Aurora Posted July 25, 2021 Share Posted July 25, 2021 ?? “I burnt my honey toast today and hoped for His forgiveness” ?? “Aurenaissance I • Genesis” The Novel Event • Sunday, 25th July 2021 • Click to Begin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 25, 2021 Share Posted July 25, 2021 7 hours ago, Aurora said: ?? “I burnt my honey toast today and hoped for His forgiveness” ?? “Aurenaissance I • Genesis” The Novel Event • Sunday, 25th July 2021 • Click to Begin this is such a great concept ngl aurenaissance indeed! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rence Posted July 25, 2021 Share Posted July 25, 2021 Serve after serve yup Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurora Posted July 26, 2021 Share Posted July 26, 2021 7 hours ago, Prisoner said: this is such a great concept ngl aurenaissance indeed! 4 hours ago, Rence said: Serve after serve yup Let's hope the content is as acclaimed as the packaging! I appreciate the positive feedback though, really. It's fun making era concepts. I wish I could have posted something earlier in the week but I just had NO time, so I guess that will have to be postponed until a later date... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rence Posted July 26, 2021 Share Posted July 26, 2021 2 hours ago, Aurora said: Let's hope the content is as acclaimed as the packaging! I appreciate the positive feedback though, really. It's fun making era concepts. I wish I could have posted something earlier in the week but I just had NO time, so I guess that will have to be postponed until a later date... A part of what I love about these games is writers sharing visions of their own concepts. It shows how dedicated people can be to what they’re doing. I’ve done something like that before as well because it’s fun. Seeing your posts here about your own concepts feels inspiring! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 26, 2021 Share Posted July 26, 2021 sent a #risk Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hug Posted July 27, 2021 Share Posted July 27, 2021 Round 6 Reviews~ @Prisoner @Aurora @Auburn @Jackson I was meditating, you guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurora Posted July 27, 2021 Share Posted July 27, 2021 Oh, I was just about to get some shut-eye. Thanks for the review, and happy to hear you found it intriguing Hug! Surprised at there only being four submissions though. Hopefully some comebacks next round? Unless next round is the Top 3 finale... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 27, 2021 Share Posted July 27, 2021 Thanks for the review Hug! I totally agree about you saying it starts off weak because the verses were the parts I worked the least on, I wrote them in one take I think Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 27, 2021 Share Posted July 27, 2021 28 minutes ago, Aurora said: Oh, I was just about to get some shut-eye. Thanks for the review, and happy to hear you found it intriguing Hug! Surprised at there only being four submissions though. Hopefully some comebacks next round? Unless next round is the Top 3 finale... let's hope next round isn't the finale. I don't wanna be OUT from the game yet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 27, 2021 Share Posted July 27, 2021 wait at the top 4 being three katy stans and one OOTB stan. Katy's impact I fear Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Auburn Posted July 27, 2021 Share Posted July 27, 2021 6 minutes ago, Prisoner said: wait at the top 4 being three katy stans and one OOTB stan. Katy's impact I fear a songwriter -- thanks Hug for the critique Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rence Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 Sorry I won't be able to post today (or tonight if you're from the West). I was doing my reviews then I just suddenly felt sleepy. I can't even think straight It's probably because of the meds I took a while ago. Again, sorry for the delay Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minho Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 Spoiler @Aurora- This was a very interesting and amusing approach to your topic. I noticed "Satire" was a genre so . I liked your chorus a lot, it had a really tight structure that helped inform your concept as a whole. Your imagery is particularly interesting this time around because you did something that a lot of others have experimented with - a lot of mundane descriptions become something more meaningful or interesting. I like that! It makes sense with this song just purely because nothing really happens - instead it's more of a mood piece. I feel like this is a pretty abstract or conceptual piece which makes sense to me. I would've liked to see more of a story carved out of this personally, but strongly written as usual. @Jackson- Not the emotive song leading into a sex bop. This was a pretty cool approach, I liked the duality and felt the contrasting made sense. I was more struck with your second half because I think you played to your strengths there. The descriptive imagery worked surprisingly well with the "sex pop" nature. You lost me at the rap but I mean that's a personal preference. I just felt like it faltered from the rest. Overall it was a risky entry, but I think there's a neat concept in there. @Prisoner- This was super engaging! I like the way you approached this. It wasn't too on-the-nose or immersed in like.. biblical terms of phrase etc. I feel like you found a natural "click" between your usual sense of songwriting and the new topic. There was a tight structure that I admired here, and I felt like every section was really purposeful. @Auburn- The poetic this was really pretty. I like the tone a LOT and honestly I've discovered that that is one of your biggest strengths. You have the ability to capture a mood and really stick with it, making sure everything reinforces it so that we get pulled into the world you've created. I really liked this entry, great work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
