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38 minutes ago, WildOne said:

I’m not a hugeee songwriter, but I have a few gold records, and radio and club top 5’s. Happy to give songwriting/production feedback, just shoot me a DM or tag me in a post! 

Oh wow! A legitimate Golden Hitmaker. :jonny5: Your feedback would definitely be most appreciated among these circles I'm sure!

 

35 minutes ago, feelslikeadream said:

Omg, I didn't know you were still active here. Seeing the list, and your name right before mine, made me nostalgic for the OldTRL days (back when I had enough free time to be involved in the games nnnn) :'(

It would be lovely if you could even participate in a single round in a future season! Golden Hit seasons only last about six rounds/weeks and usually have ~5 day deadlines. It's been so long since I've seen any of your amazing works!

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6 hours ago, Aurora said:

Sounds like your song might have been a little ahead of its time for certain people. :mandown: One of Golden Hit's writers, @Remmy, saw considerable acclaim with a sex bop "Flowerbloom", so you never know what Golden Hit 2 might have in the cards for you!

5 hours ago, Legend E said:

Remmy, a legend I fear. Invented sex :celestial:

Period :gaycatina1::gaycatina1::gaycatina1:

5 hours ago, Gavin. said:

In that case let me start writing it’s sister song about rim jobs :gaycat2:

Yesss get on it :gaycat2:

 

 

 

Speaking of which, I might as well share Flowerbloom while I'm here :fan:

 

 

[verse 1]
He/him hoe with a they/them c*ochie
But a big, big bone make me she/her poochie
I'm a doggy with a tongue, don't need no Snapchat filter
Desperate for water, yeah this flower's 'bout to wilter

I know you're h*rny, but just be cautious, this bush is thorny
Searchin' for a big boy, so in that case, you're perfect for me
And if you need more, don't you worry, let's make this three
Like an alien attack, you fightin' back, call you Sigourney

[pre-chorus]
Baby, I can roleplay, whatever gets you out those clothes
If you wanna blossom this rose -
I need somethin'...

[chorus]
Wetter than the ocean, taller than the trees
Done this before, so skip the birds and the bees
(This is the p**sy that you chose... so show me where you stick that hose)
Wetter than the ocean, taller than the trees
Done this before, already down on my knees
(It's lonely out here in these meadows... so show me how your wind, blooows)

[verse 2]
Sloppy toppy, he love to rock me
Leave me with a soggy bottom, soaked and soppy
He knows how to hydrate, my gentle poppys
Got me like a flash flood, in Abu Dhabi

Oh I'm moanin' and wheezin', he f**kin' and pleasin'
Straight to the point, he's got no time for teasin'
Make sure I'm not bleedin', and then we repeatin'
That c**k is so Grande, gotta remember "keep breathin'”

[pre-chorus]
Baby, I can dress up, put on some kinky clothes
If it makes you blossom this rose-
I need somethin'...

[chorus]
Hotter than the sun, and softer than the snow
I'm like a broken porta potty, seconds from overflow
(This is the p**sy that you know... give me protein to help me grow)
Hotter than the sun, and softer than the snow
If you want this garden, you're gonna need a hoe
(Let's play a game of whack-a-mole... gotta put your hammer right to my hole)
(Hole... hole.... hole...... hold up!)

[verse 3]
I'm strugglin' to stand, he's holding my hand
Feels like I just went through surgery
Flipped upside down, just like my world
I think retrograde in Mercury

All I can hear is boom, boom, boom
Wondering what the neighbors assume
Bed vibratin', and it's shaking up the room
He knows how to make this flower bloom

[outro]
(Yeah, yeah... yeah, yeah)
He knows how to make this flower bloom
(Yeah, yeah... yeah, yeah)
Oh, he knows how to make this flower bloom

 

 

as well as Paper Airplane Crashes, which was my highest peaking entry @ #3 & completely different from the song above!

 

 

[verse 1]
Watching myself through an astral projection
Shaking my head at every selection, I make
I let out a laugh, while everyone has a frown
I'm never quite on the same page

Feeling like a burden, everytime I get a word in
Even with my own family
Somebody called to ask about the kids
You completely skip over my name
And when I yell at you for that
I don't know how you stand the sight of me


All I do is disappoint you
A crowd full of people that love me... the seats are empty
And even though the seats are empty
No, there's no room for you in here

[instrumental break]

[verse 2]
I'm not destined for a long life
Always tell myself I'll never hit fourty
"Where do you see yourself in 10 years?"
There's an answer I can never see


I'm a professional at wasting time
Got over a decade full of proof
But once I run out of it
I'll probably be begging for more
Wish I could give some time up
To the people that have little left

Not sure if I can truly love anything
Every positive thought barely sticks around
Sometimes it feels like I'm not even alive
I guess I'm living just to survive

[instrumental break]

[bridge]
My engine's starting to fail
We're spinning out of control
No one responds when I call
Body separates from the soul
1,000 feet above the ocean
There's nothing I can do anymore...

