mxtthewdelrey Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 3 minutes ago, MattyTacos said: I've had a thing for curly haired white boys ever since I saw The Way He Looks wow lemme watch this cause i need even more reasons to be gay + sad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 Just now, swiftie13 said: mess didn't notice it was so small, nn increased to 12 pt thank you also thank you for your comments and for stepping in this week! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 4 minutes ago, swiftie13 said: MattyTacos - Ending Scene I had a hard time reading this because the flow felt off, but you did a good job at telling a story. The chorus was the worst part of this song, not only because it didn’t read well at all but it was awkward and didn’t encapsulate the theme well enough to justify its appearance throughout the song without changing like most storytelling choruses often do. Overall, it didn’t capture my attention but it was an interesting tale and the titular phrase was nice. girl I had a hard time reading this review cuz the text is legit small af. im squINTING over here. But yeah, I could've made bigger changes in each chorus instead of just the third lol. Thanks though. I thought i was gonna make top 10 this week but it seems like these guest judges are gonna screw me over Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
touya kinomoto Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 2 minutes ago, swiftie13 said: Reviews KatyCatPH - Something Crazy I’ll be honest, this feels very basic. Like it’s a random filler song on a random demo album for a random wannabe pop girl. It was very general and the language didn’t draw me in or convince me. There was nothing outright bad about this nor was there anything great. I understand and I even put it in my disclaimer that basic me came back but I had to get something in. But I am glad that I didn't do anything that's totally wrong (except for being very basic). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
swiftie13 Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 3 minutes ago, Hug said: Okay yes I will take myriad being clumsy but I stanned for pyrotechnic I...so suppose the pyrotechnic eyes thing worked better when I was actually talking about fireworks, I will also give you that! Also, the short story has a huge emphasis on how time is experienced, and the main character can effectively see the future after learning an alien language. I think a lot of people were inspired by that, I know I was! Thank you for your review Hor. <3 baby i didnt drag pyrotechnic it went well, with the fireworks theme Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 2 minutes ago, mxtthewdelrey said: wow lemme watch this cause i need even more reasons to be gay + sad it has a happy ending actually. shocking right? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
swiftie13 Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 1 minute ago, MattyTacos said: girl I had a hard time reading this review cuz the text is legit small af. im squINTING over here. But yeah, I could've made bigger changes in each chorus instead of just the third lol. Thanks though. I thought i was gonna make top 10 this week but it seems like these guest judges are gonna screw me over the more opinions, the more right thing get, that's just science Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 1 minute ago, Corsola said: You can still easily make top 10 considering there's 14 entries so ddd this entire week is lowkey sabotage for everybody tho Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hug Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 Just now, swiftie13 said: <3 baby i didnt drag pyrotechnic it went well, with the fireworks theme Nnn I got told about my word choice from every judge basically, and 'pyrotechnic' specifically from two people, so that's why I defended it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
swiftie13 Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 Just now, MattyTacos said: ddd this entire week is lowkey sabotage for everybody tho don't bring others down with you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 Just now, swiftie13 said: the more opinions, the more right thing get, that's just science Not when these "opinions" can easily be dismissed tho. besides our chemistry used to be more than science so this is just a nuclear blow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 2 minutes ago, MattyTacos said: it has a happy ending actually. shocking right? i lost interest Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurora Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 10 minutes ago, swiftie13 said: Aurora - The Gift Tbh playboy was also the first thing that came to my mind @Hunter. This read more like a story that rhymes than lyrics but I’m fine with that, it’s another style of writing. It was very dense but it didn’t feel long the storytelling was on point. I love the little details like “colliding trucks with plastic dinosaurs” representing playing with toys as a child. The easy rhymes in the bridge were nice to read as you gave them really good context. You also developed the universe into a strong character. I wasn’t a fan of the last chorus, it was worded awkwardly but overall, this was a solid entry. Don't forget to pick up a copy of Sugar Skulls on bandcamp, it sucks but it's for an important cause. Me. Thanks, Hor. I'll be sure to listen to Sugar Skulls just because I chuckled at your important cause. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
touya kinomoto Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 2 minutes ago, Corsola said: You can still easily make top 10 considering there's 14 entries so True. I'll be 14th so just pray that you get a better score than 3 others. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 1 minute ago, swiftie13 said: don't bring others down with you The attempt to frame and dismantle my name, truly living up to yours Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 1 minute ago, ultraviolence.xx said: i lost interest akskdkgkal the gays can never win y'all Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurora Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 9 minutes ago, Temporal said: MY SWIFT ASS WARNING i didn't report it but slay hug! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 1 minute ago, MattyTacos said: akskdkgkal the gays can never win y'all actually no i should prob watch it so i can regain some will to continue living this life Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
swiftie13 Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 (edited) 3 minutes ago, MattyTacos said: Not when these "opinions" can easily be dismissed tho. besides our chemistry used to be more than science so this is just a nuclear blow Are you Nitrogen and Oxygen because NO Edited October 2, 2017 by swiftie13 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 1 minute ago, swiftie13 said: Are you Nitrogen and Oxygen because NO omfg i HOWLED Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
swiftie13 Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 3 minutes ago, Aurora said: Thanks, Hor. I'll be sure to listen to Sugar Skulls just because I chuckled at your important cause. glad you recognize its importance Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ultraviolence.xx Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 Just now, swiftie13 said: glad you recognize its importance can you link it again? or can someone bump the OP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurora Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 3 minutes ago, swiftie13 said: Are you Nitrogen and Oxygen because NO are you Oxygen and Magnesium because OMg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 Let me go finish my class work, smoke a joint and get my life to Tell Me You Love Me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MattyTacos Posted October 2, 2017 Share Posted October 2, 2017 5 minutes ago, swiftie13 said: Are you Nitrogen and Oxygen because NO my name is no, my sign is no, my number is no Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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