funnellegs Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 (edited) @Prisoner @Aurora @Auburn @Jackson https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NgDs3T1UPYQBt43BjIKDn8kfO8ox0IS7tqdvwsDwMng/edit?usp=sharing reviews Edited July 29, 2021 by funnellegs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 thank you for the reviews minho and funnel much appreciated Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 6 hours ago, Rence said: Sorry I won't be able to post today (or tonight if you're from the West). I was doing my reviews then I just suddenly felt sleepy. I can't even think straight It's probably because of the meds I took a while ago. Again, sorry for the delay omg Rence a druggie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Auburn Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 thanks everyone Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurora Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 Thank you for sharing your thoughts minho and funnellegs. It's interesting to see that the satirical nature of the piece was obvious to some and unidentifiable to others, but I like that we all have different approaches to readings. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rence Posted July 29, 2021 Share Posted July 29, 2021 @Aurora@Jackson@Prisoner@Auburn https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vGEZBGmxDjJfaj0W8hI6YzZJ1-LL-H96HXktSUdHkGM/edit?usp=sharing Amazing round Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 30, 2021 Share Posted July 30, 2021 thanks for the feedback rence Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 30, 2021 Share Posted July 30, 2021 PRISONER - MY WAY 1. Hopelessly Devoted To You 2. One day you're driving your dad's old car 3. Beyond The Backyard Fence 4. A Sea of Daffodils 5. My Way 6. Highway 7. When I Pretend (Bonus Song) Here are the two songs I wrote for the round. I decided to share the one I didn't submit as well since I love them both about the same Highway Spoiler VERSE We'll be chained by their hate forever Unless you have a plan, my dear And something in your eyes tells me, you do We'll be locked in by their gates forever Unless I run away with you And something in my heart tells me, I want to CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be getting our very own exodus VERSE This isn't something I want them to change For it to end and you're just a friend So I pray they don't find out, heaven forbids This isn't a place I want my memories To collect like the scars they inflict So let's sneak away from here like we're kids CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be a part of the great exodus BRIDGE So run and don't look back Don't mind the adrenaline or the suspense The electricity in the fence And the sirens calling out our names CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be a part of what they call exodus OUTRO So run and don't look back The grip of your hand on mine Our bodies shaking like a fault line So run and don't look back The flutter of your brown jacket I'll memorise it like a habit So run and don't look back The shimmer in your black hair Glistening sweat in the evening air So run and don't look back The sounds of cars on the street The heat of the concrete on my feet So run and don't ever look back We made our exodus tonight The smile on your face is like a birthright When I Pretend Spoiler VERSE I'm the antithesis to life's canon A biblical disgrace in a sacred place I don't know if I want part in a fandom That proliferates through their words of hate We used to have fun, tales of Cain and Abel But now I feel like it's all lies and treason Cause I used to love Narnia like the fables Does growing old turn us into demons? PRE CHORUS It's not skepticism It's a little farther where I'd find peace somewhere If I'd just listen CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool VERSE I pray to Jesus because that's my faith So the real problem that I have in hand Isn't the people that calls me desperate But the people revering Trump and Mike Pence A flock constantly preyed on by the wolves Worshipping the hand that bites and then bleeds All over and acts like it's one for the books Spreading the poison, misreading to mislead PRE CHORUS It's not skepticism It's a little farther where I'd find peace somewhere If I'd just listen CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Escape the pain and escape reality As I pretend like everything's cool BRIDGE And people say what they wanna say about me So I close my eyes and I won't hear a thing And then you say all the things you're saying to me So I close my eyes but why do I feel it sting? CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Everyone's hurt and everyone's complaining When I sing the words out like a fool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aurora Posted