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@ultraviolence.xx thank u for the lovely review :hug: 

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@Hug I'll ask you because I feel more comfortable talking to you than other mods. Do threadbans ever get lifted? :skull: 

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Just now, UFO said:

@Hug I'll ask you because I feel more comfortable talking to you than other mods. Do threadbans ever get lifted? :skull: 

It really...depends on the severity. By default, they last two weeks. If two weeks pass and it doesn't get lifted, make a post in HQ or send a HR.

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11 minutes ago, Hug said:

It really...depends on the severity. By default, they last two weeks. If two weeks pass and it doesn't get lifted, make a post in HQ or send a HR.

Thank you! :heart2:  I'll just wait it out. nn at least it wasn't her album thread. :chick3: 

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33 minutes ago, Corsola said:

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me reading ur song

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25 minutes ago, UFO said:

THANK YOU :chick3:

 @ultraviolence.xx :weeps:  :weeps: I really need this right now! :chick3::heart2::heart2: 

 

also had to google some words :toofunny3:  but YAS, king of maximalism!!!! :weeps:  :party: :weeps:  you're reminding me of the great sis @Meowster, making my song sound much better than it actually is :jonny:  :jonny:  THANK YOU :heart2: yes! I try to stick to a central metaphor as much as possible and I was WAY worse with that in the past, but I still love veering out here and there into other imagery. omg :heart2:  STAN "And my thoughts kept rising / And my heart kept hunting / And the waves kept charging" I love that part too. and I love the lyric you chose! not gonna lie, writing the bridge made me VERY emotional. :emofish: :laugh:

ahh i'm so glad you liked it! yeah, the bridge felt very raw. glad you slayed!

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26 minutes ago, Auburn said:

@ultraviolence.xx thank u for the lovely review :hug: 

you're welcome! thank you for the lovely song :hug:  

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1 hour ago, UFO said:

I'm lowkey upset :emofish:  ATRL is way too conservative and restricting in my opinion, and there's literally SO many people being messy. ajfasfakajs hopefully I'm not the only one thread-banned because that's seriously crappy. :skull::chick3: 

 

Like people literally posted that they're happy Avicii's death is not affecting Ari's comeback single and I'm the one who gets thread-banned for posting this pic of Frankie:

 

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That's...messy :rip: Let me confront the base and see whats up

someone who really hates frankie prolly did it

 

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also i have no clue what flower im using nnn

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5 minutes ago, Gastrodonatella said:

we got like 75 pages from round 1 and now we're on round 2 and hurricane discord killed the ratings :ahh: 

even my late reviews couldn't save them

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My reviews having no ratings

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Just now, swiftie13 said:

My reviews having no ratings

honestly i didn't even know you posted them dkjahsdf i never saw them

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Me snatching a Top 3 hit with an experimental R&B influenced breakup song. Lemme call Tamar and Babyface for this flower round.

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1 minute ago, Citrus said:

Me snatching a Top 3 hit with an experimental R&B influenced breakup song. Lemme call Tamar and Babyface for this flower round.

me still nutting at verse 2

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I can't believe I finished my song before basically every contestant :dancehall: 

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1 minute ago, Hug said:

I can't believe I finished my song before basically every contestant :dancehall: 

aksjdhf i'm about to read it

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Is there someone I can send the first draft of my song to x

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I think I'm gonna take a risk with rhythm of the song. I'm gonna try this thing when in one line you end the sentence/thought and begin other. Lorde style. 

Posted
23 minutes ago, ultraviolence.xx said:

me still nutting at verse 2

Baby you need to edge more 

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7 minutes ago, Citrus said:

Baby you need to edge more 

im edging through the first two stanzas and then in the chorus i lose it a little and then BAM v2: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VLnWf1sQkjY

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2 hours ago, ultraviolence.xx said:

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THIS WEEK'S TRACK REVIEWS

 

This post rounds up our reviews of the final quarter of this week's chart debuts. For earlier quarters, check previous digital issues.

