tournament Song of the Season 3 ? WINNER ANNOUNCED (pg. 137)

[Rence]

Sent  

[ughgabriel]

 

inspired by the spooky aliens round

[Dessy]

On 11/30/2020 at 12:29 PM, ughgabriel said:

Sure, i can give you 48 if it helps

I'll take this cause I JUST got hit with inspiration 

[fountain]

6 hours ago, ughgabriel said:

 

inspired by the spooky aliens round

Oh wow, I remember when this song went #1 on Kepler-452b, this is such a nostalgic experience for me to be listening to it again. It has really been a while. 

[ughgabriel]

18 hours ago, keshaspearsxo said:

Oh wow, I remember when this song went #1 on Kepler-452b, this is such a nostalgic experience for me to be listening to it again. It has really been a while. 

please not kepler-452b jsdkhfsd ⚰️

[ughgabriel]

another one cause i had two days off and we're being productive

 

 

my cinematic attempt

[fountain]

21 minutes ago, ughgabriel said:

another one cause i had two days off and we're being productive

 

 

my cinematic attempt

wait maybe we shouldn't have asked for that extension 

 

this one is my favourite so far though 

[fountain]

Okay I am taking forever, but I am coming, #Masochism2020

 

[Hug]

On 12/1/2020 at 7:20 PM, ughgabriel said:

 

inspired by the spooky aliens round

Part club banger part sci fi horror theme, the collab we didn't know we needed until now!

[Hug]

18 hours ago, ughgabriel said:

another one cause i had two days off and we're being productive

 

 

my cinematic attempt

Also responding to this. Outside of the spooky glitch that happened that one time, I thought this was really gentle, sweet, and nostalgic. ? it'd be perfect for a more...bittersweet moment than pure happiness or sadness.

[ughgabriel]

just waiting on @8thPrince, @Posh Spice and @keshaspearsxo

no pressure though <3

[fountain]

24 minutes ago, ughgabriel said:

just waiting on @8thPrince, @Posh Spice and @keshaspearsxo

no pressure though <3

I submitted around when you posted this, did you get it?

 

I’m making some small alterations in the doc but I’m otherwise done. 
 

[8thPrince]

Sorry for not being around for weeks, i didnt want to drop out so I still submitted 

[Hug]

Lemme just post this because the deadline passed a while ago...!

 

 

This is the instrumental to SIDE-HUG's debut DON'T-ASK-ME, which is a K-Pop girl group inspired Dance Pop song

[fountain]

6 minutes ago, 8thPrince said:

Sorry for not being around for weeks, i didnt want to drop out so I still submitted 

You'll probably serve a Hug and get #1 

 

Self doubt always wins

 

 

 

Hope you are well though 

[fountain]

6 minutes ago, Hug said:

Lemme just post this because the deadline passed a while ago...!

 

 

This is the instrumental to SIDE-HUG's debut DON'T-ASK-ME, which is a K-Pop girl group inspired Dance Pop song

Sabrina did not have to go that hard

 

So, what's the fandom name? 

[Hug]

9 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said:

Sabrina did not have to go that hard

 

So, what's the fandom name? 

They're O-MAGES (pronounced homages) 

 

The O stands represents the popular XO (kiss/hug) symbolism, no X because they don't kiss :x

 

The "MAGES" represents the special hint of magic the girls put into their music and what listeners experience as they listen to the music!

 

O-MAGES looks similar to "IMAGES", and it represents the fact that when SIDE-HUG pictures their dream, they see their fans cheering for them. It's a clear image in their head.

 

It's pronounced like homages, because every song is an homage to the fans who let them live their dream and do what they love. <3

 

(yes, I DID plan this whole thing to make it as convoluted as typical K-Pop group/fan base names)

[fountain]

23 minutes ago, Hug said:

They're O-MAGES (pronounced homages) 

 

The O stands represents the popular XO (kiss/hug) symbolism, no X because they don't kiss :x

 

The "MAGES" represents the special hint of magic the girls put into their music and what listeners experience as they listen to the music!

