ughgabriel Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Was expecting to see some action on your instagram story :(
Galah Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Welp. The hopefully. Getting bottom of the barrel teas from this review. But thanks @Temporal.
UFO Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 (edited) Quote This was oddly straightforward for you, but I welcome it! I think it shows your versatility, really. Thanks @Hugamari! This is exactly what I was aiming for I think the fact that I wrote the song so quick and the fact that rhymes were not allowed helped me to focus on executing the song well instead of incorporating a cluster**** of ideas. I used to think rhymes encouraged my creativity but, after doing this challenge, I've realised that rhymes can actually be a limitation. I really tried to embody the emotion of the song and write through that rather than writing what I thought sounded nice or write a lyric just so that it fits rhythmically. I do agree that it was a bit long though alkflakgj I am Euphoressay for a reason It was originally shorter but I added some more verses because I thought the development didn't flow as well (e.g. the development from the first verse to the bridge wouldn't have been as effective/natural if not for the other verses), but I'll take that into account next time Edited January 29, 2017 by UFO
Hug Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 I'm glad someone saw the lack of rhymes as an opportunity, rather than a limitation.
funnellegs Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Thank you for the feedback Hug, if I get through I promise I'm gonna change it up.
Temporal Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 7 hours ago, 8thPrince said: @Temporal when writing his reviews: Temp: This review looks... off... "egregious" Ffff bitch
Auburn Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 7 hours ago, Hugamari said: @Auburn - Nuisance So...what is this about? It would be really interesting if this was from the perspective of someone who was having a mental conflict about themselves if they are a boy or a girl. That’s what I was getting, but I can’t really tell. Either way, I thought this was forgettable, and a bit phoned in? Wow I wish my idea was that deep. This song was written about my recurring strep throat that won't ****ing go away I don't think my song was good either but I needed to submit something
SaintWest Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 (edited) @TemporalI thought this was my best song I submitted so far. Would you maybe mind going in depth a little more so I know what didn't work? Also if you're talking about the rhyme being ten/head, idk but I asked several people and they didn't think it rhymed. Edited January 29, 2017 by SaintWest
Hug Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 @8thPrince - Shelter You killed it. You kept your theme consistent throughout, and even though the idea of getting caught in the rain with someone is far from novel, I couldn't help but feel that the way you presented it was refreshing. Once again, you have some lines that I can not help but enjoy ("we're stranded by the storm / it makes an island on the ground we stand on", for example, was such a highlight for me due to it being a simple idea illustrated so creatively.) One thing I do want to comment on was you saying "rain" in two lines in a row in verse two, but this is relatively minor considering how much I enjoyed everything else (especially the two lines after it, I liked the word choice <3) From beginning to end, you knew what you were doing, and it obviously shows.
ughgabriel Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 I just found out that a new FJM album is coming in April and I couldn't be happier! You know, unless we had some more reviews
Kelp Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 11 minutes ago, ughgabriel said: I just found out that a new FJM album is coming in April and I couldn't be happier! You know, unless we had some more reviews Yaaaasssssss
ATRL Moderator khalyan Posted January 29, 2017 ATRL Moderator Posted January 29, 2017 Quote @jpow - Being Myself I can’t seem to decide what I think of this song. On one hand, I love the social commentary. It’s open, yet very tongue in cheek. On the other hand, the second verse effectively tells me you want to quit? I can’t give you a bad score based solely on the fact that you want to quit. If you want to, just do it. Regardless, this stood out. Take that how you will. I wanted it to seem like those thoughts happen every week, because they honestly do. But if I wanted to quit, I wouldn't have submitted a song this week and I wrote this with kinda the same idea of Element's song about being late a few seasons ago - something quirky and tongue in cheek and honest about the contestants problems in the competition but still trying to make it into an actual song to make it work. Hope that makes sense.
Jackson Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 I've woken up and fallen asleep about 5 times this morning
ughgabriel Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 (edited) Quote And how's this for irony Their idea of being free is a prison of beliefs They've every right to never leave WIG Edited January 29, 2017 by ughgabriel
Jackson Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 I also had a dream that one of my best friend's husbands was trying to sleep with me and send me dick pics. I think I have a R6 concept!
UFO Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 aljga I keep thinking it's Tymps posting all this ****
Hug Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Honestly, I've had some brilliant ideas like every morning when I first woke up for like a week. My idea this morning was making an ATRL game based on Saw.
UFO Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Just now, Hugamari said: Honestly, I've had some brilliant ideas like every morning when I first woke up for like a week. My idea this morning was making an ATRL game based on Saw. omg yess!!! copyright it before someone steals it, like how they stole ATRL Bingo from me
Denim Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 I'd be here for the first ever performance of telephone
Jackson Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 I think Element came up with Bingo first for Let's Spoon
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