 

@Alesus – "Void"

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alesus debuts with “void (veer off into darkness).”

okay i’m slain right off the bat by some of these images. you clearly have a love of wordplay that comes through in the way you write. fractals and flames and murky water, whew.

i liked that you capitalized Mother in the chorus, gave it sort of a superlative feeling, but that cap was missing in the verse and it would’ve been cool to have them both.

the main issue with this song is it feels more poem-y than song-y; it needs a more rigid syllable structure. my wig is already levitating imagining you bring this level of imagery and concept to a song with stronger meter. (also +2,000,000PHU for the lana reference “i will never sing again,” unless it wasn’t intentional, in which case no score increase.)

 

favorite part: “fractals burst through the twilight”; “time is dead and all is hurting”; “let go, forget, be still / journey quietly into the night”

 

 

Thanks for the feedback! I definitely will spend more time on my next entry so everything is cohesive. I think I focused on the imagery a bit too much with Void, therefore neglecting my meter and the overall story. 

 

And of course I stan for the legendary Swan Song. Truly an album highlight :jonny5:

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1 minute ago, Alesus said:

 

Thanks for the feedback! I definitely will spend more time on my next entry so everything is cohesive. I think I focused on the imagery a bit too much with Void, therefore neglecting my meter and the overall story. 

 

And of course I stan for the legendary Swan Song. Truly an album highlight :jonny5:

you're welcome! can't wait to see!

 

and whew!

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41 minutes ago, Body Talk⠀ said:

does someone wanna read mine and give feedback before i possibly ruin my chances of going further? ddd :-*

Sure sis, we on another mentality

 

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i just wanna break up all your ****

call your mama phone, let her know that she raised a bitch

then dial tone, click

 

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ISLAND

UFO

 

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Spoiler

 

INTRO

I learned to never let go of me

Even when the sun burned

And the waves kept charging

 

VERSE

Pretty faces took over my dreams

Ugly hearts that I could never see

It was all superficial, not concrete

Everybody be faking, fooling me

And I was tempted by the sweet air

That I couldn’t taste the salty water

 

VERSE

I never realised who they truly are

‘Til they got what they want, ruined my heart

I wish I stormed their clouds, destroyed their stars

I wish I rained them down and drowned their lungs

But they were already scattered and gone

And I was still very shattered and lost

 

CHORUS

I learned to never let go of me

Even when the sun burned

And the waves kept charging

Island, with no one out there at sea

Alone, I fought with myself

I saw myself differently

And my thoughts kept rising

And my heart kept hunting

And the waves kept charging

Island, with no one out there at sea

I learned I was my own rescue team

 

VERSE

They broke away and left me here to bleed

But it’s not about them it’s about me

Isolation’s now my territory

With anguish I created a new scene

Air is not as sweet, the earth spins slower

My mind remembers but my heart’s freer

 

CHORUS

I learned to never let go of me

Even when the sun burned

And the waves kept charging

Island, with no one out there at sea

Alone, I fought with myself

I saw myself differently

And my thoughts kept rising

And my heart kept hunting

And the waves kept charging

Island, with no one out there at sea

I learned I was my own rescue team

 

BRIDGE

It hurts to be your own worst enemy

And to cast yourself away 

When you’ve already been stranded

You’ve been deserted, damaged

You’ve been abandoned by the world

You’ve been convinced you don’t deserve

For once to cry with a smile on your face

Instead of hiding away

You’re always hiding away

 

It hurts to be your own worst enemy

When you’ve already been stranded

Deserted, damaged, abandoned

No more hiding away

 

CHORUS

I learned to never let go of me

Even when the sun burned

And my thoughts kept rising

And my heart kept hunting

And the waves kept charging

And the waves kept charging

Island, with no one out there at sea

Island, with no one to bring me peace

And the birds kept calling

As they all kept flying

And my heart kept wanting

To be free

I learned I was my own rescue team

I learned to never let go of me

 

 

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If I end up not doing reviews this week...or ever again...y'all know why...

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