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1 minute ago, ultraviolence.xx said:

it's just how i type :ahh: i can fix it if it's obnoxious but i ain't used caps in years :alexz2: 

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I decided to admit that I like "...Ready For It?" because it's basically what I wanted from Taylor. :rip: Her white girl rap and it not taking itself so seriously >>> also the vocoded bridge is a huge PLUS for me. I just wish the chorus was...different. The rest of the song is so hard-hitting and ~edgy~ and the chorus has a safe poppy sound to not completely alienate her fan base, and I understand that it could be done for the juxtaposition of it, but personally I'm not really into really peppy bubbly choruses, if it had the same sort of dark, brooding feeling the rest of the song had I'd probably love it.

 

Anyway, yes this is my review of "...Ready For It?" and overall I like it more than anything I've heard from Taylor since..Style probably, but I only like the instrumental of that song.

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1 minute ago, Hug said:

I decided to admit that I like "...Ready For It?" because it's basically what I wanted from Taylor. :rip: Her white girl rap and it not taking itself so seriously >>> also the vocoded bridge is a huge PLUS for me. I just wish the chorus was...different. The rest of the song is so hard-hitting and ~edgy~ and the chorus has a safe poppy sound to not completely alienate her fan base, and I understand that it could be done for the juxtaposition of it, but personally I'm not really into really peppy bubbly choruses, if it had the same sort of dark, brooding feeling the rest of the song had I'd probably love it.

 

Anyway, yes this is my review of "...Ready For It?" and overall I like it more than anything I've heard from Taylor since..Style probably, but I only like the instrumental of that song.

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32 minutes ago, Covergirl said:

Me when I get my weekly "bUt FEfE wroTe iT for YOu" comment

 

 

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batch two x

 

@mxtthewdelrey, “Misjudged” (REHAB)

 

Okay, I do really get Amy vibes from this song. I think she was one of the harder artists to pull off, so it’s really impressive that you were able to pull it off even when your styles are so drastically different. So props for that. There were a few missteps here and there, particularly the “cares” line and the underwear line. They just seemed really forced and out of place in a song like this. Apart from that though, I don’t have much to say. This was definitely my fave song from you this far, and I hope to see more of this toned down version of you in the future, because I think it fits you quite well. Although maybe it’s just for this challenge?

 

@Nait Phoenix, “Hubris” (REID)

 

Okay wow, someone did finally did twenty one pilots. And they pulled it off! Extremely well, I might add. This definitely sounds like it would be sung by 21p, and that’s even if we ignore the subject at hand. The way it’s written with all the commas and such just screams 21p. My only real complaints would be that the chorus was a little anticlimactic - maybe cause its so short. I know that’s where the title is from but it just seemed so expository. I was much more excited to get to the bridge rather than read the chorus again, which is odd. I just wish the chorus was as top notch as the rest, but as is, it’s still a nearly flawless entry for a challenge like this.

 

@Mezik, “Tennessee” (NEW ROADS)

 

Okay, I really like the narrative in this, though it does feel a little contrived, since I know it didn’t actually happen to you, or maybe just not in that way. Still, it’s still very heavy emotionally heavy and a subject that few people won’t resonate with, even if they’ve never lost a loved one. I think there were still some technical difficulties here - mainly with the quotes which felt kind of shoehorned in, but with other things as well, like the first line of the chorus, which is just worded super awkwardly. I think this could definitely pass as a Dolly song. It wasn’t the perfect  emulation, but it definitely hit the mark for me. I think you went for subject matter more than emulating her style, but in the process you kind of did both, since the song is pretty storytelling heavy. So whether that was by accident or on purpose, I applaud you!

