Rence Posted July 30, 2021 Posted July 30, 2021 6 hours ago, Aurora said: Thanks for the feedback Rence—I'm glad to hear you liked it, at least conceptually. I'm also pleased you mentioned thematic coherence, because I intend for there to be somewhat of a thread connecting each of the songs (the genesis theme was used in the chorus of a song I wrote earlier in the season, "2", which follows this round's submission in the track list, as well as the consecutive tracks "Riverbed" and "Into My Sea" featuring water imagery, for example). While I do agree that "Aurenaissance I" works better in a for-the-album context than as a standalone piece in comparison to "Aurenaissance II", I do picture "Aurenaissance I" as more of a short album intro, while "Aurenaissance II" would be a longer mid-album interlude bridging the two parts (leading out of "Into My Sea" and into "Creation". My intention was for "Aurenaissance I" to not only establish the tone of the album, but to in turn establish the tone of the song "Genesis" so that it would not be taken at face value having been prefaced by questioning theology, raising doubt, and provoking the reader's own imagination. This is probably giving a bit #AuthenticallyMinimalist but I appreciate the comments and suggestions from all of the judges and should I make it to the next round I will take them on board. This will in all likelihood be my final double entry for the season but it's been fun experimenting with something like this since I haven't actually done it in any other season before. Thank you for this I’ve been rereading all entries wondering if I can understand them more each time and I can say that your explanation definitely helped.
smholiv Posted July 30, 2021 Posted July 30, 2021 I like Highway more too I feel like the concept comes through a bit more effectively
Galah Posted July 30, 2021 Posted July 30, 2021 12 hours ago, Prisoner said: PRISONER - MY WAY 1. Hopelessly Devoted To You 2. One day you're driving your dad's old car 3. Beyond The Backyard Fence 4. A Sea of Daffodils 5. My Way 6. Highway 7. When I Pretend (Bonus Song) Here are the two songs I wrote for the round. I decided to share the one I didn't submit as well since I love them both about the same Highway Hide contents VERSE We'll be chained by their hate forever Unless you have a plan, my dear And something in your eyes tells me, you do We'll be locked in by their gates forever Unless I run away with you And something in my heart tells me, I want to CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be getting our very own exodus VERSE This isn't something I want them to change For it to end and you're just a friend So I pray they don't find out, heaven forbids This isn't a place I want my memories To collect like the scars they inflict So let's sneak away from here like we're kids CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be a part of the great exodus BRIDGE So run and don't look back Don't mind the adrenaline or the suspense The electricity in the fence And the sirens calling out our names CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be a part of what they call exodus OUTRO So run and don't look back The grip of your hand on mine Our bodies shaking like a fault line So run and don't look back The flutter of your brown jacket I'll memorise it like a habit So run and don't look back The shimmer in your black hair Glistening sweat in the evening air So run and don't look back The sounds of cars on the street The heat of the concrete on my feet So run and don't ever look back We made our exodus tonight The smile on your face is like a birthright When I Pretend Hide contents VERSE I'm the antithesis to life's canon A biblical disgrace in a sacred place I don't know if I want part in a fandom That proliferates through their words of hate We used to have fun, tales of Cain and Abel But now I feel like it's all lies and treason Cause I used to love Narnia like the fables Does growing old turn us into demons? PRE CHORUS It's not skepticism It's a little farther where I'd find peace somewhere If I'd just listen CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool VERSE I pray to Jesus because that's my faith So the real problem that I have in hand Isn't the people that calls me desperate But the people revering Trump and Mike Pence A flock constantly preyed on by the wolves Worshipping the hand that bites and then bleeds All over and acts like it's one for the books Spreading the poison, misreading to mislead PRE CHORUS It's not skepticism It's a little farther where I'd find peace somewhere If I'd just listen CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Escape the pain and escape reality As I pretend like everything's cool BRIDGE And people say what they wanna say about me So I close my eyes and I won't hear a thing And then you say all the things you're saying to me So I close my eyes but why do I feel it sting? CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Everyone's hurt and everyone's complaining When I sing the words out like a fool Wait, why is "My Way" followed by "Highway" highkey excellence? Continuity! I also like both of your songs but you made the right call submitting "Highway" for sure. 3 hours ago, Rence said: Thank you for this I’ve been rereading all entries wondering if I can understand them more each time and I can say that your explanation definitely helped. I've been keeping a track list / lyric booklet doc updated weekly after each results but I just realised I never have actually posted it publicly in the thread so of course you wouldn't know what "order" the songs are *meant* to come in. I should do that while we await this round's results.
Galah Posted August 1, 2021 Posted August 1, 2021 Still cooking up something fun and a little bit special... here's a couple teasers while we wait for results.
miguel Posted August 1, 2021 Author Posted August 1, 2021 i am back from the grave! sorry to keep y'all waiting! i will be posting results this afternoon!
miguel Posted August 1, 2021 Author Posted August 1, 2021 Get in! We're doing results a little bit different today! Spoiler @Jackson @Aurora @Prisoner @Auburn
miguel Posted August 1, 2021 Author Posted August 1, 2021 And by different I mean we're starting with the winner today With his first WIN of the season, huge congratulations to... Spoiler @Auburn with "Samson and Samson"
miguel Posted August 1, 2021 Author Posted August 1, 2021 Just now, Auburn said: here to flop well...
miguel Posted August 1, 2021 Author Posted August 1, 2021 At 2nd place, with his third top 3 in a row!!!! we have Spoiler @Prisoner with "Highway"
miguel Posted August 1, 2021 Author Posted August 1, 2021 and finally... we have a TIE for third place! @Jackson @Aurora both of you have done a consistently great job this season, of which I am very proud of, but as some of you have predicted, the next round is the finale, which means we'll have to let one of you go! But what does that mean for both of you? You'll find out in my next post!
miguel Posted August 1, 2021 Author Posted August 1, 2021 Welcome @Aurora and @Jacksonto the tiebreaker challenge, which will decide if you go into the finale or not! For this round, you may write about whatever you want! You have complete and total liberty in that aspect. The catch is, you only have 48 hours to do so. If either of you have limited time for the next two days for whatever personal reason, please let me know as soon as you can and I will give both of you a new challenge instead. If not, then, happy writing and good luck! You have 48 hours to submit your song! Submission form.
Rence Posted August 1, 2021 Posted August 1, 2021 24 minutes ago, Auburn said: here to flop Flop at losing
Auburn Posted August 1, 2021 Posted August 1, 2021 23 minutes ago, Rence said: Flop at losing that doesn't happen every day
Galah Posted August 2, 2021 Posted August 2, 2021 Huge congratulations to Auburn! I really want to read your song now because it sounded lovely from the feedback. Also congrats to Prisoner for making the finale, of course. I'd be lying if I said I didn't see this coming—at least the Top 2 and me being either third or fourth. While I appreciate an extra opportunity to write, and the time constraint won't be an issue for me, I will wait to see how Jackson feels about it before beginning out of respect for a friend who I don't necessarily enjoy being pitted against specifically. Another downside to this seemingly fast-tracked finale is that I assume 8thPrince will be denied a possible comeback opportunity after not submitting this round despite his otherwise extremely impressive performance this season.
smholiv Posted August 2, 2021 Posted August 2, 2021 the colourful/paint splattered aesthetic of those discs is really cool Aurora
smholiv Posted August 2, 2021 Posted August 2, 2021 oh regarding the comeback rules, I believe those usually "end" at the top five, especially with the top 5 being the "critical" point in the game also as far as I know 8th hasn't mentioned anything about participating in it(? not sure though)
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