[verse 3]
My paper airplane crashes, stuck in water for too long
And I tried to save the bodies, but the current was too strong
Now the trauma never leaves, I fear that it will be lifelong
So now I live out each day recalling things that I did wrong


Oh so wrong, Oh so wrong. I did every damn thing wrong.
Took too long, took too long. Now the hope in me is gone.
Hope is gone, hope is gone. How do I just carry on?
Carry on.


(the word "on" echoes & then fades out)

 

 

 

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13 hours ago, Legend E said:

Hi *******! Didn't really write anything since GH, but I have a few ideas/recordings

 

Legend E

To be fair it’s only been like a week or something :eddie: who knows maybe we will see these ideas come August :eli:

 

13 hours ago, Jack! said:

I definitely may throw my hat back in the ring again! I love to write and still keep up to it to this day, so definitely if i have time!

We love to see it :gaycat: would be very fun, we’ve tried to make GH not too much of a commitment either so we allow people to miss rounds if they are too busy that week (means they score a 0 for that round so it does lower their overall average, but means that people can keep playing regardless of busy schedules!) 

 

10 hours ago, Temporal said:

Cute seeing all the names there :heart2: Really hoping I can play at the end of August!

Ahh king :jonnycat: time to bring out the thesaurus

 

3 hours ago, Remmy said:

Speaking of which, I might as well share Flowerbloom while I'm here :fan:

 

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[verse 1]
He/him hoe with a they/them c*ochie
But a big, big bone make me she/her poochie
I'm a doggy with a tongue, don't need no Snapchat filter
Desperate for water, yeah this flower's 'bout to wilter

I know you're h*rny, but just be cautious, this bush is thorny
Searchin' for a big boy, so in that case, you're perfect for me
And if you need more, don't you worry, let's make this three
Like an alien attack, you fightin' back, call you Sigourney

[pre-chorus]
Baby, I can roleplay, whatever gets you out those clothes
If you wanna blossom this rose -
I need somethin'...

[chorus]
Wetter than the ocean, taller than the trees
Done this before, so skip the birds and the bees
(This is the p**sy that you chose... so show me where you stick that hose)
Wetter than the ocean, taller than the trees
Done this before, already down on my knees
(It's lonely out here in these meadows... so show me how your wind, blooows)

[verse 2]
Sloppy toppy, he love to rock me
Leave me with a soggy bottom, soaked and soppy
He knows how to hydrate, my gentle poppys
Got me like a flash flood, in Abu Dhabi

Oh I'm moanin' and wheezin', he f**kin' and pleasin'
Straight to the point, he's got no time for teasin'
Make sure I'm not bleedin', and then we repeatin'
That c**k is so Grande, gotta remember "keep breathin'”

[pre-chorus]
Baby, I can dress up, put on some kinky clothes
If it makes you blossom this rose-
I need somethin'...

[chorus]
Hotter than the sun, and softer than the snow
I'm like a broken porta potty, seconds from overflow
(This is the p**sy that you know... give me protein to help me grow)
Hotter than the sun, and softer than the snow
If you want this garden, you're gonna need a hoe
(Let's play a game of whack-a-mole... gotta put your hammer right to my hole)
(Hole... hole.... hole...... hold up!)

[verse 3]
I'm strugglin' to stand, he's holding my hand
Feels like I just went through surgery
Flipped upside down, just like my world
I think retrograde in Mercury

All I can hear is boom, boom, boom
Wondering what the neighbors assume
Bed vibratin', and it's shaking up the room
He knows how to make this flower bloom

[outro]
(Yeah, yeah... yeah, yeah)
He knows how to make this flower bloom
(Yeah, yeah... yeah, yeah)
Oh, he knows how to make this flower bloom

 

 

as well as Paper Airplane Crashes, which was my highest peaking entry @ #3 & completely different from the song above!

