FCKNAmbrosia Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 Codes - #7 Dance of the Dragons - #17 (can't believe I wrote that trash) King of the Weekends/ Good Mourning - #8 Anorev - #12 The Curator - ??? Based on my chart run "The Curator" should crack top 10 and land on #9 but... *Lorde high pitched voice* I'm waiting for it That top 5 I want it
Hug Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 Omg on a surface level, I'm gonna rank my song titles. Drowned In Neon > (a bunch of greater than signs) > Stormy Sky > I Do, I Do... > Big Brother > Candle
SaintWest Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 1 hour ago, Hug said: Omg on a surface level, I'm gonna rank my song titles. Drowned In Neon > (a bunch of greater than signs) > Stormy Sky > I Do, I Do... > Big Brother > Candle and s.a.d. since that was ur idéa
fountain Posted June 19, 2017 Author Posted June 19, 2017 On 16 June 2017 at 5:41 AM, keshaspearsxo said: (from left to right: Temp, Aurora, Gabe, Pears) Round #5 - The Judge's Pick Round This week is similar to the record label challenge - each member of the panel has picked their own challenge for this week, of which you get to choose from. There will be different 4 challenges for you to pick from, and you only have to do one. Alike the record label challenge, the judge in charge of each challenge will be able to assign bonus points to those who they believe met they challenge criteria the best. Our judge's picks are: @keshaspearsxo - The Dr Luke Challenge: A repeat from last season, your challenge is to write a song out of the typical verse-prechorus-chorus-bridge-chorus pop formula, by instead writing a song without the use of repeating sections (like a pre chorus or a chorus). You may use some small repetition, such as repeating a line as part of a motif, but there should be no repeating sections. Examples of songs you could use as a blueprint are Portal - Lights, Butterfly - Christina Perri, Every Teardrop is a Waterfall - Coldplay, Bohemian Rhapsody - Queen, Hide & Seek - Imogen Heap, Under Pressure - David Bowie & Queen. @ughgabriel - The Former Self Portrait Challenge A new challenge suggested by Gabe, the challenge here is to write a song directed to your former self. From Gabe himself: "The purpose of this one would be to write about things that they regret, that were left unfinished, telling things to their inner child that they needed to listen when they were going through a bad situation, like finding in themselves the comfort and comprehension they needed from people on a past stage of life. I think it could help them to heal and give closure to these open wounds they carry. And of course the song has to be directed to their former self." @Aurora - The MC Challenge A new challenge suggested by Sam, the challenge here is to write a song using rap. From Sam himself: "Rap writing has never been discouraged in PH but it's never been compulsory either. Done right, it can allow some of the best lyricism imo. So long as they're not trying to go for the radio-friendly "rapping about cars and chains and big asses" angle, but then again the same can be said about regular writing not relying on the cliche and drinking in the club etc." @Temporal - The Sequel Challenge A repeat from PH9, your challenge here is to write a sequel to a pre-existing song, along the lines of what Paramore did with their songs "Let the Flames Begin" and "Part II". The song you are writing a sequel to must not be something you yourself have already written, but rather a pre-existing song by an artist which you have chosen to expand upon. Your song should remain from the same perspective as the original. If you have any questions or need any clearer information feel free to ask us! Rules: PM your entry to me by this time! Late entries will receive late penalties @funnellegs@ONIKACRAZY @Glassmouth @Corsola @Auburn@Hug @ICEY @Pecinta Mariah @FCKNAmbrosia@Nait Phoenix @UFO@Gastrodonatella @Tsareena @8thPrince @SaintWest @RihsusChrist(ATG) @beatinglikeadrum@OreGuy @mxtthewdelrey @Buyonce1814 @Lane Boy @ceremonials 7 hours @ONIKACRAZY @Corsola @Auburn @ICEY @Pecinta Mariah @Nait Phoenix @UFO@Gastrodonatella @Tsareena @8thPrince @SaintWest @RihsusChrist(ATG) @beatinglikeadrum@mxtthewdelrey @Buyonce1814 @Lane Boy @ceremonials
