ATRL Moderator khalyan Posted January 27, 2017 ATRL Moderator Posted January 27, 2017 2 minutes ago, ughgabriel said: Yes. Edit: No? what?! I TOLD Y'ALL LAST NIGHT --- Anyway, I have a new concept. Verse one, chorus, and bridge are almost gone. I know it'll get me eliminated but kii I'm trying
ATRL Moderator khalyan Posted January 27, 2017 ATRL Moderator Posted January 27, 2017 (edited) here to stay, here to slay Edited January 27, 2017 by jpow
ughgabriel Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 The thing is "Because Of You" was used as an example and since she repeats that over and over I thought it was acceptable to end the line with the same word. Ugh, I'm ****** Will try to resubmit though
fountain Posted January 27, 2017 Author Posted January 27, 2017 Post your example and I'll tell you if it's ok or not
ughgabriel Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 Mine are basically these two: I shaped you imperfect And contoured you unloved You designed me the same Filled with regret And feeling unloved Black mirror, black mirrorReflect your pain on me Black mirror, black mirrorReflect your hate on me
fountain Posted January 27, 2017 Author Posted January 27, 2017 3 minutes ago, ughgabriel said: Mine are basically these two: I shaped you imperfect And contoured you unloved You designed me the same Filled with regret And feeling unloved Black mirror, black mirrorReflect your pain on me Black mirror, black mirrorReflect your hate on me I'd say change the second one
ughgabriel Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 Ok I will just delete the last two lines nn thanks baby
Achilles. Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 My song would be so damn good if it was allowed to rhyme. I'm gonna edit a second version with the rhymes and use that as my real song. This rhymeless nonsense can be a Diamond Hits Exclusive tbh.
ughgabriel Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 3 minutes ago, Jackson said: Still haven't started XD But you can write a song in like 15 minutes and still slay, us the ungifted take four hours to write something
fountain Posted January 27, 2017 Author Posted January 27, 2017 Just now, Achilles. said: My song would be so damn good if it was allowed to rhyme. I'm gonna edit a second version with the rhymes and use that as my real song. This rhymeless nonsense can be a Diamond Hits Exclusive tbh. I fail to understand why rhyming would make such a difference
ughgabriel Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 2 minutes ago, Achilles. said: My song would be so damn good if it was allowed to rhyme. I'm gonna edit a second version with the rhymes and use that as my real song. This rhymeless nonsense can be a Diamond Hits Exclusive tbh. Literally same
UFO Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 I wasn't planning on submitting tbh but let me see if I can cook a little something up
fountain Posted January 27, 2017 Author Posted January 27, 2017 1 minute ago, Corsola said: I'm actually surprised no rhymes is a new challenge. I felt like it would've been a challenge way earlier I'm not sure if it is or not
SaintWest Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 @ everyone posting repeatedly about not starting yet
fountain Posted January 27, 2017 Author Posted January 27, 2017 The next challenge is a pretty popular one
UFO Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 (edited) Btw @keshaspearsxo are internal rhymes okay or is it strictly no rhymes? Example 1: I can't feel it something something something I can't heal the something something something Example 2: I can feel it start to heal I can't see what I want to be Are any of the above acceptable or nah? I use internal rhymes so much, it feels so natural to me 9 minutes ago, Corsola said: Yas please sis Already started working on it lol I only have 2 and a half hours left but I've written some of my best songs in under an hour, so we'll see Edited January 27, 2017 by UFO
fountain Posted January 27, 2017 Author Posted January 27, 2017 1 minute ago, UFO said: Btw @keshaspearsxo are internal rhymes okay or is it strictly no rhymes? Example 1: I can't feel it something something something I can't heal the something something something Example 2: I can feel it start to heal I can't see what I want to be Are any of the above acceptable or nah? I use internal rhymes so much, it feels so natural to me Already started working on it lol I only have 2 and a half hours left but I've written some of my best songs in under an hour, so we'll see No
TheCheetahwings Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 I finished but I'm expecting to be dragged
UFO Posted January 27, 2017 Posted January 27, 2017 Just now, keshaspearsxo said: No alright, thanks!
fountain Posted January 27, 2017 Author Posted January 27, 2017 1 minute ago, UFO said: alright, thanks! Sry!
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