross every ocean

looking for a place to stay

i will swim through the seas

and dive across the bays

 

right now i'm telling myself today's the day

i'll find the courage to sail away

 

 

 

:heart:

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3 minutes ago, fountain said:

Tylerbv - Sail Away

 

 

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sail away

 


 

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verse 1

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i've never called anywhere else home

i stay here on my island each day

looking through these maps for new horizons

praying for a bright and sunny place

 

but when love and hope knock at my door

i shut the blinds; hide under my bed

cause although i long for things to change

i always lock myself inside instead

 

========

prechorus

========

i swear i long to see it all 

but i'm chained to this place

someday, i'll untangle myself from this mess

and i'll finally sail away

 

========

chorus

========

i will let myself go

and i'll become somebody new

i'll finally get on my boat

and search for something new

 

i will cross every ocean

looking for a place to stay

i will swim through the seas

and dive across the bays

 

at least that's what i tell myself every day

for now, i'll try to find the courage to sail away

 

========

verse 2

========

i'll find a reason to be here

give my heart some time to slow down

make my utopia from these sticks and stones

and finally want to stick around

 

i'll build these walls so high

it'll be like nowhere i've ever been

they'll keep me safe from all that comes at me

even when the tidal waves crash in

 

========

prechorus

========

i swear i long to see it all 

but i'm chained to this place

someday, i'll untangle myself from this mess

and i'll finally sail away

 

========

chorus

========

i will let myself go

and i'll become somebody new

i'll finally get on my boat

and search for something new

 

i will cross every ocean

looking for a place to stay

i will swim through the seas

and dive across the bays

 

at least that's what i tell myself every day

for now, i'll try to find the courage to sail away

 

========

bridge

========

i know i'm gonna be somewhere better soon

it's just a matter of when

next time love and hope knock at my door

i hope i'll finally let them in

 

========

chorus/outro

========

i will let myself go

and i'll become somebody new

i'll finally get on my boat

and search for something new

 

i will cross every ocean

looking for a place to stay

i will swim through the seas

and dive across the bays

 

right now i'm telling myself today's the day

i'll find the courage to sail away

 

 

 

:heart:

Exceptional 

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Oh no, I have a really bad feeling that I'm getting eliminated. :dancehall:

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31 minutes ago, Aurora said:

except you

The rules have been revoked given the quality of the song! You’re out!

 

My solar power era :WAP:

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1 minute ago, ughgabriel said:

The rules have been revoked given the quality of the song! You’re out!

 

My solar power era :WAP:

Can I win this?
No! I can't!

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