 

O-MAGES looks similar to "IMAGES", and it represents the fact that when SIDE-HUG pictures their dream, they see their fans cheering for them. It's a clear image in their head.

 

It's pronounced like homages, because every song is an homage to the fans who let them live their dream and do what they love. <3

 

(yes, I DID plan this whole thing to make it as convoluted as typical K-Pop group/fan base names)

I know they will always do their best and show a better self, we are one, SIDE-HUG hwaiting!

[fountain]

9 minutes ago, Posh Spice said:

I’m so sick of you being so iconic

[Hug]

Changed my avi to celebrate upcoming results

[fountain]

[Prisoner]

 

ROUND 8 REVIEWS

 

Good work everyone, it's so hard to judge at this point because it comes down to the tiniest details and you all slayed. 

 

Here are the reviews.

 

Hug - "DON'T-ASK-ME"

Spoiler

 

This is a colourfully written entry. I think this is your second most 'poppiest' entry so far, after Rainbow of the Night which I really love. You managed to make this feel like a real pop song while having a more serious topic/theme and I commend you on that. Verse one has you rhyming 'old' and 'gold' and that is just precious. I feel like you used the 'old is gold' phrase without actually using it, and so help avoid a cliche and at the same time, make the lines read so smooth and natural with a comforting sense of familiarity. 

 

The way the first stanza of the chorus builds up makes this section really fun to read. Going from 'die' to 'goodbye' and 'sign' to 'side' really strengthened the overall flow of this section and actually elevated the ending rhymes here. There's a bit of repetition to it but it's done really well and each line feels like a new layer to the one before. 

 

The bridge here is also really wonderful. I love that little nod to your first song this season, but it's also just very sweet and ethereal and really stands out as a bridge, which makes a really effective bridge. 

 

I do have to say though that I'm not too huge a fan of the 'Don't ask me' repetition because I don't see too much a purpose for it. Repetitions can be beautiful, yes, but the one we have here, especially the one in the pre-chorus doesn't really say anything new after each line or feel like it has a purpose in the context of the song. So for that, I think this kind of drags the song down a bit. 

 

But overall, this is a really strong entry with a really colourful vibe. And that first verse is literally gold, it's one of the finest verses from the songs I've read this season so far. 

 

Favourite line(s):

"Perfection to me isn’t not growing old

It’s having my sun set with someone to hold

Perfection to me isn’t streets paved with gold

It’s paved with our memories and stories we’ve told"

 

 

Rence - "echoed footsteps"

Spoiler

 

This is a really great storytelling entry. The most epic from you so far, in my opinion. The first verse feels very familiar already, but as I read on I realized why. You used all these elements from your previous entries, like the video games, the mother, the crush, etc. to create this piece which feels like the summit of all those songs put together. I'm actually speechless, this is like the 'End Game' to your discography so far (even though I've never actually seen the Avengers movie nnn).

 

I love the detail with the 'sky blue walls' in the pre chorus. It really helped me vividly picture the scene, the line with the '…as the images follow' is a perfect follow up to the former and just reads so naturally. It is also the perfect pre chorus because the chorus has you mentioning the colour of the blue of the world being stripped away. This really really strengthened the progression of the song but also the chorus is really great too which helps the transition feel even much greater. 

 

The entirety of the song has you mentioning or referencing all these past songs of yours, and presenting these memories of the past as 'echoed footsteps' is really really brilliant. I'm shook. 

 

I only have one nitpick, I feel like the ending line could be phrased better by using a metaphor or something like 'cause my twenties is a nightmare that will eternally last' or something but that's it. 

 

Overall, excellent work, brilliant work, amazing work! You did a really really great job and should be proud. 

 

Favourite line(s):

The whole thing tbh. 

