SaintWest Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 Not me continually borderline flopping every round.
Temporal Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 11 minutes ago, swiftie13 said: Finally bitches im back Damn
SaintWest Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 On 1/19/2017 at 10:46 PM, Temporal said: HINTS 8thPrince - The Wiggles Achilles - Cold Chisel Auburn - Cold Chisel (again) Aurora - Jessica Mauboy Ceremonials - The Wiggles Citrus - INXS Corsola - Violent Soho Dylobs - Tame Impala funnellegs - Nick Cave & the Bad Seeds Gladion - illy Jackson - Keith Urban jpow - Hillsong Worship Kunst - Play School MattyTacos - Delta Goodrem SaintWest - Sia Speezy - Guy Sebastian swiftie13 - Ashleigh Dallas TheCheetahWings - Flume UFO - Isaiah ughgabriel - Crowded House Wow @ me getting a new page too! What kind of acclaim.
Jackson Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 Cupid has the AUDACITY to off us at 5 WPs but can't even write reviews?
ughgabriel Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 Ok @ jackson getting another #1 slay bitch I missed getting into this thread
ughgabriel Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 1 minute ago, Jackson said: Cupid has the AUDACITY to off us at 5 WPs but can't even write reviews? +1
Temporal Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 19 minutes ago, Corsola said: @Temporal You already heard but I took issues with your review and I'd like to explain why. Usually with your critiques I don't mind because I can see the point behind what you say and that was still the case here with certain parts like the rhymes I had in verse 2/cruel tornado but there's one major part of your review that's objectively wrong. I take huge issue with my song about a mother raising and protecting her child from their abusive father being written off as some cliche love song. I could go way more in depth on this and why I feel that it didn't read as a love song at all but I'm not gonna post a big wall of text as soon as I get on atrl but if you want me to explain deeper I definitely will. Also at this part: “I'm a cherry blossom tree” if you want to use a metaphor, you shouldn’t blatantly tell us “HEY THIS IS WHAT I’M TRYING TO DO!!!!” We probably would’ve gotten it with the rest of the 1st verse by itself anyways. I don't take issue with this either but I genuinely don't understand what you meant so it'd be nice to hear some clarification. First off I think it's funny and ironic that one of my metaphors seemed too blatant considering what I said above But anyway, I felt it'd be appropriate to list her as a tree since I'm gonna talk about strengthening her roots and her seed and her branches etc. I don't really know what else I'd put there since if I just remove it completely, a lot of stuff in the first verse actually ISN'T clear at all so that's why this confused me. 3 Reading your song back, I decided to just write you a new(ish) review. Corsola - Wooden Branches This song was pretty good, there was a lot of potential here, but I think you needed to look at the song as a bigger picture to stitch everything together. So the biggest complaint overall that I would have is that the imagery didn't feel very natural, or it wasn't used as well as it could've been. The birds in the 1st verse seem to be there purely to go with the tree motif (they don't seem to represent anything, if you want to say the birds are the mother's other children, that would be a bit weird since the child you're writing the song to/about is a seed, do you see what I mean?). The sun and moon imagery in the 2nd verse was a bit out of place with the rest of the song, and saying that you're the "sun" when the whole song focuses on you being a tree made the overall metaphor feel a bit lacking (not to mention that trees and something fire-y like the sun makes the idea of you being both of them at once feel conflicted). “I'm a cherry blossom tree” if you want to use a metaphor, you shouldn’t blatantly tell us “HEY THIS IS WHAT I’M TRYING TO DO!!!!” We probably would’ve gotten it with the rest of the 1st verse by itself anyways. The reason I was probably most confused by this entry at first was that the "he" you bring in the 2nd verse is just really jarring. I think you should hint more at things being amiss in the first verse to make this feel a bit more logical. Not to mention the "he" could've been anybody since you don't establish that familial relationship in the same way you do with the mother. If you want that to be up for the audience's interpretation, cool, but if you want them to really get the family aspect of this which you seemingly do, that would be something to consider. The 2nd verse was not done very well; ex. you rhymed “moon” with “soon” and “skies” with “sky” “He is just a cruel tornado” “cruel tornado” feels a bit cheesy
Temporal Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 If anyone didn't or doesn't find their review from my helpful at ANY point, you can always ask me for more feedback. I'm only here to help
Speezy Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Category:Songs_written_by_Guy_Sebastian oop seen my review now that you mention the non-meter presence. Guy does carry alot of non-meter existence in a couple of his tracks.
Hug Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 I'm glad I am not one of the girls panicking over the new rules. It doesn't change how I use the site at all.
Jackson Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 I'm not ALWAYS at 5-6 points, but I definitely am one or two times a year when the swifties are trying iT. The new rules are without a doubt extra but whatever They'll realize sooner rather than later
Hug Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 They also extended some WP expiration times, like abrasive is 60 days now. Anyway, the changes don't apply to me (or, they do but they don't change anything for me) so I guess that's why I'm fine with it. I also think this is a very knee-jerk reaction and people will get over it. (That, or people will leave and the site will be faster so tbh they can go.)
ceremonials Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 Wat are the new rules Also go post in the p100 thread
fountain Posted January 22, 2017 Author Posted January 22, 2017 @Hugamari@Temporal send me your scores rats!
Hug Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 Is rat a nickname? Reported! 4 more and you're OUT sis! No, but sending it now.
SaintWest Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 When you're an angel and have never had any WPs. Talent always wins.
Jackson Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 I don't like the username nickname rule. It's like a PH staple
ughgabriel Posted January 22, 2017 Posted January 22, 2017 3 minutes ago, keshaspearsxo said: @hugamari @temporal send me your scores rats! Tell'em baby
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