Temporal Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 4 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said: temporal when i do the dr luke challenge but boycott it and just have 80 perfect rhyme lines in a row Aw that's cute, you think I wouldn't have hung myself
UFO Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 (edited) Ok reading through my song again, I was definitely too morbid and grotesque sorry for making you guys read that I'll try to make my song more uplifting this week! NNnnnn I love how I wrote two sad songs back-to-back and they both flopped, I thought sad songs were my forte I guess I took it TOO far fffff my Alejandro moment I'm still proud of my song this week tho! It included some of the best lines I've ever written tbh. I'll definitely tone it down when I write about more sensitive topics in the future. Thank you for the warning Edited June 16, 2017 by UFO
UFO Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 (edited) DEATH LULLABY VERSE When I discovered a second pulse, bliss was reborn and started to flow In my blood towards my mind, I wished to hold your tiny hands From the edge of earth all the way to the moon, I had planned your lifetime In my vision you grew up with your own happy family I painted your bedroom with careless joy, but blood started to run down the walls A deep kick in my gut, I only had you for three months Collapsed in your pool of blood, I still wish to hold your tiny hands CHORUS My flickering flame of life was blown out inside Your ashes in my womb imitate lost butterflies They swirl, dance around, falling free, flowing deep in me Your soul now incomplete echoes next to my heartbeat We're beating as one, I hear you cry at night Now all I can hear is your death lullaby POST-CHORUS What have you done with my Sun? God if you're listening My little ray of light, where are you hiding? VERSE Fixated, I stare at your teddy bear in the corner, playing pretend Curtains drawn, body freezes in the cold command of darkness My joy left from my breath and turned the air in the room into poisoned gas I inhale knowing well that the years with my son are only in dreams Now nine months have passed since the cord broke, now I dress you in funeral clothes Your wings caught in my cage, I don't want you to fly from the nest But I let you go, I birth you into the arms of darkness CHORUS My flickering flame of life was blown out inside Your ashes in my womb imitate lost butterflies They swirl, dance around, falling free, flowing deep in me Your soul now incomplete echoes next to my heartbeat We're beating as one, I hear you cry at night Now all I can hear is your death lullaby Now all I can sing is your death lullaby Words left me except for your death lullaby BRIDGE So tell me why you weren't able to breathe your first breath So tell me what was your first word cause I couldn't hear it I steal the stars from the night time hoping you're one of them I search the locked room in my mind, are you waiting in there? I was attached to your life by a cord of my love But now the cord's invisible and there's nowhere to run CHORUS My flickering flame of life was blown out inside Your ashes in my womb imitate lost butterflies They swirl, dance around, falling free, flowing deep in me Your soul now incomplete echoes next to my heartbeat We're beating as one, I hear you cry at night Now all I can hear is your death lullaby Now all I can sing is your death lullaby Words left me except for your death lullaby POST-CHORUS What have you done with my Sun? God if you're listening My little ray of light, where are you hiding? Edited June 16, 2017 by UFO
Bandito Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 18 minutes ago, UFO said: Ok reading through my song again, I was definitely too morbid and grotesque sorry for making you guys read that I'll try to make my song more uplifting this week! NNnnnn I love how I wrote two sad songs back-to-back and they both flopped, I thought sad songs were my forte I guess I took it TOO far fffff my Alejandro moment I'm still proud of my song this week tho! It included some of the best lines I've ever written tbh. I'll definitely tone it down when I write about more sensitive topics in the future. Thank you for the warning This is more like your Kathy Griffin moment! You took it too far, but you apologize and work on doing better next time! The GP loves a good public image REVIVAL (now on iTunes) so you should be good sis!