fountain Posted June 19, 2017 Author Posted June 19, 2017 I had good and bad news good news, I'm going to post reviews of last week after all bad news, my phone charger is breaking
SaintWest Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 3 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: I had good and bad news good news, I'm going to post reviews of last week after all bad news, my phone charger is breaking screams the plot twist twist
ceremonials Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 19 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: 7 hours @ONIKACRAZY @Corsola @Auburn @ICEY @Pecinta Mariah @Nait Phoenix @UFO@Gastrodonatella @Tsareena @8thPrince @SaintWest @RihsusChrist(ATG) @beatinglikeadrum@mxtthewdelrey @Buyonce1814 @Lane Boy @ceremonials trash
UFO Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 MAGIC TRICKS I look at you and instantly you're my King and I'm your Queen
fountain Posted June 19, 2017 Author Posted June 19, 2017 (edited) Pear Reviews yes. me. i wrote these. me. all me. @OreGuy - What Happened to Emmy? I think the Emmy (ME) thing was clever and I appreciate originality! As a fan of mystery and the unknown I find it to be great because it gives me this feeling of wanting to know more about the story. The personification of your mind as a separate entity to yourself is super interesting to me. Beyond that, I think the song’s flow was a bit too fast paced. @mxtthewdelrey - Vape With Me Postman - The Story of My Life The Roxxxy Andrews reference made me laugh! You made me smile, at least. I don’t have much to say for this, but I think the song came apart more as it went on as I really liked the intro. @Hug - Stormy Sky I feel like the whole song was cohesive and the story you told was clear and well developed. I appreciate that you’re one of the few people who are still trying in this game. On a technical level, this was all fine, but there was no buildup or climax here. @Gastrodonatella - Lost in Fire The entry was very cohesive and your imagery was very consistent and I thought the wildfire metaphor was very fitting for the story you were trying to tell. This was kind of morbidly satisfying. I think your style and the language were nice. @Nait Phoenix - Hard Candy I felt like the song needed some kind of closure. But your story was very interesting and it kept me on my toes. As far as technical aspects are concerned, I really enjoyed some of the rhyming techniques you utilised, especially in the chorus, which made for a much more dynamic, interesting read. Conceptually this was fine, but there weren’t any punches with this. @SaintWest - S.A.D. I feel like this entry gave me what I was left wanting from other entries, which is the mention of detail. This is a natural progression from Midsummer but it’s even more faultless. I did find it a bit more gimmicky than Midsummer, and there could’ve been more complexities with this entry, but again, this was well done. @Glassmouth - Laffy Taffy I think this could've been a great entry if your chorus was stronger. You set up some good imagery in the chorus and I do wish that was more prominent throughout. I didn’t see a common thread to really tie to the song all together. @funnellegs - Bottom of a Plastic Cup At points the song felt a little more descriptive of how you were feeling instead of actually narrating the situation that was happening. I thought this was nice, but it didn’t wow me like your entry did last week. @FCKNAmbrosia - Anorev I liked how the intro was a subtle hint to the tragedy that was about to happen. Consistency is a must, there’s no point having a really good verse laden with water metaphors/imagery if you don’t keep that same metaphorical stance throughout. I also didn’t get the point of spelling “Verona” backwards, it would’ve been fine if it was just spelled regularly. @Tsareena - Scarlet Games I was really surprised by your creativity. Honestly, I really like the bowling metaphor. It’s unique and you’ve executed it well. However, there weren’t any couplets or big punches here, as the verses were so really straightforward. @UFO - Death Lullaby I understand the message you were trying convey, the story you were trying to tell and the feelings you were trying to evoke. Maybe this could have worked had you done more showing than telling, but you’re literally depicting umbilical cords breaking and a fetus decaying