 

 

funnellegs - "summer is forever"

Spoiler

 

At this point in the game, I've noticed that your signature style is these short lines packed with imagery and which is usually accompanied by a hint of emotion.  And this one has all that too. I really like the calm vibe of this song. It feels almost religious even, the longing for a place that is just free of pain and suffering. 

 

The use of the Sun to portray God is a really good choice. It really adds to the warm tone we have here in the song. It feels very comforting and sets a really nice colour to the reading experience. It also helps that there were civilizations worshipping the sun so the narration felt very natural. 

 

The chorus or whatever it is that has the 'summer so sweet' section is just amazing and cleverly crafted. The imagery here is super super powerful. Digging ourselves to a grave so deep we die but then sailing away to a place where we can breathe, this is just so so beautiful to picture, and the lines are written so neatly and perfectly. 

 

I do think the song needed a little bit more to really make me feel 'that' emotion, you know. We have the line 'Nothing else could feel quite like this' but there's not enough here to portray said feeling in my opinion.

 

But this is another good entry from you, it's not 'The Seafarer' in terms of making me feel like I'm in a safe haven, but it's still an amazingly written entry and has such beautiful imagery packed, as usual from you. 

 

Favourite line(s):

"how is this summer so sweet? 

we dug ourselves a grave so deep.

but in death we were set free,

sailed to a place where we could breathe."

 

 

Dessy - "Nuclear Wheel of Damocles (Vainglory of the Ten Tenacious Sins)"

Spoiler

 

I think if I'd read this elsewhere I'd still know it was from you since this entry has all the elements that really make it a 'Dessy' song. It's a really unique style for this competition and I think you've really managed to find a signature voice. 

 

I get a sense of urgency and war like picture from this song. It's a bit confusing yes, but I like it for that very reason too. The chorus here is just two lines but it still somehow feels very epic with the lava and Mordor imagery followed by the '10,000 shooting stars in the air which just is really nice to read. There's a really hardcore tone to this and I can imagine something like electric guitars going off in the background nnn. This vibe continues onto the second verse which is a really good verse imo since this section greatly complemented the chorus and also helps provide a bit more clarity to the song. 

 

While I do enjoy the song, however I feel like this is a little too in its own world for someone to truly immerse himself into it. This could make a whole lot of sense when considering your canon but as an entry itself, reading it could feel like being randomly placed into the scene and not understanding what any of it means. It's actually very fun to read this, but it's just that I wish there were more. 

 

Overall, I think you've really come into your own. And this 'Ten Tenacious' saga you've been doing is one of the most fun things I've witnessed in the competition, I've been engrossed each time and keep wanting to see what's next. Good work!

 

Favourite line(s):

"See the great circle of death and grey with the lava from Mordor

10,000 shooting stars in the air, I think there’s even more"

 

 

keshaspearsxo - "I W t M W F C a G"

Spoiler

 

Okay firstly, I didn't watched your explanation beyond the first few seconds because I feared something would jump up to scare me. So there's that. I apologise if I missed any important details. 

 

This is quite a philosophical entry, I really like the nature of the song. I interpret this as a work that compares between the perfect and the imperfect, Heaven and Earth, God and Man, etc. especially with the first verse where the two stanzas portray different things and of which I think is a really effective thing and helped set the tone for the song. It's a really nice approach. 

 

The chorus here is greatly crafted. The mentioning of 'tools' that we have but not doing anything with them to make the world perfect really hits hard. I find this chorus to be really universal and something many people can connect to. This section is written the most simple but it's the most that grabbed my attention and the most that I love. 

 

That being said, I think this song drags out for far longer than needed to be. There were parts that I feel are filler and could've been replaced with new perspectives or something. I think going at the same thing for circles can really help hit the point but it'd have helped a lot approaching it from multiple angles. 

 

But this is still a really good entry. I enjoyed reading this a lot and that chorus will stick in mind for a long long time. Good work! 

 

Favourite line(s):

The chorus, but specifically the first stanza. 

