Denim Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 1 minute ago, Temporal said: Why did so many of y'all choose to do that thing where y'all repeat the same line multiple times in the same verse/throughout the song? call me out
ceremonials Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 4 minutes ago, Temporal said: Why did so many of y'all choose to do that thing where y'all repeat the same line multiple times in the same verse/throughout the song? I didn't, I deserve points for originality
Achilles. Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 19 minutes ago, Temporal said: Why did so many of y'all choose to do that thing where y'all repeat the same line multiple times in the same verse/throughout the song? Because it's the closest we could come to using rhymes? nervous for my reviews.
ceremonials Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Trying not to rhyme was so hard so I feel y'all
Aurora Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Thanks for the review @Hugamari. I feel the same way about the things you commented on. 41 minutes ago, Temporal said: Why did so many of y'all choose to do that thing where y'all repeat the same line multiple times in the same verse/throughout the song? Well for me as soon as rhymes were banned, the best ways to capture the song vibe were a recurring motif or extended metaphor (and I tried to incorporate both). Nobody wants the dreaded 'this read more like a poem than a song' critique!
Temporal Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 His snapchat doesn't have his birthday either
Jackson Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Yeah, I tried to find ways to replace the repetition rhyming provides in another form but fortunately I didn't repeat any lines/words
Kelp Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 I keep thinking I posted all this dumb **** because you all stole my avi
Cupid Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 They played Roar in this bar tonight and I legit sang Brave by accident.
Temporal Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Literally who would steal a Tymps avi, so reductive
ughgabriel Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Join us https://www.dubtrack.fm/join/platinumhitz
Cupid Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 Also Kesha really did that with Timber, I miss when pop girls just made fun songs and everything wasn't so serious.
Jackson Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 16 minutes ago, ughgabriel said: Join us https://www.dubtrack.fm/join/platinumhitz be there in 30 minutes
Aurora Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 29 minutes ago, Cupid said: Also Kesha really did that with Timber, I miss when pop girls just made fun songs and everything wasn't so serious. Stan her best feature! Charitable queen giving Pitbull his biggest WW hit to date.
TheCheetahwings Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 4 hours ago, Hugamari said: I’m disappointed. This, to me, read like every other one of your failed relationship songs when the chorus could’ve EASILY been about a dead child. **** I would’ve given that a 10 so fast. “You found a ladder climbing into the sky / And I knew you weren’t meant to stay here” like um hello dead child this is Hugamari speaking and I’m LIVING for this concept. At any rate, this was you but without rhymes. I hope you can be more adventurous next week. <3 (EDIT: I meant your songs were about relationships that didn't work out, not that your songs themselves were failures! I figured I needed to clarify that because of the way I stated the beginning of my review.) I def agree that it was a bit samey I just tend to gravitate towards similar themes because I don't usually write anything aside from my own experiences.
fountain Posted January 29, 2017 Author Posted January 29, 2017 3 hours ago, Jackson said: keshaspearsxo There's only one elim sooooooo 3:18PM Report oh Well 2 people dropped out so
Temporal Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 10 minutes ago, Jackson said: remember when hunter said reviews tonight I'm going to need you to stop attacking me I have like one more to do for the first batch but I'm procrastinating
Hug Posted January 29, 2017 Posted January 29, 2017 @ceremonials A lot of the time, the metaphors you chose didn't pertain to chess. For instance, when you talk about the son, you use seed/forest metaphors. I do not get how it pertains to chess. I can see chess about half the time, and although I get that writing the whole song would be hard just using chess metaphors, I think in general, you should've either stuck with that theme through and through or had some lines without metaphors at all. This is unrelated to my comment about the metaphors, but I think a bit of light as to how she got into this situation would've been nice. This isn't exactly an every day situation.
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