July 30, 2021 Share Posted July 30, 2021 Thanks for the feedback Rence—I'm glad to hear you liked it, at least conceptually. I'm also pleased you mentioned thematic coherence, because I intend for there to be somewhat of a thread connecting each of the songs (the genesis theme was used in the chorus of a song I wrote earlier in the season, "2", which follows this round's submission in the track list, as well as the consecutive tracks "Riverbed" and "Into My Sea" featuring water imagery, for example). While I do agree that "Aurenaissance I" works better in a for-the-album context than as a standalone piece in comparison to "Aurenaissance II", I do picture "Aurenaissance I" as more of a short album intro, while "Aurenaissance II" would be a longer mid-album interlude bridging the two parts (leading out of "Into My Sea" and into "Creation". My intention was for "Aurenaissance I" to not only establish the tone of the album, but to in turn establish the tone of the song "Genesis" so that it would not be taken at face value having been prefaced by questioning theology, raising doubt, and provoking the reader's own imagination. This is probably giving a bit #AuthenticallyMinimalist but I appreciate the comments and suggestions from all of the judges and should I make it to the next round I will take them on board. This will in all likelihood be my final double entry for the season but it's been fun experimenting with something like this since I haven't actually done it in any other season before. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rence Posted July 30, 2021 Share Posted July 30, 2021 9 hours ago, Prisoner said: PRISONER - MY WAY 1. Hopelessly Devoted To You 2. One day you're driving your dad's old car 3. Beyond The Backyard Fence 4. A Sea of Daffodils 5. My Way 6. Highway 7. When I Pretend (Bonus Song) Here are the two songs I wrote for the round. I decided to share the one I didn't submit as well since I love them both about the same Highway Reveal hidden contents VERSE We'll be chained by their hate forever Unless you have a plan, my dear And something in your eyes tells me, you do We'll be locked in by their gates forever Unless I run away with you And something in my heart tells me, I want to CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be getting our very own exodus VERSE This isn't something I want them to change For it to end and you're just a friend So I pray they don't find out, heaven forbids This isn't a place I want my memories To collect like the scars they inflict So let's sneak away from here like we're kids CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be a part of the great exodus BRIDGE So run and don't look back Don't mind the adrenaline or the suspense The electricity in the fence And the sirens calling out our names CHORUS So let us run away from here And go into the great unknown Into the highway of hope to where Freedom flies freely in the air And though it's just the two of us We'll be a part of what they call exodus OUTRO So run and don't look back The grip of your hand on mine Our bodies shaking like a fault line So run and don't look back The flutter of your brown jacket I'll memorise it like a habit So run and don't look back The shimmer in your black hair Glistening sweat in the evening air So run and don't look back The sounds of cars on the street The heat of the concrete on my feet So run and don't ever look back We made our exodus tonight The smile on your face is like a birthright When I Pretend Reveal hidden contents VERSE I'm the antithesis to life's canon A biblical disgrace in a sacred place I don't know if I want part in a fandom That proliferates through their words of hate We used to have fun, tales of Cain and Abel But now I feel like it's all lies and treason Cause I used to love Narnia like the fables Does growing old turn us into demons? PRE CHORUS It's not skepticism It's a little farther where I'd find peace somewhere If I'd just listen CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool VERSE I pray to Jesus because that's my faith So the real problem that I have in hand Isn't the people that calls me desperate But the people revering Trump and Mike Pence A flock constantly preyed on by the wolves Worshipping the hand that bites and then bleeds All over and acts like it's one for the books Spreading the poison, misreading to mislead PRE CHORUS It's not skepticism It's a little farther where I'd find peace somewhere If I'd just listen CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Escape the pain and escape reality As I pretend like everything's cool BRIDGE And people say what they wanna say about me So I close my eyes and I won't hear a thing And then you say all the things you're saying to me So I close my eyes but why do I feel it sting? CHORUS Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Nobody's hurt and nobody's complaining When I pretend like everything's cool Standing right here in this pulpit gazing At an empty church and blasting rock tunes Everyone's hurt and everyone's complaining When I sing the words out like a fool Both are good but I like Highway more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prisoner Posted July 30, 2021 Share Posted July 30, 2021 2 minutes ago, Rence said: Both are good but I like Highway more Highway is the more mature anthem I feel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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