 

 

Posh Spice - "Hot Girl Saturn" (feat. Megan Thee Stallion, Doja Cat, & Lady Gaga) 

Spoiler

 

This is the first lyrical work I've ever read that contains ? in it so you really did a great job at making your entry stand out yet once again. This is a really fun entry. 

 

I actually enjoy the collaboration you decided to do here, I thought the names here were just for aesthetics but you actually used them and their characters and persona. That's some nice work there. I can actually picture Doja singing some of those lines. 

 

Now I don't really enjoy the Lady Gaga chorus but the verses with Doja, Posh and Megan were so so fun to read. Each line is packed with tons of energy which I love, and the flow is quite good too. The song here is full of PINK, at least that's what I think you meant it to be, and I could almost hear the colours of the song, it's that loud and bright. So in that sense I think you did a great job at painting the scenes and imagery. That Ichigo and hollows line also added variety to the song, and even though I don't think Bleach is that popular of a show to be mere references in a song, I personally really enjoyed those parts. 

 

However, the Lady Gaga chorus in my opinion, felt very weak to me. This would make sense if it were a full song with production I think, but it's a little bare here. I think your entry would've been a lot better if you just omitted this part and incorporated the elements of this chorus in the verses or elsewhere. 

 

Overall, I really had fun reading this entry. You brought camp once again and did not disappoint at all. Good job!

 

Favourite line(s):

"Might send you straight to hell like a reaper to ya soul,

Nobody boutta eat me out, I don't need no Icihigo, 

Miss me with the love interest, I just wanna kill a hollow, 

Bitch this ain't a nut, there ain't no reason you can't swallow,"

 

 

8th Prince - "Who Owns The Sky"

Spoiler

 

Dudeeeee the concept! This song! I'm literally squeaking. Who knew you'd come up with this when I thought you weren't gonna submit for a second there. Anyway I'm glad you submitted because this is so so good. I never knew I could get so excited reading lyrics about a drum. 

 

The first verse is brilliant. Just imagining God stretching a drumhead over the top of Mt Sinai to Taipei 101 just makes for such a grand and beautiful imagery. This epicness goes into the pre chorus where we drape banners from the Himalayas' summit and all those other things which are just so wonderfully dramatic and grand. 

 

Then when I thought that's how the song is going to go, you switched it up in the chorus and post chorus and changed the entire course of the song into another boulevard of pure awesomeness. You went from setting the scene into kicking off a whole entire story with just these first four sections alone. And not only that, the 2nd verse, the bridge, everything is a natural progression to the section before and every scene just rose and crumbled as your words come and go. I think I got a little bit dramatic here but it literally is so good I can't not. 

 

I also really love that you used a whole metaphor here to depict human greed and the ignorance of mankind. Even if there were such a simple thing as a drum that would enable world peace, the world would still be fighting over it. You accompany this concept with these really beautiful and grand imagery which really helped make the song feel 'big' and come to life. Those banners in the Himalayas, those black sands covering the beach, the drum, Manhattan's horizon crumbling, etc. everything here just works. 

 

Overall, I'm really impressed and think this is your best work so far. You did a really really wonderful job here. Just excellent. 

 

Favourite line(s):

Literally the whole thing.

 

 

@Hug @Rence @funnellegs @Dessy @keshaspearsxo @Posh Spice @8thPrince

[Prisoner]

[Hug]

The way I wasn't meaning to reference the "old is gold" saying, but...if it works out that way, that's how it works. ? I think the verses feeling strong is a good sign because a lot of pop songs kind of have verses that serve as excuses to get to the chorus and that annoys me a bit  

 

I do get the don't ask me repetition being kinda...filler-y. It was part of my attempt to make this feel like a real pop song with multiple hooks and all that, but reading it just doesn't have as much of an impact as it would listening to it.

 

I appreciate your review, Prisoner.

[funnellegs]

Thank you @Prisoner always appreciate your thoughtful reviews