UFO Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 (edited) 5 minutes ago, Lane Boy said: This is more like your Kathy Griffin moment! You took it too far, but you apologize and work on doing better next time! The GP loves a good public image REVIVAL (now on iTunes) so you should be good sis! Thank you for the support! Hopefully I won't hold a press conference and back-pedal like a mother****er Edited June 16, 2017 by UFO
UFO Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 Ooh this round is pretty interesting. There's so MANY to choose from! like 4 or something, but still
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 8 minutes ago, ceremonials said: let me keep Hourglass a secret unstanning
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 Verse One Our paths crossed beneath the harsh June sun And I figured they'd diverge in a couple of months You glanced back at me as you walked out of view Because something stopped you, and I felt it too The world around us began to break and bend Then we were alone, and I felt it again And I would have left then, if I'd known before But time was nothing to me anymore. Pre Chorus Will you be on the other side When the sand begins to fall Will you be there in the end? Will you be there at all? Chorus You said you loved me in the summer But will you love me in the fall? There's a girl back home You say you love her But does she know you at all? Verse Two When I woke up, I saw your faint reflection Blurred by grains of sand falling in every direction You looked back again, and I saw you hesitate But you didn't turn back then so all I could do was wait Cause even a broken clock is right twice a day And I could've waited for centuries if I had it my way I didn't know it then, but you were never coming back And it took me too long to realize I'd trapped myself behind the glass Pre Chorus Were we ever aware of time Were we afraid it wouldn't last Did we spend all of it right? What slipped through the cracks? Chorus You said you loved me in the summer But will you love me in the fall? There's a girl back home You say you love her But does she know you at all? Bridge Were we ever aware of time? Did we think ours wouldn't pass? Did we use all of it right? What slipped through the cracks? Were we afraid of time? Were we held down by the past? Did we see our future right Looking through the hourglass? Chorus You said you loved me in the summer But will you love me in the fall? There's a girl back home You say you love her But does she know you at all? Outro And I'm too sick of living on borrowed time You've moved on with your life, and I have to with mine But I'll always remember that look you gave me What the hourglass gave us, and what it had taken
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 There's a few lines I wish I would have changed but oh well ?
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 A seasonal song about nostalgia and lost relationships? Midsummer has been PLAGIARIZED.
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 2 minutes ago, SaintWest said: A seasonal song about nostalgia and lost relationships? Midsummer has been PLAGIARIZED. its about a straight guy, i plagiarized nothing ?
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 i really tried to make the text look like an hourglass too but it looked awkward after i split them up ?
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 7 minutes ago, ceremonials said: its about a straight guy, i plagiarized nothing ? BITCH my song was too
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 Just now, SaintWest said: BITCH my song was too ajhxjhbzjh really
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 3 minutes ago, ceremonials said: ajhxjhbzjh really adfghk yes. it was about a straight boy I fell in love with midsummer who i eventually had to walk away from because i was falling in too deep and i didn't want to wait until i crashed. i'm living for the parallels. straight boys really do give us gorls the drive to produce quality material!
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 Just now, SaintWest said: adfghk yes. it was about a straight boy I fell in love with midsummer who i eventually had to walk away from because i was falling in too deep and i didn't want to wait until i crashed. i'm living for the parallels. straight boys really do give us gorls the drive to produce quality material! True!
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 (edited) 6 minutes ago, ceremonials said: True! SIS i am CACKLIN your entrih's chorus Quote You said you loved me in the summer But will you love me in the fall? my entrih's chorus Quote Before I knew it, midsummer was gone Now I have to face the fall Edited June 16, 2017 by SaintWest
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 Just now, SaintWest said: SIS i am CACKLIN hourglass s.a.d. nnnnnnnnn not midsummer showing up in SAD the full circle
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 4 minutes ago, ceremonials said: nnnnnnnnn not midsummer showing up in SAD the full circle the top two realy did that this week i am so proud
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 3 minutes ago, Corsola said: yas your icon being the iconic man hater also an iconic top 5 this round where? i don't see cor on that list
ceremonials Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 3 minutes ago, Corsola said: yas your icon being the iconic man hater also an iconic top 5 this round did you not submit m
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 Just now, Corsola said: I'd love to say I was busy with work but honestly I was just busy becoming an overwatch legend but it's been working queen show me. i am terrible at it but it's the only video game i've ever loved the best i did was yesterday i played bastion and d.va and won with 27 deaths, 0 kills and 20 deaths, 0 kills. but that was freaky lucky for me.
SaintWest Posted June 16, 2017 Posted June 16, 2017 5 minutes ago, Corsola said: Sombra is my fave but if you play her in ranked then you'll get death threats and people trolling all the time I wouldn't care but my tracking/gun aiming is really bad because I have a shaky hand so I'm not gonna be picking Sombra until I'm at a steady elo I'm still not high rank but I went from bronze (1197 SR) to almost diamond in like 4 days and I'm still climbing rapidly (all with legend mercy) so uh what does ranked mean i just go on and play. i have no idea what all these levels and ranked means
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