 

@PoKiTaurus, “Our Love’s A Two Piece Heart”

 

Okay, this was a definite improvement for you! Good job. There are almost 0 forced rhymes in this piece, which is what I told you to work on last week. The “near” rhyme in the chorus was probably the closest we got to this. I like that the song sort of travels through the weekend, I thought that was really cute. It wasn’t as storytelling heavy as I might have liked, but there was some narrative going on. Maybe a more satisfying conclusion to the narrative would’ve tied things together more seamlessly. I also felt the chorus was the weakest part of the song, which is generally not a good look. You want the chorus to be the best, cause it’s what is  most likely to stick with the reader. Overall, I think you’re definitely showing a willingness to grow from your mistakes, which is admirable. No matter what you place at, you’re always here the next round, ready to learn from your mistakes and better yourself as a writer, and that’s what this competition is all about. Keep going, sis.

 

@Aurora, “Match Without Flame’ (REID)

 

Not a volcano concept, a scream. And you actually pulled it off. Not perfectly mind you, but for a 21p it definitely hits the mark. Most of the lines seemed a bit too long for 21p’s very choppy/jittery style, but I think the way they’re actually written is what translates them into 21p lyrics so well. I like how long the song is as a whole, it feels very rant-ish in that way, but the really long lines sort of muddled my imagination os 21p singing this. I like that you push yourself to do new things and take risks, even though it might not always pay off. Every great writer has to step out of their box every now and again, and your willingness to do so underscores your  comfortability with change and your own style, which are huge assets in this game. I hope you continue to keep them in your arsenal if you’re planning to win this season!

 

@Speezy, “Don’t Penetrate My Future” (REID)

 

Okay, this was definitely a change of pace for you and I like it. I expected it to be another sex song based on the title, but it wasn’t, so I find that title odd, but it still made me giggle. :keir: This felt a lot more refined than most of your entries, so I’m glad that you’re getting better at editing things/sending them to other people for edits. It can really do wonders. There were still a few awkward lines though, like the “animated” line in verse one, and the “broken leg” line in verse two. The first was just a bit forced, although I do like the couplet that it’s a part of. The broken leg line just felt really out of place. Maybe it was just the challenge that forced you into a certain corner, but I hope to see more from this side of you, and I’m sure the other judges will agree. (Though Sex Speezy MUST return eventually, even if it’s next season)

 

@SaintWest, “Numbers Girl” (REHAB)

 

Oh wow, Numbers Boy her sister. I thought this would be for 21p weirdly when I saw the title, but immediately dismissed that as I started reading. I was originally dewigged at the first verse, it was literally a flawless representation of Amy, as well as flawless writing in general. Things sort’ve went downhill from there but I mean, the first verse was a 10, so there wasn’t anywhere to go but down. And while it was essentially a downward slope of a song, it wasn;t a very steep one. The second verse almost holds up as well as the first, but felt a little out of place. I wasn’t very fond of the second chorus - I get what you were trying to say, but I felt it could’ve done better. I don’t think the whole “number one” motif needed to be repeated at all, for that matter. In this sense, I liked the final chorus a lot more than the original, though I get why they are separate entities. Likewise, I wasn’t feeling the bridge. The “inside your home” line was just a bit too blunt, maybe not for Amy in general, but I dont think it fit the tone of the song up til that point very well. Still, this was a very good attempt at tackling a very hard artist to emulate, and I definitely like this more than Numbers Boy :fan:

 

@KatyCatPH, “London’s Calling” (HERETIC)

 

Hmm, this was a bit of a reach as a Florence song for me. As a subject it was very much her, but I feel like she might’ve tackled it with a little more subtlety. I was mainly looking for stylistic choices when writing for Florence, but I appreciate that you did something original while also kind of staying true to her style. It wasn’t exactly cookie cutter Florence, but the allusions were there, which is nice. Had this been for another round, I feel I would’ve liked it more, because it’s not a bad song by any means. The orchestral theme is really cute, and I think it fits a city like London really well. But as is, I couldn’t believably see Florence singing this - not on her own album at least. Still, you’re continuously growing every week as a writer, even if the challenges maybe aren’t the best for you right now.