 

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[verse 1]
Watching myself through an astral projection
Shaking my head at every selection, I make
I let out a laugh, while everyone has a frown
I'm never quite on the same page

Feeling like a burden, everytime I get a word in
Even with my own family
Somebody called to ask about the kids
You completely skip over my name
And when I yell at you for that
I don't know how you stand the sight of me


All I do is disappoint you
A crowd full of people that love me... the seats are empty
And even though the seats are empty
No, there's no room for you in here

[instrumental break]

[verse 2]
I'm not destined for a long life
Always tell myself I'll never hit fourty
"Where do you see yourself in 10 years?"
There's an answer I can never see


I'm a professional at wasting time
Got over a decade full of proof
But once I run out of it
I'll probably be begging for more
Wish I could give some time up
To the people that have little left

Not sure if I can truly love anything
Every positive thought barely sticks around
Sometimes it feels like I'm not even alive
I guess I'm living just to survive

[instrumental break]

[bridge]
My engine's starting to fail
We're spinning out of control
No one responds when I call
Body separates from the soul
1,000 feet above the ocean
There's nothing I can do anymore...

[verse 3]
My paper airplane crashes, stuck in water for too long
And I tried to save the bodies, but the current was too strong
Now the trauma never leaves, I fear that it will be lifelong
So now I live out each day recalling things that I did wrong


Oh so wrong, Oh so wrong. I did every damn thing wrong.
Took too long, took too long. Now the hope in me is gone.
Hope is gone, hope is gone. How do I just carry on?
Carry on.


(the word "on" echoes & then fades out)

 

 

 

The journey we went on with your entries :jonny6: we love a diverse portfolio, it was so fulfilling ending on Paper Airplane Crashes though; definitely a moment :clap3:

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11 hours ago, Aurora said:

It would be iconic to see if you could have your own Jackson re-peak moment! Hopefully things work out and we can see you participate.

Really doubt I'd win again, but would love to **** around and have fun with it :flower: I'm just gonna be balls deep in this coding bootcamp at the end of August so we'll have to see how that's going!

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53 minutes ago, fountain said:

Ahh king :jonnycat: time to bring out the thesaurus

jsgdhfkh phantasmagorias and pedagogies galore!

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omg as Songwriter I’d love to participate next time. Is it just lyrics or lyrics + melodies?

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35 minutes ago, PopKills said:

omg as Songwriter I’d love to participate next time. Is it just lyrics or lyrics + melodies?

Ahhh we’ll make sure to tag you when it’s starting again!

 

In the game all we judge is lyrics and it’s specifically writing based, but if you also sing/compose and are able to record your songs so we can appreciate the melody too then we definitely encourage that as well! We love seeing any and all creativity and its amazing when we see people recording their songs/making instrumentals/creating single covers and album ideas etc., but the only thing that actually gets scored are the lyrics, anything else is optional and just for fun :bird: it can be a really great creative outlet though and it’s so cool seeing all the different things that people make

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6 hours ago, PopKills said:

omg as Songwriter I’d love to participate next time. Is it just lyrics or lyrics + melodies?

While fountain pretty much covered everything in the post above, there's definitely a sense of natural rhythm and flow that can be conveyed with carefully crafted lyrical choices and arrangements, as well as through the use of literary devices such as meter, internal rhyming, alliterations etc. While it may be easier to capture an interesting vocal melody in an actual recorded song, I believe it's definitely possible to craft a vibe that lets you "hear" (or more accurately, feel) how a song might sound just from lyrics on a page, and allow the reader to easily imagine their own melodies!

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Started something else today, anyone else move on to different ideas as soon as they come or do they like to finish a song they started first?

 



Let’s make a toast to all the blues 

I’ll raise a glass    

Linger on the past, till it’s old news.

It’s often times we stop that we finally see

Even when winds changed 

Watching Times mistakes, you were there for me

 

And I’ll drink another one

Pour another one

It’s usually never one. 

And I’ll drink another one

Pour another one

‘Til I’m the only one.

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20 hours ago, Augmented said:

Started something else today, anyone else move on to different ideas as soon as they come or do they like to finish a song they started first?

 

 

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Let’s make a toast to all the blues 

I’ll raise a glass    

Linger on the past, till it’s old news.

It’s often times we stop that we finally see

Even when winds changed 

Watching Times mistakes, you were there for me

 

And I’ll drink another one

Pour another one

It’s usually never one. 

And I’ll drink another one

Pour another one

‘Til I’m the only one.
 