in the womb. It’s best to have some poeticism about it. @RihsusChrist(ATG) - Paraiba Tourmaline I just think the story was too simple. This was probably my favourite song from you, actually. Trying to tell a life story in two verses in a chorus just did not work. @Lane Boy - Playground Games I don't know about your experience in songwriting but you have a very polished style that makes you stand out and do well throughout the challenges. The song was great, told a great story, kept to the central metaphor, had that progression etc. everything you want from a storytelling song. I’m patient. @ceremonials - Hourglass I really liked the whole song, it's a topic that most people tend to feel. “Cause even a broken clock is right twice a day” WIG legend, you did that. You’re an idiot for not submitting the other round because if you kept up this level of work you would’ve ****ing won this season. @beatinglikeadrum - Story of the Birds I feel like you were consistent and commited to the metaphor you chose to use on this song. I liked the central metaphor and you kept to it throughout and the imagery was all very nice. I feel like this is perhaps your best entry. I don’t remember you being a contestant with heavy grammatical issues, but there were certainly plenty with this entry. @Auburn - For You I had a problem with this because it was too short. I appreciate that you still submitted something, that’s always, always better than not trying. This was cute for its length but definitely didn’t meet the challenge. Edited June 19, 2017 by keshaspearsxo
ceremonials Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 bye did you just copy and paste parts from Tempral's review
Bandito Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 I'm cackling at the mashup of all three reviews in mine. Pears did THAT! Ending randomly with "I'm patient" literally made me scream.
fountain Posted June 19, 2017 Author Posted June 19, 2017 Ok here I'll just post my scores instead @OreGuy - 4 @mxtthewdelrey - 4 @Hug - 6 @Gastrodonatella - 9 @Nait Phoenix - 5 @SaintWest - nearly a 10 @Glassmouth - 9.9 @funnellegs - 10 @FCKNAmbrosia - 6 @Tsareena - 7 @UFO - 9 @RihsusChrist(ATG) - 6.5 @Lane Boy - 10 @ceremonials - 10 @beatinglikeadrum - 8 @Auburn - 5
fountain Posted June 19, 2017 Author Posted June 19, 2017 1 minute ago, Gastrodonatella said: truly a ****ing paula do better sis let me live my life
UFO Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 (edited) a 9? I call bull**** Aurora must've dragged me all the way down aklfjasglkaj nnnnn I'm overflowing with poker puns after writing my song this week, you could call it a royal flush I bet you didn't expect that! ksajgakdg I'm a mess, let me exit through the backdoor deal with it Edited June 19, 2017 by UFO
fountain Posted June 19, 2017 Author Posted June 19, 2017 Just now, UFO said: a 9? I call bull**** nah i actually liked it. was it a mess? yes absolutely. but you told a compelling story nonetheless, which is more than others can say
fountain Posted June 19, 2017 Author Posted June 19, 2017 (edited) 9 minutes ago, UFO said: I love how each review is two or three lines long. it's so anaesthetically pleasing i think you mean aesthetic not anaesthetic. they're a little different concepts Edited June 19, 2017 by keshaspearsxo
UFO Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 Just now, keshaspearsxo said: nah i actually liked it. was it a mess? yes absolutely. but you told a compelling story nonetheless, which is more than others can say OMG That was intention, I'm glad you liked it! I knew it would be heavy and problematic but as long it told a story with gripping emotion I didn't care
UFO Posted June 19, 2017 Posted June 19, 2017 (edited) 4 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: i think you mean aesthetic not anaesthetic. they're a little different concepts No I meant anaesthethically pleasing NNN inb4 I use it for my song next week aklfja my wordplay is too much Edited June 19, 2017 by UFO
fountain Posted June 20, 2017 Author Posted June 20, 2017 7 minutes ago, UFO said: No I meant anaesthethically pleasing ok
SaintWest Posted June 20, 2017 Posted June 20, 2017 (edited) if i had told you last season that pears would one day be giving me NEARLY A 10 Edited June 20, 2017 by SaintWest
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