 

@Glassmouth, “Greener” (HERETIC)

 

I dont know why, but conceptually this kind of felt like a Florence song? I don’t think she’s ever done something similar either, so props on that. But WHAT is a brae? :skull: One of the most forced lines ever, honestly, though maybe if i had more context it might fit better. That dog line also was not the tea, and I knew I was going to think that as soon as you asked what rhymes with dog in the thread. It’s a difficult word to rhyme with and actually pull off. This did feel like a Florence song as I stated before, but I was also getting heavy Perfect Places vibes. Do you like that song? In a way it feels like Florence’s take on that song, which I think is cute, although it was probably unintentional. This was a massive improvement on last week, and I think maybe it’s because your style isn’t as prominent here as it usually is. Maybe try experimenting with more writing styles in the future, it could do wonders!

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23 minutes ago, ceremonials said:

@KatyCatPH, “London’s Calling” (HERETIC)

 

Hmm, this was a bit of a reach as a Florence song for me. As a subject it was very much her, but I feel like she might’ve tackled it with a little more subtlety. I was mainly looking for stylistic choices when writing for Florence, but I appreciate that you did something original while also kind of staying true to her style. It wasn’t exactly cookie cutter Florence, but the allusions were there, which is nice. Had this been for another round, I feel I would’ve liked it more, because it’s not a bad song by any means. The orchestral theme is really cute, and I think it fits a city like London really well. But as is, I couldn’t believably see Florence singing this - not on her own album at least. Still, you’re continuously growing every week as a writer, even if the challenges maybe aren’t the best for you right now.

I knew that my style and Florence's are totally different. I tried but yeah, I agree I myself had a hard time convincing myself that it could be a song that Florence would be singing.

 

Thanks for the commentary cere. :hug:

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Looks like me, uvie, and Tsareena have the same score at least! Now whether or not that's a good thing is yet to be determined.

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1 minute ago, Gastrodonatella said:

mxtthewdelrey is higher than hug, tsareena and uvie and saintwest is your #3

Wrong.

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gave it a shot :cm: no shade i just noticed that there were 3 slowpokes and a slowbro which is the better form of slowpoke so :keir: 

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2 minutes ago, Hug said:

Looks like me, uvie, and Tsareena have the same score at least! Now whether or not that's a good thing is yet to be determined.

Also wrong :fan:

 

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I don't know anything about pokemons but this one doesn't look cute at all 074.gif

Could somebody explain it to me?

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Just now, Gastrodonatella said:

gave it a shot :cm: no shade i just noticed that there were 3 slowpokes and a slowbro which is the better form of slowpoke so :keir: 

But Slowking is better than both :fan:

 

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1 minute ago, FCKNAmbrosia said:

I don't know anything about pokemons but this one doesn't look cute at all 074.gif

Could somebody explain it to me?

You dont need to know anything about them to figure it out, tbh.

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I was thinking weaker = better, but that would still imply me, tsareena, and uvie are tied. :michael: 

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grimer - 8.8
slowpokes - 8.0
slowbro - 8.1 
drowzee - 9.6
bellsprout - 6.9
geodude - 7.4
cloyster - 9.1
victreebel - 7.1
machop - 6.6
machoke - 6.7
machamp - 6.8
farfetch'd - 8.3
magneton - 8.2
tentacool - 7.2

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I have a hunch it doesn't even have to do with evolutions this time, or if it is it isn't the standard "being a higher evolution = better"

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Just now, Gastrodonatella said:

grimer - 8.8
slowpokes - 8.0
slowbro - 8.1 
drowzee - 9.6
bellsprout - 6.9
geodude - 7.4
cloyster - 9.1
victreebel - 7.1
machop - 6.6
machoke - 6.7
machamp - 6.8
farfetch'd - 8.3
magneton - 8.2
tentacool - 7.2

Did you think I'd be that obvious? :fan:

 

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