 

 

I usually like to finish one idea before moving onto the next, however I do acknowledge that sometimes this is a bit of a self-destructive habit. After all, creativity and inspiration can strike unexpectedly, and if you're trying to force your writing in one direction when going with the natural flow might take you in a completely new one, ignoring that might end up making for a less than excellent result. Even with the most recent song I'm (still) writing, I spent a few hours on this particular verse section trying to get all of the pieces to fall into place and I just wasn't happy with it. When I finally called it a night I had all of these ideas come to me while I was trying to sleep that were so much better than anything I thought up while trying to force ideas out. Fortunately I had my phone next to me so I could jot them down and revisit them in the morning (and I did end up using a lot of them!) so that's another good idea—always have a means of writing or recording when inspiration strikes.

 

Tangent aside, I love what you have here! Especially the second stanza, very much serving pop bop with meaning! I hope you're able to finish this one. :duca:

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22 hours ago, Augmented said:

Started something else today, anyone else move on to different ideas as soon as they come or do they like to finish a song they started first?

 

 

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Let’s make a toast to all the blues 

I’ll raise a glass    

Linger on the past, till it’s old news.

It’s often times we stop that we finally see

Even when winds changed 

Watching Times mistakes, you were there for me

 

And I’ll drink another one

Pour another one

It’s usually never one. 

And I’ll drink another one

Pour another one

‘Til I’m the only one.
 

 

 

I guess it depends on the intention behind the song for me, am I writing it because there is something specific that I want to say and a message that I think it can have, or am I writing it just for fun and because it sounds good to me? At least personally in my own writing I find it easier when I give a song the intention of saying something, but it can differ for everybody and the type of writer you are/want to be. From what you have of this so far it seems like it could actually go either way, so it feels like a pretty nice starting place for something no mater what direction you might take it!

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An idea I started:

 

Dazzling muscles of ancient lore
That could lift the world up and do so much more
Than my arms could ever carry
It seems borderline imaginary
What my heart desires is what my conscience condemns
And when I retire at the end of each day
I think to myself the big question
When?

 

Will I be able to find a man who desires my aching heart?
Will I be able to hold together if he were to depart?
Will I be able to answer when questions loom?
About who I want to be
About my place in this world
About perceptions of doom
Of the life that unfurls
Before my anxious eyes
I want to be wary
I want no surprise

 

Piercing gazes the sun could not shine
That sparkle bluer than the freshest of Neptune's tides
More than my eyes could ever bear
It seems almost as though I shouldn't care
What my conscience longs for is what my heart will refuse
And when I lie down and fall into slumber
I ask myself whether hope's just a ruse
Of when?

 

Will I be able to be desirable, without burdens on my soul?
Will I be able to show affection without letting inhibitions go?
Will I be able to pour my feelings and be true?
About who I need to be
About my role on this Earth
About change I must do
For my life to ungirth
And I'm petrified
But I can no longer be wary
It's my turn to rise

 

Roaring voices that tear through the valleys
That bellow stronger than these lashes talleyed
On my back for all I've done wrong
It seems that I'll be damned to this song
The rhythm of a heart that aches for what it will break
And I lie awake for ages before sleep every night
Pinpointing pinpricks of when I could have made it right

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Oh I really enjoyed both of your perspectives on that @Aurora and @fountain. I think because my lyrical writing is so closely tied to my melody writing I am so used to working with such short ideas and motifs. Unless I get really inspired I’ll just leave the idea and come back to it, I actually write little notes if I think something was strong and put like *come back to this* or something of that manner to remind future me.

19 hours ago, hurricane326 said:

What my conscience longs for is what my heart will refuse
And when I lie down and fall into slumber
I ask myself whether hope's just a ruse
Of when?

Oh I absolutely LOVE this part :clap3:

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Happy August :cool:

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Hey, Hitmakers! :duca:

 

@fountain and I would like to kick off August by formally announcing Season 2 of ATRL's newest hit writing tournament, Golden Hit!

The brand new season will begin on August 20th, featuring six unique challenges and zero eliminations during its anticipated 7-week run.

 

Not familiar with Golden Hit, or just need a recap of its best moments? Relive the entire Season 1 thread over in the Games section here.

Keep an eye on the ATRL Songwriter's Studio—that's this thread!—for more teasers, judge reveals, and countdowns until launch day!

 

The Season 2 thread will be posted in the Games section on August 18th, allowing time for Q&A and meet-and-greet questionnaires. :matty:

Finally, feel free to pre-signup for Season 2 of Golden Hit to be tagged in any future updates, as well as when the season officially goes live!

 

Golden Hit Season 2 Pre-Signups:

1. 

2. 

3. 

4. 

5. 

6. 

7. 

8. 

9. 

10. 

(cont.)

 

We're all so excited for another fantastic season of creativity, and we hope you'll join us in making this season even better than the first! :1stplace:

 

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Hey, Hitmakers! :duca:

 

@fountain and I would like to kick off August by formally announcing Season 2 of ATRL's newest hit writing tournament, Golden Hit!

The brand new season will begin on August 20th, featuring six unique challenges and zero eliminations during its anticipated 7-week run.

 

Not familiar with Golden Hit, or just need a recap of its best moments? Relive the entire Season 1 thread over in the Games section here.

Keep an eye on the ATRL Songwriter's Studio—that's this thread!—for more teasers, judge reveals, and countdowns until launch day!

 

The Season 2 thread will be posted in the Games section on August 18th, allowing time for Q&A and meet-and-greet questionnaires. :matty:

Finally, feel free to pre-signup for Season 2 of Golden Hit to be tagged in any future updates, as well as when the season officially goes live!

 

Golden Hit Season 2 Pre-Signups:

1. 

2. 

3. 

4. 

5. 

6. 

7. 

8. 

9. 

10. 

(cont.)

 

We're all so excited for another fantastic season of creativity, and we hope you'll join us in making this season even better than the first! :1stplace:

 

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Very excited for another great season :gaycat:

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I don't think I can sign up for this season without @Achilles. wanting me dead but I'll definitely be spectating :gaycat:

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1 hour ago, Jackson said:

I don't think I can sign up for this season without @Achilles. wanting me dead but I'll definitely be spectating :gaycat:

:deadbanana4:  @Achilles.??

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2 hours ago, Jackson said:

I don't think I can sign up for this season without @Achilles. wanting me dead but I'll definitely be spectating :gaycat:

Lol based on my past performance I’ll probably follow up last season’s smashery by tanking in the next one, so have at it king! :gaycat:

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I'm so excited for Season 2 and Season 3 and Season 4 :fan: Hopefully I can actually finish my latest album! I am going to ensure it happens despite my busy schedule. :jonny5:

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It's now just less than a week until the thread for the second season of Golden Hit is posted!

 

We really hope everybody is looking forward to another great writing experience ahead. @Aurora and I were incredibly impressed by what you all showcased during the first season, so if that is anything to go by we're in for another amazing time; and I look forward to our new judge getting to see the talent that you all have too!

 

Oh, that's right, we'll be welcoming a new judge to the panel this season alongside myself and Aurora.

 

It goes without saying that there is a surplus of amazing, gifted people who could have taken this position, and I also look forward to seeing who else may play this role in future seasons! That said, without getting ahead of ourselves, this person we have chosen to join us for season two showed such fantastic songwriting prowess during the first season, that it was a no brainer to choose them!

 

Everybody give a warm welcome to the judging panel...

 

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Our new judge...

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Wait, hold on, it seems we'll be having a panel of four this season, not three!

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I suppose you could say there was a tie...

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Our season two judges:

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The winners of Golden Hit season one, @8thPrince and @Jackson!! 

 

So excited to have you both joining us this season! Of course we had to have our brilliant winners back. I know you'll both be able to offer great feedback and insight with your writing experience. Thank you so much for your involvement! :heart: 

 

 

 

 

The thread for season two will be posted on August 18th in the Games section.

The season will begin with the first challenge being posted on August 20th.

Really hope to see many of you lovely writers again! 

 

:bird:

 

@GentleDance @Prisoner @Legend E @Remmy @8thPrince @Achilles. @☆lex @Hanami-Blossom @RobDeWittBukater  @hurricane326 @Hug @Arrows @Jackson @ughgabriel @Euterpe @Tylerbv @EpicSongFan @luckystrike @OreGuy @Augmented @boubour @TruGemini @Jessie @Julia Fox @Astro @JoeAg @mxtthewdelrey @DatChickDoe @Better Mistakes @Lorenzo22 @Insanity @D e v o n 

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Not y'all kicking Element out i-

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5 minutes ago, Legend E said:

Not y'all kicking Element out i-

Nooo we love @Element :heart2:  

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8 minutes ago, Legend E said:

Not y'all kicking Element out i-

It was a mutual decision actually and Element knows the Golden Hit family is always welcoming to him as a player or potential judge in a future season. :heart2: Rotating judging panels keep things fresh and interesting, and introduce new points of view.

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